xxc н a r a c т e ɾ • ι n f o r m a т ι o n xxxx • Name : Sophie Valentine xxxx • Gender : Female xxxx • Height : 6'00" xxxx • Weight : 140 lb xxxx • Reiatsu Color : Red and White xxxx • Reiatsu level : Great
This level of spiritual power corresponds to those possessing a large amount of spiritual power which is finely controlled. This level of spiritual power is common amongst those of a Captain and Espada. However even Vice Captains and some seated officers can reached this level.
xxxx • Appearance : She has long red hair that goes down to her lower back. She has emerald eyes, and an hour glass figure. She is taller that most people, and has always felt a little self-conscious about it. She also has pale skin that burns easy. She also has a large scar on her right shoulder, which she now has a tattoo of a rose on top of crack, over the scar a hollow pierced her chest. xxxx • Personality : She is strong and Passionate in what ever she dose. If she starts something, you know she will finish it to the best of her abilitys. She also has strong opinions on a few things and will fight with everything she has for them. She is the type of person to make people work to be in her inner-circle of people she can and will trust, she dose not just give it out freely. But if you are lucky enough to be someone she can put her faith into, she will defend you with everything she has. She is highly protective, kinda the big sister type. She is able to fight with an opponent for a minute or two, and come up with a way to try to counter their attacks. It may not always be the best way, but she dose come up with one. She has a strong will, and will try to never lie to anyone, unless she has to. But her straightforward nature goes farther than that. She will do her best to always fight with honor, she would rather take you down face to face, than some dirty trick doing it for her. What a lot of people don't know about her, is that she is a die hard romantic. She is able to stay calm under pressure. It takes a lot to make Sophie lose focus on the battle field. Because she knows one mistake can get someone killed. But there are still times she loses focus. Remember no one is perfect.
She has a temper to match her hair colour. But since she was young, she has been learning how to control it, but it still shows itself from time to time. The thing that gets under her skin the most are egotistical men. She is also stubborn to the core. She rarely backs down, especially if she loss her temper, or her pride was hurt. But there is no way she would let it come down to losing a friend or someones life. She sometimes has a sharp tongue that comes into play, but it could just come out on it's own. Sometimes it can get her into trouble, but sometimes it can come in handy. And sometimes her shape tongue will be completely void of any tact what so ever. She will speak her mind without even thinking. Again this can get her in trouble sometimes, but it can also come in handy. xxxx • Biography : Growing up in the slums ~~~~
Sophie is a little Sister to a brave older brother Red. When she was young her temper would get the best of her, she always had to back down a lot to protect herself and her brother. They even had to steal to keep themselves alive, but one day everything would change. Red went to the Soul Reaper academy to try and make a better life for him and his sister. One day he was back home visiting his sister when a hollow came and started kill everyone around her and her brother. The hollow was looking for Red's powers and Sophie latent powers. The Hollow was about to attack her brother Red, when she push Red out if the way just in time. The hollow stuck one of it's claws throw her chest, just missing her heart. It was about to eat her, when her brother's true power busts forth in a brilliant display of beautiful white rose petals. The petals swirl around him as he look at the scene that had just happened. With his sisters blood on his face he started to attack the hollow with his newly unsealed Zanpakuto. He fought as hard as he caught. it came down to one final blow. As Red struck the hollow as the hollow struck him. Both stricks were a deadly blow, but the hollow was the first to go. The hollow dissolved into nothingness as he fell down beside his sister. Red turned his head as he looked at Sophie. He places his pure white Zanpakuto on her chest as a white rose petal fell on her cheek. A Woman from the 13 Court Guard Squads final showed up but it was to late. The hollow was purified, as the siblings lay in a pool of their mixing blood. Red leaned over to his sister and told her he will always love her and to be strong. She started to cry as she saw him fall back, lifeless on the ground. Sophie blacked out with the faint outline as the last thing she saw.
Sophie woke up in her bed back home, with the woman sitting beside her bed. The woman had done nothing but bring her home, It was actually her brother who saved her life. As he died, he knew his sister still needed him, and his overwhelming need to protect her allowed his Zanpakuto sprite to fuse with her and healed the wound. Because it was her brother's Zanpakuto Spirit, Baraouji he was easily taken in by Sophie, even tho she did not know it yet. Baraouji would help her and shape Sophie Zanpakuto Spirit, and that is how Barahime came to be. Just as Sophie and Red are brother and sister, so are both their Zanpakuto Spirits that now live in Sophie.
When Sophie wake up and saw the the woman, and asked where her brother was, and then she remembered. The woman gave her a smiled full of heartache.Anna Valentine gave her name to Sophie. She said she had enough of backing down, and being helpless. having to have everyone else protect her. Sophie vowed to Anna and Red that she would become a Soul Reaper, and that she would never back down again, and to protect the weak, and to become strong enough to never have to back down again or feel helpless. What she later learned is that her brother made the same vow to himself.
After hearing Sophie's moving vow Anna made her an offer. She offered to let her come live with her and her husband Samuel. Sophie was unsure at first, but knew it would be best chance for her and the thought crossed her mind. That Anna couldn't be all that bad, because she did stay by her bed. She could have just left, and she didn't have to make that offer ether. So they she went to live with the kind Lady Soul Reaper and her Husband which in time adopted them and raised the pair as their own children.
After the Academy ~~~~~
Sophie was the lieutenant of Squad 13 under Kiyo Ikazuchi. Her adoptive mother Anna Valentine was one of the captains appointed by Kiyo Ikazuchi. Anna’s lieutenant was Sophie’s adoptive father and Anna’s husband Samuel. Sophie was doing her best as the lieutenant of squad 13, till one day Sophie got a message telling her that her mother and father were missing in action while on assignment and presumed dead. Sophie rushed to find her brother as fast as she could. When she found him she held onto him and tight as she could. She also took comfort in her Captain, to who she looks up to like an older brother.
Sophie Is currently severing under Auron Yamato the new captain of Squad 13. Kiyo was like a father figure to Auron. So because Kiyo was like a brother to Sophie, Auron and Sophie naturally became close. Sophie always saw Auron as a little brother that she love to torment as only a sister can do. Seri Gin the captain of squad 7. She is also a wonderful friend and amazing woman. She is also the girlfriend of and her Captain Auron. Then there is Momo Hirako. She is one of the sweet people Sophie has had the pleasure to come in contact with. Momo also share a few character traits such as her upfront nature. That may be one of the reasons why Sophie adopted Momo as a sister. But Momo dose have a mean streak in her. She rarely get mad but when she dose, watch out!
A bit about Anna & Samuel Valentine. ~~~~
Anna Valentine was a sweet and kind lady, who could never stand for anyone getting hurt, she tried her best to help the remaining being after the event. She would defend the weak and feed the hungry, with her best friend Samuel by her side.
Samuel would always follow Anna around like a shadows while they were in the academe together, till one day she creeped up behind him, and scared him half to death. She knew he had a crush on her, but he didn't know she had a crush on him till much later. Anna never lost her kind heart even after Kiyo Ikazuchi made her a captain after the event. Samuel became Anna's lieutenant and later he became her husband.
xxo p τ ι o n a l • ι n f o r m a т ι o n xxxx • Reiatsu Shape : Her Reiatsu takes the shape of a Dual coloured rose. xxxx • Likes : xxxx • Roses xxxx • Icecream xxxx • A kind Heart xxxx • A beautiful spot by the water
xxxx • Dislikes : xxxx • Overly Cocky People xxxx • People who get Undeserved Respect xxxx • People who waste her time. xxxx • The Cold xxxx • Pickles
xxxx • Relationships : xxxx • Anna Valentine (Adoptive Mother) {Missing in Action} xxxx • Samuel Valentine (Adoptive Father) {Missing in Action} xxxx • Red Valentine (Biological Big Brother) {Died protecting her} xxxx • Auron Yamato (little Brother figure) {Captain of Squad 13} xxxx • Seri Gin (Friend, & Little brother's girlfriend) {Captain of Squad 7} xxxx • Momo Hirako (little Sister figure) {Captain of Squad 5)
xxr a n k ι n g • ι n f o r m a т ι o n xxxx • Rank : Lieutenant xxxx • Squad : 13 xxxx • Squad ability : Guardian's Shield allows the user to block opponents incoming offensive spells such as a Hado spell or a Cero. The user creates a large shield of pure reiatsu to block the attack. They can either create the shield around themselves, or a near by ally. The shield is put out directly in front of the caster when they speak the words "Guardian's Shield!" it cannot defend against area of effect spells or block attacks made from the Zanpakuto. This includes any Zanpakuto technique, kido based or otherwise.
This Shield only works against offensive Kido spells, the most effected would be by that extension, Hado. However some Bakudo, primarily those which are non-touch ranged versions would be effected, for example the Bakudo Spell #16 "Metal Thread" would be, whilst something such as Bakudo Spell #8 "Strike" would not be.
While normal Cero is effected, any form of advanced Cero would be to powerful for the shield to block it out completely, thus it would only lessen the damage, not block it outright.
The shield is instantaneous, thus it could be used, and is meant to be used as, a reaction, and it will only last for the post it is cast in. It is summoned, it blocks a spell or cero, it breaks and vanishes.
xxxx✮Lieutenants: xxxx •Can use this to block up to 60 kido/hollow spells as well as equal ranked cero blasts. xxxx •Can defend 2 allies and them selves up to 20 feet away. xxxx •This can be used up to 4 times in battle, with a 5 post cool down between uses.
xxz a n p a k u т ō • ι n f o r m a т ι o n xxxx • Zanpakuto Name : ~ Barahime (Rose Princess) ~ Baraouji (Rose Prince) xxxx • Inner World Appearance :
xxxx • Spirit Appearance : Barahime on the left & Baraouji of the Right. xxxx • Sealed Appearance : xxxx • Extra Info: ~ Barahime's Red rose petals represents Love, Passion, Courage, and Respect. ~ Baraouji's White rose petals represents Purity, Innocence, Loyalty, and Humility.
xxr e l e a ѕ e • ι n f o r m a т ι o n ѕ н ι k a ι • xxxx • Release Type : Stand alone xxxx • Release Phrase : Barahime ~ "With a Passionate heart, lead the way!" Baraouji ~ "With a Pure Heart, stand your ground!"
xxxx • Appearance : Barahime's sheath and the fabric on the hilt turns red, were the the fabric on Baraouji's hilt turns white. xxxx • Instant Effect : Barahime will dissolve into Red Rose Petals, and Baraouji will dissolve into White Rose Petals.⇩ xxxx • Passive Ability : Sophie has twin Zanpakutos that will dissolve into soft rose petals. They a beautful, but thing are not always what they seem. Each is as sharp as finely honed blades. Each Zanpakuto will dissolve into a different colour that has a different meaning. Barahime will dissolve into Red rose petals that represents Love, Passion, Courage, and Respect. Baraouji will dissolve White rose petals, that represents Purity, Innocence, Loyalty, and Humility. Each blade has 1000 rose petals. Each Zanpakuto has it's own petal count that is unaffected by the other. So if one Zanpakuto is damaged enough to be down to 500 petals, the other will till be at 1000 petals, that she can switch to if need be. But Sophie must keep using the same Zanpakuto for 3 turns before she can switch to the other.
Sophie has a mental link with each petal allowing her to move each petal independently of the others. Each petal has a soft and genital appearance but are as strong as oak wood. She will use her metal link to move the petals into formations to aid Sophie in her attacks. The petals produce an oil that makes them water resistant. (e.g. Rain will just bead on the petal and roll off, but the impact of the drop hitting the petal may throw the petal off. Wind will also effect the petals.) If 250 or more of the petals are destroyed in one shot, Sophie will feel a shape jolt in her mind disrupting her concentration, but if all the petals of one blade were to be destroyed at once, there would be a massive sharp, piercing jolt in her mind, that would prevent her from releasing ether blade for at least 1 turns. Sophie can regenerate the petals at 5% (50 petals per turn) of the petals on her turn when the petals are released, or every two post. But When the blade is sealed it has a 10% (100 petals per tune) regain rate of the petals on each of her turn, or every two turns. Each blade has it own regain rate, So both blades can regenerate at the same time.
xxxx • Techniques : xxxx • Prim Rose Armor ~ Sophie will bring the petals in close to her body, placing each one carefully on her body to cover each square inch including over her hair. Leaving only her face and the palm of her hands uncovered. The petals are soft enough to rest on her body and flex with each moment without cutting her, but stronger enough to protect her body. It is like having a second skin of oak wood. {{Duration Length: This the easiest one for her to use. She is easily able to keep this move going from anywhere from 2 - 8 posts}} {{Cool Down: She knows this one by heart and it is the easiest one for her to use she only needs rest for two post, but she is still able to use her other attacks.}}
xxxx • Rose Ribbon ~ Sophie will release one of her Zanpakutos, and attack with the other in blade from. The released Zanpakuto will follow every movement the other makes. It will leave a path were the other one was. It looks like the Zanpakuto in blade form has a ribbon following it, kinda like an after image. The Ribbon sorta has a kind of have an elegant chainsaw effect. So as she pulls the sword the ribbon will continue on the path the blade took so it will continue to cut. {{Duration Length: The ribbions can stay around for anywhere from 2 - 8 posts.}} {{Cool Down: This takes very little effort so three post before reuse, but she is still able to use her other attacks.}}
xxxx • Rose Burst ~ Sophie will draw in all the petals of her Zanpakuto around her, in a tight formation. The speed of the petals increases in this tight dome shape, making all most impenetrable. At any point Sophie will shot all the petals straight out, causing a massive amount of damage in a 25 feet area (including the sky) around Sophie, the damage is similar to what a round of buckshot would do, except stronger. This move can turn trees into tooth-picks, and boulders into gravel. But the Ball will start to get bumpy and will have a 10 second delay before it burst out, giving people a fair bit out time to get away. {{Cool Down: This one takes a lot out of her, so she can not use this one to often, She would most likely only use this move once per battle, but the cool down is five posts.}}
xxxx • Sacrifice: Royal Sin or Family Virtue ~ Sacrifice is a move were one blade sacrifices petals from the other blade to restore it own petal count, but the petal count of ether blade can not exceed the max petal count. (1000 petals each) but the amount of petals sacrificed is adjustable. There is two different version of this move. ~ Sacrifice: Royal Sin is were the released blade sacrifices petals from the seal blade, to replace petals that the released blade lost. (This version of the move represents, when a royal sacrifice another royal to get farther ahead.) ~ Sacrifice: Family Virtue is were the released blade sacrifices it's petals to restore the seal blades petals. (This version of the move represents, when someone sacrifices themselves to help their family.) {{This move is hard on Sophie's Zanpakuto spirits, so Sophie try to only use this move when she has to, but she can only do this once per battle.}}
в a n k a ι • xxxx • Bankai Name : ~ Miaka Barahime (Beautiful Red Rose Princess) ~ Yuu Baraouji (Gentle Rose Prince)
xxxx • Release Type : Progressive xxxx • Release Phrase : "Miaka Barahime, Yuu Baraouji. Twins born of the Rose. One born of Passion and Courage. The other born of Innocence and Humility. Together they Bloom in Unity. Bankai!" xxxx • Appearance : xxxx • Instant Effect : To release her Bankai, Sophie’s blood must be drawn, and a tear be shed first. Sophie's Hair will grow down past her ankles, and flow weightlessly in her Reaitsu aura as if she was under water. Her cloths will also transform into the the armor you see in the pic. xxxx • Passive Ability : To activate Sophie's Bankai, her blood must be drawn firstr. She must show her vulnerability for her to gain strength. But if the conditions are met, she will release both blade at the same time. But the only thing about her Bankai is that the petals will pour out of the blade, but the blade will not dissolve this time. The petal count of each blade is restored to it's maximum, when she enters her Bankai no matter the amount of damage taken in her Shikai. Each petal will then grow into a rose with 10 petals. The roses will then bust, creating a fury of red and white. (She would have 20,000 petals, 10,000 Red Petals and 10,000 White petals)
Sophie has a mental link with each petal allowing her to move each petal independently of the others. Each petal has a soft and genital appearance but are as strong as oak wood. She will use her metal link to move the petals into formations to aid Sophie in her attacks. The petals produce an oil that makes them water resistant. (e.g. Rain will just bead on the petal and roll off, but the impact of the drop hitting the petal may throw the petal off. Wind will also effect the petals.) If 2500 or more of the petals are destroyed in one shot, Sophie will feel a shape jolt in her mind disrupting her concentration, but if all the petals of her Bankai were to be destroyed at once, there would be a massive sharp, piercing jolt in her mind, that would prevent her from releasing her Bankai. Sophie can regenerate 500 on her turn when the petals are released, or every two post. Each blade has it own regain rate, So both blades can regenerate at the same time, but in this case it would count as one blade.
xxxx • Technique : xxxx • The Rose Waltz ~ Sophie congers a solid ten foot high wall of petals, were the petals are connected to each other. It creates a Colosseum effect. The Colosseum will be about 200 feet across. It will make an "area control" effect that will stop people from getting out of range of her attacks. But if something hits the wall it will just bounce off without damaging it. The wall would have a little flex it it so blunt force may not always work. But she can create holes in the wall as she see if. If people have the power to destroy Sophie's petals, they can brake through the wall. She still has the ability to use other technique but may need to change the size of the Colosseum, depending on what technique she uses. {{Duration Length: this attack can last anywhere from 2 - 10 posts}} {{Cool down: because this is a lot like her Shikai technique, she dose not need as much rest to use another attack. she needs a cool down of about three posts.}}
xxxx • Equestrian Rose ~ Gypsy Rose This technique is a ritual that will summon the Equestrian Rose. Sophie summons a majestic white horse, with light armor on it's body. The Ritual requires 25% of Sophie max petal count. (20,000 - 25% = 5,000) and a small circle draw in her blood on a flat surface. The blood will then start to glow and expand to fuse with the 5,000 Rose Petals. The Blood fuse Rose petals will then start morphing into Gypsy Rose, Sophie mighty white steed. Sophie will ride Gypsy Rose into battle, and because Sophie and Gypsy have been together for so long they can interpret what the other is going to do before the other dose it. But Gypsy will still allow Sophie to use such techniques as flashstep, and air walk while mounted, along with her other Shikai and Bankai techniques. Gypsy will give her a normal speed advantage, along with a height advantage when crossing weapons. But of course normal mounted weakness would still apply. {{The cost of this technique is 5,000 petals, 25% of her total petal count, but any damage done to Gypsy will result in a subtraction from the 5,000 petals. So the petals are like her health. Different parts of the horse will be worth different amounts.}} {{Because Gypsy is almost a separate entity, she can stay on the battle field until she is to injured to fight, or is sent away.}} {{If Gypsy is to injured to fight she can not be able to be re-summoned to the battle..}}
xx e q u ι p м e n т • xxxx• Testing xxxx• Testing xxxx• Testing
Hi, my name is Youroka Kage and I will be your judge today.
Wait...this is different than what I thought it was before. You can only use one blade at a time meaning being released at one time. This way it's more fair to the person that faces you, because this is a godmoddish RPC. Before you argue with me, listen to what I have to say. You control each piece with your mind. If someone doesn't have a power that is able to deter the petals, they will die. Now I know there will be a kido that has wind in it, but sometimes for Flavor, they decide that they don't want to use Kido, or some chose to never use their Zanpakuto, heck some people even decide to not use either. Hope and I have talked about this RPC, and we believe that it should be outright denied. One of the reasons is because it's a Godmoddish RPC. Another is because it is mostly a copy cat RPC from the show, without all the disadvantages that he had with it. Not to mention, in Shikai you have 2,000 total, somehow you increase to 40,000. There is no way I could allow the Bankai with that many petals, or with that many blades. Even if you were mounted on your horse the entire time, it would not be fair to others. Your horse also states that you will Automatically seal him when he gets to half health. How would damage even be done at one time? There is no way for us to even gauge what this could do.
I know this is long, but this profile is denied on the grounds that it has too many petals and it is a copy cat RPC.
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Posted: Fri Mar 14, 2014 9:20 am
It is hardly a copy cat RPC. It may have started as based off the idea, but it has since evolved into my own set of powers, which I still admit may have bugs in it. But I would like to bring up the fact that everyone's is based off some idea they saw somewhere.
As for the 2000 in shika, it is really is more like 1000 at one time because she uses one blade at a time. It is set up so the petal can be destroyed and reformed, so the petal count can be adjusted, but never more than 1000 at one time. And when it comes to the 2000 turning into 40,000, which can be change 20,000 because it would be 10x her power, as it states in cannon story. It is the only way I could think of to increase her power, other than change the straight of the petals.
I will also make the "petal dance" move into a one way currant like a storm would have, that can be easy to deflect.
As for the people who don't have the power to ether cut through wood strength petals or find a way to deflect them, then they would not last long in the real Bleach world.
For the horse she would be fairly easy to damage as if it were a normal horse. So it is not "The immortal horse of the Rose" that can never be damaged. It is like a normal horse, takeing normal damage.
And if you are worried about the her making blades at will. I can make it a max of two, one for each spirit.
Perhaps it would help if I gave a full assessment of this RPC. Please bear with me.
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Sophie can regenerate the petals at 5% of the petals on her turn when the petals are released, or every two post.
But When the blade is sealed it has a 10% regain rate of the petals on each of her turn, or every two turns. Each blade has it own regain rate, So both blades can regenerate at the same time.
I hate percents personally. Especially in RP. Why? because they're so hard to determine. And unless you're a math whiz - which I am personally not - no one is going to sit there and do the accurate math of how many petals you should regenerate with... every petals are released or every two posts. - which side note - those are separate right? WHEN she releases she regains 5% of her petals back, AND also with every two posts they're out? Which doesn't really matter because she can just switch zanpakutos every two posts anyways and regenerate a huge chunk - 20 % plus 5% on release next time. Seems a bit.. OP to me.. maybe if she had to use the same zan for like 5 posts, then I wouldn't be wrinkling my nose at this so much. Then again, what the hell is 25% consider its probably based off of how many petals are destroyed?
So.. percents = good for anime, bad for RPing. If we can change all the percents into actual numbers - solid numbers I'd be more keen on accepting this rpc. Let's not make it too drastic either, because its been established, you have an OP amount of petals in bankai.
Petal Dance O_O... -dies-
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I will also make the "petal dance" move into a one way currant like a storm would have, that can be easy to deflect.
>_>; I agree. Lets do that. *is nodding eagerly in real life like a spastic*
Also?
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Barahime and/or Baraouji dissolves and creates a storm of Rose petals,
Im just gonna ask you to specify - you can only release ONE at a time. So getting rid of that "and/or" may be a good idea and just changing it to "Barahime/Baraouji" or "Barahime or Baraouji" would make me stop licking that hotspot.
Rose Ribbon I don't have any problems with technique - yet - but just a few questions. Does this ribbon work with her mind directly too, as it's a technique? Doe sthat mean it can wrap around enemies and what not or can it ONLY follow the direction of the sword, like a trailing ribbon and that's it?
Rose Burst Ah see, this is an awesome ability HOWEVER. The way it's worded with...
This move can turn trees into tooth-picks, and boulders into gravel. This insinuates... it's basically going to be impossible to "block" or "dodge" or.... Uhm.. how about... SURVIVE? >_> Yah. that's a good way of putting it. Soooooo.....er.. I mean its an awesome ability. If we could just...nerf it a bit to where it's not an "Unless you can move at Mach 23 outta range you're instantly dead ********!" move... xD it'd be great!
Also...
"20 - 50 feet area" - That's too convenient and easy to manipulate according to convenience. can we get a solid range please?
Sacrifice - this is interesting. What are the Parenthesis saying it represents? Its that just explaining your thoughts behind it? Or is there like a image that happens when one or the other happens? I'm just a bit confused if its part of an ability or just a thought process.
ALSO. Its only a 4 post cool down? ugh. sorry gurl but this is something I personally would say "NOPE. Once per battle." because A. You're progressive. B. thats OP all you have to do is wait for 4 posts and basically you've got ever lasting petals. Which... is so unfair.
Bankai Its progressive so therefore you do not need to stay youre release phrase. Its optional... if you want it that's fine. But realistically. xD It's long. And if you leave it your character is gonna have to say the whole thing each and every time you release.
... >-> idk about you but my chracters are gonna wait around while a person recites a long phrase. They're gonna be beating the crap outta anyone who sits there and has to talk for so long to their zans to release. Its just personal perspective - not really something I'd require you to change.
40,000 petals.
I'm sorry its just too much. ^_^; Even if its cut in half for each zan. A mental connection with 20k objects at once and controlling it at once - even in fantasy it's unrealistic. I understand you're trying to power her up for bankai but. I don't even professor xavior or Jane from Xmen would have the capacity to have a mental connection with 20k objects and be able to control it. And that is legit the most powerful telepathic example I could think of. 10x her power would be 5k petals per sword. Which would legit be good. Or even 10k petals per sword. I'd even be good with that. (but Kage is your original judge so ultimately its up to her)
uhm. Again with the percents. can we change these to solid numbers instead of percents? I've already explained my reasoning for this evaluation.
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She is able to collect a small amount of petals to form a blade for her to use as she sees fit. (The amount is a fraction of the total number of petals, It takes only about 100 petals to form a blade.)
Mk... So. This seems more like a technique to me, considering she's already GOT a passive ability - and it's already super powered from shikai. This seems like a second passive ability to me and I would not be willing to accept that. If you'd like to change it out to a technique, sure, but we'd have to talk about how it says "is a fraction of total number of petals" but then contradicts itself by saying it takes "about 100 petals to form a blade." One of those sentences is a moot thing - also how many petals you have and it only takes 100 petals to make a blade? how big is this blade? Cuz those rose petals aren't that big, so hundred petals to make a blade - that's gonna be an itty bitty little steak knife right? Also how does it form? Do they merge and become solid? or do they stay as petals and just press together? What? that's if you're even keeping it.
The Rose Waltz 300x100? >_>; with a 250 foot eye...das a large area. especially for another insta kill technique. And a technique that has two techniques in it.... at least that's how I'm reading it due to the
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like each sword has a ten foot ribbon attached to it, following every move.
part. Then again her passive ability she has control over it, so she could do that that easily due to her manipulation however it's not needed in this technique because again, it sounds like a double tech. Can we nerf that size please? considering you probably are not going to be having that many petals anyways.
I mean, its just a huge massive area, you're essentially untouchable and anyone you consider an ally would be instantly killed should they enter the storm without some kinda power to keep them at bay. (Ye sure there are kido and stuff, however... it doesn't take away the fact that once agai, it IS worded as essentially an instal kill)
Equestrian Rose with the percents here you actually did the maths for us however since we are more than likely going to be nerfing the amount of petals you have, this too will need to be altered accordingly.
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For the horse she would be fairly easy to damage as if it were a normal horse. So it is not "The immortal horse of the Rose" that can never be damaged. It is like a normal horse, takeing normal damage
can we specify this in the technique please? I know it mentions already about damage done to Gypsy Rose, however it doesn't say its a normal thing that can damage the horse.
Also let me get this straight - not only do you get a speed advantage but your horse can also use flash step and stuff? >_> I'm not entirely opposed to that if there are some limitations put on that. Also. What is "normal mounted weakness" you mention? I honestly have no idea what that means, and I reckon others wouldnt either.
Other Things I would like to mention
You have two zan spirits. This is really really rare in bleach guild. And as the rules state, the head judge and the co-head judge have a right to deny it as they see fit. To be honest, because this was based off a canon character, I PERSONALLY don't see it as creative enough to allow. Double zans are fine but again they are rare. I don't see anythign especially eye catching in the biography or character personality to warrent such strength to wield two spirits. This is up to Kage, but your character would not be something I'd allow for two spirits as it is.
You could at least mention some where HOW she obtained her double spirited zanpakuto. Why she was privileged or considered worthy - something to justify it.
- Chiyudo is mentioned in your biography. There is no chiyudo in this guild or since the last destruction of the Seireitei (which will be mentioned once I get my lazy a** to finish the back story for the guild detailing it out) So unless she came from be when Chiyudo still existed - there should be something else mentioned about this, specifically. I know it seems like nit-picking but since Chiyudo doesn't exist here... it kinda... complicates things.
Posted: Sat Mar 15, 2014 11:12 am
That math is not to hard to do. (5% of 1000 is 50) (10% of 1000 is 100) and in my post sig. I do the math for both parties and before you ask I am fair in the math. But if you really want me to I can put numbers in the profile. And Yes Math is my best subject that I have high marks.
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Im just gonna ask you to specify - you can only release ONE at a time. So getting rid of that "and/or" may be a good idea and just changing it to "Barahime/Baraouji" or "Barahime or Baraouji" would make me stop licking that hotspot.
As for the "and/or" was just a writing glich.
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Rose Ribbon I don't have any problems with technique - yet - but just a few questions. Does this ribbon work with her mind directly too, as it's a technique? Does that mean it can wrap around enemies and what not or can it ONLY follow the direction of the sword, like a trailing ribbon and that's it?
It is just a Ribbon that follow the same path as the blade, to kind of have a chainsaw effect. So as she pulls the sword the ribbon will continue on the path the blade took so it will continue to cut.
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Rose Burst Ah see, this is an awesome ability HOWEVER. The way it's worded with...
This move can turn trees into tooth-picks, and boulders into gravel. This insinuates... it's basically going to be impossible to "block" or "dodge" or.... Uhm.. how about... SURVIVE? >_> Yah. that's a good way of putting it. Soooooo.....er.. I mean its an awesome ability. If we could just...nerf it a bit to where it's not an "Unless you can move at Mach 23 outta range you're instantly dead ********!" move... xD it'd be great!
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"20 - 50 feet area" - That's too convenient and easy to manipulate according to convenience. can we get a solid range please?
I can give it a worrying sign if that will help and give a set range for the attack.
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Sacrifice - this is interesting. What are the Parenthesis saying it represents? Its that just explaining your thoughts behind it? Or is there like a image that happens when one or the other happens? I'm just a bit confused if its part of an ability or just a thought process.
ALSO. Its only a 4 post cool down? ugh. sorry gurl but this is something I personally would say "NOPE. Once per battle." because A. You're progressive. B. thats OP all you have to do is wait for 4 posts and basically you've got ever lasting petals. Which... is so unfair.
I am fine with changing it to once per battle. as for the thing about the represents thing. It is a way to give a little bit more about the name of the move and connect the blade to their names and each other.
As for the long bankai release phrase. I think there is a time and place for a dramdic release phrase. but she should be able to release it like cannon characters with "Bankai!" I find that people seem to not care about the connection between their shikai and bankai.
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40,000 petals.
I'm sorry its just too much. ^_^; Even if its cut in half for each zan. A mental connection with 20k objects at once and controlling it at once - even in fantasy it's unrealistic. I understand you're trying to power her up for bankai but. I don't even professor xavior or Jane from Xmen would have the capacity to have a mental connection with 20k objects and be able to control it. And that is legit the most powerful telepathic example I could think of. 10x her power would be 5k petals per sword. Which would legit be good. Or even 10k petals per sword. I'd even be good with that. (but Kage is your original judge so ultimately its up to her)
uhm. Again with the percents. can we change these to solid numbers instead of percents? I've already explained my reasoning for this evaluation.
Even tho It is not a copy cat RPC, I would like to bring up the fact that B 's 1000 tiny blades turn into a full blade that shatters into 1000 tiny blades each. So I will do the math, (1000 X 1000 = 1,000,000) So he at least has one million blade he controls.
And 10x her power would be 1000 per blade then times by 10. (1000 +1000) x 10 = 20,000 2000 x 10 = 20,000 So it is not 5k, it is 20k.
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The Rose Waltz 300x100? >_>; with a 250 foot eye...das a large area. especially for another insta kill technique. And a technique that has two techniques in it.... at least that's how I'm reading it due to the
Quote: like each sword has a ten foot ribbon attached to it, following every move. part. Then again her passive ability she has control over it, so she could do that that easily due to her manipulation however it's not needed in this technique because again, it sounds like a double tech. Can we nerf that size please? considering you probably are not going to be having that many petals anyways.
I mean, its just a huge massive area, you're essentially untouchable and anyone you consider an ally would be instantly killed should they enter the storm without some kinda power to keep them at bay. (Ye sure there are kido and stuff, however... it doesn't take away the fact that once agai, it IS worded as essentially an instal kill)
This is not an "instant kill" It is a "area control" Ability. It is a way to stop people from getting out of range, but it in not impossible to escape.
Equestrian Rose I guess I can spell out what horse weakness are, but that would take some of the fun out of it, because it people don't know what a mounted unites weakness is, is it really fair their character knows?
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Other Things I would like to mention I really hate that fact that you call my character a "Copy Cat RPC", which I have put hours of thought into making her abilitys, and making her, her own unique person! You do not say that a Fire Zan is a "Copy Cat Cannon RPC" So why is mine?
I would also like to say that Vizard are out of control in Bleach guilds including this one, because if you look at Cannon Bleach Vizard are also rare that are no lower in ranking than Lt. or up. And I would like to state that the Vizards should have good reason them becoming Vizards.
Even tho It is not a copy cat RPC, I would like to bring up the fact that B 's 1000 tiny blades turn into a full blade that shatters into 1000 tiny blades each. So I will do the math, (1000 X 1000 = 1,000,000) So he at least has one million blade he controls.
And 10x her power would be 1000 per blade then times by 10. (1000 +1000) x 10 = 20,000 2000 x 10 = 20,000 So it is not 5k, it is 20k.
90% of your zanpakuto: Good for anime. Bad for Rping. Period. Byakuya's zanpakuto: Good for anime, bad for rping. We're trying to keep things as fantastically realistic as possible. The requested changes are there for a reason - and I apologize for putting this so harshly but: You don't HAVE to like our reasons. As long as their reason is a thought out explained legit reason If you can come up with a solid argument that changes our mind fine - but until then - The judge makes the changes based off of what they believe would be able to keep things well balanced and in fairness to others as well.
I'm going to quote Kage on this: "This is not the league of OP Instakill rpcs." Which unfortunately Your zan is within the first release and with the bankai and amount of petals. your first response to kage on the matter I read as "Fluffed as "safe" because people can "destroy the petals" and if they don't "They shouldn't have survived this long anyway." Which... Is total oscarmayer bologna. My decision stands on asking you to change the petal amounts. Everyone else I have asked to make sure I'm not over reacting to big numbers and if you like I can quote all of them for confirmation if you're not willing to take my word for it: They believe it is too much and should be made more reasonable.
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I would also like to say that Vizard are out of control in Bleach guilds including this one, because if you look at Cannon Bleach Vizard are also rare that are no lower in ranking than Lt. or up. And I would like to state that the Vizards should have good reason them becoming Vizards.
Being a vizard doesn't warrent such a thing. It's a race. Something to add diversity to the guild. Also most guilds, like ours have a reason vizards are more common. We're not canon, we're canon based. In saying this I understand what I was saying about your double spirited zans is canon however its a bit different considering having two spirits could give you a special edge. Anyone could have gotten infected with a vizard virus, - however it takes a really special someone to have TWO zan spirits.
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I really hate that fact that you call my character a "Copy Cat RPC", which I have put hours of thought into making her abilitys, and making her, her own unique person! You do not say that a Fire Zan is a "Copy Cat Cannon RPC" So why is mine?
I'd be happy to call out anyone with any other type of zan that is so obviously based off a canon character. I hate to be rude about this: but it is. You started with the idea of Byakuya, then twisted it with a few of your own ideas. Your zanpakuto, from its release, to its passive ability is ESSENTIALLY a copy catted version of Byakuya's zanpakuto. The techniques are unique because you had to come up with your own. But even your first technique of your shikai is based off of his, to the fact that that originally it could change directions and surround and blah blah blah. Again, I'm not meaning to be rude. but this is how I see it. I wouldn't deny it - though some other judges would be completely irritated that I would pass this as they are more a**l retentive about rpcs that are so closely based off of a main character in the actual anime. I'm actually one of the more laid back judges about it who goes "so what?" However, I does annoy me when people deny it and even have the audacity to say "its a unique zanpakuto." Sure. You're character is her own unique person and personality herself - but you took the idea of her weapon from someone else - and as an artist and a writer its rather aggravating you're in such vehement denial over it. Tbh if someone took my creative works and said it wasn't a copy cat I'd be FURIOUS. So we don't need to touch on this subject again. Again. I'm sorry, and I don't mean to insult you - I'm juts being honest.
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This is not an "instant kill" It is a "area control" Ability. It is a way to stop people from getting out of range, but it in not impossible to escape.
Again, if its not an instant kill area then change the wording so that it is not worded as such. After double checking that I am not looking too much into it, Majority of our RPC JIT's and kage have all said they read it as an instant kill.
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[11:31:02 AM] Steel Gallade Rei Izumi Brett - Sparkles: He also fully negates ranged character with the Rose Waltz. Not bad...except going anywhere near the edge of the "arena" will kill the person.
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Equestrian Rose I guess I can spell out what horse weakness are, but that would take some of the fun out of it, because it people don't know what a mounted unites weakness is, is it really fair their character knows?
Fair enough - I am more than willing to compromise as such - since I myself don't believe in having to put exact weaknesses in my own rpcs. Since it is emphasized in there that there are mounted weaknesses, I'm actually okay to leave that be.
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I am fine with changing it to once per battle. as for the thing about the represents thing. It is a way to give a little bit more about the name of the move and connect the blade to their names and each other.
As for the long bankai release phrase. I think there is a time and place for a dramdic release phrase. but she should be able to release it like cannon characters with "Bankai!" I find that people seem to not care about the connection between their shikai and bankai.
Thank you for understanding about the tech to once per battle thing. And as for the bankai release phrase - okay, fair enough I was just letting you know that it was an optional thing incase you didnt know since we don't actually HAVE the systems up yet (They are still in voting process)
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I can give it a worrying sign if that will help and give a set range for the attack.
i'm not entirely sure what this means to be honest sweatdrop
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It is just a Ribbon that follow the same path as the blade, to kind of have a chainsaw effect. So as she pulls the sword the ribbon will continue on the path the blade took so it will continue to cut.
Okay that's no problem. With that clarification I have no problems with that technique as there are ways to block it and such, if its going only one direction.
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It is just a Ribbon that follow the same path as the blade, to kind of have a chainsaw effect. So as she pulls the sword the ribbon will continue on the path the blade took so it will continue to cut.
You and I are complete opposites then. However yes, percents are just awful for Rping. Solid numbers are generally a good way to go that way no one can really be confused on them, and it will help avoid potential arguments/problems with you in the future.
Posted: Sun Mar 16, 2014 11:59 pm
I have had a thrid party take a look at the profile. She said there are thing that are close about the abilitys, but she can see Differences too. She said that She saw what I was trying to do with Sophie's Powers in "Gypsy Rose" It is the power to create with her abilitys not just to destroy, and that I should play up the elegant and soft side to the petals and not treat them just like blades. They are petals first, then a blade.
So I have changed both "Petal Dance" and the "Rose Waltz". I have also put a reason to why she has two Zan Sprirts in her bio.
I get that some Zans are good on the anime, but bad for RPing. So I am will to try and make this work. So What is an acceptable number of Petals to you?
Sorry it took so long. I got sick, then lazy, then it was REALLY hard to get motivated to be productive again rofl! (I didn't even use judging format. So...so...lazy) U-U
I've re-read it. I LOVE the reason in the biography. That to me is a GREAT reason to have two zan spirits. crying bit a tear jerker too!! I absolutely love it.
As for the changing of those two abilities - I must say i LOVE these abilities. To me they are a breath of fresh air and truly unique. I only have one question: on the bankai abilitiy, are people still able to destroy the petals if they focus on them? I just want a bit of clarification mostly cuz it reads to me (And the sole reason I am an rpc judge believe me is because I always assume the worst LOL) as it can't be destroyed any more. >_> I think I am just being tired and fussy though so please correct me if I'm wrong. U_U
As for the petal amount any where between 5k up to 10k Per sword is absolutely wonderful to me for the bankai.
And again just reminding you - Percents to numbers - or if we can work something out with that. The thing with percents is it just too easy to manipulate to advantage and its so hard to determine in RP and stuffs.
I see you have made the other changes I requested (as far as I can tell lol), so when we get these last few things settled I will give the whole thing a once more over to make sure we both didn't miss anything and you'll be good to go!
Posted: Sun Mar 23, 2014 10:41 pm
Thanks my sister help me out with the second look and the helped build off what I was trying to do, but I wasn't doing so well. sweatdrop
I have added a little bit more to the "Rose Walts" Saying it can be destroyed if they can destroy her petals, but the wall would have a little flex to it.
As for the number of petals, I have changed the number of petals for Bankai to 10k per Zan.
I have changed many of the presents to the solid number that the present represents. And any present left have what it is in brackets.
Congrats! heart WE DID IT! heart I now officially feel comfortable accepting this RPC. It took us a while to get there but - thank very much for all your cooperation and understanding! whee It was wonderful working with you.
