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 Posted: Mon Jul 30, 2007 12:45 pm
sweatdrop my freind wanted me to post these poems!please comment them!Me and my freind hope you enjoy them!
a box
scared to open the box
of which no one knows what it
contains
scared that you may be locked inside
never to feel the warm breeze
never to see the light again
sinking lower into what you have
made your get away
stars shine overhead
for no one but you can see these stars.
as it seems you are alone
will I get back up?
you force yourself to ask.....
will I be saved?
locked inside this box
only you can let yourself out dont be afraid
in the end you saw the light and followed it out of
your closed up box
hope u enjoyed my poem and there are more to come wink
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Posted: Mon Jul 30, 2007 12:57 pm
alright i'm back thanks to soul reaper wolf *claps*
fighting to stay with you
fighting to stay here
fighting to never leave
fighting to stay by your side
you have been there for me
everytime i felt like the world
was against me
now its my turn
you never seem to show it
when you've fallen
only certain times I can tell
I'm coming back to you
no matter how hard it may
be.
it is my turn
I will stand tall for you
I will always treasure your
words in my heart
for I will never leave you
for I will stand beside you
for I will try my hardest
to make you happy
forever more.
- this one is deticated to my boyfriend heart still hoped you enjoyed it tho wink and i still have more poems to submit until next time
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Posted: Mon Jul 30, 2007 1:12 pm
hi I'm back exclaim well heres another one and again thanks to mi best friend soul reaper wolf heart whee c'mon clap for her!!
They
I am a ghost to them
I am their ghost
I only appear when they
want me to appear
otherwise I don't exist
I can sit in the same room
and try to speak
but they won't hear me
They know my name
I know they do
maybe I shouldn't
try to use my voice
since I know they refuse
to hear me
should I wash away my
presence completely?
would anyone miss me?
I will cease to exist
will they care?
-this one has alot to do with me and some guys in my classes at school
go figure- um i need some adive ya'll plz! pirate blaugh redface thanks for reading
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Posted: Wed Aug 15, 2007 3:07 pm
Your poems/ friend's poems are really deep and connectable. If you really want advice I suggest adding more form to your poem, and a pattern to it.
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Posted: Thu Sep 06, 2007 5:29 pm
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Posted: Fri Sep 07, 2007 7:00 pm
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