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~(LillithSoulshroud)~
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 14, 2006 10:08 am


Okay, so i have been experiencing writers block for a little while now, and i have written this piece. It seems simply, but im going for a lot of symbolizim (sp?) in this one, And considering i cant even spell the word! I think i may need some help redface So anything (good or bad) would help me out!


Mask
No, This isn’t another poem
About the cliché mask
Hiding someone from society
And all of lifes daily tasks.

My mask is different.
It is the color of a pink carnation,
That’s draped between my
Brow and upper lip

There is a slight stiffness to it,
Considering it is only 2 days old
And since I hadn’t planned on this accessories
I have nothing picked out to match.

I saw it the other morning,
When I awoke to wash my face.
And when I said good morning,
My throat felt dry and weak.

As I went off to start my day,
I got many “Are you okay?” and “What’s wrong?”
But I just shrugged them off
And went right on along.

In the rear view mirror
I could see my mask spreading.
My eyes were turning as well,
With pink rivers of pedals.

When I grace my face
With the palm of my hand
I feel the moisture running down,
But it could simply just be a sign,
That the morning dew is falling.
PostPosted: Wed Jul 26, 2006 11:27 pm


that has lots of symbolization(dont worry i cant spell either)but thats realy good it ment somthing

Im 2 sexy for dis SN


Tortoises

PostPosted: Fri Nov 10, 2006 4:52 pm


That DOES have a lot of symbolization (Can't spell it either..) but the way you use the words.. That could be changed a little you know? I really like your poems though!
PostPosted: Tue Mar 20, 2007 10:38 am


I really like! I like the begining when you explain what the poem clearly isn't about because I've seen so many poems like that.

One for the money

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