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PostPosted: Thu Feb 01, 2007 7:05 pm


None of them are titled. Tell you what you think-

The Silence eats away at me
just like hte mares of night called dreams
if you decide you want to see
how I lack a light-like beam
you'll have to come much closer still
or at least until the night is here
I don't care if you've had your fill
you wanted to now face all fear
once upon a time I was trapped
yet now I face a demon wrath
away never will it choose to go
I'm stuck now dancing to and fro
while music plays far it will be
hark- wait for the day I am free




The blood now drips upon the floor
staining the tiles once white
yet still a cry for more and more
brings the red to light

You thought that this was just a game?
look again- I'm still inside this dream built cage
trapped by nightmares none can tame
to what use will you aid your Rage?

The gun is heavy in my hands
am I right or am I wrong?
I pull the trigger for my final stand
Peace... The fond are-


I know you really want me
I see it in your eyes
but know my love is never free
so take me by suprise

I'll never give up willingly
it'll always be a fight
but if you touch me lovingly
I'll dissapear from sight

I hate you, fear you, love you, need you
don't hold back this time
give the room a different hue
not with your blood but with mine.
PostPosted: Fri Feb 02, 2007 9:15 pm


I love your writing. I like the second one especially. Only thing I have to say is the timing for the rhymes are a little off. ^___^

[Muffin Man]
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XOxo_HugsAndKisses_oxOX

PostPosted: Sat Feb 03, 2007 3:21 pm


[Muffin Man]
I love your writing. I like the second one especially. Only thing I have to say is the timing for the rhymes are a little off. ^___^

Thanks!

Yeah... I notice that too when I read over them again in the morning. I write most of my poems in the middle of the night. I have nightmares and so when I wake up from one... I write. They don't always make sense when I read them over again. lol.
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