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 Posted: Sun Mar 30, 2014 5:05 pm
 xx c н a r a c т e ɾ • ι n f o r m a т ι o n xxxx • Name : Phane Hinko
xxxx • Gender : Male
xxxx • Height : 5'11"
xxxx • Weight : 248 lbs
xxxx • Reiatsu Color : Gold
xxxx • Reiatsu level : Average
xxxx • Appearance : 
xxxx • Personality : A man of honor and determination... is something that wouldn't describe Phane. He's a man of little care for the world around him, only caring about those he knows. He is reckless, vicious, and willing to go to any level to get the job done. He does have a sense of wisdom, but it is not well known.
xxxx • Biography : xx o p τ ι o n a l • ι n f o r m a т ι o n xxxx • Reiatsu Shape : An hour glass
xxxx • Likes :
xxxx • Ferrets
xxxx • Violence
xxxx • His Zanpakuto
xxxx • His tech
xxxx • Dislikes :
xxxx • Dogs
xxxx • Mindless Violence
xxxx • Classic Attire
xxxx • Relationships :
xxxx • N/A
xxxx • N/A
xxxx • N/A xx r a n k ι n g • ι n f o r m a т ι o n xxxx • Rank : Soldier
xxxx • Squad : Squad 8(Pending)
xxxx • Squad ability : Battle Adaptations xx z a n p a k u т ō • ι n f o r m a т ι o n xxxx • Zanpakuto Name : Asura Junzizan
xxxx • Inner World Appearance : His world
xxxx • Spirit Appearance : Spirit
xxxx • Sealed Appearance : Nodachi xx r e l e a ѕ e • ι n f o r m a т ι o n ѕ н ι k a ι • Unavailable right now
xxxx • Release Type : Stand Alone
xxxx • Release Phrase : Become the True Offensive Weapon!
xxxx • Appearance :
Right Arm: http://www.medievalcollectibles.com/images/PRODUCT/large/MCI-2588_3_.png
Left Arm: http://th07.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/i/2013/111/0/b/dark_souls_ii___custom_shield_by_faatehhamad-d62ghe8.jpg
xxxx • Instant Effect : A Draw in energy before a forceful release to push back reckless opponents. The Push back only works when the foes are within 10 feet of the user who activated their shikai.
xxxx • Passive Ability : A strange resonance with the air around the user, capable of breaking the air with either the shield or the gauntlet.
xxxx • Techniques : Do not type on this line
xxxx • Wind Cracker: The technique that is easily mistaken for a wave slash, but has another means to it. Upon the usage of this technique, the user uppercuts the air, priming it for a technique as they dash from where they are towards the enemy. They then swing with their shield's edge to get them to bend over. They soon strike the back of the neck of the foe with their gauntlet covered right elbow as a burst of wind shoots from the the original spot towards the user's elbow. This sends the opponent crashing into the ground with shear force of the air around them
xxxx • Whirlwind Draw: A simple technique to bring enemies closer to the user with a quick swing of the arm. It only works 20 ft away from the user, bringing the enemy in 5 ft at a time. If it is used while the enemy is 6 ft or less away from the opponent, the user will bring their right arm up to strike the foe in the jaw and blast them away with their strength and air.
xxxx • Lighter than Air: A fair technique that lightens the user moreso than the air itself, allowing them to move as a blur within the air around them. When moving, the user not only appears as a blur, but turns into wind itself to dodge oncoming techniques. This however, does not create a perfect defense as the user can be knocked out of this skill without having to wait 5 posts with a flame-based technique.
xxxx • (officer only) в a n k a ι •(Unavailable for now)
xxxx • Release Type : Stand-Alone
xxxx • Release Phrase : Fear the true unknown... Asura Junzizan!
xxxx • Appearance : http://i67.photobucket.com/albums/h305/DaneNerro9/323_max_zps5582d0af.jpg
xxxx • Instant Effect : Complete armor on the user, changing his appearance to better fit the use.
xxxx • Passive Ability : Fields of Sand: The user is constantly surrounded by sand and each of his foot steps turns the ground it touches into sand.
xxxx • Techniqued : Do not type on this line
xxxx • Sand Cutter: The user draws the sand at the tip of their swords before cutting a sand cross before the user. They will then slash at the cross to make it fly forward in a wave slash pattern, slowly getting bigger and thinner in it's form until it vanishes back to the user's area.
xxxx • Sand Crusher: The user raises their right leg up before they slam it down onto the ground, sending the sandy dust into the air. Because of the armor, they can see clear as day inside of the dust and dash forward to slash at the enemy to get them off balance. Then the sand comes flying in to crush them on the spot.
xxxx • The Desert Devil: The user stabs both of his swords into the ground, letting them sink as the area within a 50 ft radius turns into a field of sand. A barrier rises up to keep any caught within the sand field inside as the user is swallowed up by the sand. The user will be moving within the sand, acting like a shark as each movement causes sand to shoot up. They soon move towards the fow before the sand stops, soon the enemy will be dragged down if they remain on the ground. In the air, the user will shoot up while encased in a sand spike prison.(captain only) xx e q u ι p м e n т • xxxx• Testing
xxxx• Testing
xxxx• Testing
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Posted: Fri Apr 04, 2014 12:13 pm
✿✿✿Assessment✿✿✿ Hello, I am Steel, and I will be judging your profile (finally).
Let us start right from the top. Please use a smaller image if you want it to be right in the RPC, but I would prefer you to link it, much like you have for your Zanpakutou, or use a spoiler coding to conceal it. Please also include 2.3 sentences for your appearance in the event your image decides to vanish completely, as they sometimes do.
I would also like to ask you to write a biography. Aim for at least one paragraph, which is 4 to 5 sentences long on average. You can indeed do more, or a bit less, and please do not use cop-out biographies or amnesia or artificially made to avoid having to write a background, as even those have stories. If you character does not know their past, so be it, you still do.
For the images you have for your Zanpakutou information, please use at least one sentence to describe it beyond the image itself, in the event the image link breaks or is lost.
Now, even if you do not have your Shikai or bankai available, do not use white text. Use the coding to denote that it is unavailable. Now, onto the actual abilities themselves.
Shikai
Passive: Please further expand on the resonance. If you are using vibrations, do please say so, but strange resonance is vague and could cause plenty of problems later, particularly when it comes to blocking your techniques.
Techniques: You can delete the "do not type" bit,
-Wind Cracker : I am pretty sure I have no idea what is going on hear, as from the first sentence on, you are describing a full series of attacks, not a "wave slash" as it can be mistaken for. Over all, this one technique has three attacks in it, which seem to dictate how an enemy is moving as well. I would recomend rewording it to "The user strike the air in front of them, to cause a resonance which remains stationary. The user will then move to attack at close range. The next post after the initial attack, the user's resonance is pulled towards the gauntlet, giving it extra striking power that, if hit, would be able cause a 5 foot diameter crater to be formed. Can only be used once every three posts." This way it has more applications and avoid possibly dictating how someone would move or potentially auto-hitting them.
-Whirlwind Draw: Again, you are semi-dictating how an opponent can move and react. I would recommend wording it as "The user creates a vaccuum around their fist, creating a vortex that can drag in most un-rooted materials towards the user by 5 feet per post it is sustained. If an opponent is within 5 feet after the technique is activated, the user will cease the technique, and use the resulting expulsion of air and pressure to attempt to punch the opponent. Can only be sustain for 4 consecutive posts, cannot move during technique, and only pulls in objects and people within 20 feet. The user can reuse the technique after 3 posts when it was ended." This again will allow freedom of attack, and allow opponents a chance to escape using Shunpo or other such means.
-Lighter than Air: Alright, this one started off nice...but then got bad. Let's reword this. "The user creates a resonance in the air surrounding themselves to produce a haze that makes them appearing in multiple places at once within a 5 foot area around themselves. This technique also causes the user to resonant, making them able to avoid physical attacks for a very limited number of times. This technique can be sustain for 5 posts, unless an attack is avoided by use of this ability, which will reduce the sustainable duration by 1 post per attack (if used for one round, then three attacks are avoided, it would end after the next post). The user cannot avoid fire-based techniques, as they heat the air itself, thus negating the use of the resonance to avoid attacks." Now there are clear limitations, and it doesn't seem like an automatic escape to avoid attacks, and it fits in with your passive ability, the resonance.
You can include one more technique, since having them all written down makes it easier to update in the event of ranking up.
Bankai
Passive: I get the feeling you don't really grasp the passive ability section. This is what your weapon is capable of doing. Thus, your passive for your Bankai would be The ability to manipulate sand, and generate it from the ground. or something similar.
-Sand Cutter: Good. Please denote a range on this, as its current wording would allow it to go on forever in theory, if enough sand was used in its creation. And denote how often it can be used. We are using "cooldowns" to show how much energy is expended to use a technique, for more semi-realistic combat.
-Sand Crusher: Oh gods no. You are doing to much at once, and I am seeing a pattern in some of your techniques. Let me reword this to make it more acceptable. "The user smashes the ground beneath them, sending a cloud of sand into the air. The user will then move to attack a target within the sand cloud. If physical contact is made, the sand will then move towards the point of contact, often resulting in burial by sand." See? Much better and open to more types of attacks on your end. Using the types of limitations I put on other techniques, let me see what you got, alright?
-The Desert Devil: No. I can see what you are attempting here, and it sounds good, but let me put it to you this way. All races have the capacity to essentially fly. I would recommend finding a completely different technique to use here please. Also remember that you cannot directly control your opponent with any of your techniques.
For all instances where you posted a link, please also give a sentence description in the event the link is broken. Thank you, and do please quote me when you have completed updates. ✿Status✿ 
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DJ Hope 1990 Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu May 01, 2014 2:41 am
You have one week to make the edits or contact us about your RPC before it gets archived. Please keep in mind once it's archived it CAN be retrieved upon request. We just like to keep the clutter down.
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Posted: Sun Aug 03, 2014 12:16 am
I am archiving this because it has been a while since you have made changes to your RPC. If you would like us to get this back for you, you can post in this thread
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Youroka Kage Vice Captain
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