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 Posted: Sat Sep 30, 2006 6:21 pm
These aren't to anyone. I just thought of writing these. They don't have any titles or anything but they're all kinda on the same subject. (by the way I am sorry I haven't been on in a while. what with school and everything I haven't found the time to get on)
These don't have any titles or anything. They're just writings I thought of because I was thinking of my soon to be boyfriend.
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Posted: Sat Sep 30, 2006 6:26 pm
1:
I stare at the stars wondering where you are.
Why?
Why is it so that I cannot keep my mind off of you?
Why is it that I see your name everywhere I look?
2:
I see a rose all alone.
I think of what it'd be like to be a single petal on a fully bloomed rose.
With you right next to me.
Crowded.
Silent.
Unknowing of your surroundings.
Comfortable to be right next to you.
We are close.
But do not know it.
It was destiny that brought us together.
It will be destiny that will either keep us together or break us apart.
3:
I am a small person.
With noone to talk to.
I am all alone.
Looking for that special someone.
I am alone.
Waiting.
Watching.
Wondering.
4:
I look at the clouds.
And see a group of people.
Two people in that group.
Are holding hands.
I wish that that was you and me.
I wish that we were together.
I know that wish might
Or might not come true.
5:
I think of you every day.
Hoping that someday.
I will end up in your arms.
Hoping that someday.
I will be the one.
Right next to you.
6:
In your arms.
That's where I want to be.
I want you to stand right next to me.
I want you to care for me.
I want you to be there for me.
I miss you.
I wish you were here.
7:
I wish I was with you.
I wish I had someone.
Who would make me.
Laugh and smile.
Without even saying something.
I wish I could be with you.
I wish you were here.
So I can talk to you.
While sitting outside looking at the sky.
8:
I am silent.
Waiting for that special someone.
Hoping to meet him soon.
Wanting to be with him then.
Destiny is important.
Destiny can hurt.
Just like love.
9:
I don't know what to say.
I miss you.
I wish I could see you again.
I miss you.
You were there for me.
When I needed you the most.
I want to be there for you.
When you need a shoulder to lean on.
10:
Where were you when.
I was all alone?
Where were you when.
I was depressed?
Where were you when.
I was mad and needed someone to quiet me down?
Where were you?
You were gone.
Out of my heart.
You left me to suffer.
You left me to cry.
You left me angry.
But yet I still loved you.
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Posted: Wed Oct 25, 2006 10:47 am
Doesn't anyone care about what I write. I see that other people have comments on their thread but the only comments I have on mine are just ones I type.
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Posted: Sat Nov 11, 2006 7:27 pm
I must say my favorite of the bunch is #6, although I really like them all! Your words are great! But just a little suggestion; replace some of the periods with commas, some of the commas with semicolins, etc. There are other very wonderful punctuations out there that would help the words along! In studying poetry, I've realized that poetry can't have an assumed rythem, because there are some people out there who assume the rythem without the help of punctuation. It makes it kind of hard on the reader if they are stopping after every line, you know?
I like your word usage, though! The words you use aren't super complex, but they aren't too simple in meaning, either. I like poetry that makes you think, but not to the point where you have to whip out your dictionary in order to fully understand it!
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Posted: Wed Mar 21, 2007 3:22 pm
You have some beautiful poetry....keep up the good work! biggrin
Sin, Halo_Rising mrgreen
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