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 Posted: Mon Jun 20, 2005 11:43 am
Why
((this is meant to be read outloud, but it can be read anyways, just doesnt have the same...effect. for helpful reading, pause after each line. and on single word lines, read quickly. *shrug* just fyi jic))
Why do people fall in love
fall
painfully
hard
into
love
emotions so strong
they burn inside
like fire
left untended
to devour its surroundings
What is it that drives the heart
to allow itself to fall
into this trap
of painfullness
loneliness
fear
Is it a longing for companionship
hand to hand
mind to mind
flesh to flesh
heart to heart
Why does the mind let itself go
giving in to this shining darkness
that is
the creation and destruction of humankind
Happy
sad
caring
hating
kissing
yelling
make up your mind love
which is the way
that we are supposed to act
Why do we do this
to ourselves
laughing and crying
because of another
We allow this torment to enter our lives
draining us
little by little
as it brings us up
and pulls us down
So I ask the question
the burning
acheing
question
filling my mind
my heart
my soul
Why
do people
fall in love?
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Posted: Mon Jun 20, 2005 3:14 pm
Wow....just wow....that is awsome Rainy!! Purely awsome. I just love it. It has such an effect when you read it alowd. Wow...I can't explain it any better!
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Posted: Mon Jun 20, 2005 4:04 pm
Yay, Rainy! I'm so glad you finally posted! And what a post it was eek . That was incredible. You're right, it is better when spoken aloud. It sounds like something Jill Scott would slip into her songs, like when eve-ry-thing goes sta-cat-to. Or like something Floetry would put to music. Incredible. Beautiful. I am mindblowingly wowed.
*snaps very enthusiastically* Cool, cat. Cool.
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Posted: Mon Jun 20, 2005 9:31 pm
yay! im glad you guys liked it, i really love it ^-^ its one of the best things i've written, i think. or at least, one of the things im most proud of. thankyou for the great comments ^-^ heart
im gonna post a few more poems tomarrow, but i still think that one is the best ^-^
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Posted: Mon Jun 20, 2005 10:26 pm
Yes, it was a very nice poem. It describes Love pretty well.
I don't have much experience with poems like this, but I noticed that you capitalized the beginnings of some sentences, but not others. Why is that?
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Posted: Tue Jun 21, 2005 7:11 am
*points up* yeah I noticed that too.....but it was a great poem Rainy! Do you always write in that form or do you mix it around?
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Posted: Tue Jun 21, 2005 11:24 am
FieryKnife Yes, it was a very nice poem. It describes Love pretty well. I don't have much experience with poems like this, but I noticed that you capitalized the beginnings of some sentences, but not others. Why is that? I think, because i wrote it to be read, i capatalized where a main idea ended, or basically where to pause during reading and begin with a new...emotion...or lets say i have my hands up while saying one part, when it gets to a capitalized word, i put them down, and start anew. I guess im not entirely sure, i just went with how i felt like writing it.
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Posted: Wed Jun 22, 2005 10:52 am
Tenda8860 *points up* yeah I noticed that too.....but it was a great poem Rainy! Do you always write in that form or do you mix it around? im not very good at sticking to one style. With stories i can always look back and tell i wrote something because the styles typically the same, but with poetry my stuff usually differs.
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Posted: Sun Jun 26, 2005 8:07 pm
I know how that is. I like to do what I feel like when it comes to things like that. biggrin
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Posted: Wed Jul 06, 2005 10:23 pm
Wow. That's good. I like the title of your post too, with the typewriter thing (it's what I mainly write on) but it has an appeal. If it was longer you could probably use it for Slam Poetry. I like Slam Poetry.
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