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 Posted: Wed Apr 23, 2014 9:44 am
This was made when I was a preteen or teenager.
It got an A from my Literature teacher.
( i have no idea whether I deserved the A or not, which is why.. I have placed it here)
Love can make one seem bad,
and make one seem glad,
but one can follow their hearts
and do their parts.
But understanding is in not words or one word,
but in feelings and by sharing with friends.
And a love preserved and till the passage of time ends,
like celestial beings,
a friendship is forever
and is powered by loyalty, trust and respect.
These are things I am searching for.
Two eternal friends will be together
to the very end
since there is no such experience
in this love, for this.
I think love is and will be and always
will be
a mystery.
Note: has no title.
Suggest a title?
So, anyway, this is over a decade old and I would like some critique but please also provide some praise?
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Posted: Fri May 02, 2014 12:38 am
Mysterious Love is what I can suggest. ninja
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Posted: Fri May 02, 2014 2:30 am
that sounds like a good title. sometimes, i baffle myself. i can write some poetry but can't think of titles. Strange eh?
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