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 Posted: Sun Jul 15, 2007 6:18 pm
this is where you can post all your comments about peoples stories,just make sure to A.check on comments about your story and B.say which story your commenting on
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Posted: Mon Jul 16, 2007 1:27 pm
A. Th Black Hats: New Recruits
I hate to say it, but.....it seemed boring. I don't care about length, but nothing was really attention grabbing. I got confused as well. At first you made it sound like Me and some other people were your room mates and was yath first or you first. It confussled me on how you wrote it......sorry.
-Angel the honest critic.
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Posted: Mon Jul 16, 2007 2:45 pm
training day is hilarious angeli....i meen gerard it reminds me of a certain movie.....
sincerially big stinky ugly baby eating o brien
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Posted: Tue Jul 17, 2007 11:51 am
liked the shoe story...... really short though, oh well, still good.
as for the "gerards"... im not sure if it's supposed to be black hats or not, but still good. funny. i liked it
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Posted: Tue Jul 17, 2007 12:07 pm
yus, teh shoe story made me lol
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Posted: Tue Jul 17, 2007 12:23 pm
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Posted: Wed Jul 18, 2007 9:36 am
Shoe that caused WW3:
First of all, Mtv is in Times Square, New York. I been there once, you should try it sometime. Generally I like it, a few misspellings, but hey, I can't spell either. I love the icon, that was the best!
-Angel The Honest Critic.
Simon Cowell Ain't got nothing on me!
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Posted: Wed Jul 18, 2007 2:12 pm
umm im not commenting....yet...
BUT
i was wondering can the sorties be any genre sorta scary or creepy whatnot and is doesnt have to be related in any size, shape or form on the black hats?
well simpler way
can it be about anything and be anything? cause i have a peice of old english work i wouldnt mind posting up here
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Posted: Wed Jul 18, 2007 5:05 pm
hauntingnightmare umm im not commenting....yet...
BUTi was wondering can the sorties be any genre sorta scary or creepy whatnot and is doesnt have to be related in any size, shape or form on the black hats?
well simpler way
can it be about anything and be anything? cause i have a peice of old english work i wouldnt mind posting up here anything you want to write, you can write here.
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Posted: Thu Jul 19, 2007 10:38 am
The Black Hats: New Recruits,
You had to drag me in there didn't you? Well you made things clearer and I'm beginning to enjoy it. A few grammatic errors is all. Also I love the Karate Kid esq training thing that happened to Kavid.
-Angel The Honest Critic,
Simon Cowell Ain't got nothing on me!
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Posted: Sun Jul 22, 2007 9:33 am
i absolutly love the black hats story! it has a kind of fast paced action that i really like.
but one thing is that you should remember this is gaia, so if you just post something that you typed offline or even just online. its hard to read. especially something long. my request is that you seperate the paragraphs by one or two spaces and bold it. otherwise its very hard to break it down and truly absorb the story.
that was honestly my only criticism/suggestion. it was also a little bit confusing but it works so thats completely okay.
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Posted: Sun Jul 22, 2007 9:36 am
hahah i liked the shoe story!!!!!!!!! [yay for chiyo-chan!!!!!]
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Posted: Mon Jul 23, 2007 4:18 pm
hehe it came randomly...
hehe =D
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Posted: Tue Jul 24, 2007 4:27 pm
rehosukaga, your pictograph stories are funny and very random, and you pulled a Bridge!(mmmmm, buttered toast) the last one was better but for the toast thing I give you bonus points ^_^
-Angel, The Honest critic who loves*Wiggles Fingers*Buttery Toast!
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Posted: Tue Jul 24, 2007 4:35 pm
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