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 Posted: Tue Aug 01, 2006 8:17 pm
Here is a poem I worte Tell me what you think.
Thanks for Watering the Plants
Thanks for watering the plants
They're really quite a sight.
When I left town I didn’t know
If they would be alright.
They need water so baldy
If ever they’re to grow
But with no water for a week
They would have drooped so low
Then you came to save the day.
You rushed o’er to my house.
You turned on the hose quickly too
My garden you would douse.
Now I’m home, the plants look great!
They really look quite stunning,
Except the damage to my bill,
You left the water running!
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Posted: Tue Aug 01, 2006 10:39 pm
I like it! The only line I have problems with is "They are so helpless like" It just doesn't sound right. And they're only like helpless? They're not actually helpless? Other then that it's really good.
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Posted: Wed Aug 02, 2006 10:21 am
rofl rofl rofl rofl rofl rofl NICE
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Posted: Wed Aug 02, 2006 2:43 pm
I think it's great, you kept on pattern really well except in the place Mcfeegle already mentioned. It's really funny.
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princess_Im_bored Captain
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Posted: Wed Aug 02, 2006 8:58 pm
Okay, I changed the second line. I think it is batter now.
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Posted: Thu Aug 03, 2006 2:09 pm
Yeah, it is a lot better now. by the way about your siggy, i'm even more frightening, I think I can sing every single fred astair and ginger rogers song by heart. sweatdrop from easter parade and silk stockings too. eek
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princess_Im_bored Captain
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Posted: Fri Sep 01, 2006 7:15 am
You two are meant for each other... 3nodding
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