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xxxxName : Seri Gin
xxxxGender : Female
xxxxHeight : 5’
xxxxWeight : 128 lbs
xxxxReiatsu Color : Silver
xxxxReiatsu level : Immense
xxxxAppearance : Seri has long light pink hair that goes down to her waist and is rather messy. The ends of her hair are loosely braided in some places and have black wooden decorations at the end. She wears an all-black blouse and skirt that goes down to her knees underneath her Captain's coat. She has bright blue eyes and a gentle, playful smile.
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xxxxPersonality : Seri has an interesting personality. Normally she’s happy and cheerful. She greets everyone with a smile and a hug, usually a very powerful hug that she surprises them with. Most people will agree her hugs come out of nowhere unless she says hi first. She is a friendly and cheerful individual, but like anyone she is capable of a full range of emotions. She sometimes takes a little while to understand things and she likes to see the best in people. Something she plays ignorance towards and tolerates because she’d rather not get into them and she’s learned that feigning ignorance usually ends things in her favor.
The flip side to her personality is a bit darker. When she doesn’t get a hug her personality does a complete 180 and she turns into a violent berserker. This is great for battles since it gets her in the fighting mood against hollows that she usually has pity for, but it is a pain for those who do not know her well and reject her hugs. She has some control over it at least. When she doesn’t know a person she asks for a hug before hugging them. This avoids her going violent. She generally tries to get along with everyone.

xxxxBiography :
Seri was born in another dimension that went through a apocalypse. Kiyo found her near death and stayed with her until she died because she asked him too. She was scared and clung to him. He stayed because he was shocked she could see, touch, and hear him. When she died he took her to the soul society and raised her as his daughter. She was top of her class in sword fighting until Auron managed to beat her. She and Aruon spent a lot of time together and fell in love. For a while he helped her in her squad before he went to his own.

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xxxxReiatsu Shape : Swallowtail butterfly
xxxxLikes :
xxxx • Peace
xxxx • Auron
xxxx • Cats
xxxxDislikes :
xxxx • Unnecessary violence
xxxx • The violent side of her personality.
xxxx • She dislikes disliking people.
xxxxRelationships :
xxxx • Auron is her boyfriend.
xxxx • Kiyo is her adoptive father.
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xxxxRank : Captain
xxxxSquad : 7
xxxxSquad ability : Zen Powder


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xxxxZanpakuto Name : Cho Eruma (Butterfly Elma)
xxxxInner World Appearance : A flower garden in black and white. The flower garden is planted in such a way that it looks like a maze. In the center is where her spirit, Elma, resides.
xxxxSpirit Appearance : A man with a butterfly tattoo on his face. The tattoo is black and his hair is brown. His eyes are yellow.
xxxxSealed Appearance : Black katana. There is a hidden design on both the blade and the sheath that you can only see if the light strikes it the right way. The design on the blade is three lotus flowers in different stages of blooming. The design on the sheath is fully bloomed lotus flowers bordering the edges of the sheath. It is a Praying Mantis style katana meaning that it weighs about 2lbs and is 41 inches long in total.

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xxxxRelease Type : Stand Alone Release
xxxxRelease Phrase : Cho Eruma Ōku no tsubasa! (Butterfly Elma, Many Wings!)
xxxxAppearance : The katana stays a katana and stays the same length.
xxxxInstant Effect : The katana glows pink along the edges of the blade.
xxxxPassive Ability : Summons a cloud of hundreds of swallowtail butterflies that just fly around. The butterflies are Tiger Swallowtail Butterfly with a 5 inch wingspan and they are 4.5 inches tall. The cloud of butterflies contains 500 butterflies total that do not respawn and can easily be destroyed by energy based (like kido and zanpaktu abilities). The area affected by these butterflies is 50 feet in diameter. However if all the butterflies are destroyed she can go out of shikai for three posts (just her). After those three posts she can go back into shikai and have the full amount of butterflies.
xxxxTechniques : Do not type on this line
xxxx • Blackout : The cloud of butterflies turns black and tries to surround the the opponent in a five foot by five foot circle, blocking and absorbing the light into their wings so visibility is reduced to none or very little depending on the time of day. The lighting is reduced to half-light so if it is done at noon it looks like dusk inside the circle of butterflies. Breaking through the butterflies is very easy and lighting returns to normal while the butterflies regroup around the opponent. 150 butterflies are used for this technique and is most effective indoors or when it is cloudy. This technique lasts for 2 posts total and it takes 1 post for the butterflies to regroup after they have been broken through.
xxxx • Blind: The butterflies fly at the opponent’s eyes and try to stick over them to form a blind fold over the opponent’s eyes that causes temporary blindness if the butterflies manage to land. They can be dodged or destroyed by physical attacks and energy based attacks like kido/cero and zanpakto abilities. 100 butterflies are used for this technique and it lasts for one post and has a five post cool down. The butterflies are still black and block out all light if they manage to form the blind fold.
xxxx • Shadow Dance: The butterflies surround the opponent and create confusing arrays of shadows by creating openings in their circular wall that constantly change. This is to confuse the opponent and throw them off balance. It is very easy to break through the circular wall of butterflies and they have to regroup afterwards. Two protect her from the confusion two of the butterflies cover her eyes and her eyes will glow the color of her reiatsu. What these two butterflies do is allow her to see clearly among all the shadows as if there were none. The technique uses 200 butterflies to create more shadows in a rotating wall of shadows, energy and general confusion. The wall parts in one place at a time so that the user can take advantage of the confusion caused by the butterflies. This rotating wall lasts for 3 posts and can be evaded in the first place, or can be defeated by destroying the butterflies.
xxxx • Flickering Flurry: The cloud of butterflies fly around the combatants in a frenzied flurry with no rhyme or reason. They bump into things and the combatants and cause the lighting to flicker really quickly to try to produce a stunning and dizzying effect. To protect her from the affects of her attack two butterflies cover her eyes. Her eyes turn the color of her reiatsu and she gains the ability to not see shadows for the duration of the attack. However she is vulnerable to attacks that she can be warned of because of shadows. This doesn't enhance her vision it just makes it so she can't see shadows and only lasts as long as the attack does. The technique uses all remaining butterflies up to the full 500 in order to create absolute chaos and confusion on the battlefield. The butterflies swirl around at random bumping into objects or people for 5 posts before they are able to calm back down. During this time no other technique can be used and the goal is to make the opponents extremely confused leaving them open to other attacks from the caster.


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xxxxRelease Type : Stand Alone Release
xxxxRelease Phrase : Cho Eruma Kamisori no Tsubasa! (Butterfly Elma, Razor Wings!)
Appearance : The katana becomes two daggers. Each dagger has a hilt decorated with butterflies and the blade is plain. Each dagger is 12 inches long and are silver colored.
xxxxInstant Effect : The blades of the daggers turn a silvery blue color along the edges.
xxxxPassive Ability : 1,000 razor sharp winged butterflies are formed. This time they are silver, the same color as Seri's reiatsu.. They can be just as easily destroyed by an energy based attack. The area affected by these butterflies is 100 feet in diameter. If all the butterflies are destroyed she is knocked out of bankai for five posts and then she may enter it again with the full amount of butterflies.
xxxxTechniques : Do not type on this line
xxxx • Cyclone slicer: The butterflies fly around the opponent in one direction and can cause many small cuts where their wings brush. They are very delicate and break after they cut someone or they are knocked away and do not respawn. The technique uses 150 butterflies to fly around the opponent attempting to cut them with the razor sharp wings. These cuts are about the equivilent of getting a bad paper cut, at most one or two layers of skin and they come in at the opponent in a straight line from the side before trying to encircle the opponent. This technique lasts one post and needs 3 posts to cool down.
xxxx • Flurry: The butterflies dive bomb the opponent in a wild flurry to try to cut the opponent. They are very delicate and break after hitting something. The technique uses 200 butterflies grouped up together to strike at the opponent and break after they make contact with an object. This technique can leave some deep and nasty cuts, as if they were cut by an exacto knife. However it is not outright life threatening. This lasts for one post and has 3 post cool down.
xxxx • Fluttering Finale: All remaining butterflies are used in this attack and are sent to strike at an individual’s vital spots such as the eyes, neck, wrists and back of the knees. They can be avoided, but the sheer number of them makes this difficult. They can be destroyed using energy based attacks. Once they are destroyed they cannot respawn and this attack can only be used one time per battle.
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1. Shō (衝, Thrust)

2. Panpan (ぱんぱん,Slap)

3. Tanki-sha (短気者, Spitfire)

4. Byakurai (白雷, Pale Lightning)
5. Yuki no tama (雪の玉, Snowball)
7. Howaitorikiddo (ホワイトリキッド, White Liquid)
9. Tōketsu (凍結, Frozen)

10. Yakedo (火傷, Burn)

11. Tsuzuri Raiden (綴雷電, Bound Lightning)

12. Fushibi (伏火, Ambush Flare)
13. Shimo bōkō (Frost Assault)
14. Sōshū (Frost Fall)

15. Mahō no Misairu (魔法のミサイル, Magic Missile)
16. Reinbōkyanon (レインボーキャノン Rainbow Cannon)
18. Bakuhatsu Senkō (爆発穿孔, Explosive Punch)

19.Bakuhatsu-tekina kikku (爆発的なキック, Explosive Kick)

20. Chi no ame (血の雨 , Rain of Blood)
23. Akarui Furea (明るいフレア Bright Flare)

24. Furea (フレア Flare)
26. Raionshīrudo (ライオンシールド Lion shield)
27. Howaitobīmu ( ホワイトビーム, White Beam)

28. Saidan ( 祭壇, Altar)
30. Denji wa (でんじは Electromagnetic Wave)
32. Ōkasen (黄火閃, Yellow Fire Flash)
33. Sōkatsui (蒼火墜, Blue Fire, Crash Down)
34. Kongōbaku (金剛爆, Adamantine Blast)

35. Middonaitoraikou (ミッドナイトライトニング, Midnight Lightning)

36. Cheinraitoningu (チェインライトニング, Chain Lightning)
38. Taiyōkō-sen (太陽光線, Solar Beam)

40. Oni hanmā (鬼ハンマー Demon Hammer)
41. Kaenbin (火炎瓶 Molotov Cocktail)

42. Sutikkī shuryūdan (スティッキー手榴弾 Sticky grenade)

43. Mizu no chikai (水の誓い The Oath of the Water)
44. Kasai no chikai (火災の誓い The Oath of fire)

45. Kusa no chikai (草の誓い The Oath of Grass)
46. Kaze no tanken (風の短剣 Wind dagger)
48. Ryū kurō (龍クロー Dragon Claw)
49. Hi no bakufū (火の爆風 Fire Blast)
50. Ippuku no seiryō-zai (一服の清涼剤 , A Breath of Fresh Air)
51. Nisemono Shunpo (偽物 瞬歩Fake Flash Step)

52. Kyōfu Seiji (恐怖政治, Reign of Terror)
53. Yukidama no yama (雪玉の山, Mountain of snowballs)
54. Haien (廃炎, Abolishing Flames)

55. Kaze no Yaiba (風の刃, Blades of Wind)

56. Gurren Yari Doriru (真紅槍ドリル Crimson Spear Drill)
58. Tenran (闐嵐, Orchid Sky)

59. Shīdomashingan (シードマシンガン Seed Machine Gun)

60. Iwa no haka (岩の墓 Rock Tomb)
64. Yami Arekuruu (闇荒れ狂う, Raging Darkness)
67. Hedorobakudan (ヘドロばくだん Sludge Bomb)

68. Tsubasa no Kumo (翼の雲 Cloud of Blades)
70. Bakuhatsu Parusu 爆発パルス, Explosive Pulse)

72. Gaki Rekkō (牙気裂光, Raging Light Fang)
73. Sōren Sōkatsui (双漣蒼火墜, Twin Lotus Blue Fire, Crash Down)

74. Tsurara yari (Icicle Spear)

75. Ryūsei sutoraiki (流星ストライキ Meteor Strike)
80. Chikyū koramu (地球コラム Earth Column)

83. Kūfuku chikyū (空腹地球 Hungry Earth)

86. Seiki no Arashi (世紀の嵐 Storm of the Century)

88. Hiryū Gekizoku Shinten Raihō (飛竜撃賊震天雷炮, Flying Dragon-Striking Heaven-Shaking Thunder Cannon)

89: Burakku•rein (ブラック•レイン Black rain)

90. Kurohitsugi (黒棺, Black Coffin)
92. Sen Honō no Ame (千炎の雨, Thousand Flame Rain)
93. Hyōga Seiran (氷河晴嵐, Glacier Vapor Storm)

94. Nobi Tsunami (野火津波, Wildfire Tsunami)
99. Ryūsei busshitsu Arashi (流星物質 Meteoriod Storm)
βakudō

1. Sai (塞, Block)

2. Kaze no myaku (風の脈, Pulse of Wind)

3. Kiiro no rōpu (黄色のロープ Yellow Rope)

4. Hainawa (這縄, Crawling Rope)

5. Hikari Parusu (光パルス, Light Pulse)

6. Hikarinorokku (光のロック, Light Lock)

7. Seki (斥, Repulsion)

8. Geki (撃, Strike)

9.Hōrin (崩輪, Disintegrating Circle)

10. Hando Rokku (ハンドロック, Hand Lock)

13. Sonikku Shindō (ソニック振動, Sonic Vibration)

14. Shingōenkan (信号炎管 Signal flare)
15. Setchi (接地, Grounding)

17. Kinzoku Ito (金属糸, Metal Thread)

20. Fukkushotto (フックショット, Hook Shot)
21. Bikan (美観, Beautiful Sight)

22. Sekienton (赤煙遁, Red Smoke Flight)
23. Dokueki-yō Konomi (毒液用好み, Venom Taste)
24. Shīrurokku (シールロック, Sealing Lock)]

25.Tate Basshu (盾バッシュ, Shield Bash)
26. Kyokkō (曲光, Bent Light)

27. Suchīrugādo (スチールガード, Steel Guard)

28. Fantomu (ファントム, Phantom)


30. Shitotsu Sansen (嘴突三閃, Beak-Thrust Tri-Flash)
31. Teisatsu (偵察. Spy)
34. Shōmei (照明, Illumination)

35. Burokku (ブロック, Block)
38. Suchīrubaria (スチールバリア, Steel Barrier)
39. Enkōsen (円閘扇, Round Lock Fan)
42. Īguruaizu (イーグルアイズ, Eagle Eyes)
43. Buki wando (武器ワンド Weapon Wand)
45. Sherushīrudo (シェルシールド, Shell Shield)

44. Yoku Hibiku Oto (よく響く音, Booming Voice)
47. Kihō (気泡, Air Bubble)

48. Kenshutsu-ki (検出器, Detector)

49. Kurosu Kama (クロス鎌, Cross Scythe)

50. Kurippuru Kiri (クリップル霧, Crippling Fog)
52. Gomubaburu (ゴムバブル, Rubble Bubble)

53. Sonikkuranburu (ソニックランブル, Sonic Rumble)
58. Kakushitsuijaku (摑趾追雀, Trace-Catching Pursuit Sparrows)
60. Noren Mekuri (暖簾捲り, "Curtain Stripping")
61. Rikujōkōrō (六杖光牢, Six-Staff Light Prison)
63. Sajō Sabaku (鎖条鎖縛, Chainlink Chain Bond(s))

65. Shōgekiha (衝撃波 Shock wave)

67. Shibireyubi (しびれ指, "Numbing Finger")
72. Basho Tensō (場所転送, Location Transfer)
77. Tenteikūra (天挺空羅, Heavenly Void Net)

81. Dankū (断空, Severing Void)

83. Shadow Dance (シャドーダンス Shadōdansu)

85. Runa no taihō (ルナ大砲, Lunar Cannon)

87. Fū Yubiwa (封 指輪 Sealing Rings) –
91. Senjū Kōten Taihō (千手皎天汰炮, Thousand-Hand Bright Heaven Culling-Sear)
97. Gēto (門, Gate)

99. Kin (禁, Seal) .



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PostPosted: Thu Sep 18, 2014 10:22 am


Sadly, per guild rules, if this is not finished in a week (September 25th) I will have to archive this. If you are having troubles with ideas, let me know, and we can work together to get this RPC up and running. ^.^

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PostPosted: Sat Sep 20, 2014 9:29 am


She is ready to be judged.
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Hello, my name is Youroka Kage and I will be your judge today. I'm sorry it took a long time for a judge to get on this.

First things first, your title should read [7] Seri Gin l Captain l Shinigami

Ok, every appearance in your RPC should have at least a 2 sentence description to it, so make sure that people that don't have access to pictures are able to see it. This also gives you the chance to mention things that aren't in the picture. If there isn't a image, then at least 4 sentences are needed to show what the area looks like. cat_sweatdrop

There is one appearance that I would like to bring attention to. You say that your sealed appearance is a black Katana, without a mention of how big it is. (Guidline for you) Nor nothing on it, not even a hidden design, which would be cool.

Release types for Shikai are either Constant, or Stand alone. Stand alone means that there are no other powers that you can draw from (as a shinigami, that is fine.) Constant is when your blade either doesn't have a released form or is always released. The way that your shikai physical appearence is, it would be a constant release. However, I am not sure on this, because the instant effect seems to be used as the Zanpakuto's main power. An instant effect is basically something that happens to essenuate the fact you have gone into a release. A lot of people use flashes for this, as an example. However, this is not needed.

I am a little confused on what absorbs light so that visibility decreases. I also don't know the area in which this happens, and to what degree. Does it make it pitch black, or does it just make it dim? What can dispel this, for even a little while? Details are key.

Ok, to Shikai Techs.

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Blackout: the butterflies surround the combatants and absorb the light around them so both must fight in decreased lighting. The butterflies follow the fight so both are forced to fight in limited visibility.


Ok, this kind of overlaps with your passive ability. Does this further decrease the light? How long does this last? How long does it take for this ability to come back after it has been used? However, as it is worded, I am not sure where the butterflies are coming from seeing that they are in your instant effect and would only stay for a max of 2 posts, if they were to remain there.

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Blind: the butterflies fly at the opponents eyes and form a eye blind so the opponent cannot see.


The way this is currently worded, it is an auto hit. This is because it that flies at their eyes and forms a blind, with no way for someone to block it. It also doesn't state how long this ability lasts, and how long it would take for this ability to cool down.

That is all for shikai, let's head to bankai.

Bankai needs a release type so that we know if you can use your Shikai techs in Bankai. The two types of releases there are are Progressive and Stand alone. Progressive allows the Shikai abilities to be used in Bankai, however, the abilities must be connected and use the same concept. Stand alone would not allow you to use the Shikai ability, but it would allow you to use other concepts. Also, do you still have your Katana in Bankai?

Ok, I believe for both Shikai and Bankai you are confusing Instant effect and appearance. If your instant effect was the appearance of the Skikai/Bankai, the abilities would make sense. However, they both need a lot more detail to them.

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Passive Ability : the wings cause small and painful cuts when they fly by an opponent.


The way this is worded is an auto hit again. The way to avoid Auto hits is to say "can." Also, what can these cut through? Right now, it seems like everything as there is not a limit cat_sweatdrop Also, we do not not know how many butterflies there are, as no amount it ever stated. cat_sweatdrop

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Cyclone slicer: the butterflies fly around the opponent in one direction and cause many small cuts where their wings brush.


For this, I would need to know the size of the cyclone of Butterflies. How many butterflies there are, and how long this Cyclone happens. Also the way it's worded is again a auto hit. It would be better if it started off to the side, and then moved towards them, in a singular line. Otherwise it would be homing. Also, this needs a time in which it lasts, and a cool down.

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This is again an Auto hit. We also don't know how fast these are flying, or if they have to stay in a straight line. This would also need a cooldown, and for how long they attempt to do this.

Kage's opinion: Personally, this looks like it was throw together really fast. I honestly like the shadow butterfly idea, and think you should go with that as your Zanpakuto's concept. It would be cool, if instead of injuring someone, when they go through someone's body, they feel icy cold, as if they walked through a ghost. Hit me up on skype, and we can make this a full RPC. cat_biggrin






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PostPosted: Sat Oct 04, 2014 9:47 am


okay. I will get on it. Thank you. ^^'''
PostPosted: Tue Oct 07, 2014 4:22 am


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okay. I will get on it. Thank you. ^^'''
Zel. I'm giving you until the 14th to get this RPC edited and completed before it gets archived. We can't bend the rules for Crew.

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PostPosted: Mon Oct 13, 2014 11:38 pm


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DONE! She's ready for you to look at again.
PostPosted: Tue Oct 14, 2014 12:42 am


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Hi, I see that you made some edits to your profile. So let's look at what we have here.

Ok, so it looks like you fixed a lot of the beginning things I asked for you. However, we are at your Release state. I would like to show you one of the judging rules, all of them can be found here.

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Constant: A release type that is always released. This is normally used as a Shikai 1 release type. This would mean that the zanpakuto is always released and never sealed. These are typically very, very rare. If you create a zanpakuto with a constant release, the head judge will need to approve it. If they accept or deny it, for whatever reasons it is as their discretion.


Meaning this is my choice on whether you are able to use constant release. There is no logical reason for you to have a constant release. There is nothing in your biography that would convince me to let you have it. Not to mention, you included an instant effect to your profile, which you wouldn't have as a constant release. My ruling on this is no for constant release. The one that you would have to chose is Stand alone.

For your passive ability, how big are the butterflies? How many of them are there? Are they able to be destroyed? Without knowing this information, there is no way to know if this is fair or not.

Black out: With this, how long does it take for them to regroup? Are they weak to energy attacks, or just physical attacks? Again, because we don't know how many there are, we don't know if this is fair or not.

Blind: No, it's an auto hit, and the cooldown is too low for an ability of this level. This also would count as controlling another person's character.

Shadow Dance: No, this ability is again an auto hit, and controls another person's character, by saying it automatically confuses them

Flickering Flurry: Again, this is an auto hit, as it automatically happens when you command it.

Bankai passive ability: Cutting to the muscle is considered a deep wound, as that can permanently cripple someone. It also does not state how many butterflies you start out with.

Cyclone slicer: This is again an auto hit, as it does not attempt to hit someone, it automatically hits them. It doesn't state anywhere what the strength of these butterflies are, what size they are, and what can cut them. Also, a 3 post cool down is very little for how powerful this attack is.

Flurry: As we don't' know exactly what breaks them, this can not be determined as fair or not.

Fluttering Finale: Why does it state that you can only use it once, but has a cool down of 10 posts?

I will count kido in my next judging as it is almost 3 am. Please make the requested changes.

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Hi,I know that we made some edits while I was at work, so lets take a look at them.

Shikai passive: Ok, my bf helped me with this one, as we had to take out a measuring tape to look at this. These butterfly's wing span would not be able to lift them off the ground. My bf told me to explain it as such. Imagine if a human's arms are as long as the width of their side when they are laying down. This is how those butterflies would look with their tiny wings. Also, how many hits can these butterflies take, can they block up to a certain kido?

Blackout: How long does it take the scattered butterflies to regroup?

Blind: That is a powerful ability, the cool down is not long enough.

For Shadow Dance and Flickering Flurry, as I don't know the limitations to how these can be destroyed.

Do remember, because Bankai is stand alone, you can not use shikai abilities in bankai.

Bankai passive ability: As we don't know the limitations on what can destory the butterflies, I can not pass it. However, Bankai can be more powerful than Shikai.

Please make the requested changes.

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PostPosted: Tue Oct 14, 2014 8:12 pm


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Hi,I know that we made some edits while I was at work, so lets take a look at them.

Shikai passive: Ok, my bf helped me with this one, as we had to take out a measuring tape to look at this. These butterfly's wing span would not be able to lift them off the ground. My bf told me to explain it as such. Imagine if a human's arms are as long as the width of their side when they are laying down. This is how those butterflies would look with their tiny wings. Also, how many hits can these butterflies take, can they block up to a certain kido?

Blackout: How long does it take the scattered butterflies to regroup?

Blind: That is a powerful ability, the cool down is not long enough.

For Shadow Dance and Flickering Flurry, as I don't know the limitations to how these can be destroyed.

Do remember, because Bankai is stand alone, you can not use shikai abilities in bankai.

Bankai passive ability: As we don't know the limitations on what can destory the butterflies, I can not pass it. However, Bankai can be more powerful than Shikai.

Please make the requested changes.

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Okay.. so. I read what you said and I can fix thing, but I want to bring up two things. The measurments for the butterflie's wings are accurate. Here is some proof and there is also proof from National Geographic. Also, I did state that energy based attacks (like kido and zanpaktu abilities) and physical attacks destroy the butterflies. So I am confused as to why you saw a problem when those when they were addressed. Or do you want me to be more specific with what destroys the butterflies?

And for using shikai abilites in bankai... do you want me to put that 1000 new butterflies with razor wings are created and the black butterflies disappear? Would that work?

http://www.enchantedlearning.com/subjects/butterfly/species/Tigersw.shtml
PostPosted: Tue Oct 14, 2014 8:51 pm


I made a few slight edits to blackout, blind, and my bankai passive.

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PostPosted: Tue Oct 14, 2014 9:18 pm


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Hi,I know that we made some edits while I was at work, so lets take a look at them.

Shikai passive: Ok, my bf helped me with this one, as we had to take out a measuring tape to look at this. These butterfly's wing span would not be able to lift them off the ground. My bf told me to explain it as such. Imagine if a human's arms are as long as the width of their side when they are laying down. This is how those butterflies would look with their tiny wings. Also, how many hits can these butterflies take, can they block up to a certain kido?

Blackout: How long does it take the scattered butterflies to regroup?

Blind: That is a powerful ability, the cool down is not long enough.

For Shadow Dance and Flickering Flurry, as I don't know the limitations to how these can be destroyed.

Do remember, because Bankai is stand alone, you can not use shikai abilities in bankai.

Bankai passive ability: As we don't know the limitations on what can destory the butterflies, I can not pass it. However, Bankai can be more powerful than Shikai.

Please make the requested changes.

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Zelici DragonSquire


Okay.. so. I read what you said and I can fix thing, but I want to bring up two things. The measurments for the butterflie's wings are accurate. Here is some proof and there is also proof from National Geographic. Also, I did state that energy based attacks (like kido and zanpaktu abilities) and physical attacks destroy the butterflies. So I am confused as to why you saw a problem when those when they were addressed. Or do you want me to be more specific with what destroys the butterflies?

And for using shikai abilites in bankai... do you want me to put that 1000 new butterflies with razor wings are created and the black butterflies disappear? Would that work?

http://www.enchantedlearning.com/subjects/butterfly/species/Tigersw.shtml


I saw what you meant on skype. We both were confused because of the fact that we thought the height was the length of the body.

What I am saying is that any physical attack or kido can destroy them then it's too weak. When I mentioned both of them, I was asking for you to chose one.

I was mentioning what stand alone does. I want to make sure you know that you can't use Shikai abilities in bankai if it's stand alone.

We also will need you to put this at the bottom of your profile. This way if anyone edits it on you in the future, you will know.

[spoiler][quote="DJ Hope1990"][/quote]
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PostPosted: Tue Oct 14, 2014 9:40 pm


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Hi,I know that we made some edits while I was at work, so lets take a look at them.

Shikai passive: Ok, my bf helped me with this one, as we had to take out a measuring tape to look at this. These butterfly's wing span would not be able to lift them off the ground. My bf told me to explain it as such. Imagine if a human's arms are as long as the width of their side when they are laying down. This is how those butterflies would look with their tiny wings. Also, how many hits can these butterflies take, can they block up to a certain kido?

Blackout: How long does it take the scattered butterflies to regroup?

Blind: That is a powerful ability, the cool down is not long enough.

For Shadow Dance and Flickering Flurry, as I don't know the limitations to how these can be destroyed.

Do remember, because Bankai is stand alone, you can not use shikai abilities in bankai.

Bankai passive ability: As we don't know the limitations on what can destory the butterflies, I can not pass it. However, Bankai can be more powerful than Shikai.

Please make the requested changes.

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Zelici DragonSquire


Okay.. so. I read what you said and I can fix thing, but I want to bring up two things. The measurments for the butterflie's wings are accurate. Here is some proof and there is also proof from National Geographic. Also, I did state that energy based attacks (like kido and zanpaktu abilities) and physical attacks destroy the butterflies. So I am confused as to why you saw a problem when those when they were addressed. Or do you want me to be more specific with what destroys the butterflies?

And for using shikai abilites in bankai... do you want me to put that 1000 new butterflies with razor wings are created and the black butterflies disappear? Would that work?

http://www.enchantedlearning.com/subjects/butterfly/species/Tigersw.shtml


I saw what you meant on skype. We both were confused because of the fact that we thought the height was the length of the body.

What I am saying is that any physical attack or kido can destroy them then it's too weak. When I mentioned both of them, I was asking for you to chose one.

I was mentioning what stand alone does. I want to make sure you know that you can't use Shikai abilities in bankai if it's stand alone.

We also will need you to put this at the bottom of your profile. This way if anyone edits it on you in the future, you will know.

[spoiler][quote="DJ Hope1990"][/quote]
[quote="Youroka Kage"][/quote]
[quote="Zelici DragonSquire"][/quote][/spoiler]


Okay. i will do that. Also, I know that I can't use Shikai abilities in Bankai... What I am confused on is if that is what I have put? I thought I had them pretty different and they have their own techniques. So they are stand alone. Or are they progressive? I honestly can't tell.

I put both physical and energy based attacks because I didn't want it to be overpowered and I wanted the person to have a fighting chance. It's a lot of butterflies. But I can change it to one or the other. I just need to pick one and I can do that after putting some thought into which would be more fair.

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PostPosted: Tue Oct 14, 2014 9:58 pm


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Hi,I know that we made some edits while I was at work, so lets take a look at them.

Shikai passive: Ok, my bf helped me with this one, as we had to take out a measuring tape to look at this. These butterfly's wing span would not be able to lift them off the ground. My bf told me to explain it as such. Imagine if a human's arms are as long as the width of their side when they are laying down. This is how those butterflies would look with their tiny wings. Also, how many hits can these butterflies take, can they block up to a certain kido?

Blackout: How long does it take the scattered butterflies to regroup?

Blind: That is a powerful ability, the cool down is not long enough.

For Shadow Dance and Flickering Flurry, as I don't know the limitations to how these can be destroyed.

Do remember, because Bankai is stand alone, you can not use shikai abilities in bankai.

Bankai passive ability: As we don't know the limitations on what can destory the butterflies, I can not pass it. However, Bankai can be more powerful than Shikai.

Please make the requested changes.

✿Status✿

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Zelici DragonSquire


Okay.. so. I read what you said and I can fix thing, but I want to bring up two things. The measurments for the butterflie's wings are accurate. Here is some proof and there is also proof from National Geographic. Also, I did state that energy based attacks (like kido and zanpaktu abilities) and physical attacks destroy the butterflies. So I am confused as to why you saw a problem when those when they were addressed. Or do you want me to be more specific with what destroys the butterflies?

And for using shikai abilites in bankai... do you want me to put that 1000 new butterflies with razor wings are created and the black butterflies disappear? Would that work?

http://www.enchantedlearning.com/subjects/butterfly/species/Tigersw.shtml


I saw what you meant on skype. We both were confused because of the fact that we thought the height was the length of the body.

What I am saying is that any physical attack or kido can destroy them then it's too weak. When I mentioned both of them, I was asking for you to chose one.

I was mentioning what stand alone does. I want to make sure you know that you can't use Shikai abilities in bankai if it's stand alone.

We also will need you to put this at the bottom of your profile. This way if anyone edits it on you in the future, you will know.

[spoiler][quote="DJ Hope1990"][/quote]
[quote="Youroka Kage"][/quote]
[quote="Zelici DragonSquire"][/quote][/spoiler]


Okay. i will do that. Also, I know that I can't use Shikai abilities in Bankai... What I am confused on is if that is what I have put? I thought I had them pretty different and they have their own techniques. So they are stand alone. Or are they progressive? I honestly can't tell.

I put both physical and energy based attacks because I didn't want it to be overpowered and I wanted the person to have a fighting chance. It's a lot of butterflies. But I can change it to one or the other. I just need to pick one and I can do that after putting some thought into which would be more fair.
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