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 Posted: Fri May 04, 2007 7:48 pm
The evil inside me
I am darkness.
I am hate.
I am destiny.
I am the evil that shall be your fate.
I shall be the tip of deaths sword.
I kill all far and near.
I strike with blood itensity and fear.
Darkness is my weapon.
Death is my pride.
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Posted: Fri May 04, 2007 7:52 pm
It's a bit rough but i think it's ok.
Im named after a famous poet guess who it is and if your right you get 200 gold
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Posted: Fri May 04, 2007 8:04 pm
I like it, it's short and direct. ^^
Um... Edgar Allen Poe? Robert Frost?
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Posted: Fri May 04, 2007 8:11 pm
When i was writing it i realized it was short and could use some work, im glad you like it
niether of them are correct.
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Posted: Fri May 04, 2007 8:16 pm
crazydew When i was writing it i realized it was short and could use some work, im glad you like it niether of them are correct. Personally I think it's good as it is, but that's just me. sweatdrop Shoot. Hm... Henry Longfellow?
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Posted: Fri May 04, 2007 8:20 pm
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Posted: Fri May 04, 2007 9:08 pm
A love never lost
As the war starts.
The soldiers march.
The innocents die.
The angels cry.
The lone hero stands.
Does he fight for good?
Does fight for justice?
Does he fight for evil?
No
He fights for the one that he loves.
He will find her no matter the stakes.
His steed rides upon the shadow the shilouete makes.
When he finds her she cold, she is pale.
To him this is not fair.
His mind cannot bare.
The anger, the passion, the love that is lost.
He takes out his blade.
Strikes himself down.
He thought without her could no longer go on.
He did this because he loved her did not want to leave her.
"Till death do you part"
Has no meaning to them.
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Posted: Tue May 15, 2007 5:28 pm
even tho i know its not the answer you're looking for, i think its me, i will be famous once i publish my work (im only saying this b/c u named ur thing "My Dark Poetry" and this was 2 days after i made my post called "Dark Poetry" and in a way im famous, cuz im known throughout gaiaonline, and everyone who has read my work is left in awe (i know im exadurating but they loved it ok?! )
anyway, on the other side, i belive that your poems are very good, tho they could, as u said use work, but hey, no one is perfect. smile
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Posted: Sat May 19, 2007 8:44 am
thank you
although that is not why i named this thread .
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Posted: Sat May 19, 2007 8:55 am
Just because I felt like saying it...is it T.S Elliot?
Your first poem is rough, yes. With a little refining, it would be fantastic. The second is quite good although, again, a little rough. Sharpen the edges a bit and polish the length of it through and through.
It is a pleasure to meet you. I'm the vice-captain though I have been quite absent unfortunately. *bows* I hope you have fun here. Check out my thread sometime if you want. It is Falvenger, Hall of Books.
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Kharne Bloodhowler Vice Captain
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Posted: Sat May 19, 2007 2:04 pm
Not T.S. Elliot
Thanks for the feedback on the poems.
A pleasure to meet you as well.And i will look into the thread.
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Posted: Sun May 20, 2007 2:58 pm
crazydew thank you although that is not why i named this thread . Yes, i know, it was just on my mind, biggrin , keep up the good work tho biggrin
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Posted: Thu May 24, 2007 7:53 pm
Thanks.
And on another note My name: Come on people I have the gold just Waiting to be taken. Here is a hint: its not like EXTREMELY famous just sorta kind of famous.
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Posted: Thu May 24, 2007 8:09 pm
Death of one held close
My love stands.Her eyes shining bright.
Aware that her life will end tonight.
The plague wil spread.
People awake with dread.
She is nothing more than a soul.
I love her only.For my heart is as black as hole.
As she stands at the balcony I run to her side.
But what do i find?
Her blood stained dress. A dagger nearest her heart.
I scream in rage.
I feel like a demon locked in his cage.
I shall find the one that murdered her.
I shall rip them to shreds kill them till my anger is gone.
Till I feel no more hate.
Then I will leave , and run away for without her i am not complete.
I will find a dark place and sit there and cry tears blood.
Untill my heart will no longer beat.
If i could relive one day.
It would be marriage
The day she died.
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Posted: Sun May 27, 2007 8:25 am
note to plagurists and idiots who have nothing better to do: copy and paste even the smallest stanza from ANY of my work ill sue you so fast my lawyer will allready be counting his money.
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