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 Posted: Mon Jul 30, 2007 6:49 pm
This broken heart can't be mended
Too many pains and sorrows blended
I can't understand this feeling of hate
I'm having some sort of internal debate
This broken heart has been hurt
Tipped out and thrown in the dirt
Tossed atound like a baseball
I think I'm gonna kill them all
Those feelongs never tended
I guess this heart must be ended
(c)J.B.L.P
I wrote that May 15 '05
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Posted: Mon Jul 30, 2007 9:05 pm
really good rein! it's good to see that rhyming in poetry is still alive! i like it. i can really feel what you're saying, and you didn't use a lot of filler words (i usually have to). in short: awesome.
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Posted: Sat Aug 25, 2007 11:11 pm
OoMonsteroO really good rein! it's good to see that rhyming in poetry is still alive! i like it. i can really feel what you're saying, and you didn't use a lot of filler words (i usually have to). in short: awesome. thank you
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Posted: Sun Aug 26, 2007 6:50 pm
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