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 Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2007 12:49 pm
Untitled Love
by emily (btw that's me!)
Our eyes meet
My Knees tremble
In your arms
I am yours
From jokes
To looks of love
I have always felt this way
Tears will fall
Hearts may break
Hearts may be whole
You now know
How I feel
It's hard to say
I love you
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The Rose
by Emily
The rose was given to her
As a gift of love
She loved him
He loved her
The sat on the dresser
By his picture
One day she went to see him
He was lieing on the floor face down
In a pile of blood
And now the rose wilts
On is tombstone
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Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2007 9:30 pm
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Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2007 10:09 pm
I personally think that you could do better then that. Not that I can do that well but on the second one you got some typos and on the first one it was a little to simple...Try expressing more feeling. I like the first part but then it just kinda not get me through it on the last part. Good job but do some little fixes smile
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