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[Holdbrat] Cartoun [Approved]

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Ruhane Chiisai

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PostPosted: Tue Jul 30, 2019 7:59 pm


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Name: Cartoun
Age: 13
Gender: Male
Sexual Orientation: Strict Straight
Role/rank: Holdbrat/Stands Impression
Origin: Ista

Appearance: This youth bears eyes of a surprisingly pale blue, narrowed as they might be. Dark, coal-black hair tops his head, usually pulled back in a high ponytail poof. His clothes are usually pristinely dusted and layered and fitted with a tailor's hand. He likes to dress a little older than his age and rarely scuffs his clothes. When that does happen, he is careful to have them mended before he wears them again.

Personality: Cartoun is perfectly used to things being in their place when they're supposed to be. It is unusual for him not to have things a certain way, just as much as it is for him not to get his way. Many of his Nannies caved to his desires easily at home, and he is always frustrated when he cannot will a dragon to choose him as his own. With much competition between his brothers and he for the hold he lives at, he hopes for a different life.

Despite his upbringing, however, he's not holding out for a bronze or a brown, as more ambitious types might. No, this boy wants something a little closer to his own size if he can arrange it. A white, would actually suit his needs perfectly. Yes... Something that can more easily stay on the ground with him. Something that won't succumb to needless and overexuberant shows in the air and death-defying falls. Something calm and intelligent and reflectve. (Has anyone told this kid that most dragons are at least a little of all...most all of that?)

Positive: Adventurous, Ambitious, Realistic
Negative: Persnickety, Opinionated, Spoiled


History: Even as young as he is, this young holdbrat has had many adventures. One of the lesser-watched of his siblings due to his independence, Cartoun has spent much time wandering caverns, halls, and various other buildings in various states of repair. He sees all the little things that need work in his domain and all the repairs that must be done. As he knows he cannot do them himself, he logs them on a parchment he turns into the maintenance staff anytime he can. Unfortunately, his writing is chicken scratch and some of them can't read, so very few things ever got fixed.

Aware that his dream as a dragonrider may be a pipe dream, when he's not been invited to a hatching to sit in, he will lean heavily on a swords instructor for lessons. He's advanced, for a 13-year-old, but can't match up with those who have more experience, and wth the possibility that he may not ever be a rider, his alternate goal is to be the best damn swordsman in the North.

Other: This character is a stands impression only
Risk Level: 4
PostPosted: Thu Aug 01, 2019 3:13 pm


Hia, just a few things that need tweaking before we can approve Cartoun!

1. Dragonriders don't have unusual coloured eyes, please stick to standard human eye colours.

2. Could you please rephrase OCD in his negative traits, or substitute it for something else? There's nothing in his personality that hints he has Obsessive Compulsive Disorder, and even if there were we don't accept mental illnesses as negative traits.

3. Just seeking a bit more clarity on his background, it sounds to me like he belongs to a wealthy family in Ista Hold? If so that's all good, I'm just checking I have the right end of the stick.

Thanks!

TawnyAngel
Crew

Predestined Inquisitor


Ruhane Chiisai

Clockwork Rodent

21,850 Points
  • Rat Conqueror 500
  • Battery 500
  • Magical Gems 500
PostPosted: Thu Aug 01, 2019 9:08 pm


TawnyAngel
Hia, just a few things that need tweaking before we can approve Cartoun!

1. Dragonriders don't have unusual coloured eyes, please stick to standard human eye colours.

2. Could you please rephrase OCD in his negative traits, or substitute it for something else? There's nothing in his personality that hints he has Obsessive Compulsive Disorder, and even if there were we don't accept mental illnesses as negative traits.

3. Just seeking a bit more clarity on his background, it sounds to me like he belongs to a wealthy family in Ista Hold? If so that's all good, I'm just checking I have the right end of the stick.

Thanks!


1. I thought violet and one other unusual eye color weren't unusual to dragonriders. Might be crossing from another shop, so made them pale blue instead. I'll fix the picture later.

2. He is obsessive compulsive, referenced in the part that goes over how if things aren't just so he can become an absolute nuisance. This is based on my own. To fix the use of it as a trait instaed of a mental illness, went with spoiled instead, because he is.

3. Yes, he's part of the inheriting family of a hold somewhere in Ista (I don't know geography or hold mechanics! XD) I hope I cleared that up some
PostPosted: Fri Aug 02, 2019 12:48 pm


Thanks, approved!

TawnyAngel
Crew

Predestined Inquisitor

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