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Hatake Shiko

PostPosted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 7:12 pm


Hypocrite: One who affects virtues or qualites of virtue or religion



What is the real meaning though? How do you know that you

are not a hypocrite? How do any of us know? I guess we should take

a look at some hypocritical behavior to see if we are anything like this

horrible word.

Do you claim to be a loving parent, yet you yell at your children

every chance you get? Do you bring down their self esteem with just

a few simple words? Do you tell them to do things even though they

know in their hearts that it is wrong? Do you still claim to be a loving

parent?

Do you claim to be a follower of God, yet you cuss out someone

the instinct their voice raises above the octive you don’t like? Do you

use His name in vain, and then blame it on you children? Do you

scare your children into thinking that they are going to Hell if they do

not do things your way? Do you still claim to be a follwer of God?

Do you claim to have your childs best interest at heart, yet you

do things just to make it easier on you. Do you tell them that they are

not allowed to try out for a sport because you do not have the time to

get them to practice? Do you tell them that they cannot take a higher

level class because they will fail it, yet they were placed in it by a

teacher? Do you tell them that they cannot go to college if they stay

in school and that they must drop out of high school in order to have a

chance at a higher education? Do you still claim to have your childs

best interest at heart?


Hello, I would like to introduce to you my parents.



Now it is time for a different perspective on things, lets go for


that of a friend….



Do you claim that you are best friends with someone, yet you

think nothing but evil about them? Do you make plans with them and

then cancel at the last minuet because someone else was available?

Do you say that you want them to succeed, yet deep down you hope

they fail? Do you leave them when they have an emergency and need

you help? Do you still claim to be their best friend?



This list can go on and on, but what is the point? I have just

listed the major hypocritical behaviors for you. All you have to do is

see if you have the qualities of one of them…







So, what did you guys think?
PostPosted: Sun Feb 18, 2007 7:48 pm


I caught a few spelling errors;
line 10, I believe you meant instant, rather than intinct.
The line below that, your rather than you.
Also, in the beginning of the friend part, minute rather than minuet, and then 'your help'.

Alright, you've obviously got some demons to work out. I get the feeling you're a teenager, and going through the same things every teenager deals with.

I'm fifteen, I read your story, and recognized several sentiments of my own, and of my friend.

I don't want to pick a side without knowing how and why someone did what you say they did. That's just plain stupid, so stupid it scares the living daylights out of me that most people do. Human beings have a way of skewing the truth like no other creature. It is a second nature, so much so we twist words almost unconsiouly to put ourselves in a favorable light, and cast our rivals from that same light.

It also scares me that so few take the time to really put themselves in their opponents shoes. Think about the situation. Think about what you would do, not what you know you should, not what you would like to do, what you would do.

Maybe they have done these things. Maybe they are hypocrits. Maybe you are completely innocent.

I think you all are simply too human.

Requiem For A Threnody


Bane Montecristo

PostPosted: Wed Feb 21, 2007 1:27 pm


Lol, I think that you are describing one who is covertly hostile. Of course this can all be looked at as hypocritical behavior, but toward the end it didn't seem hypocritical, just backstabbing.

It was good... except for the spelling errors that other girl pointed out. Could flow a bit better though in the way that you set up the lines.

If you want... I posted a story.... not that anybody else is reading it.... but you could. stare

Good luck with your parents, by the way. ^^
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