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 Posted: Sun May 06, 2007 3:34 pm
It's an free verse... >.<
Run with the wind splashing
against two faces
Run with the clouds streaming
with its gray sleet
In this cemented wonderland
No end in sight, no end in sight.
A decayed love has an end
a witchcraft girl
with the wind at her back
is the one that ends it all
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Posted: Mon May 07, 2007 12:17 am
I liked the irony of wonderland! Like I've said before, all you need is a band and a nice guitar solo and this would be a good song! Your poems are deep, and luckily an idiot like me understands it! The thing about your poem is, it sounds like a part of a song, but it's not quite there yet... Write more, k? I'll look forward to it!
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Posted: Mon May 07, 2007 4:39 pm
It sounds more like lyrics from a song instead of a poem, but other then that it sounds really good.
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