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Miranko
Captain

PostPosted: Tue Sep 12, 2006 9:37 am


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I talked to Hollow_Ichi-kun to get permission to post this here ^w^ Enjoy!


Title: A Simple Confession
Author: HollowIchi-kun
Pairing: ByaxIchi
Status: One Shot for now. (might write more if ppl actually like it)
Rating: G
Disclaimer: I do not own Bleach.
Summary: Just a piece of Fluff... VERY Fluffy ... no real plot... but alot of fluff
Right and almost forgot - Still takes place in SS, Set after end of arc- but right before they go back.


Please? Constructive Critisism helps.



~~~


They both broke away from the hesitant and inexperienced kiss hastily, each looking in directions away from the other.

Ichigo braced himself against the wall he was pressed up against, though the Captain had moved backward slightly after breaking away.

The Captain of the 6th division of the royal court guard. Kuchiki Byakuya stood a bare meter from the once Ryouka and threat to Soul Society Kurosaki Ichigo, with for once all of the carefully erect barriers that he had set into place torn down in one moment of hasty decision.

Ichigo looked about to say something to the taller man, then tensed and paled, his skin color fading out to white. "N- Go. Go AWAY!" He practically shouted into the others' vulnerable face, with as much rage as the Captain had ever seen, and defeated, he attempted to straighten his posture to something more dignified looking, as he attempted to turn away from the one who he had just confessed his feelings to not a moment before. One who obviously could never be capable of reciprocating them, but then... that was something Byakuya had already known somehow before he had even approached the younger boy.


~~~


Ichigo had kept himself braced to the wall, to the best of his capabilities, since he wasn't all that confident in his ability to stand under his own power, after the Captain had suddenly passed him in the small branching hallway he'd been in and apparently decided it looked to be a good time to bare his soul to the other. Then had kissed him. him A guy, another guy had gone and kissed him. But before the initial shock could even begin to wear off, and he could start to actually assess how the hell he was even feeling, his other side chose that moment to try and take over.

In the moment of hesitation and off balance the Hollow inside of him raged to get out. It was all he could do to keep it from showing even though he knew that the man in front of him already was aware of the other being living inside of him, and apparent had either forgotten or didn't care.

"N- Go. GO AWAY!" He screamed at himself, as his vision started blurring. He only received laughter in response, but the feeling did start to gradually recede, and he realized that he had won this unorthodox battle. For now. He kept still, panting slightly with the effort necessary to keep control of his own body, when it finally clicked in his brain the pain that he was feeling from the man dejectedly walking away from him, as he was screamed at to do.

'Wha-t? I didn't mean for him to-'
He thought suddenly, realizing just how much pain the other must be going through, and how those words must have affected him especially in such a delicate and vulnerable state as the other had been caught in. He must think I hate him - Ichigo thought, knowing just how hard it must have been for the older man to have been capable of even showing a fraction of those emotions, let alone breakng down completely enough to have kissed him.

'That's right... he... he kissed me' Ichigo realized again suddenly, caught up with an unknown emotion as he thought about it again. It had been short, sweet, and chaste, but Ichigo realized all too suddenly that he had liked it.

Deciding to wait until after he went to the retreating Captain to figure his own emotions out more clearly, he started screaming at himself for inflicting that kind of pain onto somebody he 'cared about?' he asked himself. Shaking his head lightly to clear it of the lingering after affects of both the unexpected kiss, and the almost possession, he tried calling out to the figure trying desperately to hold himself together after baring his soul, and being told to 'Go Away'.

Which he was.

Unless Ichigo managed to convince him that he didn't mean that.
In a panic Ichigo flash stepped to catch up to Byakuya, trusting that since he was faster he could catch up to the other before he decided to just run. He reached out and grabbed a handful of that mysterious fabric that didn't feel too much like any material he'd encountered before (but then the Shihakushou couldn't exactly be considered ordinary, and neither was the place he was in) and as the other registered that he was being held back and really did seem to contemplate running, Ichigo tightened his hold on the Captain's sleeve, and said simply "Wait"

Byakuya at first couldn't understand why the boy was holding him back - 'To yell at him for what he had done perhaps?' What he had done was inexcusable. One nobly born, and raised should never behave in such a fashion. it was undignified, and unbecoming of one in such standing as him... and yet it was this boy that had urged him to break the rules. To shed what was unnecessary and restricting. So why couldn't he have done the right thing for once? Why must messing up... hurt so badly.
He thought for a moment that he should just leave. Remove himself from any further hurt and pain by removing himself from the situation he had caused, but he knew that would just be cowardice, and a moment later a word cut through his indecision.

"Wait"


~~~


That one word was all that was needed to make Ichigo feel even guiltier, as Byakuya looked at him and the pain filling his eyes became like a flood threatening to overtake Ichigo's senses. He realized that he didn't even know what it was he actual had wanted to do - just take away some of that pain he had unknowingly caused when he tried to keep his body from being taken over by the Hollow that still laughed slightly inside of him. "Shut up" he whispered screwing his eyes closed in concentration, and keeping his hold on the sleeve of the noble beside him that tensed as he said that.

Ichigo knew he should feel bad about making the already hurt Captain feel even worse, but he didn't have much time. He had to figure out what he felt because he knew somehow in his being that if he didn't, things would only end up getting worse, and not better.

He searched his soul for an answer, without even really knowing what it was he was looking for, when he suddenly realized that the answer was right in front of him. He simply asked himself what he wanted to do right then, and didn't care if the answer was 'right' or 'wrong' or 'not proper' or anything.

Then Ichigo did what came most naturally to him, since it was how he lived his life. And why he got into so much trouble all the time.

He just acted on impulse.


~~~


Byakuya's eyes widened a fraction more as he steadied himself for another tirade after hearing the words 'Shut Up' but he started to have a feeling that things might not be as they seemed. For one the words this time didn't seem to be directed at him, or for that matter anyone save the boy himself, and also the young Ryouka was acting exceedingly abnormally.

Thus he wasn't exactly expecting it when Ichigo leaned forward and captured his lips for a second kiss.


~~~


Ichigo wasn't exactly certain what he was even doing anymore, but it felt good, and above all it felt right for some reason he couldn't even begin to explain, as he hesitantly kissed, and was kissed back by the older more experienced Captain whose roles were now reversed in that it was Ichigo that had initiated the kiss.

After a few more moments, as things started to get a little more passionate, he broke away again, for some air and an explanation.

He looked at Byakuya's face, and into his bewildered eyes, and sighed softly 'What the hell is wrong with me? I should like Rukia... not her brother' he thought, but as he continued staring into those ebony orbs he knew that that would just be lying to himself. He didn't know how, or why, but somewhere along the line he had fallen for the 6th Captain, just as the Nobel had apparently fallen in love with him.

He sighed again at his new predicament, thinking about how the others would take this bizarre, and completely unexpected news, as he struggled to find words to explain what had happened earlier.

"Byakuya" He started, and saw the other start, albeit in a slightly different, physical way at the familiar use of his name. 'well i just kissed the guy so what does he expect?'

He tried again before he could get cut off or interrupted or anything else to keep him from saying what he had to.

"I - Please believe me - That wasn't you I ... was yelling at..."
Byakuya looked puzzled for a moment then it clicked as Ichigo finished what he was saying.

"You... remember our fight?" He asked and Byakuya nodded. That wasn't something either was likely to forget anytime soon.

"My hollow side... was tying to take over again. That's who I was yelling at. Not you."

Byakuya's eyes widened as he realized exactly what Ichigo had implied. That that was no fluke. That he really was part Hollow inside.

Ichigo closed his eyes and took a deep breath before continuing. "I understand if this changes how you feel about me. I really don't blame you, I mean - I may be a shinigami still, but I'm also part hollow so if..."

He was cut off as he felt the others lips brushing against his lightly again.

"Then I guess we'll just have to work harder to keep it down. Even if such a relationship might be considered to be definitely breaking the rules a bit..."

Ichigo felt the others smile through their kiss that was rapidly becoming more passionate, but before either could do much more of anything, they felt some familiar reiatsu come around the corner, quicker than they could react to since they had been so preoccupied with certain other things.

"Hey there you are Kuchiki-tai...chou..."

Renji and Rukia's jaws just dropped as they walked into the last scene any of them had ever expected to be seeing.


~~~


Please tell me what you think it would be appreciated - This is the first Bleach fic I have ever written, And the first fic i've written on years. Thank You for reading!

-HollowIchi-kun
PostPosted: Wed Sep 27, 2006 6:00 pm


(( Just so you know - I've read this fic at Eljay's Bleach_Yaoi. xD

I <3 it.

About to post one of mine, too.

PS: You spelt Byakuya wrong in the title. >= ))

xXCrimson_WolfXx

Eloquent Conversationalist


KitsuneChan66

PostPosted: Sat Oct 21, 2006 9:55 pm


You gave me a hearty laugh at the end.  
PostPosted: Wed Oct 25, 2006 2:56 pm


Nice ending, I can see that happening, then Ichigo being punched by Rukia! LOL

Good ending.

Phill Kaiba


Miranko
Captain

PostPosted: Sat Nov 11, 2006 12:23 pm


Thanks ^^ (By now the ppl i know IRL that are in this guild know that this is my pen name to keep the reveiws i get from my friends IRL honest ^^ If i want critisism, i'd prefer honest and unalloyed critisism - it helps you get better IMO >< SO critisize away lol - And since your all online it realy doesn't matter too much for honest opinions if you know my pen name lol - so yeah - I'm Hollow_Ichi-kun ><)
PostPosted: Sun Nov 12, 2006 4:58 pm


xd I love the ending! Nice little twist with Hichi messing around with Ichigo's life. Poor Byakuya. But he gets kissed again, so all is well!

Now, I warn you, I am an editor at heart, but I try to be really nice with my concrits.

Your emotions are wonderful. I like the way you moved from Ichigo to Byakuya and let us get a taste of what each was feeling. The overlap, though, was too much in places, and it felt like the timeflow was moving backward at one point: the paragraph between the two 'Wait's. I couldn't decide if Ichigo said it twice or not. Also, you used a lot of pronouns. Not neccessarily bad, but some of the faster pacing can be confusing when you have two guys, so drop in a name every so often to keep the readers up to speed.

You have a nice balance to your dialogues, I enjoy your word choices, and yes, I think about these things way too much. sweatdrop

JitkaJaylor


Miranko
Captain

PostPosted: Mon Nov 13, 2006 5:57 pm


No no >< I thank you for thinking about them ^o^ Perhaps i can fix my style up if i write more at any point >< It's much better at least than some of my earlier works >.> Perhaps i'll post Echoless Cry up here sometime (tho by now the whole thing likely needs to be re-written.) When i wrote this actualy, i just sort of had the idea... wanted to write it... and just actualy did ^o^ I normaly procrastinate so much that things never do get written >< Or like the one time i wrote out 11 pages of notes, and have still not managed to get around to writing it >< My very first shounen ai fic ^.^ from way back when i was one of the only ones out of my friends to be very much so into yaoi ^^;

I may write that someday... (tho now i think it'd likely end up a little lemony >< i was sooo much more inocent back then ^o^ lol) If i do write it tho, i'll be sure to edit it and add it to the guild compilation of fics ^.^ I'm just waiting for the day they finish being able to add sub-forums to the sub-forums, then i'll hopefuly organize things into a fic section for yaoi aside from Bleach etc... *sighs* Eventualy ^^

I was trying to use phrases like The captain, etc, to avoid even more pronouns, esp since they're both guys. I tend to dislike pronouns alot anyways, and didn't want to end up with a paragraph of just their names iether sweatdrop But i also was hitting some writters block, since i didn't have too clear an idea with what i actualy wanted to do with the middle, tho it started out with my idea for the beggining, and i just couldn't resist the end 3nodding

Thank you for reveiwing ^.^ I apreciate it >< Most of what i'd looked it over so far has been gramatical checks >< And i know i still probably haven't got all of those. I lack a beta at the moment >.>

Perhaps i will post my Furuba fic here tho ^^ I'm starting to think that might be... an interesting idea - continuing it. You can see how bad i used to write lol

>< It's pretty pathetic. But i'm working on it. It's incomplete, and the pairing was never established lol- i started working on it not knowing myself what i wanted to do except for a few parts... that Honou still likely wants to kill me for not revealing >< Sorry Honou!

hehe - Thanks for the critical input ^^ I appreciate it!
PostPosted: Tue Nov 14, 2006 6:31 pm


Hee. Glad to help any fellow writer!

Pronouns are the bane of my existence. Have you ever tried to write a fight scene? Gah! My Naruto fics tend to have a fight scene, and it's hard not to have names all over the place.

Innocent, hu? I started writing when I was ten. It was a murder mystery. blaugh Took me forever to become a fanfic writer, but whoo! It certainly broke me out of a lot of conventions. It's amazing what an active community can do for making you better.

Furuba? It's been so long!

JitkaJaylor


Miranko
Captain

PostPosted: Wed Nov 15, 2006 5:23 pm


>< hai - I ... don't remember - i think for fight scenes the best i ever attempted was a random old Rurouni Kenshin Drabble - very old randomness tho >< i mainly was just messing around witht he poor charecters >.> I actualy didn't even remember i'd written that 'till now >< Thank you lol!

And i always appreciate any help >< but hai - i agree w/ the 'bane-of-existence' thing >< I only wish i were as good a writer as say... Mijan or Uzumaki-sama crying (currently reading and re-reading their stuff so they're stuck in my mind ^o^)

Ever read anything by them?
PostPosted: Fri Nov 17, 2006 7:40 pm


Heh, it's always good to back to your roots and go 'What on earth was I doing?!' xd

No, haven't read anything by them. I take it they come highly recommended?

JitkaJaylor


Miranko
Captain

PostPosted: Fri Nov 24, 2006 5:33 am


Personaly? At the times i read them they fit my mood so well i became rather obsessed with those authors ^o^

Uzumaki-sama's Main pairings are RikuxSora

~ Stygian Solace - OOC galore, but i like it anyways lol

~A Complete 180 - (This would be a crack AU, and one of my fav fics for RikuxSora ever ^o^ It's just too messed up lol - but i like the style - and the fact that Sora thought Riku had been a girl when they were little >.> lol - the op concept - she wrote it to be... amusing and fluffy ^^ But it's gotten a plot! lol - it's amusing - MUCH less angsty that Stygian Solace there, but also it's just... lol

And there's, unlike alot of other KH fics i've stumbled accross, other chara from the games in it- ex. Irvine, and Tifa (written before KH2 came out - i think it and SS have both celebrated their 3rd birthdays just a few months ago lol)

~Sunday Morning After - an amusing twist on why you shouldn't drink >.> lol RikuxSquall, toung rings and tatoos. lol - gotta love AU. And good life's lessons >< lmao

Mijan - HP; HarryxDraco

~ Eclipse

I mainly like Eclipse because it manages to keep the charecters so in charecter at first, that you REALY can't see it ever becoming a pairing fic lol - They made the personality shifts occur in the fic, so it was more plausibly then most HxD fics that i've ever seen out there. Like all the fics for tht pairing that made me hate it at first ^o^ This is the fic that changed my mind on the pairing completely actualy >< lol- It made me a definate fan of the two - as in it's amusing to go through the books looking for any slashy hints - And it's REALY great to re-read the 6th book with a yaoi mindset for once ^o^
PostPosted: Fri Jan 12, 2007 12:59 pm


I had already read your fic in Bleach Yaoi 'SS Yaoi Division' and had found it great heart Keep writing 3nodding

Lord-of-Imladris


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PostPosted: Tue Apr 03, 2007 1:46 pm


I think I've read this like 3 times at ff.net already! xd
Love it!
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