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Posted: Thu Dec 28, 2006 7:43 am
Alright. Please post any good fanfiction you come across, with pairings, the link, warnings, and the author (on gaia or otherwise), and if you wish, a breif description of the story ant a rating. Such as: Your Not Alone, by Tao-Ri-Sarra (Sarra_Zaazuullii). BSxEC, JHxAC ECxRH, CCxEC, AROxOC, CAIUSxOC. http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2825834/1/Description: Even though Bella thinks she's all alone at night, she's really not at all. Within the shadows lurks the most beautiful being known to walk upon this wretched earth, watching the amazingly angelic girl in her sleep, protecting her from all evil. Warnings: some slight OCness. Also references to sex may be used, as well as foul language. My Rating: 7/10 Not that descriptive, but good so far as a storyline. It has a in depth plot, and it is promised that it will be later revised once she is finished. What will not be tolerated under these are "Its good" or "It sucked." If you wouldn't give it a 4 or higher, please dont post it. This is for intellectual literature on Twilight fanfiction, where we can include our own personal characters if ytou so wish. You may post your own works as well, I even encourage it, as other members may be able to assist you in editing or proofreading.
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Posted: Sat Mar 24, 2007 2:35 am
yah so im writing may own fanfiction now....its like five in the morning...i was supose to meet someone and now that im up i figure that i could post a little of it...im not sure if anybody actually cares, so just to forewarn you, i wont post another unless someone talks back and tells me what they think of it so far:
Chapter 1.
Authors note: I do not own any of Mrs. Meyers books or characters. I just have a nasty habit of writing fan fictions. ( continuing where New Moon had left off )
“ ISABELLA MARIE SWAN ! YOU CAN MOVE FASER THAN THAT ! ” Charlie yelled as we emerged slowly from the shadows of the trees. His face was as red as a tomato. I laughed to myself, in reflex to the fact and Edwards face went from stern to confusion when he heard my laugh escape out of me. “ What could be so funny at a time like this? ” He whispered, amused by me. I tired to pull the sides of my smile down so it wouldn't be so obvious, but failed. “ Nothing. ” I giggled out, quickly becoming stern myself. “ Bella, what the hell is this? ” Charlie pointed towards my red, shiny motorcycle. “ Are you looking for a death wish? ” It was a rhetorical question but Edward and I both hung our heads down, my hair creating a curtain all around my head. Charlie must have thought it was in shame or embarrassment, but he couldn't have been more wrong. Edward and I were both laughing under our breathe. I tried to stifle another giggle, choosing instead to take a breath, but was shocked to find in sounded like a sob. Edward shot a glance at me and I caught his eyes through an opening in my curtain. “ Act on that. ” He slowly whispered. I nodded my head and had to think quickly of something that would put teas in my eyes. I had plenty to choose from: Edwards' leaving me, my bad dreams, the fact that I missed Renae. But I choose my dreams about Gran, or so...me. I thought of how I could have easily been mistaken for Edwards' grandmother. But for whatever reason, the traitors weren't coming. I had to think harder. I started to think of how Edward used to be so stubborn. Set on keeping me human, even though I didn't want to be anymore. But now, I might have an actual chance. That is if he doesn't find a way out of it. It made me so mad before, how he used to shoot me down whenever I had asked about it. Something cool ran down my face. I suppose it would have been warm if it wasn't twenty-eight degrees outside. But nevertheless, it was a tear that I could work with. I pretended to whip away dozens of tears, being very careful not to disturb the only real one, making it seem as though I had only missed one. Upon doing this, I was vigorously rubbing my eyes to get them poofy and red. It probably only took eight seconds from the time Charlie questioned my sanity to the time I had achieved my illusion. I picked up my head to look at Charlie, my air still partially in front of my face. Instantly, Charlie went from outraged to sincere. “ Bella, sweet-heart...” I realized why this had so much affect on him. Throughout my life, Charlie probably made me cry a grand total of two dozen times. He had always felt bad when he seen what he was capable of doing, and felt obligated to make it up to me right then and there, never remembering to punish me. I have never used this to my advantage before, it felt wrong to make him worry about me. “ Dad, I'm sorry, ” I chocked out, whipping a couple real tears away. “ I didn't know what I was thinking,” I lied “ I just wanted a ... a change, I guess.” I broke out a sob and turned around to out my hands to my face and rub my eyes again, in fear that my acting wasn't good enough. “ Bella, we need to talk. ” Charlie directed the statement towards Edward. I turned around to look at him, letting my eyes wander to his eyes, down to the ground, and after a brief moment, swiftly up to his again. He nodded slightly and came over to give me a hug. “ Choose your words carefully. ” He whispered in my ear before he quickly kissed the hollow below it, and turned to head towards his Volvo. Charlie opened the front door a gestured for me to follow, but my legs where anchored to the ground. Reluctantly my legs began to move when I commanded them to. I walked past Charlie into the hallway and he followed closing the door behind him.
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Posted: Mon Mar 26, 2007 4:15 pm
I read your fanfiction, and although I saw a few mispelled words I like it blaugh it has a certain quality that makes it seem twilight-ish... question does that make any sense? ...I kinda confused myself sweatdrop
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Posted: Tue Mar 27, 2007 1:19 pm
Thanks, If you were talking to me...yah its my first time trying, so I hope I dont completely suck at it...I will post again as soon as I get home...I am staying at a friends house for the week...and the next chapters are at my house....and I cant acess them...but I should be home by thursday night...yayness.
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Shattered Perception Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Mar 27, 2007 6:27 pm
Alice Hale Cullen Alright. Please post any good fanfiction you come across, with pairings, the link, warnings, and the author (on gaia or otherwise), and if you wish, a breif description of the story ant a rating. Such as: Your Not Alone, by Tao-Ri-Sarra (Sarra_Zaazuullii). BSxEC, JHxAC ECxRH, CCxEC, AROxOC, CAIUSxOC. http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2825834/1/Description: Even though Bella thinks she's all alone at night, she's really not at all. Within the shadows lurks the most beautiful being known to walk upon this wretched earth, watching the amazingly angelic girl in her sleep, protecting her from all evil. Warnings: some slight OCness. Also references to sex may be used, as well as foul language. My Rating: 7/10 Not that descriptive, but good so far as a storyline. It has a in depth plot, and it is promised that it will be later revised once she is finished. What will not be tolerated under these are "Its good" or "It sucked." If you wouldn't give it a 4 or higher, please dont post it. This is for intellectual literature on Twilight fanfiction, where we can include our own personal characters if ytou so wish. You may post your own works as well, I even encourage it, as other members may be able to assist you in editing or proofreading. Wow, I read through it and I really liked it. It just felt like it was a great way for the story to go.
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Posted: Tue Mar 27, 2007 6:29 pm
Conami yah so im writing may own fanfiction now....its like five in the morning...i was supose to meet someone and now that im up i figure that i could post a little of it...im not sure if anybody actually cares, so just to forewarn you, i wont post another unless someone talks back and tells me what they think of it so far: Chapter 1. Authors note: I do not own any of Mrs. Meyers books or characters. I just have a nasty habit of writing fan fictions. ( continuing where New Moon had left off ) “ ISABELLA MARIE SWAN ! YOU CAN MOVE FASER THAN THAT ! ” Charlie yelled as we emerged slowly from the shadows of the trees. His face was as red as a tomato. I laughed to myself, in reflex to the fact and Edwards face went from stern to confusion when he heard my laugh escape out of me. “ What could be so funny at a time like this? ” He whispered, amused by me. I tired to pull the sides of my smile down so it wouldn't be so obvious, but failed. “ Nothing. ” I giggled out, quickly becoming stern myself. “ Bella, what the hell is this? ” Charlie pointed towards my red, shiny motorcycle. “ Are you looking for a death wish? ” It was a rhetorical question but Edward and I both hung our heads down, my hair creating a curtain all around my head. Charlie must have thought it was in shame or embarrassment, but he couldn't have been more wrong. Edward and I were both laughing under our breathe. I tried to stifle another giggle, choosing instead to take a breath, but was shocked to find in sounded like a sob. Edward shot a glance at me and I caught his eyes through an opening in my curtain. “ Act on that. ” He slowly whispered. I nodded my head and had to think quickly of something that would put teas in my eyes. I had plenty to choose from: Edwards' leaving me, my bad dreams, the fact that I missed Renae. But I choose my dreams about Gran, or so...me. I thought of how I could have easily been mistaken for Edwards' grandmother. But for whatever reason, the traitors weren't coming. I had to think harder. I started to think of how Edward used to be so stubborn. Set on keeping me human, even though I didn't want to be anymore. But now, I might have an actual chance. That is if he doesn't find a way out of it. It made me so mad before, how he used to shoot me down whenever I had asked about it. Something cool ran down my face. I suppose it would have been warm if it wasn't twenty-eight degrees outside. But nevertheless, it was a tear that I could work with. I pretended to whip away dozens of tears, being very careful not to disturb the only real one, making it seem as though I had only missed one. Upon doing this, I was vigorously rubbing my eyes to get them poofy and red. It probably only took eight seconds from the time Charlie questioned my sanity to the time I had achieved my illusion. I picked up my head to look at Charlie, my air still partially in front of my face. Instantly, Charlie went from outraged to sincere. “ Bella, sweet-heart...” I realized why this had so much affect on him. Throughout my life, Charlie probably made me cry a grand total of two dozen times. He had always felt bad when he seen what he was capable of doing, and felt obligated to make it up to me right then and there, never remembering to punish me. I have never used this to my advantage before, it felt wrong to make him worry about me. “ Dad, I'm sorry, ” I chocked out, whipping a couple real tears away. “ I didn't know what I was thinking,” I lied “ I just wanted a ... a change, I guess.” I broke out a sob and turned around to out my hands to my face and rub my eyes again, in fear that my acting wasn't good enough. “ Bella, we need to talk. ” Charlie directed the statement towards Edward. I turned around to look at him, letting my eyes wander to his eyes, down to the ground, and after a brief moment, swiftly up to his again. He nodded slightly and came over to give me a hug. “ Choose your words carefully. ” He whispered in my ear before he quickly kissed the hollow below it, and turned to head towards his Volvo. Charlie opened the front door a gestured for me to follow, but my legs where anchored to the ground. Reluctantly my legs began to move when I commanded them to. I walked past Charlie into the hallway and he followed closing the door behind him. Wow, I read through this and to me it sounds like it could easily be something from one of Stephenie Meyer's books. I also like how Edward and Bella were talking without Charlie realizing it.
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Shattered Perception Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Mar 28, 2007 5:30 pm
Wow, really? You really think so? Thats great! My self esteem just went through the roof. sweatdrop
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Posted: Wed Mar 28, 2007 5:36 pm
Ok heres the next Chapter:
Chapter 2.
I woke up early Friday morning. I rolled over, aimlessly looking for my clock to see what time it was. 6:08 A.M. “Great.” I mumbled. 'My alarm clock doesn't go off for another twenty-two minutes' I thought to myself. I turned back over facing my wall and tried to force myself back to sleep. 'I wish Edward could be here.' I imagined him rocking me back to sleep. Though he would fail, I was the thought that counted. There was no way I could try to go back to sleep if Edward were here. I would want to talk to him and ask him how his night was. I remembered the conversation that I had to have with Charlie a month ago. ~ ~ ~ ~ Flash back ~ ~ ~ ~ “Dad, I'm eighteen now, please, you know I deserve more respect then what your giving me.” “ Bella, I don't care if your eighteen or thirty-six, you are still my daughter, my only child, I will not loose you.” “Ch-Dad,... you wont loose me.” “ Bells, how can I make you understand?” “ How about by trusting me!” It popped out of my mouth before I could stop it. Our conversation was quite until I practically yelled that. “ Sorry.” “ I do trust you honey, but.-” “ No you don't Dad, I'm sorry but you don't. You haven't trusted me ever since Edward came along...Dad, you can't keep blaming Edward when you know that your really only mad at me.” “ You don't understand Bells, you just came back into my life, and now you keep leaving.” “ Its not like I'm leaving you forever.” I pointed out. “ Bella-” “No, listen to me now, I am old enough for a lot of things, but its my choice to do them or not. You cant protect me from something I never wanted to be protected from. I love Edward. And he loves me. I love him so much that I could marry him Dad. I've never, never felt this way. About anyone! And if it weren't for you Dad, I wouldn't have ever wanted to come here, I would have never felt something like this.” “ Bells-” “ No, I'm not done yet. I am sorry for making you worry about me so much. I'm sorry for running out these past two years...but I can handle myself now.” Everything I've ever known to be wrong was passing through my head. It felt like I had broke so many promises and rules. Everything was detached and it seemed impossible to make things connect to say to Charlie what needed to be said. “ Are you done?” Charlie asked patiently when I hadn't spoke. “ For a little while.” I tried to smile but it was to hard. “ We need to set up some ground rules, okay?” I sank back onto my bed, leaning my head up against the wall. I knew this would come eventually, and I felt prepared to negotiate. “ I guess.” I leaned across my bed and reached for the top drawer of the night stand. Inside I kept a pen and a pad of paper. I shut the top drawer and pushed up off the side of the bed with my belongings in my hand. I was prepared to take notes but Charlie threw me off guard when he laughed at my gesture. “ Okay, I'm ready.” “ One; I want the truth, at all times, no more lies and secretes.” I looked up at him in confusion. 'Does he know? No, of coarse not.' “ Do-Ly noted” Was all I could attempt to say as I looked back down at the paper, not yet ready to write it down.. “ What else?” I asked, not looking up, as I wrote down my new rules. “ Thats all.” I looked up at Charlie again, shock written all over my face. “ Sweet-heart, I'm not out to ruin your life, I just want you to be able to come to me with the truth from now on.” He smiled at me and held out his hand for me you shake it. I looked down at it stupidly for a second, wondering what I was supposed to do with it. “ Deal?” Charlie urged, offering his hand once again. I looked at him and at his hand, still wondering what to do with what he was offering me. Finally it hit me, and in return, Charlie was hit with a flying hug. “ Deal!” I was so over joyed that we had come to an understanding, and it didn't involve too many tears. I got up off Charlie and stared blankly at him. “ What?” “ Does that mean you'll lay off Edward too?” I asked, hope saturating my whisper. Charlie smiled. “ I'm not out to ruin your life.” He repeated in a different tone. “ Thank you Dad! Oh, I love you so much!” I hugged him again. ~ ~ ~ ~ End ~ ~ ~ ~
I rolled back over and looked at the clock again. 6:32 A.M. “ Oh crap!” I shot out of bed and ran into the bathroom, slamming the door behind me in my rush to the shower. I was in and out of the shower in 10 minutes flat. I wrapped a towel around my body and walked to my bedroom to find clothes to wear. Upon entering my bedroom I found an outfit folded neatly on my bed . It was the one Alice had bought me a few weeks ago; a light cashmere sweater, a pair of dark low cut demin jeans and a pair of brown suade boots with a matching belt. It was a beautiful ensemble and I had always felt that I didn't deserve it. But here it was, laying out for me in all its glory and magnificence. I held tightly to my towel and briefly scanned the room. “ Edward? ”
( Theres more to the chapter, but I didnt want to put it all out at once. I hope you like it, C.C. is welcome, but dont be hurtful )
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Posted: Wed Mar 28, 2007 6:05 pm
Conami Wow, really? You really think so? Thats great! My self esteem just went through the roof. sweatdrop Hehehe, yes I really think that. And it's good to have a high self-esteem every once in a while at least.
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Posted: Wed Mar 28, 2007 6:12 pm
Conami Ok heres the next Chapter: Chapter 2. I woke up early Friday morning. I rolled over, aimlessly looking for my clock to see what time it was. 6:08 A.M. “Great.” I mumbled. 'My alarm clock doesn't go off for another twenty-two minutes' I thought to myself. I turned back over facing my wall and tried to force myself back to sleep. 'I wish Edward could be here.' I imagined him rocking me back to sleep. Though he would fail, I was the thought that counted. There was no way I could try to go back to sleep if Edward were here. I would want to talk to him and ask him how his night was. I remembered the conversation that I had to have with Charlie a month ago. ~ ~ ~ ~ Flash back ~ ~ ~ ~ “Dad, I'm eighteen now, please, you know I deserve more respect then what your giving me.” “ Bella, I don't care if your eighteen or thirty-six, you are still my daughter, my only child, I will not loose you.” “Ch-Dad,... you wont loose me.” “ Bells, how can I make you understand?” “ How about by trusting me!” It popped out of my mouth before I could stop it. Our conversation was quite until I practically yelled that. “ Sorry.” “ I do trust you honey, but.-” “ No you don't Dad, I'm sorry but you don't. You haven't trusted me ever since Edward came along...Dad, you can't keep blaming Edward when you know that your really only mad at me.” “ You don't understand Bells, you just came back into my life, and now you keep leaving.” “ Its not like I'm leaving you forever.” I pointed out. “ Bella-” “No, listen to me now, I am old enough for a lot of things, but its my choice to do them or not. You cant protect me from something I never wanted to be protected from. I love Edward. And he loves me. I love him so much that I could marry him Dad. I've never, never felt this way. About anyone! And if it weren't for you Dad, I wouldn't have ever wanted to come here, I would have never felt something like this.” “ Bells-” “ No, I'm not done yet. I am sorry for making you worry about me so much. I'm sorry for running out these past two years...but I can handle myself now.” Everything I've ever known to be wrong was passing through my head. It felt like I had broke so many promises and rules. Everything was detached and it seemed impossible to make things connect to say to Charlie what needed to be said. “ Are you done?” Charlie asked patiently when I hadn't spoke. “ For a little while.” I tried to smile but it was to hard. “ We need to set up some ground rules, okay?” I sank back onto my bed, leaning my head up against the wall. I knew this would come eventually, and I felt prepared to negotiate. “ I guess.” I leaned across my bed and reached for the top drawer of the night stand. Inside I kept a pen and a pad of paper. I shut the top drawer and pushed up off the side of the bed with my belongings in my hand. I was prepared to take notes but Charlie threw me off guard when he laughed at my gesture. “ Okay, I'm ready.” “ One; I want the truth, at all times, no more lies and secretes.” I looked up at him in confusion. 'Does he know? No, of coarse not.' “ Do-Ly noted” Was all I could attempt to say as I looked back down at the paper, not yet ready to write it down.. “ What else?” I asked, not looking up, as I wrote down my new rules. “ Thats all.” I looked up at Charlie again, shock written all over my face. “ Sweet-heart, I'm not out to ruin your life, I just want you to be able to come to me with the truth from now on.” He smiled at me and held out his hand for me you shake it. I looked down at it stupidly for a second, wondering what I was supposed to do with it. “ Deal?” Charlie urged, offering his hand once again. I looked at him and at his hand, still wondering what to do with what he was offering me. Finally it hit me, and in return, Charlie was hit with a flying hug. “ Deal!” I was so over joyed that we had come to an understanding, and it didn't involve too many tears. I got up off Charlie and stared blankly at him. “ What?” “ Does that mean you'll lay off Edward too?” I asked, hope saturating my whisper. Charlie smiled. “ I'm not out to ruin your life.” He repeated in a different tone. “ Thank you Dad! Oh, I love you so much!” I hugged him again. ~ ~ ~ ~ End ~ ~ ~ ~ I rolled back over and looked at the clock again. 6:32 A.M. “ Oh crap!” I shot out of bed and ran into the bathroom, slamming the door behind me in my rush to the shower. I was in and out of the shower in 10 minutes flat. I wrapped a towel around my body and walked to my bedroom to find clothes to wear. Upon entering my bedroom I found an outfit folded neatly on my bed . It was the one Alice had bought me a few weeks ago; a light cashmere sweater, a pair of dark low cut demin jeans and a pair of brown suade boots with a matching belt. It was a beautiful ensemble and I had always felt that I didn't deserve it. But here it was, laying out for me in all its glory and magnificence. I held tightly to my towel and briefly scanned the room. “ Edward? ” ( Theres more to the chapter, but I didnt want to put it all out at once. I hope you like it, C.C. is welcome, but dont be hurtful ) Wow, another great chapter. I really like you're writing style. It's nearly identical to Stephenie's style with just slight variations. I especially liked how the arguement/negotiation went with Charlie. I felt that, that was how it would go if Stephenie had written it herself. I can't wait to read more soon.
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Shattered Perception Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Mar 28, 2007 6:20 pm
Id have to say that your one of the best people get feedback from. My self esteem shot up even more, anymore and I may be lyable to have a heart attack.
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Posted: Wed Mar 28, 2007 6:23 pm
Conami Id have to say that your one of the best people get feedback from. My self esteem shot up even more, anymore and I may be lyable to have a heart attack. Hehehe. Ok, I guess I'll have to try and keep it down then.
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Posted: Wed Mar 28, 2007 6:39 pm
I wish other people would comment too though. Dont get me wrong, I love it when you comment, especially so postively and quickly, but I cant help but wonder if there are others reading this and taking it. Posting it elsewhere and calling it their own. One of my biggest fears of posting anything orginal...
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Posted: Wed Mar 28, 2007 6:43 pm
Conami I wish other people would comment too though. Dont get me wrong, I love it when you comment, especially so postively and quickly, but I cant help but wonder if there are others reading this and taking it. Posting it elsewhere and calling it their own. One of my biggest fears of posting anything orginal... Well if that does happen at least gaia tells you when you posted it so you can prove you posted it first if you find someone else posting it. Anyways I know a few of the people in this guild and I know that none of them would do something like that.
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Posted: Wed Mar 28, 2007 6:50 pm
Well thats a relief. Thanks for the words of comfort. Would you be up to reading the rest of chapter 2 tonight or would you like to wait until I finish chapter three? Im trying not to post to ahead of myself, I want to try and always be at least one chapter ahead of the readers, but I am so happy that someones' reading and liking it xd I just want to explode!
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