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PostPosted: Wed Oct 04, 2006 11:14 am


ummmm... yeah. I don't have a standing title for it yet. And thus far, I only have a Chapter One. I hope everyone understands where I'm trying to go with it and will give me a nice comment.

Essentially, this is where science fiction officially meets Sailor Moon. It takes place some time before Silver Millennium, explains how it was established, and the events that led up to it's destruction. Forseeably, it will have a tragic and sad ending.
PostPosted: Wed Oct 04, 2006 11:15 am


Part 1

Chapter 1


It was a time of terrible despair throughout the Galaxy. Although the Sailor War had ended years ago, a new threat had surfaced. The once-good Queen, Galaxia, had defeated the source of all evil only to have it corrupt her when she sealed it away within herself. She sought the powers of the Galaxy, the starseeds of the Sailor Senshi protecting the thousands of planets, conquering world after world.

In due time, Galaxia’s forces were led to the Planet Freejia. She had heard of the Imperial family’s powerful starseed, collectively known as the Imperium Silver Crystal. Her craving for this crystal is what brought Shadow Galactica down upon the Freejians with out warning and without mercy.

*****


The dead and dying bodies of soldiers lay across the battlefield. The one-sided battle was over shortly before it began. Immense explosions bloomed in the sky. Mortar tanks began firing at large buildings indiscriminately. Galactican soldiers marched their way into the city, killing anyone whom dared stand in their way.

Princess Serenity had packed only belongings she could fit into a backpack. She heard a desperate knocking at her door. The door opened to reveal her best friend, Apollo, whose face was wrought with panic. "Serenity, we've gotta get outta here immediately. The enemy is in the city and is headed this way! If they catch you, were all totally screwed!" he said in the rather undignified manner he often used. He was famous on Freejia as the guitarist and lead-singer for his band, Millennium. Apollo carried only his guitar on his back and his standard-issue side arm at his hip. Aside from being a musician, he was also a fighter pilot in the Freejian Aerospace Corps, a subsidiary of the Freejian Navy.

Behind him, The Freejian Empress, Selene and an armoured Knight were waiting. "Let's go, Serenity! We haven't much time." Her mother said impatiently. Serenity took one last look at her room and then left with the rest of them.

As the hurried down a flight of spiral stairs, a woman’s voice reported over an intercom, "Warning: Galactican Stingers are attacking the escaping ships. Repeat, Galactican Stingers are attacking the escaping ships."

All they could do is hope their warships could hold out against this onslaught. In orbit, several Freejian warships fought back against Shadow Galactica's destroyers with great tenacity, to clear a path for more escaping ships. Fighters and cruisers alike on either side erupted in flames during the battle. The faster ships had no choice but to retreat from the planet's orbit to a relatively safe location around the larger of Freejia's two moons.

Back on the ground, Galactican troops soon began storming the palace. Warning klaxons blared while the woman on the intercom said, "Warning: Enemy troops have entered the palace! Repeat, enemy troops have entered-PSHHHHHHH..." only to be cut off in a burst of static as an enemy soldier broke into the room she was working in and shot her with a paralysing EMP burst.

The outside of the palace took a mortar shot and shook violently. Just as the escapees were running down the corridor to the North Hangar, several of the large pillars came down, separating the group. Serenity and Apollo were stuck on the wrong side while Empress Selene was at a clear shot to the last transport offplanet. Apollo took out his communicator and contacted the captain of the cruiser Velocity, the Empress's flagship. "Velocity, this is Lieutenant Solaris. We are separated and I cannot get the Princess to you at this time. She is safe for the time being, but I'll have to get her offplanet myself."

Hearing this and seeing that there was no other option, the Empress warned, "If she has so much as single scratch on her, I'll personally jettison you into a black hole without a second thought!" As if to confirm the ominous threat, the palace walls shook again as she and her guard continued down the corridor.

Considering this threat, he was now a little anxious. "C'mon!" he said as he took Serenity's hand and they ran down the opposite direction to an intersection between two corridors. In the second it took to decide which way to go, two Galactican soldiers in full armour came down the corridor to the right. One of them appeared to be Human, but the other one was clearly a large, bipedal canine being; a species hailing from the planet Canis.

The Human soldier shouted, "There she is! Set for stun!" upon seeing the Princess and fired at her. His shot missed as they managed to backpedal behind the corner. Apollo immediately drew his laser pistol and returned fire, but his shots hardly pierced their armour.

As a stun burst barely missed them, he fired at the Human soldier's faceplate and he fell on the spot. The Canian howled as he saw his companion fall and began to charge at Apollo and Serenity. Luckily, Canians don't run very fast on two legs and the armour the Galactican military used made it difficult for one to get into a decent running position.

Apollo and Serenity outran their pursuer and rounded a corner. Soon, they came to another intersection and stopped. Serenity reached into her bag and pulled out a bottle of expensive perfume. "What're you doing? They're using Canians! If you put that on, they'll be able to track us better!" Apollo reasoned.

But Serenity had ideas of her own. Instead of spraying the perfume on herself, she threw the glass bottle down to the floor and broke it. A flowery, feminine smell quickly filled the immediate area. "Now they will have a hard time tracking us at all." she said smugly.

Meanwhile, just as the Empress and her guard were about to board the Velocity, a group of enemy soldiers surrounded the ship and one soldier managed to squeeze off a single shot at the Empress as the ramp was being raised. The shot hit her through her back and burned it's way through the other side of her body. Her Knight bodyguard caught her as she fell and carried her to the ship's infirmary with the aid of a Freejian soldier.

As if speaking to the atmosphere, Selene painfully groaned, "Please be safe, Serenity... And don't let Apollo do anything stupid!" She could feel the strength slip away from her body. In a fit of sheer desperation, she drew energy from her Silver Crystal’s Holy-elemental powers to heal the wound. Her vital signs had stablised, but in due time began to decline. Medics rushed to treat her with the finest of their medical supplies.

Soon the ship blasted away from the palace's North Hangar and into space. As the ship cleared the planet's atmosphere, a blockade of Galactican ships began firing. The Velocity fired back as Stingers started to engage the ship directly. Deflector screens went up at maximum power and weapons fired their full salvos as the Velocity's engines brought it to full speed.

*****


Four Canian soldiers had been following Apollo and Serenity by scent, but once they reached an intersection in the corridors, the trail was interrupted by a strong, girly smell. The one in front took a step forward and heard a crunch beneath his feet. Looking down, he saw a broken bottle and a mess of perfume on the floor.

He growled in frustration and barked to his comrades to get their attention. "Split up and hunt them down! One of you go down the right hall and another go down the left." he ordered, pointing out directions with the gun integrated into his armour. Then he added, "and you with me." He said to the remaining soldier. They then went their separate ways.

Serenity and Apollo soon ended up at a dead end in the passageway. "You know, for someone who grew up in this palace, you don't seem to know your way around too well." Apollo criticised.

Serenity glared at him and replied, "So sue me! I made a mistake! Let's go!" they turned to backtrack, but two of the Canians rounded the corner up ahead. Apollo pulled Serenity out of sight and looked around for any possible escape. Looking up, he found a ventilation shaft that appeared to go through the dead-end wall.

"C'mon! The vent!" he said, pointing up. He carefully climbed up on a nearby machine, jumped up to the vent and crawled inside.

"Oh yeah, they'll never think of looking for us in the vent.” Serenity said sarcastically. Then she heard heavy footsteps approaching and one of the Canians saying that they never checked the corner she and Apollo happened to be occupying. She saw she had no other choice. She used her Senshi powers to jump up to the vent and climb inside after Apollo. The alien soldier in front glanced up at the vent just in time to see the soles of Serenity's designer boots disappear inside.

For a moment they thought they were safe, but soon gunshots were fired at them from one of the pursuing alien soldiers. As they hurried down the ventilation shaft, all but a single shot missed the two. Just as the hot blue plasma bolt grazed Apollo's shoulder, he shoved Serenity in front of him and fired back at the soldier struggling to get into the vent to chases them. Serenity found a grate that opened up in the South Hangar and, thinking quickly, took Apollo's pistol and shot it out. "Come on!" she ordered, as she dropped down. Taking his gun back, he fired one last shot at the pursuing soldier and he, too, dropped down to the Hangar below.

Upon arriving in the hangar, a woman in a gold-armoured Senshi uniform turned to face them with a menacing glare. Serenity immediately recognised her. "Galaxia..." she said, her voice barely the ghost of a whisper.
In her right hand, Sailor Galaxia brandished a longsword. She raised it, preparing to strike Apollo down when a man in armour different from the rest of the soldier's walked up to her. Serenity also recognised him and couldn't believe her eyes. The man was a Knight, a male counterpart to a planet's Senshi guardians. And what's worse is that he was a Freejian Knight!

"My queen, let me handle them! They don't look worthy to die by your hand." said the man in armour to Galaxia. Galaxia lowered her blade and hesitated for a second, as if to consider the man's proposal. Finally, she answered, "Very well. Eliminate the boy, but leave the princess alive. She has something I want." And with that, she vanished, teleporting to another part of the palace.

"Come... Bring it on, son!" said the man, arrogantly gesturing with his hand, displaying the life-sustaining bracelets that Galaxia gave him. He drew his own sword and prepared to attack. The blade began sparkling and crackling with electricity as he charged it with his electric powers.

Serenity, completely appalled at her guardian’s betrayal, immediately protested. "Garrik, what is the matter with you? Why have you joined forces with the enemy?" Sir Garrik didn't answer, but instead attacked Apollo with brutal force. Instinctively, Apollo dodged the attack and shot at him. The Knight's armour was too strong; Apollo's shots didn't even pierce it.

Now Serenity knew what she had to do. She clutched her glowing Silver Crystal in her hand and called out, "Freejia Heavenly Charm!" A pure white flash of holy light filled the entire hangar. The attack stunned the traitorous Knight by targeting the dense darkness in his heart. He lay on the floor, trembling and hyperventilating from the holy power that pierced his dark soul.

Now was their chance to escape. Fresh, red blood stained the sleeve of Apollo's grey-blue uniform. He gripped his shoulder as he led Serenity to a small maintenance ship. They boarded the ship, started the engines, and blasted their way out of the hangar, running down a few approaching soldiers of several species in the process.

Then Galaxia reappeared in a furious rage. Recovering from the short-lived battle, Garrik stood to face his Queen. "You let them get away?" Galaxia yelled. As Sir Garrik attempted to explain, Galaxia snapped her fingers and the bracelets that he wore to sustain his life were removed and he immediately disintegrated. "Useless fool..." she muttered under her breath. “If they are leaving the system, they'll never get past my fleet!"

Once they cleared the atmosphere, Apollo immediately saw the blockade and veered up in an attempt to avoid it, but to no avail. Once they came in range, the enemy ships began firing at them. As a fighter pilot, he had knowledge of evasive actions. He put the ship into a roll at full speed. They took only a few hits because of this, but one of those hits was directly on the viewport, cracking it. The vacuum of space pulled at the cracks, making them worse as the ship tumbled forward, past the blockade.

"Uh oh...." they both said in unison. Red energy bolts still continued to fly past them into space as the viewport grew increasingly weaker. The ship’s weak deflector screens were now completely dead.

Apollo took out his comlink and said, "We're in serious trouble! We need a pick-up right away!" The communications officer onboard the Velocity got the call and passed the word on that the Princess and Lieutenant Commander were in danger. An officer on the observation deck saw their small maintenance ship hurtling into space, barely under control, and gave the order to pick them up.

"Roger, Lieutenant. This is the Velocity. We're right above you. We're opening the mooring field now." was the communications officer's response. He gave the order to an officer in the ship’s docking bay, who began to activate the artificial gravity field that would bring in the ship.

Upon hearing this, Apollo suddenly realised that this may make their situation worse. "No wait! Just open an airlock hatch and prepare to close and pressurize it the moment we get in." He suggested. The officer wasn't sure what Apollo had in mind, but complied anyway. Serenity was now both confused and scared. How was he going to go about saving them? If the gravitation field pulled at the cracking viewport, it might burst pulling them out into the vacuum of space. However, if they were prepared, this could be a good thing after all.

Suddenly, Apollo grabbed her around the waist and said, "Exhale!" As he took a deep breath, she immediately knew what he was planning to do and started to struggle screaming, "Apollo, what are you doing? If we jump, our lungs will explode!"

"Exhale... slowly!" He said. He inhaled deeply and added, "Trust me! Hold on... and steadily exhale as soon as we break through!" Serenity felt she had no choice. She did as she was told and they jumped out into the void, using inertia to pull them into an open airlock hatch. The Velocity's main airlock hatch opened to receive them and then quickly closed and pressurised just in time to save them from asphyxiation.

"Let's… not... do... that... again!" Serenity gasped. Apollo just nodded his agreement, gasping heavily. Just then, a medic and another military officer came rushing into the airlock.

"Are you all right, ma'am?" the medic asked Serenity while the other officer helped her to her feet. Apollo slowly got up on his own and followed the group to the infirmary to have his arm looked at. "Send a message to Weapons to load and fire one last salvo before we jump into hyperspace." commanded the officer to a subordinate.

"Yes, sir!" the other officer replied with a salute and turned on his heel. Minutes later, the ship vibrated as its cannons fired their rounds and whined as its engines were pushed to full power. No one onboard knew if they’d ever see their homeworld again.

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PostPosted: Mon Oct 16, 2006 11:41 am


Okay, for the most part, that kicked a**. As a long-time Sailor Moon fan and an SM writer myself, I think you're off to a great start. But.
Your grammar could definitely use work, and you have a tendency to use awkward phrasing, such as 'In the end the faster ships had no choice but to retreat away from the planet to a relativly safe location around the larger of Freejia's two moons.' My suggestion would be to clean the sentence up a bit. 'In the end, the faster ships had no choice but to retreat to a relativly safe orbit around the larger of Freejia's two moons.' or something like that.
Also, you took great apparent delight in dialogue and military jargon, but you didn't counterbalance with any description worth noting. Without some layman's speech to balance it out, all this talk of clearing atmo, deflector screens, full salvos, and barrel rolls - what exactly is a barrel roll, anyway? - can get awful tedious.
Segueing into the next point, while all the technical terms do lend a sense of realism, they can be overused. Please, please, please be careful how much techtalk you use; I'd hate to see it ruin a perfectly good story like this.
As to plot and characterization, I think you're doing just fine. With a bit of description and a few less military vocab lessons, this story could be kick-a**. It might even make it into the archive of fanfics so good, I've printed them out, made them cover pages, and installed them in their own special three-ring binders. That's how good you could be.
Ooh, and a title. You definitely need one of those. As this appears to be a pre-season fic, you might want to think about references to a beginning or the past, but I'd suggest keeping it short and simple, like maybe just calling it Before.
PostPosted: Tue Oct 31, 2006 12:50 pm


Casiela
Okay, for the most part, that kicked a**. As a long-time Sailor Moon fan and an SM writer myself, I think you're off to a great start. But.
Your grammar could definitely use work, and you have a tendency to use awkward phrasing, such as 'In the end the faster ships had no choice but to retreat away from the planet to a relativly safe location around the larger of Freejia's two moons.' My suggestion would be to clean the sentence up a bit. 'In the end, the faster ships had no choice but to retreat to a relativly safe orbit around the larger of Freejia's two moons.' or something like that.
Also, you took great apparent delight in dialogue and military jargon, but you didn't counterbalance with any description worth noting. Without some layman's speech to balance it out, all this talk of clearing atmo, deflector screens, full salvos, and barrel rolls - what exactly is a barrel roll, anyway? - can get awful tedious.
Segueing into the next point, while all the technical terms do lend a sense of realism, they can be overused. Please, please, please be careful how much techtalk you use; I'd hate to see it ruin a perfectly good story like this.
As to plot and characterization, I think you're doing just fine. With a bit of description and a few less military vocab lessons, this story could be kick-a**. It might even make it into the archive of fanfics so good, I've printed them out, made them cover pages, and installed them in their own special three-ring binders. That's how good you could be.
Ooh, and a title. You definitely need one of those. As this appears to be a pre-season fic, you might want to think about references to a beginning or the past, but I'd suggest keeping it short and simple, like maybe just calling it Before.


oh... well thank you soooo much for that reveiw. It's the best I ever got. I'll clean it up as best i can, ok? Thanx again. ^_^

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PostPosted: Thu Nov 02, 2006 9:04 am


Ooh, and when you'd done, show me the revised copy! I delight muchly in this fic.
Also, if you happen to be thinking of getting a beta reader, I'd be happy to help you out in that capacity.
PostPosted: Fri Nov 17, 2006 11:11 am


A beta reader, you say? Why would I need one?

I'm still working on a title... and how's it now? (reread the story) If there are still errors, please tell me where they are so they can be corrected.

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PostPosted: Fri Nov 17, 2006 11:57 am


yeah, how does "Sailor Moon Forever: Genesis" sound?
PostPosted: Mon Nov 27, 2006 11:33 am


Forever: Genesis sounds cool.
Most of the grammar has been fixed, and the story still rocks.
I'm noticing now that you have a tendency to not start a new paragraph when someone is speaking. That's kind of distracting; it's hard to tell who's saying what sometimes.
I realize it might seem like I'm being picky, but I haven't been nominated as guild PostNazi for nothing.

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PostPosted: Fri Dec 22, 2006 9:33 am


*laughs* yeah... i see what you mean. I'll have to fix that... I'm currently working on the next chapter, too, but the dailogue needs to be perfected. I'll get back to you.
PostPosted: Tue Dec 26, 2006 6:08 am


Hooray for chapter 2!

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PostPosted: Tue Jan 02, 2007 6:27 am


I agree, this is a very well-written fiction. I'm a tech-talk freak, so any mistakes in my or anyone elses writing I tend not to spot.
...Hm. I'm not going to try and match Casiela's critique, so I'll leave it at that. By the looks of the comments, you've fixed the majority of the problems anyhow.
PostPosted: Thu Jan 11, 2007 11:35 am


I made more changes! I went and made proper line breaks where they were needed. I hope now it looks better.

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PostPosted: Mon Jan 22, 2007 4:16 am


Chapter 2

“Dammit! We’re losing her!” exclaimed a medic as he watched Empress Selene’s failing vital signs on the bioscan. Though her wound was dressed and treated, the gunshot had severed a main artery. As strong as she was with her Holy-element Senshi powers, she failed to stop her own internal bleeding. There was little the medics could do.

Princess Serenity was led into the infirmary where her mother lay. When the Empress saw her, she was overjoyed to the point of her pain temporarily disappearing. She wanted to get up to embrace daughter one last time, but the medics urged her to stay put.

“Mother! What happened?” Serenity asked in shock.

“She’s been shot by enemy soldiers.” The senior medic answered for her. Selene struggled to find her voice and said, “I could have her that myself, thank you… Serenity, I’m not going to be able to hold on for much longer… when I’m gone, the burden I once bore will fall upon your shoulders… I expect great thing from you… Serenity… do you understand?”

“Yes, Mother!” replied Serenity with tears welling up in her eyes. Selene gently ran her fingers across her daughter’s cheeks, wiping away the tears the rolled down them.

“Be Brave… Be strong… Lead our people to victory and prosperity once more…” With those final words and a grunt of pain, Selene’s body relaxed and in moments, breathed her last. The nearest medic pulled the sheets over the dead woman’s body only to have them fall flat moments later as her body disappeared, which the bodies of all Senshi have a tendency to do when they die. Serenity wept harder than she ever had as far back as she could remember.

The responsibility to lead was hers now. She gradually stopped crying as she boldly took up her mother’s burden. She knew what she must do. “Assemble everyone on this ship on the main deck and open communication links to the other ships. My mother deserves a proper funeral service.” was her first order as leader of the Freejian Remnant. The two officers that led her into the infirmary saluted and carried out her order.
*****


“… And in her memory, let us share a moment of silence.” Serenity stated as she stood at the podium in front of a large holoprojector. Holocams drifted by on their grav-repulsors, broadcasting the event live to the other ships. Every head was bowed, every eye closed, every hat over its owner’s heart. The room was as silent as the void of space itself.

Moments passed and Serenity’s head was the first to rise. She broke the silence with a final statement, “and now, I leave you to your duties… Dismissed, carry on!”

As the crowd dispersed to their respective places throughout the Velocity, one among them remained. Replacing his uniform beret over his blonde hair, he approached Serenity saying, “Hey… I… I’m sorry to hear about what happened.”

Serenity looked up at him, staring into his amber-coloured eyes. She shook her head slowly and replied, “Don’t worry about it, Apollo.” She began to walk off toward a nearby corridor when she stopped suddenly. Then, over her shoulder, she added, “Please accompany me to my quarters.” Apollo nodded solemnly and followed close behind her.

A few moments passed without a word to break the silence. “So…. What is it you wanna talk about, Serenity?” asked Apollo nervously. They were now walking side-by-side.

Serenity held her silence for a moment, as if to think up something to say. Then she replied, “I want to talk about a promotion for you.” She paused for a few seconds, sensing his excitement upon hearing those words, before adding, “ You were very brave to put your own life on the line for me. You’re a true friend, Apollo, and as a military officer, you should be rewarded for that bravery.”

Apollo’s pride was building up. Captain Apollo Solarum… he thought to himself, trying on the next rank in his mind. “Thank you.” was his only verbal remark.

They entered Serenity’s room, which oversaw the bridge of the ship. It was her mother’s, but Selene’s responsibilities were now hers, so Serenity took it upon herself to have what belongings she had onboard to be brought to this room from the one she formerly occupied down the corridor. She pulled up a chair and seated herself in front of a table with a small holoprojector in the centre, giving a hand gesture to Apollo to do the same.

The door opened again and two men entered. Admiral Poseidon was a middle-aged man with a strong build and the mind of a brilliant tactician. General Zeus was an older, taller, and more decorated man, with the demeanour of one who had seen many battles. They, too, took seats around the table. Serenity nodded in greeting.

“Excellent. Now then, the main issue we need to discuss is what we’re to do next.” Her sapphire-blue eyes glanced at each man. After a brief pause, Serenity continued. “We are in no way safe out here. For all we know, Shadow Galactica could well be following us. I don’t mean to sound paranoid, but we shouldn’t be so foolish as to rule out the possibility. Therefore, we need to find somewhere go. You three are the highest-ranking officers in our remaining forces. Captain Solarum has just now obtained his rank.” She paused again for emphasis, gesturing to Apollo.

The other two officers glanced at Apollo expectantly. Feeling pressure, he spoke up first. “Well, first we need to find a safe port… any ideas?” His eyes met Serenity’s, whose gaze was already on him. She nodded in agreement and turned her eyes to the other two men and listened to what they had to say.

“Captain Solarum and Her Highness bring up good points.” Said General Zeus. “By now we should be just outside the Freejia system. Are there any nearby places we can go that aren’t already occupied by Shadow Galactica?”

Admiral Poseidon activated the holoprojector, which was previously calibrated to mark their current co-ordinates and trajectory on the star map. “We are here.” He said, pointing out a pulsating marker on the star map before continuing. “Now I suggest we hide our ships in this nebula until we can locate a safe port.” He pointed to a nebula some light-years away. All nodded in assent.

Serenity called the Velocity’s captain on her communicator and instructed him to prepare for another jump to hyperspace, uploading the co-ordinates to the ship’s navicomputer. The captain then uploaded the co-ordinates to the other two ships, the Valkyrie and the Vigilant, awaiting instructions. Moments later, the ship’s engines began to whine and the ship lurched forward suddenly. Outside the viewport, the stars became long streaks, which swirled into the blue-white vortex of hyperspace.

When the meeting was adjourned, Apollo remained with Serenity in her quarters. He hadn’t been able to spend any personal time with her since their senior year in high school. He eased his way over to her side as she stood at the viewport, staring off into the swirling void. He could tell she was still a little depressed. “…So…” he began, not really knowing what to say. “…What do you want to do now?”

Serenity’s eyes never strayed from the viewport; she didn’t even blink. “Build a base somewhere far away and strengthen our forces… It’s our only option.” She answered. Her voice was hard and monotone, denoting her emotions, or lack thereof in this case.

Apollo couldn’t help but look at her. She was a beautiful woman. He had dated her once before and part of him wanted desperately to do it again. They had been best friends for a long time, since their sophomore year, when his band, Millennium, was just starting out. She would see them perform in front of hundreds of their fellow students during lunch and watch them practice in Apollo’s basement. She was even the first to purchase a copy of their two albums. Such fond memories made him smile. He loved her, but knew not how she felt about him, and was, for the moment, too afraid to ask her.

Finally she turned around to face him, her face still emotionless. Apollo could feel the tension on her mind. He couldn't bear to see her sad, so he got an idea.
"I saw Gemma onboard." he began. "More than likely she's in the mess hall. You wanna go se her? She'll make you something to cheer you up." Serenity's lips barely moved, but a smile did appear. She walked with Apollo down to E-deck, where the mess hall was.

In the past, Serenity would be the one to bring Apollo and his friends to Gemma's kitchen for a drink at the bar that connected the dining room to the kitchen. Gemma was almost like a second mother to Serenity. When her mother couldn't, Gemma would be the one to give advice, help with various things, and bring a smile to her face when she was feeling down.

Sure enough, Gemma was in the kitchen, preparing meals for the crew and passengers. She had just finished what she had been preoccupied with when she looked up to see Serenity and Apollo. She smiled and came out of the kitchen to meet them.

"Hey, you two!" she greeted. She gave Serenity a warm embrace, like two good friends would after being apart for ages. "I'm so happy you're safe!" Apollo just stood there watching them.

When Gemma finally let go of Serenity, she gestured toward the kitchen. "Are you hungry? I just baked some galaxy-rolls." Apollo and Serenity both had a fondness for Gemma's masterful cooking. They both nodded like two youngsters would after being offered milk and cookies. Gemma smiled and brought out a whole sheet of galaxy-rolls, set them down at a table, and all three started eating.

Apollo licked the sugar off of his fingers and said, "I told you that Gemma works miracles." Gemma blushed and laughed modestly. Serenity just smiled and continued eating.

"So, Princess... what's the matter? Are you still down because of your mother?" Gemma asked, using her finger to pick up little grains of sugar that fell off of a galaxy-roll. Serenity nodded slowly. "Hey, your mother was a great woman! You probably don't even know how great. She was kind, strong, wise, and just.... I dare say she rivaled Sailor Freejia herself!"

"Well, our family line is descended from Sailor Freejia. Her blood runs in my veins..." Serenity trailed off. She finished the last bits of her roll and swallowed. Gemma's cooking was indeed the best. "But that's not all I'm worried about." she added.

"You're nervous, I can tell." Gemma noticed. "You're not sure if you're up to the challenge of being the gaurdian of our way of life. I appologise for putting the pressure on you, but wake up Serenity! It is the Galacitic Year 3043! Your mother would expect you to do a better job than she did. Make her proud!"

Serenity felt a little embarrassed, especially since Apollo was listening to every word being spoken. Looking over at him, he didn't appear to be paying much attention, playing his guitar but with the power switched off, so the only noise made was the quiet twanging of the strings without amplification. Hearing the conversation suddenly go silent, he felt awkward and his eyes met Serenity's. He smiled and continued playing.

Serenity, in an attempt to advert Gemma's attention from her, reached over and flipped the power switch on Apollo's guitar and the electronic riffs issued forth from the built-in amplifiers on the instrument's body. Apollo jumped with a start and gave his friend an irritated glare.

"What the hell?" Apollo interjected.

Both women laughed and shared a high-five over Serenity's prank. Apollo quickly got over his anger and chuckled. "Good one... but if you want to hear a song, why don't you just ask?"

Serenity raised an eyebrow and got an idea. "I think that's just what we need to boost the people's morale. Apollo, why don't you hold a concert on the main deck?" she suggested.

"I saw your other friends on the ship and, if my memory doesn't deceive me, they all have their instruments with them." Gemma added. "You should get everyone together. It wouldn't be the same with out the whole band."

Apollo smiled nodded his approval. He stood and went to gather his comrades. After a half an hour of searching the ship, all four band members were reunited. Apollo: Human guitarist, vocalist, and lyricist; Calliope: Zhellone keyboardist and assistant lyricist; Eurydice: Human backup vocalist and drummer; Orpheus: Human bassist. Together they were the popular rock band Millennium. The better part of the population of the ship turned out to see them perform. Holocams drifted around the deck to allow for the people on the other ships to see the show. Beginning with a screeching pick slide, they started their first song.

Serenity and Gemma sat together at a table watching the show, drinking a greenish, caffeine-loaded, carbonated drink known commonly on Freejia as "Spaz-Juice". Serenity didn't derive a sudden burst of energy from caffeine, like most people, but rather a relaxing sensation similar to a sleep medicine.

"Tell me honestly, Serenity. What do you think of him?" Gemma asked. Serenity blushed and couldn't bring herself to look Gemma in the eye.

"I....Ah....Well, he's..." she stuttered. She remembered the dance they went to together. She remembered being happy, happier than she had been in a long time. What was it about this man that made her feel this way? She never really thought of Apollo as more than a good friend.

Serenity said nothing more and Gemma apparently grew impatient. "Come on, Serenity! Tell me... You like him, don't you?" She prompted with a smile.

"Alright! You want the truth?" Serenity answered. "He's a great guy. He really is. He's talented, smart..... attractive...." Hearing the confession, Gemma's eyes went wide and her smile grew bigger. Just then, Apollo finished his song and the whole crowd erupted in applause. Serenity and Gemma joined in, too.

"I see... so, when are you going to tell him that?" Gemma asked when the noise level died down. "I'm sure he'd like to know what you really think of him. I'll tell you a secret: he likes you, too." Serenity gave her an unsure look. Another song was beginning, a slower one. It brought back more memories of their teenage years. Gemma's suggestions were starting to sound like a good idea.

While Apollo was singing, he got to a part of the song that brought forth good, memories for both he and Serenity. Apollo had been watching her the whole time, and when her eyes met his, they both smiled.
PostPosted: Mon Jan 22, 2007 4:23 am


this is only a fragment, so it'll be expanded upon in the future when I get it down. Sorry for the big delay, but behold! It's finally here!

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PostPosted: Mon Jan 22, 2007 7:18 pm


Wow. Vast improvement over the first draft of chapter one. I am so gonna print this up if and when you finish.
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