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 Posted: Sat Jun 18, 2005 9:54 am
Okay everyone else seems to be doing this and I kinda felt left out so uh here are some of my poems. Some of these date back 2 years or more so.....enjoy....
Loves Tricks
Love is a trick that nature plays
on us humans so that we can
reproduce......And I wont have
anything to do with it! Nothing....
nada! You hear?! I said NOTHING!
I will have no part in it so go away
and just leave me be!
You heard me.....I thouht I was clear.....
Stop following me! I know you think you
Love me but you dont even know me!
One date you ask? Hmm.....Well if I do,
will you leave me be? Fine then one date
and thats all, no matter what your plea
might be!
Now I guess Love has finally won this round;
you are a captive as am I, for now we are
caught deep, deep in it's web of deceit.
YOU CREEP!!! YOU CRETIN!!! How
could you do this to me when you claim
to Love me!?
This is all your fault you freak!
Why did you have to ask me out
on that stupid date anyways!?!
How come you didn't just go away
like you said you would?! Why did
you ignore my plea?!
Gods help me!
I cant deal with this I'm only 15!
Please I beg of you, let me go;
set me free!
I dont want to be the fly
in this web of lies......
Oh my, I see it all so clearly now!
How could I be so blind!?
You are the spider and I am the fly!
You are not a captive but an over
seer of all these lies!
(I wrote that a year and a half ago sweatdrop )
The Storm
I've been held up in this one room cabin for
awhile now. I have no clue for how long; I can't
even tell if it's day or night. Because the winds
have been blowing, you can tell a snow storm is
brewing.
It seems like the longer I stay here; The
smaller this room gets. Inch by inch, foot by
foot, the walls are slowly closing in around
me.
Maybe it would be easier to just face the
storm anew; but when I look out that window;
I realize that I can't make it alone. . .
Because this snow storm of my life, and if I
can't control it, then who else will?
The fire is slowly burning; Its almost out
of wood. It won't be long now till the end
is through, as I surrender my mind, body,
and soul to the snow storm of my mind.
(I just turned 15 when I did this one so this one is even older then the first one....)
Loves Flower
Love is like a floor that blooms in mid June.
Rain and winds constantly hound against
thy precious petals. Will it survive and thrive?
Or will it just simply die and wither away,
perhaps even decay?
Flowers have died over the changing seasons,
Only to bloom again come spring; is that what
our flower will be like?
Every year, during the first snow fall of the season,
standing alone, shrouded in the shadows of fate; stands
alone a single red rose, fighting for its life. Will it make it?
Could that be what our flower is going to be like?
Fate is done; you heard me, Fate is through.
For now my friend, you have discovered lifes trick
to finding your perfect flower. Help that single red rose,
by bringing it indoors and caring for it. Nurture it,
and it will thank you one day.
( xd I really dont like that one but I'm posting it anyway......><)
Stranger of the night
The wind blows eiraly outside my bedroom
window. The floor creaks outside my door.
Who could be there; are they friend or foe?
The door slowly squeals as the dim light
coming from the hall light slides across my
floor onto my bed like oil glides atop water.
I call out 'who's there?' but alas no
response comes from the shadows of my room.
Suddenly there is a bounce on my bed as some
creature with bright green eyes approaches me.
The creature jumps on my stomach as I realize
that it is no monster at all; but my black
cat Jake, come to tell me goodnight.
Satisfied, I slowly lay back down and drift
away to sleep, as Jake curls up next to me
and purrs softly to sleep.
Well thats it for now, let me know what yall think!
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 10:05 am
((wootness Amanda has found her poetry book!))
Take my hand
Take my hand and hold on tight, dont worry,
I'm sure that everything will be alright.
It's okay I'm standing here with you now so
there is no need for you to be scared. For as long as I can
remember, you have been here helping me with
my troubles. But now I am here to help you.
So take my hand now as we take this first
step on the journey of a thousand miles.
Where we shall forever walk slowly through
the sands of time. Until the end is through
I promise I will be with you all the way,
so dont delay. Take my hand now and let us
be on our way! Just remember that if anything
were to happen to me somewhere along our journey,
it's okay to continue with out me. Now matter if
you look near or far, my spirit will always guide
you to the safe-haven of home. Now matter where
this road may take us, I will always and forever
remain by your side and in your heart. No matter
where life may take us, we will always get there together.
((It starts out okay but I dont really think its the best one Ive written....I like Loves Tricks out of all of them....but thats just me....))
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 5:28 pm
*bottom lip quivers* I guess Im not that good.....oh well whoever just skips over this will die! No skin off my back.....
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 5:55 pm
I didn't skip it! I was just waiting for you to post more. I like the poems, but to me, it's hard to find a rhythym in them. I like Love's Tricks the best, but I think that it would be cool if you cut it at the fourth verse, or stanza, whatever. I mean, I like the whole thing, I was just expecting it to end there.
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 6:20 pm
LOL! sorry but yeah, it was supposed to originally but then I added more and I think Im gonna revise it though.....
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 6:50 pm
Your poems are very good, I just didn't have time to look over them until now. ^^
I do agree with Love's Trick though, it is very well written, but the last part just seems like it doesn't fit with the rest of it.(Don't take that the wrong way, my poems end up like that about 99 percent of the time.) It reminds me of Lord of the Rings and this awsome book Crank at the same time. (No, I can't really explain that because I don't really understand it either...
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Posted: Mon Jun 20, 2005 8:22 am
YAY! Thanks but the only ones I really like are stranger of the night, loves tricks, the storm, and take my hand the rest of my poems can burn in hell for all I care......I just hate some of them and when I read them Im like 'What the ******** were you thinking?!'
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Posted: Mon Jun 20, 2005 8:41 pm
I can relate. Some of my earlier stuff makes me shudder with horror at the awfulness of it all.
I like your poems; they're pretty nice. For the lot of them I just suggest proofreading and maybe breaking some of the poems into stanzas, unless you wanted them that way, of course.
Speaking of which, I need to make my own page soon. sweatdrop
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Posted: Tue Jun 21, 2005 6:58 am
Okay..... 3nodding will do
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Posted: Tue Jun 28, 2005 8:25 pm
Okay just incase you guys wanna know what im working on; Im working on lyrics for this song that I just randomly started singing one day, you know how you can just start singing random things? Even if it makes absolutely no sense at all? I do that a lot, but anyways yeah Im working on lyrics; so far I only have the chorous, first verse and part of the second verse......ugh song writing es muy difficile no facil pero es divertido. Alguien habla espanol?.....sorry had an erge to speak spanish for a second, yeah spanish, I liked my teacher she was awesome.....anyways..... ninja Well since I trust you guys Ill give you what I have so far as a preveiw type of thing......
Boy Im gonna tell you right now,
that Im not gonna stand for this.
If you keep sayin' you want this thing to work between us;
Then open up your eyes, stop being so blind!
What can I say to prove my worth;
what can I do to show that my words are true?
What can I do to prove it to you? Just tell me what to do!
You dont think Im worth anything, that Im not useful;
well Ive got news for you!
Boy, I'm gonna rock your world;
turn it upside down,
turn you around,
and show you I'm not just daddy's little girl.
Im gonna turn you around and make you a man;
You'll see I'll show you that I can!
Tell me what to do, teach me how to be.
If you say you want me, then tell me how its gonna be.
I wanna be bad with you, right here, right now.
I dont care where as long as I can have you there.
Say the time and place cause you make me wanna misbehave.
Boy, I'm gonna rock your world;
turn it upside down,
turn you around,
and show you that I'm not just daddy's little girl.
Dont want anyone to start judging me,
just because they see me with you.
My turn; come on lets have a go,
and let me show what I can do.
Trust me boy ya dont wanna mess with me.
I'll show you up, I'll make a fool out of you.
I'll make you cry so hard, you wont know what do to.
Because.....
Boy, I'm gonna rock your world;
turn it upside down,
turn you around,
and show you that I'm not just daddy's little girl.
I've heard you've been around the block a time or two.
Rumors even say you're that love 'em and leave 'em type.
Dont want your other girl to see you're messin' 'round with me.
Come a little closer hun, gotta share a little something with ya.
You make me wanna break all the rules;
because you make it look so good.
All because you make it feel so good.
I'll give you props for playin' us all so well,
but its all over now, because......
Boy, I'm gonna rock your world,
turn it upside down;
turn you around,
and show you that I'm just daddy's little girl.
Just let me say; thanks for the ride.
Now get your a** out of here!
You've been played.
YAY! I finished it! Hope you like it tell me what you think, oh and the tune is undescrable, I cant think of a song that it comes closest to....oh well if I do Ill put it up.....
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Posted: Tue Jun 28, 2005 9:20 pm
It sounds like a good song, Tenda! I like how you don't let on who you're talking about until the end.
I really need to question the "make you a man" part. Whenever I think of that phrase I think of something...not innocent. You know what I mean, or am I just being culturally illiterate again?
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Posted: Wed Jun 29, 2005 8:09 am
I like it! 3nodding But now I want the tune . . .
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Posted: Wed Jun 29, 2005 6:15 pm
lol yay Im glad you guys liked it.
And yes Fiery youre thinking of the right thing, even though you know Id never do it but it fit the part so I went with it. sweatdrop
GO READ IT AGIAN ITS FINISHED! WOOTNESS ^^
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Posted: Fri Jul 01, 2005 9:33 pm
I say the song was done very well, Tenda! And forget what I said earlier about the "I wanna make you a man" part. I didn't read it right. You have permission to slap me...
But, first, I want to point out one correction! I think the line "Just tell me what to do?!" would be better if you didn't use a question mark with it (Just tell me what to do!).
That's all.
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Posted: Sat Jul 02, 2005 12:27 pm
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