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WinggedOne

PostPosted: Sat Jan 06, 2007 7:02 pm


Something I've been workinbg on for the past few years but can't continue because of the writers block I'm having on it... >.>

Prologue
Light and dark, we all know this as ying-yang. Where there is good
there is evil. Where there is white there is black. This story is
about 2 souls both a demon born in the darkness of hell's fiery pits
and an angel born in the grace of god live in one time, in one world,
and one place in life. They will both know the meaning of love and the
sacrifices they will have to make.


Chapter 1

(Angel)
The meeting of Satin and God is always boring to the angels that join
him. All they talk about is the souls they have received or if there
not talking about that they're talking about what they're doing and so
on. It's all very boring to some of us, ok it's boring to me. So I
take off and go to my garden. A place where I could find a place to
rest and a place where no demon will follow me too. That was until
today.

(Demon)
Coming from hell to the meeting place takes time and energy both of
which I chose to not spend. Today was different to me I was bored. I
needed to do something so I decided to go to this meeting just to kill
time until I am needed which is not very usual. When I got there I
took off to explore and ran in to this very beautiful garden. Deciding
to get closer I find not only it has flowers but I could see it was
taken care of very well. I took a mental note of where this garden was
so I could find it later if I wanted to. After I had done that I took
my time to walk around and admire the beauty of it all.
I stopped suddenly and listened thinking I heard something. It came
once again and my "heart", my soul is my heart, skipped a beat. The
sound I heard was wings and I was in the path of where it was going.
Not knowing what to do I hid myself in order not to be seen not
knowing it was too late.

(Angel)
As I came closer to my garden I felt a brief moment of someone trying
to get in to my mind, why I didn't want to know. I tried to find out
where it came from but it left my mind to fast, probably when I
prevented it from entering. Concerned I moved as fast as my wings
could take me. As I got over top if my garden I know that there was
something there most likely a demon, but I quickly ruled that out
because a demon would come nowhere near here.
But one thing for sure, I saw something move in my garden. Landing as
softly as I could, which is pretty soft in the sence that a human
would not have heard me land, I move from rose bush to rose bush
looking for the intruder. I checked each rose bush but with no
results. I was about to give up when a noise gave the thing away
whatever it was I was looking for. As I moved forward I was glad that
it had been this rose bush and not any of the other because it was
isolated from the rest.
When I got there I looked in the rose bush and found nothing but roses.
Disappointed I turned and started walking away not looking where I was
going when I hit something almost soft. Looking up I recoiled in
shocked, I had hit the thing I was looking for and it was a demon
after all.

(Demon)
I was almost gone when she hit me. I could only watch as she looked up
at me and recoiled. I was about to speak in hope that she would hear
me out: no such luck;

"DE..." she stopped short because I had covered her mouth with my
hand. She tried to break loose as I told her;

"Please don't scream. I have enough trouble being a demon. I promise
to let go if you give me your word that you will not scream. I also
give you my word not to hurt you deal?"

She shook her head after a moment of hesitation and I let her go.
"Y-y-you're a demon!"

"Yes I know I am but I wish not, and will you please keep your voice down."

"Sorry but it is kind of a shock to find you here."

"And why is that?"

"Because you are a demon."

"Yes, yes I know that fact very well, but why is it shocking to see me
here. Don't you see demons all the time?"

"So you agree you are a demon."

"That is because I am one."

"If you are a demon why is your wing color red not black?"

"Because I am. Wait a second you don't believe I am a demon do you?"

"Well you have to be you aren't an angel."

"If you did not believe I was a demon why then did you call me one at
the beginning?"

"Instinct"

"O...K... then, why do you care what color I am?"

"You are not a normal color of a demon."

"So..."

"How many of you kind are red besides Satin?"

"Many"

"Name a few"

"There is... no he's black, hum... O there's... no he's black too."

"There's no one is there?"

"Your right I hate to admit it but I am a one of a kind freak."

"A... freak?"

"Someone different is called a freak."

"What ever. Why are you here?"

I told her why I was here in the first place, how I found this garden.
"By the way can you give my complements to the angel who takes care of
this garden?"

"You already have."

"You are the one responsible for this place!"

"Yes"

"How did you find this place?"

"It started with me..."


(Angel)
So I told him how I found my garden and what I did for it. When I
looked up to where he was sitting all I saw was a note.

Sorry I had to leave the
Meeting is over hope to
Talk to you soon.
Red

I looked over it once more and concluded that he was interested in
meeting me once again and his name was Red. I headed to heaven and on
the way made sure that Red's note to me was well hidden in my robe.
What I did not realize yet is I would be seeing him a lot more.


Chapter 2

(Angel)
Going back to my plane, which I call home, I decided to find out more
about Red. But before I could even take a step into my dwelling Lura
caught up to me "So? Where were you all the meet?"

I turned around and looked strait at her. She wasn't that tall kinda
short but her beauty made up for her small body size. Her wings were
perfectly white with golden edges showing that she was one of the
element angels of heaven. "What do you mean?"

She stared at me before answering, "I mean where were you while the
meet was going on? In fact where do you go every meet?"

"You know where I go every meeting...you also know how I feel about
talking or even being near any type of hell spawn."

She just nods her head; "True...I know that you have a rose garden
that you take care off. I also know your feelings for the Demon kind,
which prevents you from achieving master angel status."

Normally I am a calm person but when Lura threw that fact in so
casually the last of my calm snapped; "What do you want Lura? Or did
you just come here to gloat once again of you fire angel master
status?"

She just shrugged without answering. I glared at her once more but
then turned and walked into the house and not so carefully closed the
door in her face.
PostPosted: Tue Jan 09, 2007 2:10 pm


*pokes death* you seem to post this on every site that i know your a member of >.> well the peeps here can certianly help yas with the block ^^

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WinggedOne

PostPosted: Tue Mar 06, 2007 4:26 pm


I hope by now someone would have Made a comment...
PostPosted: Wed Mar 07, 2007 7:51 am


I'm sorry I hadn't before, I must have missed over this one some how. Sorry sorry sorry. You have a decent plot and the layout is interesting but the speaking is too choppy and you make things awkward because you feel it necessary for characters to reveal info about themselves or each other to quickly. You don't have to tell people all about characters right away. You have them talking in a hyper stilted and really uncomfortable to read way.

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WinggedOne

PostPosted: Thu Mar 22, 2007 11:54 am


I was making the story to be a short one in the first place...it's been about a year since I've re-worked it...one day I'll post the new Angels and Demons on here.
PostPosted: Sat Mar 24, 2007 8:14 am


haha princess no likey your story xP
I should post my random pointless story excerpt on this site...*lazy b*****d I is* but it has no plot...xP

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PostPosted: Sun Mar 25, 2007 3:30 pm


"Post it, post it, please. We all love reading such things in this guild."
PostPosted: Wed Mar 28, 2007 1:00 pm


I`VE LOSTED IT!!!!!! *cries untill a flash flood floods e'ry one out of the guild*

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PostPosted: Sat Mar 31, 2007 4:23 pm


"Now, now, no reason to get emotional." eek "Good God you've washed out the layer of grime under the sink, I didn't think that possible."
PostPosted: Sun Apr 01, 2007 11:59 am


i STILL havent found it...*prepares the hose to rinse off of everything that was tearstained because of the slat layrer from the tears*

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PostPosted: Sat Apr 07, 2007 5:16 pm


"Thank goodness we aren't around the books or all this water could be a big problem."
PostPosted: Mon Apr 09, 2007 4:44 pm


yes..it`s a good thing i bought that water/fire proof safe for our books ^___^

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PostPosted: Sun Apr 15, 2007 6:36 pm


Bibliophiles of the world unite......
PostPosted: Sun Apr 15, 2007 7:04 pm


..and tacos....

*lol when josh get`s ungrounded i`ll wonder if he`ll get steamed about our rambling in wich are off topic* yeah but when I find that sheet of paper i`ll type it up ^___^ *for now you`ll have to read my POETRY! *gasps* The horrors!

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PostPosted: Fri Apr 20, 2007 8:24 am


We are ALWAYS off topic but that's OK because our ramblings are always funny and that is the main reason we have a guild.
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