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 Posted: Mon Apr 16, 2007 11:27 am
The Rose
by Emily
The rose was given to her
As a gift of love
She loved him
He loved her
The sat on the dresser
By his picture
One day she went to see him
He was lieing on the floor face down
In a pile of blood
And now the rose wilts
On is tombstone
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Posted: Mon Apr 16, 2007 7:40 pm
Hm... It is interesting... The rhyming... It could use some work, but I love the story to it and how you have it.
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Posted: Tue Apr 17, 2007 7:02 pm
The story to it is very nice and unique, but you should put more emotion and stronger words in it. But the fact that there is such little words make the readers think about it more. God job! biggrin
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Posted: Wed Apr 18, 2007 11:13 am
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Posted: Wed Apr 18, 2007 5:11 pm
nice, i luv how it has a short story line so it gets 2 the point quick
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