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 Posted: Wed Jul 04, 2007 7:58 am
i started making this a few years ago but never finished it for a few resons
1. i run out of ideas REEEALY easily
2. i had only been watching naruto for a few weeks and had to go on what a friend told me
any suggestions on what i could make better would be appreciated
i'll devide it so its not just one huge post
(note: i made this when i hated neji so sorry if i make him seem like an a**. but i like him now i think hes awesome)
A long time ago in a shinobi village called konoha there lived a boy named Leon. The last of his bloodline he has the aura sight. A do-jutsu that allows him to see the unique aura of each person. It also causes his eyes to reflect his emotions.
At the young age of 14 he was one of the best young shinobi in the village. Although friends with most of his rivals he has the desire to be the best burning strong within him.
Leon’s day started out like most others. Have some breakfast then head over to the training grounds. Leon had just finished eating he grabbed his gloves and backpack and headed out the door. Along the way Leon came across Hinata. “Morning Hinata!” Leon said with a wave “Oh h-hi Leon” ‘wow Hinata looks so pretty today’ Leon thought. Hinata is a very shy girl and doesn’t open up to very many people. Leon has had a crush on Hinata for a long time but he hasent told her how he feels just yet.
After passing by Hinata Leon continued toward the training grounds in hopes of sparing with Naruto today. Seeing as he passes the ramen shop on the way he thought he might as well see if Naruto was there.
When Leon got there he looked in and saw Naruto “morning Naruto!” Leon walked over and sat beside Naruto “hi Leon! You feeling lucky today?” Naruto is a bit of a joker but takes every fight seriously. Leon rose an eyebrow at Naruto’s question “whadaya mean lucky?” Naruto gave Leon his signature smile and said “you think you can beat me today? I really whooped you last time!” Leon smiled “hm…yeah well I didn’t expect you to use your Naruto combo in a sparing match”
“Yeah yeah….excuses excuses” Naruto said is a smart-a** kind of tone Naruto finishes his ramen and pays for it “c’mon Leon what are you waiting for?”
Leon was daydreaming and didn’t see Naruto get up “huh? Oh sorry” Leon stood up with Naruto and they headed to the training grounds.
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Posted: Wed Jul 04, 2007 8:02 am
Along the way they passed by the Yamanaka flower shop “hey Ino!” Leon said through the window “oh morning Leon!” Ino replied
A few minuets later they both arrived and went to the sparing area. “Okay! Are you ready to lose twice in a row?” Naruto said taking up his fighting stance “not a chance!!” Leon said doing the same.
They then went at each other holding back somewhat so they don’t hospitalize each other. A short time into the fight Naruto uses his shadow clone jutsu “heh predictable Naruto!” Leon says pulling out a few of his own hairs. As the 4 Naruto clones appear Leon says “spirit needle!” transferring chakra into the hairs the hairs glow light blue and stand up straight. Leon throws a needle at each Naruto he can see. Leon hits the 4 clones but the real Naruto dodges it.
“Nice move Leon!” Naruto says “but your still not gonna win!” Naruto lunges at Leon and rams his head into Leon’s torso “ugh!” Leon yelps before falling to one knee. “Oww! Easy Naruto!” Leon yells to Naruto “oops sorry” Naruto says laughing a little “oh yeah?” Leon jumps over Naruto and gets him in a headlock and gives him a noogie “ha! How do ya like that?” “Oww! Get off me!” Naruto trips Leon forcing him to let go.
The fight goes on for another 20 minuets but ends with Leon giving up after being surrounded by 50 Naruto clones. “I surrender” Leon said putting his hands in the air Naruto jumps in the air and yells “all right!! That’s two in a row Leon!!” Leon claps and says
“Good move Naruto. But I almost had you!”
“No way! You had no chance! Oh well looks like your buying the ramen again!” Naruto said in his cheery tone Leon sighs “yeah I guess so” Leon stretches then walks over to his backpack and grabs 2 bottles of water “catch!” he says throwing one of the bottles to Naruto. Naruto catches it and says “thanks!” then walks over sits with Leon and has a drink.
“Hey Naruto?” Leon asked “what?” Naruto replied “Looks like we’ve had a spectator. You can come out now!” Leon said looking at a tree. Then Hinata jumped out and walked over to the two pressing her fingers together shyly “hi Hinata!” Naruto said “oh h-hello n-n-Naruto” Hinata has a crush on Naruto but he's to thickheaded to know “hello Hinata” Leon said with a smile “h-hello Leon. I s-saw your fight you’re both amazing” Naruto rubbed the back of his head and smiled “heh heh! Thanks Hinata.
Hinata blushed and smiled “y-your w-welcome Naruto” “hey Hinata were going to the ramen place and I’m buying you wanna come to?” Leon asked standing up “y-yes okay” Leon nodded “okay” Naruto jumped in the air again “all right!! Lets go!!” on that note they all walked to the ramen shop. When they got there Leon said, “Order up you two” they all ordered and got their food.
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Posted: Wed Jul 04, 2007 8:04 am
“Ha ha! That another victory for me!” Naruto said trying to rub it in Leon’s face. It worked “yeah yeah…. shut up and eat” Leon said dully “what? are you mad Leon? Mad that you’ve had your butt kicked twice in a row?” Leon had to resist the urge to punch him in the face. He thought ‘jeez…how can Hinata love a bonehead like Naruto?’ “Well really you didn’t beat me. You made me give up” “yeah whatever” Naruto said again in a smart-a** tone. Hinata giggled slightly at the conversation that was going on.
After about a half an hour they all left “heh! Where do you put it all?” Leon asked Naruto “I don’t know how do you manage to pay for it?” Naruto said jokingly. Hinata let out a slight giggle “care for another round Naruto?” Leon asked “no I’m gonna’ train on my own for a while” Naruto said running off “oh okay bye then!!” Naruto looked back and waved “see ya!” Leon waved back then turned to Hinata but she wasn't there “huh?”
Leon looked around for a second then saw Hinata. She was sitting by a tree pulling the petals off a flower, the wind blew slightly making the branches sway, Hinata’s hair looked as if it was drawing the suns light.
Leon went over and sat next to her “hey Hinata whatcha doing?” Hinata looks at Leon “oh n-nothing” Leon looked at the flower and said “I see…you trying to see who loves you right?” Hinata blushed “y-yes” “you shouldn’t do that” Hinata looked at Leon “why?” Leon smiles and says with a wink “Because your such a cute and kind girl I’m shore everyone loves you” Hinata blushes even more “L-Leon r-really?” “Yup and I’m one of em’” Hinata blushed even more her face now completely red “th-thank you L-Leon”
Leon stood up and said, “No problem” he was blushing a little himself “well I should get back to my training see ya Hinata!” Leon turned began walking away “b-bye Leon” Leon then returned to the training grounds and began his training “okay I’ll start with some tai-jutsu then some other stuff” Leon does his tai-jutsu training for about an hour ranging from quick strikes to heavy blows
“Okay time for the jutsu training!” Leon walks about 10 feet away from the tree he was training on the base now worn from training “shadow clone jutsu!!” 3 clones of Leon appear next to him “okay guys come and get me!” he said taking up his fighting stance the clones lunge at Leon and they each throw a punch he dodges two of them and blocks the third one. Then flips the clone over his shoulder causing it to disappear then does a spinning kick taking out the other two
“Well that was fun. Now for something more serious my most powerful jutsu” Leon turns back to the tree and does a few hand seals then grabs his left wrist and holds his hand in front of his head as his hand glows blue gathering chakra. Once finished he points his fist at the tree and yells “spirit cannon!!!” a blast of chakra fly’s out of Leons fist and destroys the lower half of the tree.
“All right!! Ugh!” Leon falls to one knee with his left arm limp at his side. “Heh…still needs some work…” Leon stands up holding his shoulder “ugh no feeling at all…heh must’ve used too much chakra” Leon walks out of the training grounds still holding his shoulder.
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Posted: Wed Jul 04, 2007 8:08 am
On the way home Leon comes across Kakashi. Reading his book as always. Kakashi is one of the strongest people in the village but is a pretty nice guy “hi Kakashi sensei!” Kakashi looked at Leons arm “hmm to much training Leon?” “Huh? Oh this? Yeah a little” Leon said with a slight laugh “don’t work to hard” Kakashi said walking past patting Leon on the shoulder “yes sir!”
As Leon continued home he saw a few people he used to go to the academy with. Wanting to be friendly he waved giving a friendly smile. As he was getting closer to his house a figure was at his door ‘who could it be?’ he thought walking a little bit faster ‘its probably Kiba’
But when he arrived he was wrong it was Hinata “Hey Hinata” Hinata looked over at Leon “oh h-hello Leon” “what's up?” Leon asked “oh I j-just wanted to th-thank you for what you said earlier” Hinata said blushing a little “no problem whoa!” Hinata wrapped her arms around Leon and hugged him. Leon was surprised but hugged her back she hugged him for a little longer then let go. She was blushing wildly “th-thank y-you Leon. Well…goodbye” Hinata then walked off “Hinata…” Leon said to himself then walked inside. ‘Well. I’m one step closer to winning her heart’ Leon thought
He took off his gloves and his backpack and lied on his bed and fell asleep.
Leon wakes up at sunset to a knock on his door it was Naruto, Sakura and Sasuke “what's up guys?” Leon asked sleepily.
Naruto said “nothing its just that we’re going to the ramen place and wondered if you wanted to come to” “yeah shore!” “Okay then lets go!“ Leon closed the door to his house and walked with the others a short while down the road Leon asks “so how was your day Sakura?” Leon asked “it was okay. No complaints” Leon nodded “Sasuke?” Sasuke didn’t answer.
Sakura and Sasuke are the other members of Naruto’s team aside from Kakashi. Sakura is a normal girl and has a thing for Sasuke. Sasuke on the other hand is best considered as a lone wolf.
When they sat down at the ramen shop they all ordered the usual “no I think I’ll try something different” Leon said “well what would you like?” the Ayame replied “hmmm I think I’ll try the spicy ramen” the Ayame nodded and walked away.
“So Naruto? Hows your training with Jiriya going?” Leon asked “its going okay” Sakura looked over to Leon and asked, “How’s your training going Leon?” Leon looked at sakura and replied “good. My spirit canon jutsu still needs some work though” Naruto laughed and said
“I whooped him in training this morning!” Leon sighed and said, “You made me surrender...” Naruto gave his signature smile and said “yeah whatever! But the thing is I won!” Leon and sakura both sighed. Sasuke reached over and hit Naruto on the head “ow! What was that for Sasuke!?” Naruto said rubbing his head “Shut up dumbass…” Sasuke said in his regular cool voice.
Leon smiled and said, “About time someone hit him. I’m just sorry it wasn't me” sakura giggled “hm…” Sasuke mumbled. A few seconds later Ayame came over with there ramen “here you go!” the Ayame said then walked away “thanks” Leon said then began to eat.
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Posted: Wed Jul 04, 2007 8:10 am
About a minuet later sakura looked at Leon and asked “are you okay Leon?” Leon was just sitting there his face a bright red “y-yeah. Whew I didn’t expect it to be this spicy” sakura grinned slightly “well Naruto made that mistake once remember?”
Leon thinks back a few months Naruto’s eyes wide and his mouth open, he was running in circles after he ate some ramen he ‘thought he could handle’ “HOT!! HOT HOT!!!” he screamed before chugging a glass of water “see Naruto I told you you couldn’t handle it” Leon laughed a little “Oh yeah! Well I’m never gonna eat that again”
Leon laughed and said, “yeah I remember. Naruto looked like more of idiot than normal” Naruto looked at Leon “hey gimmie’ a break!”
They all continued talking as the evening went on. Telling jokes, discussing training methods, or just plain talking.
They said their goodbyes at the door “wow I can’t believe we actually got Sasuke to laugh,” Leon said cheerfully “who’d of thought?” Naruto said “well g’night guys” “bye Leon” Naruto and sakura said. Sasuke just waved.
On the way home Leon thought ‘will Hinata ever feel the same way? I mean she likes me but… not in the same way she likes Naruto’ Leon sighs deeply “maybe if I bring her a flower” Leon says. When he arrives home he lies on his bed and says, “How can I win her heart?” Leon thinks for a few minuets but slowly drifts off to sleep.
The next morning Leon heads straight to the Yamanaka flower shop and buys a small pink flower “who’s it for Leon” Ino asked “I don’t know if I should tell you” Leon said “oh common you can tell me. Tell Ino” ino said talking like Leon was five years old “well… okay” Leon leaned over and whispered to Ino “…Hinata…” Ino smiled and said “you growing up Leon. So you really like Hinata?” Leon blushed as his eyes turned pink “yes…” Leon was a little reluctant to tell Ino seeing as she was a little bit gossipy “do you think you can win her over?” Ino asked “I can try” Leon said in a determined tone “well good luck!” “Thanks!”
Leon took the flower and went to look for Hinata. He looked all over the village but could not find her ‘where could she be?’ Leon thought now a little tired. Soon after Leon gets an idea “I know! I can focus on her aura” Leon then jumped onto a roof and went in to deep concentration. “Ha! Got it!” Leon said excitedly. She was under the same tree they were at yesterday where she was picking the petals off that flower. When Leon got there Hinata greeted him “hello Leon” he walked over to her and replied “hi Hinata. I-I have something for you” “huh? Y-you do?” Leon nodded and handed Hinata the flower. Leon’s face was now bright red and his eyes were pink “I hope you like it” Hinata looked at the flower "t-t-thank you" she smiled.
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Posted: Wed Jul 04, 2007 8:12 am
"Foolish Hinata, playing little love games” a voice came from behind them. It was Neji “Neji…” Hinata said softly.
Neji walked up to Hinata and began insulting her about how weak she was “love can make you weak and you’re weak already” after about a minuet of Neji saying things like “why must you always give up?” and “your weak” Hinata looked like she was about to cry.
Leon put his hand on Neji’s chest and pushed him back. He walked in front of Hinata and faced Neji his eyes a light red. He was angry “Giving up doesn't always mean your weak, it sometimes mean’s you are strong enough to let go.”
Neji looked almost surprised “why are you defending her?”
“Because I…” Leon paused “I love her…” Neji took a step back, scoffed and walked away Leon then turned to Hinata who was still looking down.
Leon blushed ever so slightly eyes went from red to aqua his mood changed from angry to apologetic he looked down a little and said “sorry Hinata…. I…I didn’t want you to find out so soon”
Hinata looked down twiddling her thumbs “its okay my cousin is a little protective” her tone seemed to turn into a slightly more happy tone “uh…are you all right?” Leon asked.
Hinata looked up a cute and innocent smile on her face. She nodded; her white eyes seemed to shine brighter than normal maybe she felt the same way.
Or maybe she just didn’t want to hurt Leons feelings “I’ll…give you some time to think…till then” Leon said before turning and walking away
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Posted: Wed Jul 04, 2007 8:15 am
Leon walked around for a while collecting his thoughts before returning to the flower shop to talk to ino.
Ino is kind of a mentor for Leons love life he can always rely on her to give him some advice. Even if its not always good.
He walked inside and Mrs. Yamanaka was at the counter “hi Mrs. Yamanaka is ino in” Leon asked “no not right now I’m afraid Leon” she replied “oh well do you know when she’ll be back?” “Soon”
While Leon waited at the flower shop for ino Mrs. Yamanaka asked, “so how are things with Hinata?” “Huh? How did you find out about that?”
“Ino told me” Leon sweatdroped and looked down “ohhhh I knew she would tell someone” he said with a sigh “it doesn’t matter if its me does it?” Mrs. Yamanaka asked, “Well as long as It stays a secret” Leon replies
“Not a word. Promise” Mrs. Yamanaka said
(and thats as far as it goes any help to get me going on this again i would love even if you want to write a whole page chances are i will love it and put it in. so tell me what you think thanks)
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Posted: Thu Jul 05, 2007 7:42 pm
I really like the idea of your fanfiction. I get that you didn't see much of it back then so I''ll try not to be too mean....
The battle scenes needed to be a little more descriptive so people know what the characters are capable of.The original characters were a little OOC but thats okay because this is a fanfic, you can do what you want with them. (You have the power bwhahahahahaha!) A lot of your sentences weren't in correct for and needed added punctuations such as coma and semi colon use.
I thought the Leon/Hintana was very adorable! And o far it has a pretty good plot. I hope your able to write more. Good job!
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Posted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 2:39 am
lol "the power is mine!!"
yeah but punctuation is not one of my strong points so thats a downside there. because i never bothered to learn it i have no idea what goes where half the time.
but the thing is i got up to this point and just ran out of ideas but i had quite a bit of help from a friend of mine. she gave me the parts like hinata's reaction, naruto's spicy ramen flashback and neji's interference.
yeah but like i said i just started watching the show when i started writing this so the out of character parts are expected maybe you could pm me with some suggestions of what i could change?
so im gonna try to write some more.
and im glad you like Leon/Hinata mrgreen
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Posted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 4:19 am
(new entry posting it as it comes!)
A few minuets later Ino walked in “hey! How’d it go?” she asked. Leon just stared at ino (insert -.- face here.) “What? Ohhh. Common your not mad are you?” ino said “no. But you promised you wouldn't tell anyone!” Leon said, “No I didn’t” ino replied “so how did it go?” she asked again “…she found out.” Leon said looking down
“WHAT?! You told her?!” ino yelled “it wasn’t my fault! Neji intervened!” Leon yelled back. Ino put Leon In a headlock and said, “So you just blurted it out?” “Oww acting on first thought! Acting on first thought!” Leon said struggling “oh! You baka!” ino said as she hit Leon on the head then let him go.
“Oww” Leon groaned rubbing his head “anyway how did she take it?” ino asked “she didn’t reject it. She almost seemed happy” Leon replied. Ino clapped her hands together “that’s great! So your not at a total loss!” she said happily “I had some mean things to say to you if she took it badly” ino said
“What? Ohhh… so what do I do now?” Leon asked “give her some time and ask her later” Leon nodded “okay. Thanks ino” Leon said giving ino a one armed hug and waving as he walked out.
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Posted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 4:34 am
(i just came up with an ending! it will come soon!)
Not wanting to let it get to him Leon decided to keep going about his normal day. Training always helped him clear his mid so he headed toward the training grounds. He had just started to stretch when he saw gai and lee training in the distance. Being the nice guy he is Leon decided to go and say hello
“Hey lee, gai-sensei!” he said walking over “can I train with you for a while?” Leon asked “yes you may. Only if you tell me the details” lee said “huh? What are you talking about?” “You love Hinata do you not?” lee asked “uhhh...wh-who told you that?” Leon said nervously
“It was Neji who told me” lee said ‘oh great. Now these two know’ Leon thought “ahh youthful love. Such a beautiful thing” gai said wiping away some tears. “On second thought. I don’t really feel like training” Leon said before walking away.
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Posted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 5:20 am
(nother' one!)
Leon just decided to go home and wait out the rest of the day. Then Leon began to think about the day him and Hinata met.
A young Leon was sitting under a tree at the ninja academy looking pretty down when a young Hinata came over “a-are you okay?” she asked.
“I just failed an exam.” Leon said in a slight sad tone “oh…well you’ll get it next time” “that’s not the point. This was my third time failing. I’d ask my friends for help but… I don’t have any” Leon said bowing his head
“Why not?” Hinata asked “because. Nobody wants to be friends with a loser like me.” Leon replied “you shouldn’t say things like that about yourself” “but that’s what I am! I’m a loser!”
“Everyone is unique in there own way. I think you would have lots of friends if you were a little happier” Hinata said trying to cheer Leon up. “Yeah I guess your right. Will you be my friend? My names Leon creesent what's yours?” Leon said extending his hand “H-Hinata hyuuga. It’s nice to meet you” Hinata shook Leon’s hand “same here Hinata. Now I’m off to train for the next exam. Thanks Hinata” Leon said running off “y-your welcome Leon.”
A few weeks after that Leon met naruto finding someone like himself they became best friends and helped each other when they were in a jam.
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Posted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 5:53 am
(last one!! hope you like the ending!) ‘You’re words that day Hinata. They stayed with me even till’ this day’ Leon thought to himself. Soon after there was a knock on Leon’s door ‘I swear if that’s someone else that knows heads are gonna’ roll.’ Leon opened the door to see Hinata “hello Leon c-can I come in?” “Uhhh. Yeah of course” Leon moved out of the way and Hinata walked in “Leon I thought about it and I decided.” Hinata paused “go on Hinata” Leon said “y-you said you love me and…w-well. I love you too but. We’ve known each other for so long I think of you more as an older brother. I hope you aren’t hurt” Hinata said looking down. Leon hugged Hinata warmly “its okay Hinata. Its okay I could never be hurt so long as we’re still friends. Okay so brother and sister. That’s what we are now and that’s how we’ll stay right?” “R-right!” And that’s how they did stay. However over the years that followed they became more and more close. Closer than brother and sister and they found something more valuable than love. And that is true trust. Knowing that you can fully trust someone. Knowing you can put your life solely in there hands. And knowing that one will never leave the other behind. The love these two feel will never be broken and will always stay strong. Just the way love should be. THE END (how was it? was it okay? in truth this was my first fanfic and i tryed my best)
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Posted: Tue Jul 10, 2007 7:17 pm
AWE! It was really sweet! I liked how they grew closer through the years. When I read ,'but I think of you as a brother.' I nearly slapped my head in frustration. You gave them good personalities that were just adorable and a lot of fun parts. Good job Stick! xp
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 2:35 am
Beowulf_IX AWE! It was really sweet! I liked how they grew closer through the years. When I read ,'but I think of you as a brother.' I nearly slapped my head in frustration. You gave them good personalities that were just adorable and a lot of fun parts. Good job Stick! xp you didn't like that? sorry but even though this is a fanfic im just too much of a naru/hina fan. but im glad you liked it all in all mrgreen i might make and alt ending. or let you make one if you want to. i love colabarating(sp?) more than working on my own so maby you and me could make a colab fanfic sometime?
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