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 Posted: Sun Jun 11, 2006 12:30 pm
People all around but yet still alone.
My heart seems to feel like a stone.
There is no feeling not even pain.
Sometimes I wonder if my mind is going insane.
As I live day by day wondering if I will stay.
Trying to be happy inside.
My whole life feels like it's going to collide.
Shall I stay or shall I go.
Right now I just feel really low.
Being put down day in and day out.
What is life really about.
One day I will look back on this and think.
Without a smile not even a blink.
But I will overcome this war.
Knowing it's not the last there will be more.
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Posted: Sun Jun 11, 2006 8:37 pm
That was very dramatic. I felt the persons pain.
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Severus Snape of the GD Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Jun 11, 2006 10:06 pm
Somehow I don't think this one was very deep...it kindof just went along to rhyme well...not really considering the meaning of the poem. sweatdrop
HINT: A good poem doesn't have to rhyme. If you don't rhyme, you can tell your feelings without worrying about the rhyming...and it will be deeper and have much more feeling to it.
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Posted: Tue Jun 13, 2006 10:24 am
Thank you for your honest opinion Ill take that to heart. This poem was set on my marriage. Which it is always hard to learn to adjust to another person even after 15 years. Not always do I put all my heart into it because I still hide alot down deep into myself that I dont show.
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Posted: Thu Jun 22, 2006 4:16 am
yes but i could tell that it was like a soldier right?
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Posted: Thu Jun 22, 2006 10:10 am
For anyone to live life everyone has to be a soldier in one way or another because living in a sense is war it is never easy. That's what I call test an trials, they are never easy but they are good for you that's what helps ppl grow.
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Posted: Thu Jun 22, 2006 2:17 pm
i didnt understand that but it sounds wise
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