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Black_Hearted_Immortal

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Posted: Mon Jan 08, 2007 6:59 pm

I pulled out my folder olf my poetry, this is a little of My Older Work, I hope you like it, I wrote it in the Psychiatric Ward

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Title: I Won't Let Them In

They force me into a place I don't want to be

They force me into situations that piss me off

They piss me off so they can keep me here

They keep me here so they can get inside my head

I won't let them in

I won't let them understand

I won't let them cure

I won't let them in my god forsaken soul

I won't let them in

If they try to get in I will fight them

I will hurt them

I will defend myself

I will defend my mind

I will defend my soul

I won't let them in

Posted: Mon Jan 08, 2007 11:16 pm

I really like that one. It's probably my favorite of your poems. There's just so much emotion, especially so much anger and defense. I really can't imagine being in that situation. Having people try to get into your head, your thoughts, the one place you're supposed to have peace from the outside world. The one place you can be totally honest with yourself, if not others. The one place you can truly hide.

Never let them in.

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Speedyguido

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Posted: Mon Mar 05, 2007 9:22 am

I've had a strange relationship like that once. It was over quickly. But she still thinks that she needs to "help" me.
I love it. (Your poem I mean.)

Posted: Wed Apr 11, 2007 3:19 pm

I like it! it's really defiant. I can feel a fight going on while i read it

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Posted: Wed Apr 11, 2007 7:05 pm

Nice, a little different (okay a lot!) from the normal stuff. It's awesome. and I know where your comin' from although whether it's true or not I only went to the school counselor and a professional therapist, not a hospital ward...

Posted: Fri Apr 13, 2007 12:28 pm

Title: Reflection Of My Heart

You are the reflection of my heart

You turned my soul into a work of art

Even though I'm stupid, you tell me I'm smart

You put me back together even before I fall apart

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Black_Hearted_Immortal

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Posted: Fri Apr 20, 2007 10:10 am

hello friends, I've recently stared working on a song, I've never written a song before, I might post it when I finish it

Posted: Fri Apr 20, 2007 2:31 pm

you should try writing a longer poem! biggrin

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Posted: Fri Apr 27, 2007 6:03 pm

Wonderful poems. ^^ I really liked 'I Won't Let Them In', I believe many people could relate to it to some extent. I also liked the mood it conveyed, the determination to stay strong against them.

I liked 'Reflection of My Heart' too. It's nice, short, and gets the point across.

Posted: Thu May 10, 2007 5:52 pm

I like the new one and yes I realize I'm later with the comments sorry, but this one seems better than the first

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