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Araunah
Crew

PostPosted: Sat Sep 11, 2004 11:45 pm


Justin ********
09-08-04
English and Comp 2

Who am I?

My name is Justin ****** *******. I was born in the state of Maryland. I

grew up by myself, and I lived with my Grandparents for a while. My parents

divorced when I was only 5. My mother moved to Alabama, and my father was

forced to work many hours at a job he hated. We tried to survive as a family

although we only spent the weekends together. As I got older I moved back in

with my father and we lived in the same house that I had always lived in. I

traveled back and forth to my mother's house many times. I attempted to live

with her to patch up whatever relationship a son and mother should have. In

the end I found myself back at my father's living with him. I went though most

of my schooling with my father. Although he wasn't there he still attempted to

provide the best life he knew how. By living on my own I obtained skills that

one normally does not. I learned to cook and sew. I was able to fix my clothes

and my blanket whenever needed. For Halloween I even made my own custom. I

graduated high school with a below average GPA. I did not care much for school,

and I loved to torment my teachers; proving them wrong whenever possible. I

moved to Texas due to my lack of finances. I continued to live with my father

throughout college. I started college with a few new goals; I wanted a family,

and I wanted to be able to give them everything I never had. Though college I

met a female. Her name was Samantha; she was originally from Alaska. She was

unlike any other female I had ever met. I quickly fell in love; unable to

prevent myself from doing anything. After I gradated from college we moved to

Alaska together; she wanted to be with her family and I wanted to have a family.

I had never been there before, but I was always willing to check out a new

location. I applied for a University in Anchorage Alaska; I was accepted. I had

a 3.97 GPA going into the University; meeting new people along the way. Although

the women I loved never left my side. She was there though the thick and the thin.

We got married during my Junior year. As for the wedding... It went as unexpected.

The church had some water damage from a snow storm days before. And it started an

Electrical Fire after I heard "You may now kiss the bride". I was not sure if

something was trying to tell me something or if things where just starting off

with a bang. Two years later our first child was born; I had just started a new

job and we had felt it was time to start bringing life into our world. The

nation had gone into a war; we remained feeling safe because we were separated

from the states. One night, 3 weeks after our second child was born, we heard a

strange noise. It was almost like a gun shot just different. It seemed as if

you could feel a gun shot without it actually hitting you. I thought that maybe

it was just a tornado or a violent hail storm. The sounds continued; frantically

we searched for a radio. We wanted to know what was going on. We heard nothing;

static filling the waves as the sounds continued. Light flared thought the house

hurling bricks thought our window. Holding the baby I was struck in the shoulder.

The baby flew out of my hands and onto the ground. It bounced across the ground

and rolled into a wall. Struggling to my feel I ran to gather the child. It

had short breathing patterns and was not crying. Samantha was holding the other

child, both of them screaming. We ran out of the broken home in fear it would

collapse on us. Getting into a car and attempting to resuscitate the child.

We drove to the hospital and attempted to gain access. It was a nut house

hundreds of people were there. We learned that we had been attacked by Korea;

they had bombed Alaska in attempt to show America their might. I began to get

tired as I worked on our child. A nurse finally came and grabbed the child

from my arms and taking it into the back. My wife followed, but for some reason

I was too tired and stayed with the other child. I dozed off and when I awoke

I could see all that was around me. I could see myself laying there and I

thought I was just dreaming. I panicked trying to wake myself up. I saw

the blood pouring down my back and dripping off the chair. My child was in

my lap laying there head on me for comfort. I could not stand to think that

it would realize I was dead... Everything became black; my reality disappeared

fading off into the distance. I woke up a new. This time I had no idea where

I was at. I walked this land trying to find something that I could familiarize

myself with. And in the end all I found was you... Please help me get back to

all I have lost. Please save me from what I have become.
PostPosted: Sun Sep 12, 2004 4:34 pm


Wow, that was a really powerful composition. No one but the ones who live through it really know what it is like to be attacked and hurt, to have your loved ones hurt or killed, but it happens every day. This was an intense view into that kind of situation. I hope something as horrifying as this never comes to pass. Good work!

Umaeril

Eloquent Inquisitor


Letolas Reloaded

PostPosted: Sun Sep 12, 2004 5:44 pm


Awesome. I loved it. At first i thought it was like your story and then i knew it wasen't xd
PostPosted: Mon Sep 13, 2004 7:18 pm


Letolas Reloaded
Awesome. I loved it. At first i thought it was like your story and then i knew it wasen't xd


I wouldn't say that. lol 90% of that is true. Well, less then that.. but err -shrugs- It ends half way though the college part, All before that is real.

Araunah
Crew


*DyingInside*

PostPosted: Mon Sep 13, 2004 7:21 pm


heart That was really good sweety. xd 3nodding whee
PostPosted: Tue Sep 14, 2004 10:41 am


*DyingInside*
heart That was really good sweety. xd 3nodding whee


thanks hun heart

Araunah
Crew


Lord Spyderguy

PostPosted: Tue Sep 14, 2004 12:18 pm


i like it! very creative.
PostPosted: Fri Sep 17, 2004 11:37 am


Lord Spyderguy
i like it! very creative.

Thank you!

Araunah
Crew


Xeroxer

PostPosted: Sat Sep 18, 2004 12:06 pm


Touching *wipes a tear from eye* n_n I'm so jealous xp
PostPosted: Sun Sep 19, 2004 8:46 pm


Xeroxer
Touching *wipes a tear from eye* n_n I'm so jealous xp


Thank you, I am glad you think so.

Araunah
Crew


meimeemeimei

PostPosted: Sun Sep 26, 2004 3:54 am


good. 3nodding it seemed so real till all the drama at the end. whee
PostPosted: Mon Sep 27, 2004 11:28 pm


So full of emotion... You should write in a short story class O_O
The blood, though, describe it if you haven't turned this in yet... lifeleddness.. fear and panic... I could feel the Emotion ^_^

Izumi Iris


NIGUH

PostPosted: Sun Oct 10, 2004 9:01 pm


very interesting.
PostPosted: Mon Oct 11, 2004 6:18 pm


feelingblue
very interesting.


I couldnt agree more. 3nodding

Xeroxer

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