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Posted: Tue Aug 29, 2006 2:29 pm
I wish to write my book in this guild. This is where I shall write it. If anyone has objections, I shall begin...when I have the time...Please send me your thoughts here or in PMs.
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Posted: Tue Aug 29, 2006 2:44 pm
The ~working~ title of my story is "Chronicles of a Raven." Suggestions always accepted with gratefulness!
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Posted: Tue Aug 29, 2006 2:46 pm
My ~working~ penname is Cuelebre (it's the name of a Spanish dragon).
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Posted: Tue Aug 29, 2006 2:49 pm
Here goes: Chapter 1
Beau woke with a thump on the floor and a spear through her head. She began to let off a string of curses, then realized that hurt more. She closed her eyes and tried to tell her head that it was quite alright and that the headache wasn’t really necessary. Her head didn’t believe her and the only comprehensible idea she could get out of it was something along the lines of “Coffee...”
She grunted the happy word to herself. Too bad she’d never gotten around to buying a coffee pot.
Somehow, with much grunting and cursing and pain, Beau dragged herself out of bed and into the bathroom. She peered blearily into the mirror wondering in a vague sort of way what a headache might look like and whether she would be able to see it or if the mirror was too dirty. After blinking a few times, she saw what she supposed must be her own reflection, though she wasn’t happy about it. She saw a dark pair of eyes ringed with smeared eyeliner and set in contrast against a pasty-white face, which, in turn, was framed by a mess of brittle hair of varying lengths and shades. She grunted apathetically at the image and the reflection made the motion of grunting back before it trudged in the direction of the bedroom, trying to find its way out of the sheets Beau had been ignoring.
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Posted: Tue Aug 29, 2006 3:08 pm
Bedclothes abandoned far distant from the bed, Beau began toeing through the rags scattered about the room. God, she needed to do laundry, just as soon as she found spare change for the laundromat.
Eventually, she managed to scavenge an over-large button-up flannel and tug it over the black cami and jeans she’d been wearing the night before. Underneath the flannel, she was pleased to discover a man’s tattered leather wallet. Bending to pick it up, Beau released a gleeful sound then dropped cross-legged to the floor with a groan and a hand to her head in a futile attempt to keep it from splitting. When she did get around to picking up the wallet, she didn’t question to whom it belonged–nor did she care. It had probably belonged to whoever had left the flannel. His loss; her gain.
She deftly removed the contents and separated them according to their usefulness. A few pictures were placed together unexamined and headed for the trash. A driver’s license, a credit card, and 2 gift certificates were tucked into her messenger bag in the hope that she could make money off them. Two condoms were tossed in the general direction of her bed. Now was the best part. She peeked inside the billfold. Score! She wiggled with excitement like a child. Four ones, two fives, a ten, and a twenty dollar bill disappeared into her back pocket. Beau knew where this cash was going. She grabbed her messenger bag and tripped out the door.
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Posted: Tue Aug 29, 2006 3:47 pm
Beau lived on the third floor. She stopped by Dave’s apartment on the second floor and let herself in. Dave was her closest friend—probably her only friend, come to think of it. No one else stayed near her long.
Beau headed straight for the kitchen where she found half a pot of coffee. A sigh of “Thank God!” flew from her lips as she pulled an empty beer bottle from her messenger bag and filled it with coffee. Beau leaned against the counter and took a deep whiff of her caffeine. This was really crappy coffee. She didn’t care. She took a sip with closed eyes and felt it spread through her body. Mmmyeah. Crappy coffee. Dave’s specialty. She opened her eyes, feeling more cheerful and immediately regretted it. She proved this by shrieking and fumbling her beer bottle. She didn’t drop it, though, this was her coffee.
Oh. You were wondering why she screamed and almost (but not quite) dropped her coffee-filled beer bottle? Well, on the counter, there sat a little blue...being. Standing, it would have been no more than a foot tall. Its feet were about four inches long and stuck straight up in the air, it’s toes curving up a little bit. The creature had huge, ragged, bat-like ears, and wore a grin for which “ear to ear” would be a superb understatement. It cackled. The sight was enough to make anyone screech.
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Posted: Tue Aug 29, 2006 4:15 pm
“Beeaauu? You okaaay?” Enter Dave, college dropout supreme. It had nothing to do with grades or with money. He just realized that college made his parents happy. One day he was upset with them, so he left college. It’s not like it mattered. Dave could make more money ((I'm not sure what he should do for a living. leave suggestions, PLEASE!)) than as a part of the family company anytime. He had shaggy brown hair, sharp blue eyes, and hadn’t shaven in a couple days. At the moment, he was wearing his favorite old blue jeans (a little bit tight, of course) and was carrying his t-shirt in his right hand, which could be called distracting.
Dave eyed the coffee. It was dripping off Beau and off the counter and puddling on the floor. Then he turned his attention on Beau. He saw a beautiful girl with the skin of a fairy tale princess, naturally colored, bow-shaped lips, and eyes black as pits that you could get lost in. A long strand of black hair hid one of these eyes and a slightly shorter strand edged along the left side of her face. The rest of her hair was mid-neck and chin length. It was black at the ends, but became snowy white at the top. She was exquisite, but she had no idea.
Beau looked up at him piteously. She reminded him of a lost child.
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Posted: Tue Aug 29, 2006 5:42 pm
YAY!! It's the story! (you already know that I think it rocks.)
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princess_Im_bored Captain
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Posted: Tue Aug 29, 2006 5:53 pm
So far so good, I like it and am happy your doing it on here. If you want my advice take out the part about "Oh. You were wondering why she screamed and almost (but not quite) dropped her coffee-filled beer bottle? Well, on the counter, there sat a little blue...being" it messes up the flow of the story. It would work better if you just wrote something like, "there on the counter sat a little blue...being. You could make Dave a musican at a club or something like that, I know it's a little cliche but musicans always go over well. biggrin
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Posted: Tue Aug 29, 2006 8:35 pm
yeah, i like messing with my flow a wee bit, but you're right, i do need to fix that. i wanna make dave something that takes considerable genius...
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princess_Im_bored Captain
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Posted: Wed Aug 30, 2006 8:12 am
Yeah, it's a tough one, I have problems like this with my story. I have a charictor who is a bit of an escape artest but I always have difficulties coming up with new, interesting ways for him to escape. sweatdrop Maybe I should have stuck with more conventional charictors but he's everybodys favorate. Well, him and my bad guy who everyone likes as well.
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Posted: Wed Aug 30, 2006 9:32 am
“I…spilled my coffee.” Dave thought this was an exceptionally simple way to put it as he studied the mess. He looked at the rather unorthodox container in her hands then back at her.
“No s**t. What was the scream for? Dramatics?” this had happened before, he wasn’t too freaked out about it, but it was still somewhat odd. She gestured at the messy but perfectly normal counter in front of her.
“A—uhm. Mm—a gremlin.” She said it as if she were talking about a cockroach; as if it were perfectly normal to see a gremlin in a kitchen and not really something to scream about. She tangled a hand through her hair to rub her scalp, trying to clear her head. To her, this was a perfectly normal thing, she just didn’t like it.
“Oh.” Dave stated simply, removing the beer bottle from her hand then starting to clean up the coffee and while he was at it the rest of the kitchen. Like that was realistic. About as realistic as gremlins. Then again, to Beau, gremlins were realistic. For as long as he’d known her, she’d seen things: gremlins, unicorns, gnomes. She would point out normal-looking people in the street and identify them as werewolves, vampires, elves, selkies, and plenty of other things Dave had never even heard of. He wasn’t sure if he believed her or not and had never really seen any reason why he should decide. Beau was a good if not colorful friend to have around and his main goal was to keep her out of trouble. Hard work, as you might imagine.
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Posted: Wed Aug 30, 2006 9:47 am
“Why don’t you go get a shower,” he offered. “You can borrow some of my jeans and a t-shirt. I’ll go get whatever else you need from your apartment.” She nodded and left, taking her beer-bottle coffee with her and dripping cheap caffeine along the way. Dave sighed after her. He sighed at the coffee now on his rented floor and he sighed at the troubled girl he couldn’t help.
He went up to her apartment and let himself in. She never locked the door, she probably didn’t even have a key anymore. Nothing she owned was of any real value. No T.V., no sound system made it’s home with her. Booze and books was all she had. The booze was cheap and most of it half drunk. The books were tattered and dog-eared dusty cheap fantasy paperbacks. There was no bookshelf; books lay scattered on the floor and in cardboard boxes. Most hadn’t even been removed from their boxes when she first moved in. A few were well loved and stayed on the floor by her bed. The combination of the papery library smell with that of intoxication made for an interesting scent that’s hard to find anywhere else.
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Posted: Wed Aug 30, 2006 9:49 am
He went to her drawer and got clean underclothes, on the counter, he found her black eyeliner then rummaged up a pair of sandals. One was in a box, wedged between “Faerie Wars” and “Tithe”, and the other was being threatened by a gang of dust bunnies under the bed.
Back at his own apartment, the shower kept showering. Dave went in and placed her things on top of the clothes she was borrowing then got himself a cup of crap coffee and threw away her bottle. Upon emergence, she seemed to feel better and she certainly looked better. His clothes fit her if she wanted them kind of baggy; they were the same height and he never sagged.
“Feeling better?” he asked cautiously.
“Much!” she chirruped back and pranced to his seat to give him a hug. Complete transformation. Moody Sulky and Silent became Cheerful Exuberant and Chatty. Dave laughed. This was just like Beau.
“C’mon, we’ll get lunch,” he offered, “I’ll pay.”
“Mmmyes! Food! And drinks! I’ll buy drinks! We’ll go to the Black Bird!” The Black Bird Bar was her favorite place. The bartender tended to ease up on prices for his favorite and craziest customer.
“Hmm. I was thinking Milo’s Diner.” Beau’s face fell and her eyes widened.
“There’s no drinks there—“ Dave grinned his roguish charm at her. She seemed to be catching on.
“Exactly. C’mon.” She rolled her eyes at him.
“Fine.” She said curtly, “let’s go.” Her attempt at haughtiness made Dave laugh again.
“That’s the spirit!” He clapped her on the back.
“No, that’s the lack of spirits,” she countered morosely.
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Posted: Wed Aug 30, 2006 9:52 am
In the hall, the single bare light-bulb was dim and flickering. “Beau, it’s good to be sober once in a while.” He sounded truly concerned.
“Only if you’re normal,” she retorted. Then, to drive the point home, “oh, did you know: you have a water spirit living in your toilet?” It worked and Dave stopped mid-stride. After a good long moment of shock, he made a strange sort of loud gargling noise.
“Ge-eh! Why’s it in there??”
“Exiled. There’s not much water in the city that gets replaced often enough for health. You flush quite a bit more often than most bachelors, so it gets some nutrition, but doesn’t have to stew in waste.”
“Remind me not to flush anymore,” Dave muttered as he exploded from the dimness of the apartment building into the bright sun, framing himself in the door for an instant.
Beau, two steps behind, looked at him sharply “ew! That’s gro-umf.” She had fallen flat on her face just before reaching the low front stoop so was now sprawled in an ungainly fashion upon the sidewalk. She quickly sat up to hold her knee with one hand and shake her fist at—a clump of pitiful-looking bushes.
“Come back here, you little—” She growled in the direction of the not-so-very-green-ery.
Dave attempted to help her to her feet but she ignored him and stood on her own, brushing herself off. “Beau! What on earth just happened?”
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