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 Posted: Sat Mar 10, 2007 6:40 am
To those who have went to "What makes a good novel" thread that was also mine, if not please critique my work.
The characters:
Vicient Vortex(Chapter 2)
Keg Katiria (Protagonist, Chapter 1)
Axel Lampris (chapter 1)
Sakura Oryx (Chapter 1)
Jade Emarld (Chapter 1)
Kat (no last name yet, chapter 1)
Coral the cat (is actually an Ani-human animals who can possess human forms, Chpater 2)
(New) Kilika (a fairy, human sized, Chpater 2)
(New) Ruin (lol, I'll post background info. later, Chapter 2)
(New) Kry (the evil they are tying to stop from being released into Gaia, In my others series, 'Harvest Twilight' (proposed title))
(New)Maikeru (chapter 4 or 5, He is Keg's full blooded Katirian half-brother, he will join Keg and help him in his epic.)
The setting: (Revised)
Gaia (ironic) is the planet they are on.
The plot: An organization who call thierselves the executioners are suching for an amulet that holds the Miasma King (Kry in my spin-off series.) They plan on take over the world and destory all humans, (the organization consist of Katirian biengs.)
Genre:
Fantasy/Romance/Comic (because everything has to be funny.)
The protagonist might (he will not turn gay officially) turn gay, lol. I find it funny b/c most of the faithful readers locally to me who read my novel by chapters and tell me what in need to improve and not to improve, would be like (since they love the main character, Keg) 'YOU DID WHAT TO MY FANTASY MAN...' LOL or (if a guy) 'Why did you make him queer, he was a a fish mongrel (pimp),' which I find quite funny... good idea or not?
New ideas in chapter 2
I have created words that sound like fairy tounge Shaychi (borrowed Shaych from Mercedes Lackey) and Demchi (my own creation). Shaychi are basically Homosexuals and Demchi are basically Bisexual. do you think the new words are understandable or no , please reply.
The main character finds his true love (Yeah! Took me a while...), and it is Kat (no last name yet sry...) who has been there the whole time since the beginning but he has not emotionally talked with or to her. Will she die...do you think she should die?
(Last one I swear...) The shaychi character Vincient Vortex has formed a bond, a fatherly bond to be percise, with Keg. Due to Keg neglection by his actual father he has been searching for a person who will show him a relationship a father and son should have, good idea or overrated?
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Posted: Sun Mar 11, 2007 11:26 am
personally if i got all that info out of like the back of the book, or i even read the first 2 chapters i would probably out the book back on the shelf. But i also don't really read stuff like that. I like fantasy but not like really in dept fantasy. Nor am i a helpless romantic who would like all that stuff like finding his tru love.
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Posted: Mon Mar 12, 2007 3:13 pm
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