Hey Bonsai!
We're so sorry for the delay in this critique. Kasey sounds like an absolute peach, but there's a couple things we were hoping you could expand on to help us understand her better!
- First off, there's just a couple of minor nitpicks: There is no "mid" or "medium" level for aura frequencies, it's either Low Frequency or High Frequency. Everyone's aura fluctuates day to day, hour to hour, depending on how they feel, but how is Kasey on an average, normal day? You list some anxiety directly in her personality, which makes me think she is a high frequency individual which is totally okay even if she is an otherwise personable and outgoing person!
- The other minor thing is that you list her as going to "Camp Majesco" which doesn't exist. The Academy is Majesco, but the Summer Camp is called Murmuring Pines. Though they are closely connected and share the same staff, the two names and places are not interchangeable.
The meat and potatoes concern Kasey's history and family.
- We aren't told what happened to cause Kasey's mother to lose custody and we need to know what this event was as it shaped how Kasey was raised and her entire family dynamic.
- Where is their father? Why wouldn't he have gotten custody instead of Mel? (Do they have other siblings too?) How old was Mel when she gained custody, because she would need to be at least 18 to legally obtain it in the US and if their mother lost custody when Kasey was an infant that means they have a pretty big age gap.
Overall, Kasey's history feels like it's being told from her sister's perspective. We're mostly getting Mel's take and feelings on the events that happen but we need to know about everything from Kasey's perspective.
Once these things are cleared up for us, Kasey should be good to go! Thank you so much for your patience.
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