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 Posted: Mon Jun 27, 2005 11:57 pm
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Posted: Mon Jun 27, 2005 11:59 pm
Aw crud. I forgot to finish the title of my thread. sweatdrop It still works....kind of.
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Posted: Tue Jun 28, 2005 8:47 am
awsome! I like it. heart I love stuff like that, and it's all so true! I can't wait to read some more of your work when you get it up! mrgreen
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Posted: Tue Jun 28, 2005 8:43 pm
Thank you Silvery Shadow! I'm glad you like it. biggrin
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Posted: Wed Jun 29, 2005 8:03 pm
More poems!
The Ghosts
Lingering, waiting, watching
with a patience sorely envied.
That strange feeling of Deja Vu
taunting your mind with flashes and fragments,
mostly a vague feeling or presence.
Where did they go,
those dreams you can't remember?
What's Insomnia?
When I stand here alone
in the light of the dawn,
I wonder how many hours of sleep I lost.
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Posted: Thu Jun 30, 2005 7:54 am
That first one basicly describes my life! I get those dreams and feelings all the time, and it really creeps me out...the second one was powerful as well. *sits patiently in front of screen until next one is posted* 4laugh
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Posted: Thu Jun 30, 2005 5:48 pm
I loved em' all L. But I found a mistake in one I think. A typo....In this poem....[does not have title so insert at will]
Lingering, waiting, watching
with a patience sorely envied.
That strange feeling of Deja Vu
taunting your mind with flashes and fragments,
mostly a vague feeling or presence.
Where did the go,
those dreams you can't remember?
I think it should be Where did they go; not Where did the go.
Thats the only mistake and you may want to add titles to those......
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Posted: Thu Jun 30, 2005 9:25 pm
Thanks, both of you! heart I'll get straight to it, A. smile
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Posted: Mon Jul 04, 2005 9:41 pm
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Posted: Tue Jul 05, 2005 7:05 am
eek crying so sad! I loved it! I'm at a loss for words at the moment...just...WOW That was amazing
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Posted: Tue Jul 05, 2005 7:57 am
Er, let's see. . . Any constructive criticism I can give?
I liked the characters and the storyline. I was waiting for a connection to fireworks though, because of that bit at the beginning sweatdrop . The descriptions were pretty good. I'm glad they weren't too graphic, though my imagination sufficed since I watched Matrix: Reloaded an hour ago. xp
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Posted: Tue Jul 05, 2005 8:44 pm
Sorry about that. I was delusioned when I wrote that joke down, because at the time I could connect guns sort of sort of sort of to fireworks.
I'm glad you weren't disgusted. I don't want that to happen to people. Most of the time. >_>;;;;
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Posted: Wed Jul 06, 2005 7:33 am
batles need to have a certain level of gore to be descriptive and entertaining. but I was afraid that I might have been the only one who loved to see carnage. I can be a bit sadistic at times sweatdrop
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Posted: Wed Jul 13, 2005 6:40 am
Please, post more as soon as you can! i love it all, and i can't wait to read what you have next heart
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Posted: Wed Jul 13, 2005 8:56 am
Id post something that she sent me to critize when we were in school but I'll leave that up to her....PUT UP THE ONE WHERE THEY'RE IN THE CHURCH DAMNIT! MOST OF US ARE PAGANS HERE WE'LL FIND IT FUNNY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Please?! *begs* Oh and the one with the weird candy land theme that was great! xp
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