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 Posted: Sat Apr 21, 2007 9:28 am
this poems about my past.. you prolly wont understand what im talking about but it means I've been used and still think im the bad one, no ones bad but me, yadda yadda yadda... and the fact that I'm always after this person wanting to get back at them.
DENIAL
honey burns from
a crucified witch
Let me stay in my womb
molasses suffered girl
with a sweet twitch
I jump in your open tomb
save me save me
go ahead and shape me
into a mindless child
Defame me, degrade me
go ahead, enslave me
into a suffering of denial
....comments, please?
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Posted: Sat Apr 21, 2007 10:07 am
that was really good. I really liked the word choices.
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Posted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 8:06 pm
Wow... All you need is a band and a nice guitar solo and this would be a hit! Write more and make it like a lyrics! I really like this one! heart
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Posted: Tue Apr 24, 2007 12:35 pm
I really really like it... I just dont understand it all... nice word choices
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Posted: Sat Apr 28, 2007 10:23 pm
wow...that was really good. i think i understand it a little too much.
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