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A new era has dawned on the Universe. Will the Soul Cycle survive? 

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[13] Yumaki Set Kuraishi - Vizard - CC/Sol - Awaiting Judge

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PostPosted: Tue Feb 04, 2014 1:14 pm


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xxxxName : Yumaki Set Kuraishi User Image
xxxxGender : Male
xxxxHeight : 6'1
xxxxWeight : 195
xxxxReiatsu Color : Black.
xxxxReiatsu Level : Vast
xxxxCero Color : Black
xxxxMask Appearance : A black vizard mask with gold, jagged lines running down it horizontally. The mask has teeth, with fangs at each end. All of the teeth are black except for the gold fangs.
xxxxReiatsu Color with Mask : Black and gold
xxxxAppearance : Set is a man with back hair and strong, golden eyes that glow brighter the darker it gets around him. He is tall, solid, and retains a lean physique. His face has sharp features, however still retains a youthful look despite his hundreds of years being alive. On his left upper arm is a tattoo of his family crest, though it has altered along the years as his family continues to grow and on his right shoulder is a scar that runs down to his collarbone. One more scar is a straight line on his left cheek.

His lean body has muscle on all the areas that matter, his figure being made through combat and training rather than normal exercise. Most of his strength lies in his arms, leading to devastating swings of his katana and formidable grappling. He keeps his body built lean rather than full muscular to match smaller people in terms of flexibility.

Despite his exceptional strength, Set's best area is speed and agility. While his kicks aren't quite as powerful as his punches, his speed is incredible, and fluid, though not quite at the speed of even sub-shunpo. His legs are long and muscular, matching his upper body.
xxxxInner Hollow Appearance :
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A blonde girl, sadistic in nature as most inner hollows are, however she has sensitive moments as well, even expressing a somber aura as well. She is often accompanied by a ghoul that leaves a dark chill wherever it goes. The woman has red eyes, and has an icy attitude which fits the zanpakuto well.
xxxxFull Hollowification Appearance : The zanpakuto he wields is covered in the black substance from his bankai, close in durability to soul steel before it actually rushes into and on Set's body, covering him whole while shattering the blade. The only part of him left uncovered is his hair, which turns from black to a strong golden color, glowing. After his body is completely covered with the black substance, cracks begin to form at the mouth and eyes, before the material covering it cracks open to reveal sinister eyes and a mouth, gold as well. The black material forms wings as well, and jagged claws begin to form on one hand,while the whole other arm begins to morph into a large, jagged blade with a curve on the edge. This form can completely regenerate lost limbs and heal most other wounds while Set is under, however when he reverts back to normal, he will most likely be unconscious or exhausted.


xxxxPersonality : Set is a soft-hearted individual with his family and friends. He could come from a training session with his squad and make them believe he was the devil, however then he'd leave them confused when he lifts up his daughter, pats his son on the head, and kisses his wife with a smile. Set is able to make this big transition because of his ability to put up fonts. He was a master duelist back when he was in the last Soul Society, and it allowed him to be able to read opponents, block off his own or even put up fake ones with remarkable precision.

His true personality is different from the one he uses in battle. Set is a soft-hearted man with strong beliefs and a formidable will to protect those he loves. He's extremely empathetic and friendly, rarely meeting a personality he can't work with. Along with that he's witty and egotistical with a lot of pride. Not to the point of vanity or narcissism, but enough that he has extreme confidence in himself. So much that some would perceive it as arrogance.

When it comes down to the nitty gritty decisions and battles, Set can remain calm and choose his emotions accordingly to get himself through. The only thing that can break his font is anger. If someone manages to enrage him, Set shows off a side that is unforgiving and relentless. Wanting only to tear the opponent apart in the most humiliating way possible.

As a father and husband, he often has to keep himself in check a lot more. It has taught him a lot about responsibility and the need to care for those important to him.
xxxxBiography :
I try not to remember my own past. It comes to me in dreams, nightmares, and things I see throughout the day remind me of actions I took in my past life. I suppose it's important though that I put my story here, just in case I perish along the way like everyone did in the old Society. Yes, it's a morbid thought, and I am strong enough to combat whatever they throw at me...but anything can happen, right?

I was born with an older brother, Noctis. We were both aive during a time of hell. People were abducted all the time for a forced draft to fight in the civil war going on at the time. Both the rebels and militia did it, ran through and stole even children for a brutal and bloody war for control of the country. After my little sister, Kaluah was born we were all prime candidates. My family had three healthy chidren, one already getting great grades in school and proving to be a prodigy. That was Noctis. He...was the one who got abducted. Me and Kaluah, we weren't wanted. We were too young. Noctis was outside when they snatched him right off the street and set fire too our house. Glass bottles of flame that I now know were molotovs lit up our house. They hit our parents room and killed them right away. Me and my sister were snatched out of the house by rebels and brought to safety.

Living a orphans in an incomplete group, Kaluah and I were shipped to America, where we could attend school under the protection of the state of Arizona. Things went well. Years passed and we never heard anything of our brother, but he was never forgotten. I was never very strong in school. My grades were failing and I was only really interested in playing music, and learning about history. The wars of the past, the interested me for some reason, and through it all I learned the tools of my trade. Through school, I had a girlfriend, Serah. A girl I thought to be my first love, but I was still young. She was taken one day after we had just got back from a diner. I remember it clearly. It was raining, early day. I had offered to buy us breakfast and after we ate, the rein started coming down. She wore a sundress, a white one that complimented her blonde hair and innocent features. Laughter erupted from us as we cut through an alley with small puddles to get home faster. In the end...It took longer to get home than I thought, and I was the only one who made it. From around the corner, before crossing into the next alley I was hit in the leg with a pipe, then kicked in the head. It dazed me, but I wasn't knocked out. Men came up in a van and slid open the door. I saw them grab Serah and try to put her in the van, grabbing and pulling her in. I didn't let them get her so easily. I burst from the ground, stumbling and trying not to trip over my own feet. My hazel eyes set on the guy leading everyone back into the van. I took him and kept running, till we were near a window. Screams of civillians rang out as a rammed his head through the glass. His own screams left as well as blood ran down his face from multiple cuts. Another man came and grabbed the sleeve of my white dress shirt, stained with blood. Lucky he did. I was going to grab a piece of the glass and stab that man in the neck with it. But I still grabbed the glass. I was pulled and led right into a fist that met my lower lip. I could feel it drip blood almost right away. I was hit another time in the eye before I grabbed his arm and stabbed his shoulder multiple times, eventually punching him down to the ground and stomping one good time on the side of his head. I tried to run out of range of the next two guys, but they caught me and started landing hits anywhere they could, grabbing where they could. I broke out and spun a bit, my clothes ripping slightly and my blood rushing down into my eye now with the rain. I let my knuckles crash into the chin of one man before I used my piece of glass and stared down the other one, not sure what move I should take yet. That moment I stopped moving, I felt a sharp pain in my body. Someone's switchblade entered my ribs from behind and I was immiediately taken aback with pain and dazed. Before I got another rush of adrenaline, the sound of wood hitting a skull rang out and I was knocked out by a grand slam from a baseball bat. I kept forgetting exactly how many there were.

I don't know what urged me to wake up, the puddles beneath me stained with blood, but I did. I was short on breath and scared, but I pulled out the knife with grit teeth and turned around, ready to throw it at those guys who...were no longer there. Serah, she was no longer there. Gone, just like that. A massive headache crashed down on me then, the wound from the bat doing well to incapacitate me as I struggled in the bloody puddle, helpless. Dying, confused, and drained of all hope of ever seeing my love again, I cried. It was only by luck that the people whose windows I crashed called the police, and in no time an ambulance was sent to my location.

A year passed, and Kaluah was scared. I left the house every night and didn't come back till near morning with frustration in my eyes. Every now and then I came home with something new. A gun, military grade, or a blade. Sometimes even crates of grenades or just a drink in my hand. She had no clue what I was up to, and some night she threatened to call the police, but the determination, guilt, and stubborn adversiy in the eyes of her brother always made her pull back her words. I had gotten into the wrong groups. I got a taste for blood with the fists that crashed into mens throats, and I took a predilection for alcohol with the guilt that crashed down in waves on me. One night I got a job. I needed to break into some guys house, and steal some gun from him. If I did, my employer said he would tel me where the guys who took Serah were. It wasn't long before I found out it was a setup. The moment I stepped into that house, I was met with heavy resistance from multiple men, all with plans to kill. I ran. I ran for I don't know how long before I was grabbed and pulled down to the ground by one who found me. He placed the gun as close as he could to my face, but I grabbed his hand. I was stronger, and tilted the gun to his own head and...Pulled the trigger. I didn't think killing would be hard, but after I felt all of his weight slump onto me and I shook him off, I looked at him. The bullet went into his chin and blew out the top of his head. I explored his pockets for ammo, but only found a wallet with a picture of him and a girl. Maybe his sister, maybe a wife. I felt the weight then. A sickening feeling rolled around in my stomach before I ran up and went into a corner, throwing up my guilt before coughing heavily, choking, tears welling at my eyes.

That was the taste of blood that spiralled me right to my end. After finding out the location of Serah by beating the crap out of my employer, I set out for the maldives republic. I went with my sister, and brought her on every run with me. I taught her how to kill. We did it together. Hit and run tactics, blowing up the bases of the sex slave trade. What I thought was a group of thugs ran deeper than I thought. A whole organization that ran drugs and prostitutes. Guns and supplies for private armies. I was sure a ******** thorn in their side. I murdered multiple heads of their business, blew up countless strongholds till I eventually reached the end.

Bursting through the door of an office I knew to be the head of the organization, I was met with a wall of bullets. My sister died in my arms that day, and I'd never forget the way she looked at me. With uncertainty. As if she didn't know who I was. I can't remember the words spoken that day, but I know I killed the man who ran the organization. A man with scars on his face that I recognized as the man who I slammed into a window that one rainy day shot me in my chest, and his bullet hit the trigger mechanism for the bomb I had placed there. They were then in ruins, and so was I.

The rest...Is difficult to remember, and I can write that with full sincerity. I remember being so full of guilt that I would not leave that spot, I remember Soul Reapers coming, but I was too scared of leaving that spot. I was afraid they would take me to hell for all I had done. In the end though, I tossed myself into that hell by running. My face hitting the ground and me blacking out is one of the last things I remember of my human life. I still remember the pain of those hollows tearing me apart, and I felt the overwhelming satisfaction after I hollified and tore down every last one of them. Then I went through my life with an unending hunger, an unending hole of guilt that nothing could never fill, no matter how many souls I consumed to evolve. I turned to an arrancar from a Vasuto Rode, a Vasto Lorde.
Chapter II - Akane
I was grabbed in from the Soul Society. They had been watching me for awhile. I now had the form of a child, one who didn't know where he was or what to do, but one still with extreme latent power. I was the first arrancar to be brought under the roof of the soul society and raised to fight for them. The first to bear the harassment and pain caused from all the other soul reapers. I understood. I could have been the cause for any of their loved ones dying. I could bear their grudges and accept each and every one. I was put into the academy, where I met an unlikely friend. A woman with pink hair and blue eyes, who seemed as scared and lost as I was. She would hardly utter a word to me in the beginning. I remember her crying in my first fight against master Asura, her crying in front of master Hitomi with his lectures. I decided that I was tired of that. Innocents crying over struggles. She became the reason I wanted to protect, and through protecting her I felt that hole of guilt become filled. We had a love-hate relationship. Still, throughout it all neither of us could deny that we had emerged best friends from it. Some days we would not utter a single word to each other, but we still helped one another in some way, any time we saw the other needing it.

In the end she graduated the academy years before I ever did. She was being raised as an assassin, and had special treatment for a reason I never knew back then. She could kill without hesitation, and she constantly grew angry with me for not doing the same. She knew I had strength, speed, power. So much power I wouldn't release for the sake of not wanting to see any more death caused by my hands. The same way Kahlua died. I would not subject anyone else to that fate. In the end I was constantly thrown written tests that I would fail, never answering right in the subject of execution. It was only until my master came to me that I learned what I needed to do. Asura was always a tough old man, one who was always growing angry with me. He couldn't understand why I wouldn't try anymore. He figured that after Akane left, the young arrancar would try even harder. One day in a training session, he took it further than ever before, activating his shikai and rushing in for the other students, striking them to the point of near death. He even beat down the head master. I was the only one who witnessed it, and everyone knew that in any situation, master Asura was someone who could not be reasoned with. Seeing the master head for the area where new arrivals were meant to train, I followed him and struck at him with my asauchi. After a long fight, I first activated my shikai in a burst of rage, and used all I had to strike him down. Before the man blacked out, he told me that what I did WAS protecting. That sometimes I needed to hurt, even kill to help out someone more in need, Never let the innocent die. Never use reason before charging in when the life of someone who doesn't deserve death is the gamble. I graduated that day. I never knew if Asura died or not, but I knew that I didn't care. He wouldn't want me to.

I first joined Squad One, where I was surprised to see who my Captain was. Akane, all grown up like myself. She always was strong, always. From there we had many journeys and missions together. We grew closer, and without even knowing it, I...I fell in love with her. It happened one day, when I confessed my feelings in a way she hardly even understood. She was crying to me, and I explained that throughout everything, I would always be her knight. That no matter what, I would protect my princess, and only dream to one day be given that token of her affections. I became her Lieutenant quickly. She trusted me more than anyone else for the role after that. We became so close. Everything was going so well, until I one day recieved a letter from Tystra Daisetsu himself. He wanted me to become the captain of squad five. How could I say no?

Chapter III - Rising
After I left, I didn't really know that it would have such an impact on squad one. Akane never showed it, but I could tell that she was a little disappointed that I had left, especially as the squad fell without someone she could trust at her side. In the meantime, I had my own squad to run. I had no clue the difficulty of such an action though. With Hueco Mundo invading, and me being one of the few useful fighter in the society, I was stretched too thin. Every Lieutenant I had was pulled immediately to become a captain because the constantly abandoned captain posts. Nobody would even think of launching a counter strike, and because of that, I rounded up an idea that nobody could. I brought a small group that would go in and out undetected, I brought Yuzuki, Kotetsu, and myself. That was it. After going through the woods before arriving at Hueco Mundo, I had my first moment with the woman who would later become my wife. I held her hands in my own and we merged pressures with each other, an intimate contact that had us both blushing and gripping onto each others pressure, it was a sight to see from a captain and royal guard.

To put things simply, the plan didn't work out well. Because more people went into Hueco Mundo unauthorized, we ended up getting compromised trying to protect them, which led to something worse in the end.

We escaped, and the next time I went to see Yuzuki, I actually meant to ask her on a date. Well, not so obviously. In the end though, I ended up losing her. Out of nowhere came a red headed man named Fefnir. He threatened to burn down the building and kill us all, and before I could even deny him, Yuzuki tossed me her zanpakuto and left with him to fit the demands he had. I was never told exactly what happened there, but I know she came back with an extreme prejudice of arrancars.

It was months before I saw her again. And in those months, I dealt with Hueco Mundo without mercy. Anyone who came through I meant to kill without hesitation. Most notable Sadon Shouri, who I injured badly every time he arrived in my home. I stabbed him down, tore apart his monsters, and chased down even the Espada who led him. Of course, every time they all escaped. Something I hated. I wanted to find Yuzuki. I'd kill them to find her. I would draw out the red-headed b*****d.

In the end, I lost myself in my lust for power and ended up giving myself to Caelo, a woman who would later become the Cero. She knew I was powerful, and wanted to bring that power out. In an attempt to wrench the power out of me, she made an attempt to bring all of the bitterness out of me, all the rage. She kissed my lips, put her body against mine, attempted to bring out all the feral nature she could. And it worked at first. My power escalated, and my lust for blood did as well. If she didn't leave then, I would have killed her. In the end though, one thing broke my bitterness. Yuzuki had returned. Instantly going to see her, I was filled with rage again. Her scar, the racism she showed to me for me. I gave her back her zanpakuto, and let her know exactly what arrancar were before I made my way to leave. She stopped me, and apologized. I knew it wasn't enough though. I needed to kill something, badly. Once again though, even after I left Yuzuki, I was halted in my plans again.

As I made my way into my office, I noticed a letter on the table of my room, along with a famous kunai sticking it down. One that belonged to my master. One that Akane stole. She was going to end everything. According to what I read, she was the daughter of Aizen, and had been manipulating...All of us. Yuzuki, Tystra....me. I rushed out immediately to the one place I knew she would be. The garden of squad one, where two of her friends had already killed themselves before. I found her with a knife in her stomach, and at that point nothing I said would get through to her. She was the second person I loved to die in my arms. I buried her in the gardens later that day, covering her in crystal ice before lowering her into the ground. I'm never going to forget that, forget her. I know that she was more than what she gave on. The pain is still fresh, but so are the feelings I had for her. She will stay with me forever.

After that, a lot of things happened. I deepened my relationship with Yuzuki I think. I kissed her for the first time, and did so many more times that day as I coped with her. In the end she spent the night together and I caught only the smallest of glimpses of what my future with her turned out to be. In the end, I went to Hueco Mundo in an attempt to turn the tides on the war, but things didn't go quite as expected.

I can't really talk about this part of my past. It's something I can't disclose to anyone, and I don't think I ever will. What I did in Hueco Mundo, and whatever changes it made to me can never be discussed, but I can tell you that it was the start to gaining immense power, enough to fight off the Espada on equal ground. I couldn't do so with the girl I was beginning to build feelings for though. I came back and confessed the way I felt to Yuzuki, and asked her if she felt the same, if she could be mine. She told me to wait a day, and after that one day, she disappeared from the Soul Society for months. With the aggressive tactics that Hueco Mundo had been using, I didn't know if she had been kidnapped again, or killed, or...Anything. I knew nothing.

So after that there wasn't much to tell. Constant battles in a soul society that was on the verge of a civil war, with nobody I could trust but my brother. I had nobody I could share everything with, who I can share burdens with, till I detected a pressure that was too familiar.

I found Yuzuki.

Chapter IV - Love, family, and a new home.

I chased her down without warning the soul society at all. I had my own questions and would not deal with any crap from any higher up about turning her in. All that would be made with my own judgement. I met her in Japan, and cornered her in an alley where she gave me her reasoning, and I gave her my forgiveness in the form of returning a heated kiss. That kiss and talk ended up leading to the forming of our relationship.

I had to end up adapting to society as I stood with her and ended up getting a job, driving a car, spending nights underneath the blankets with her, all things I would never be able to do while in the old Society. After awhile, she was pregnant with twins and while she started off scared, she ended up so protective and loving over Misaru and Akane. It's really the cutest thing.

During the last trimester of her pregnancy, I had received the note from Youroka Daisetsu, telling us of the destruction of the soul society, as well as her hidden feelings that she had...for me. It was a hard blow for both of us to take. We'd lost so many, and knew that without the society up and running again, hollows would win a war that has lasted since the beginning. I, an arrancar at the time, became the leader of the Soul Society, and my wife became the Soul King. Or Queen, whichever one. In that time though, there was much unrest. I was an arrancar leading them, with no other good of my kind with me. How long would it be until I began to have the same mindset as the rest of my kind? I couldn't have it. Especially not with my children about to be brought into this new world.

I asked Yuzuki to cleanse me, and after a long argument and declaration of love, she did. I can't exactly describe how it felt. It hurt at first, because a damn blade went through my chest, but after that I felt a huge weight being lifted as thousands of souls that I had taken in all my life were released back into the Soul Cycle to be properly made into shinigami, as they should have done in the first place. In the end though, I felt dizzy and weak as I realized my own soul was trying to escape in that cycle. Through willpower, I kept it in and lost all that made me a hollow but my pressure, making me into a vizard.

In not even a few weeks after that, Yuzuki gave birth to our greatest treasures, Misaru and Akane. Then after a few days of visits and nights spent in the hospital, I took her home and asked her to marry me, using the last remaining bit of Tamashi no Kui to do the act. She said yes, and I swore once again to never leave her. A few months later, Yuzuki had been home alone when an arrancar attempted to eat Misaru and Akane. I almost didn't even need to be there, as she donned her hollow mask for the first time and tore the enemy apart. Still, if I wasn't then she may have lost her being to the inner hollow that finally showed itself. My words guided her out, and the worst was over. Nothing else would get in the way, and We had our wedding in peace. Spending our honeymoon in the Maldives Islands, we gave each other everything we could for a week, showing the most love we could muster.

Now, with the children at four and growing healthily, I decided that it would be okay to have them grow in the Soul Society from here on out, as they were born as souls in the first place. Here, we can spend our lives together while helping the world step by step.



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xxxxReiatsu Shape : Roaring Tigers head. xxxx
Likes :
xxxx • Spending as much time as he can with his family.
xxxx • Putting speed to the test.
xxxx • Music. Playing it rather than listening.
xxxxDislikes :
xxxx • Those who threaten his family or home.
xxxx • Being still in one place for too long.
xxxx • Those with narrow minded views.
xxxxRelationships :
xxxx • Yuzuki Kobayashi-Kuraishi - Wife
xxxx • Misaru Kuraishi - Son
xxxx • Akane Kuraishi - Daughter
xxxx • Noctis Kuraishi - Brother
xxxx • Kahlua Kuraishi - Sister (Unknown MIA or KIA)
xxxx • Odaykana Arashi - Brother-in-law


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xxxxSquad : 13
xxxxRank : Soldier
xxxxSquad Ability : Guardian's Shield


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xxxxZanpakuto Name : Sutōmuburittsu
"Storm Blitz"
xxxxInner World Appearance :
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A long, wooden bridge that seems to be set in the feudal era of japan. It is long, and seems to be in the center of a forest area, appearing to lead to a village of some sort.
xxxxSpirit Appearance :

The zanpakuto spirit is...strange. You can't exactly just describe the physical appearance of the being because it's just too much to describe. His zanpakuto spirit simply is lightning. It never speaks to him except through bolts of lightning and the clap of thunder. Speaking to the storm never became so real. This being fuses its own physical form inside of Set, such is the reason that his eyes and spiritual pressure have changed so much.
xxxxSealed Appearance : ninjato with a pink and blue knot tied around the black guard. The blade is roughly 24 inches (60 cm) while the hilt measures 8 in (20 cm). The hilt is cross wrapped with black and blue cloth, and the guard seems to slightly resemble a roaring tiger. The blade is silver, and so is the pummel, blue kanji engraved along the blades flat sides while the pummel has a pink gem on the center.

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xxxxRelease Type : Stand Alone
xxxxRelease Phrase : "Roar. Sutōmuburittsu."
xxxxZanpakuto Physical Appearance: When this form is activated, his ninjato is replaced by a katana made completely out of lightning and reiatsu. It is five and a half feet long and stabilized into its shape by his reiatsu.

Along with the blade forming, a cloak is also given to him, one that wraps around his neck and wrists with a hood attached. His left hand is coated in a black material with lightning claws replacing his fingers. Lastly the mere air around him constantly crackles with electricity, however this effect is merely cosmetic.

xxxxInstant Effect : Every time his shikai is activated, a stream of electricity will leave his body like whips of energy, lashing out at any spiritual pressure within three meters.
xxxxPassive Ability : Whenever his shikai is activated, Set "becomes" lightning in a sense. It streams around inside of his body as if he were some kind of battery. This causes his physical body to meld in with his attacks. Meaning if he fires out a bolt of electricity, he can let his body travel inside of that bolt before reforming wherever it ends.

At some point, Set will run low on electricity and need to recharge. While this won't effect his other external abilities, it will effect his ability to travel as lightning. Set can dash ten times alongside his ability and take five posts to replenish the dashes completely. He gains two dashes for every recharge post capping off at ten.

This ability (and all of Set's lightning in general) travel slightly slower than the speed of shunpo. (Byakurai speeds) However, it is something he can do in quick succession with complete control over where he appears.
xxxxTechniques :
xxxx • - Violent Rhythm - Set's lightning ability allows him to infuse all strong conductors he touches with lightning (IE Water, Metal). This cannot work on soul steel. The katana in his hands is permanently infused with his reiatsu as it is a part of his release, making this effect constant. This increases the penetration, damage, and speed of those items while also giving them the average lightning effect. At the same time, this means that he can also force electricity into his enemies merely with skin to skin contact if he uses the ability.
xxxx • - Chain Lightning - Possibly the ability that works best with his passive. Set extends his hand and releases a bolt of lightning, akin in size to 1/3'rd the size of a gran rey cero. Whatever this lightning hits is then covered in the lightning, serving as the catalyst for the ability. Any conductor nearby will immediately become targeted by the electricity before the lightning rushes towards them (one bounce per post). It can be avoided (and this will end the technique unless it hits another conductor) however if it hits, the ability continues. This occurs up to seven times before finally stopping. This ability travels from conductor to conductor, meaning it can go from conductive metals to a person to water, etc. If the ability hits a non-conductor, it will deal damage to the structure in relation to lightning hitting a tree or building, but not bounce off or continue after that. One could also notice that as the lightning travels from person it becomes relatively smaller in size due to the initial large lightning bolt wearing down as it travels and breaks apart constantly to target others.

It takes four posts before another burst of chain lightning can be sent out.
xxxx • Rattling shackles - Set send out a cloud of lightning towards the target. It takes the form of a hundred sparks that are five centimeters each and occasionally flash, closing in on a certain location. They are fast, about the speed of an arrancar's bala. An opponent will need to have quick thinking to avoid this ability. If it ends up catching an enemy within, it will immediately take shape as an orb three times the size of the target. (If the enemy notices the swarm and manages to escape before it can surround them, Set will have to wait five posts before sending out the swarm again.) This orb is meant to trap the enemy inside of a prison that constantly streams with electricity. This cell of electricity is one that constantly emits the substance needed for chain lightning to bounces off it can replenish its cooldown by one. It can also be used along with Dancing with Spirits to increase the power of Set's weapon. This orb holds the target for three posts unless they find a way out somehow.
xxxx • Dancing with spirits - Set takes in all the electricity on the field and pulls it all into his lightning katana. This results in the lightning condensing in the blade, letting the next strike it makes result in a large explosion or a series of strong strikes. It all depends on how much electricity he takes in though. If he manages to absorb both a full powered chain lightning and a lightning prison, the impact could expand up to twenty meters in diameter. If he only manages to use it with a minuscule amount of lightning, the explosion would spread out five meters at best with the lightning of the katana alone. Each ability it takes in increases the size of the explosion by ten meters. All the natural electricity and electricity made from his zanpakuto will be brought in to increase the size of his ability, not allowing him to use kido energy or anybody else's lightning to his own advantage.



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xxxxRelease Type : Stand Alone
xxxxRelease Phrase : "You'll die here. Kyouki no Kami. "
xxxxZanpakuto Physical Appearance : Not too much changes. His katana is gone, replaced with two new blades that are each large, the metal itself almost his own size. He wields it with ease all the same though, naturally. His black hood flows about him now, like a flame, though it has no actual effect.

xxxxInstant Effect : A blinding cone of light surrounds him, similar to a menos grande's negacion. It comes from the sky and covers him and twenty feet around him. Those looking at the light from a distance may get caught by the flash and have white spots in their vision. Those actually in the cone with him who aren't prepared for the sudden flash can find their vision gone for two posts. If the enemy as their eyes closed, they are immune to this. It has no harmful effect otherwise.
xxxxPassive Ability : At any time, he can take the metal of the blades and 'move' it to his arms. This cause the blade to disappear and turns his arm a pitch black color with a rather jagged appearance. This specific metal strongly conducts his energy and can release the full power of it into a persons body through a touch of this material. He can coat one limb per blade he uses for this. This ability makes Set a danger to fight with in close combat, however it can be nullified by something akin to earth or rubber material. Nonetheless, if one remains in contact with him for too long even with that material, he will end up burning through it and increasing the internal temperature of the material to the point that wearing such a thing doesn't become such a great idea. He can only switch this metal from one place to the other once per post. It has the durability to withstand strikes from soul steel, however can't do a lot to it offensively.

xxxxTechniques :
xxxx • Hagane no kaze - Set swings his blades out, the force and travel of the electric current allowing him to send out harmful bursts of electrified air.The air mixing with lightning results in a burst energy that may as well be a flamethrower. The bursts are about half the size of Set and don't expand afterwards. They only have a range of ten meters, however contain the physical force of being hit by a captain-class Sho, making him plenty capable of stopping people or objects with high momentum unless they can work their way around the technique or stop him from swinging the blade.

He can send out three bursts along the span of three posts. After that a four post cooldown will occur either after he used his three, or after the three posts have ended.
xxxx • Kokurai - Set presses the hilts of his blades together, then spins the weapon above his head rapidly. Strong gusts of the electric winds pick up and spin around him, creating a dangerous, hot gust around him. If this goes on for a full post without him being interrupted, the gusts pick up dramatically and a storm envelops the area, spreading out for a whole 25 meters while it rises up about forty. This storm is filled with energy, and can immensely turn up the heat inside of it, causing it to be extremely dangerous to remain inside. Along with that, all conductors within the storm spark up heavily with his energy. This makes him a strong fighter against armored opponents or anyone wielding a lot of metal weaponry.

The storm lasts seven posts and needs an eight post cooldown.
xxxx • Raijin - Truly Set's strongest ability, able to be recognized and feared as the ultimate state of the Captain Commander that puts even his Full Hollowfication to shame. Set hard charges himself with his storm energy, increasing his bodily functions incredibly. His muscles become noticeably more prominent and his weapons completely melt into both his arms and legs, eyes turning a fierce blue. His overall reaction time is increased dramatically, and his strength is increased to the point that he can even bend soul steel if the enemy attempts to defend with it too much. This huge boost completely flushes out his spiritual pathways and fills it nearly to the brim with energy. Because of this, he cannot use kido at all. Each strike takes all of this held up storm energy and releases it outwards. Along with this is also a natural increase to speed. Naturally one doesn't go faster than utusemi or shunpo, and he doesn't, however he can utilize his speed continuously without need for a break at all till the ability is over.

It should also be noted that in this state he is sustained completely off of the energy, making him essentially a machine in a sense, the volts utilizing his enhanced body as if it was a puppet. There's no need for oxygen and he is constantly numbed, allowing him to not feel any pain. He can still be harmed though as naturally as ever, however won't black out from blood loss until the effect is done. If he has lost blood to the point where he can not actually continue living, he will either die or go into full hollowfication.

This ability lasts up to eight posts. Once this is done, he is kicked out of Bankai and unable to use it for twelve posts.



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xxxx A black, jagged kunai with gold trim that once belonged to his teacher back in the academy, then Akane stole it, then he found it again after her death. After the destruction of the soul society, it's the last thing he has to remember her by, besides the name of his daughter. It has a trigger on it that splits the kunai in half like scissors. He has it attached to a chain on his wrist, held in a holster that is opened whenever Set pushes his arm out in a straight motion. A second Kunai is held the same way on the other wrist, however it does not have the trigger function.
xxxx A gold band on his ring finger, with the first name of both Yuzuki and himself engraved. He never takes it off for anything, even carrying the presence of his wife into battle.
xxxx A leather contraption on his wrists which hold a multitude of small shuriken. When a switch is pulled at the end of the leather wrist guard, all of the shuriken are shot out in a burst in front of him. They spread harshly, so its only really viable at close range. There are twelve shuriken in total.
xxxx He keeps small knives with rounded bases in the heel of each of his sandals. These have no hilts and are sharp at all sides, making them excellent throwing weapons.
xxxxHe keeps a second ninjato tucked in his obi at all times. Just in case he needs to temporary leave the first.
xxxx In his pockets, he keeps around fifty thin, sharp spikes. These work extremely well with his shikai ability.

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Bakudo

1. Sai (塞, Block)

2. Kaze no myaku (風の脈, Pulse of Wind)

3. Kiiro no rōpu (黄色のロープ Yellow Rope)

4. Hainawa (這縄, Crawling Rope)

5. Hikari Parusu (光パルス, Light Pulse)

6. Hikarinorokku (光のロック, Light Lock)
7. Seki (斥, Repulsion)

8. Geki (撃, Strike)

9.Hōrin (崩輪, Disintegrating Circle)

10. Hando Rokku (ハンドロック, Hand Lock)

11. Bōra (ボーラ, Bolas)

12. Kami no te ( 神の手, Divine hand)

13. Sonikku Shindō (ソニック振動, Sonic Vibration)

14. Shingōenkan (信号炎管 Signal flare)

15. Setchi (接地, Grounding)

17. Kinzoku Ito (金属糸, Metal Thread)

20. Fukkushotto (フックショット, Hook Shot)

21. Bikan (美観, Beautiful Sight)

22. Sekienton (赤煙遁, Red Smoke Flight)

23. Dokueki-yō Konomi (毒液用好み, Venom Taste)

24. Shīrurokku (シールロック, Sealing Lock)]

25.Tate Basshu (盾バッシュ, Shield Bash)

26. Kyokkō (曲光, Bent Light)

27. Suchīrugādo (スチールガード, Steel Guard)

28. Fantomu (ファントム, Phantom)

30. Shitotsu Sansen (嘴突三閃, Beak-Thrust Tri-Flash)

31. Teisatsu (偵察. Spy)

32. Wana-ban (罠板, Trap Plate)

34. Shōmei (照明, Illumination)

35. Burokku (ブロック, Block)

37. Tsuriboshi (吊星, Hanging Star)

38. Suchīrubaria (スチールバリア, Steel Barrier)

39. Enkōsen (円閘扇, Round Lock Fan)

42. Īguruaizu (イーグルアイズ, Eagle Eyes)

43. Buki wando (武器ワンド Weapon Wand)

44. Yoku Hibiku Oto (よく響く音, Booming Voice)

45. Sherushīrudo (シェルシールド, Shell Shield)

47. Kihō (気泡, Air Bubble)

48. Kenshutsu-ki (検出器, Detector)

49. Kurosu Kama (クロス鎌, Cross Scythe)

50. Kurippuru Kiri (クリップル霧, Crippling Fog)

52. Gomubaburu (ゴムバブル, Rubble Bubble)

53. Sonikkuranburu (ソニックランブル, Sonic Rumble)

58. Kakushitsuijaku (摑趾追雀, Trace-Catching Pursuit Sparrows)

60. Noren Mekuri (暖簾捲り, "Curtain Stripping")

61. Rikujōkōrō (六杖光牢, Six-Staff Light Prison)

62. Hyapporankan (百歩欄干, Hundred-Step Rail Parch)

63. Sajō Sabaku (鎖条鎖縛, Chainlink Chain Bond(s))

65. Shōgekiha (衝撃波 Shock wave)

67. Shibireyubi (しびれ指, "Numbing Finger")

70. Hakufuku (白伏, White Crawl)

71. Enerugīsetto (エネルギーセット, Energy Set)

72. Basho Tensō (場所転送, Location Transfer)

73. Tozanshō (倒山晶, Inverse Mountain Crystal)

75. Gochūtekkan (五柱鉄貫, Five-Post Iron Weights)

77. Tenteikūra (天挺空羅, Heavenly Void Net)

81. Dankū (断空, Severing Void)

83. Shadow Dance (シャドーダンス Shadōdansu)

85. Runa no taihō (ルナ大砲, Lunar Cannon)

87. Fū Yubiwa (封 指輪 Sealing Rings) -

97. Gēto (門, Gate)

99. Kin (禁, Seal) .

100. Bankin (卍禁, Great Seal)


Hado

1. Shō (衝, Thrust)

2. Panpan (ぱんぱん,Slap)

3. Tanki-sha (短気者, Spitfire)

4. Byakurai (白雷, Pale Lightning)

5. Yuki no tama (雪の玉, Snowball)

7. Howaitorikiddo (ホワイトリキッド, White Liquid)

9. Tōketsu (凍結, Frozen)

10. Yakedo (火傷, Burn)

11. Tsuzuri Raiden (綴雷電, Bound Lightning)

12. Fushibi (伏火, Ambush Flare)

13. Shimo bōkō (Frost Assault)

14. Sōshū (Frost Fall)

15. Mahō no Misairu (魔法のミサイル, Magic Missile)

16. Reinbōkyanon (レインボーキャノン Rainbow Cannon)

18. Bakuhatsu Senkō (爆発穿孔, Explosive Punch)

19.Bakuhatsu-tekina kikku (爆発的なキック, Explosive Kick)

20. Chi no ame (血の雨 , Rain of Blood)

23. Akarui Furea (明るいフレア Bright Flare)

24. Furea (フレア Flare)

26. Raionshīrudo (ライオンシールド Lion shield)

27. Howaitobīmu ( ホワイトビーム, White Beam)

28. Saidan ( 祭壇, Altar)

29. Moeru obujekuto (バーニングチキン, Burning Chicken)

30. Denji wa (でんじは Electromagnetic Wave)

31. Shakkahō (赤火砲, Red Fire Cannon)

32. Ōkasen (黄火閃, Yellow Fire Flash)

33. Sōkatsui (蒼火墜, Blue Fire, Crash Down)

34. Kongōbaku (金剛爆, Adamantine Blast)

35. Middonaitoraikou (ミッドナイトライトニング, Midnight Lightning)

36. Cheinraitoningu (チェインライトニング, Chain Lightning)

37. Sandābāningu (サンダーバーニング Burning Thunder)

38. Taiyōkō-sen (太陽光線, Solar Beam)

40. Oni hanmā (鬼ハンマー Demon Hammer)

41. Kaenbin (火炎瓶 Molotov Cocktail)

42. Sutikkī shuryūdan (スティッキー手榴弾 Sticky grenade)

43. Mizu no chikai (水の誓い The Oath of the Water)

44. Kasai no chikai (火災の誓い The Oath of fire)

45. Kusa no chikai (草の誓い The Oath of Grass)

46. Kaze no tanken (風の短剣 Wind dagger)

47. Ryū no kiba (龍の牙 Fang of the Dragon)

48. Ryū kurō (龍クロー Dragon Claw)

49. Hi no bakufū (火の爆風 Fire Blast)

50. Ippuku no seiryō-zai (一服の清涼剤 , A Breath of Fresh Air)

51. Nisemono Shunpo (偽物 瞬歩Fake Flash Step)

52. Kyōfu Seiji (恐怖政治, Reign of Terror)

53. Yukidama no yama (雪玉の山, Mountain of snowballs)

54. Haien (廃炎, Abolishing Flames)

55. Kaze no Yaiba (風の刃, Blades of Wind)

56. Gurren Yari Doriru (真紅槍ドリル Crimson Spear Drill)

58. Tenran (闐嵐, Orchid Sky)

59. Shīdomashingan (シードマシンガン Seed Machine Gun)

60. Iwa no haka (岩の墓 Rock Tomb)

63. Raikōhō (雷吼炮, Thunder Roar Sear)

64. Yami Arekuruu (闇荒れ狂う, Raging Darkness)

67. Hedorobakudan (ヘドロばくだん Sludge Bomb)

70. Bakuhatsu Parusu (爆発パルス, Explosive Pulse)

72. Gaki Rekkō (牙気裂光, Raging Light Fang)

73. Sōren Sōkatsui (双漣蒼火墜, Twin Lotus Blue Fire, Crash Down)

74. Tsurara yari (Icicle Spear)

75. Ryūsei sutoraiki (流星ストライキ Meteor Strike)

76.Ten no sōzō (天の創造 Creation of the Heavens)

80. Chikyū koramu (地球コラム Earth Column)

83. Kūfuku chikyū (空腹地球 Hungry Earth)

86. Seiki no Arashi (世紀の嵐 Storm of the Century)

88. Hiryū Gekizoku Shinten Raihō (飛竜撃賊震天雷炮, Flying Dragon-Striking Heaven-Shaking Thunder Cannon)

89: Burakku·rein (ブラック·レイン Black rain)

90. Kurohitsugi (黒棺, Black Coffin)

91. Senjū Kōten Taihō (千手皎天汰炮, Thousand-Hand Bright Heaven Culling-Sear)

92. Sen Honō no Ame (千炎の雨, Thousand Flame Rain)93. Hyōga Seiran (氷河晴嵐, Glacier Vapor Storm)

93. Hyōga Seiran (氷河晴嵐, Glacier Vapor Storm)

94. Nobi Tsunami (野火津波, Wildfire Tsunami)

97. Idorafurea (イドラフレア Hydra Flare)

99. Ryūsei busshitsu Arashi (流星物質 Meteoriod Storm)

100. Ittō Kasō (一刀火葬, Single Blade Cremation)(VAST ONLY)
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Your RPC (in fact all of them) need to be done within a week or they will be placed into the RPC archives - as the Guild rule states.

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Your RPC (in fact all of them) need to be done within a week or they will be placed into the RPC archives - as the Guild rule states.

OH YA?! Well this one is done =D And so is Misaru, though he's going through the judging process <3
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Shikai:

Release Type : ALl of them have release types. Your Shikai appears to be a Stand Alone. Please change the "N/A" to Stand Alone in your release type.

Zanpakuto Physical Appearance "It clashes normally with other blades when fused with his power, putting on normal effects of electrocution whenever it comes into contact with opposing metal or opponents. " That is not a physical description. That is the description of something that sounds akin to a passive ability. Please put this in the proper place. However ... Your passive ability also needs some work. Please remember you're only allowed one passive ability so this may need to be forfeited unless you have a reasonable argument.

Passive Ability. . He can also travel through metallic structures (soul steel excluded) while letting electricity flow through them in the process. This passive ability makes him an extremely dangerous foe on the battlefield. This is fine, simply remember that any and ALL armor that is created from a persons zanpakuto release IS soul steel.

... After becoming low on energy, he needs to wait before using his passive again. ...
How long does it take to wear out? And how long does he have to wait? It's not specified.

This ability (and all of Set's lightning in general) travel slightly slower than the speed of shunpo. (Byakurai speeds) However, it is something he can do in quick succession with complete control over where he appears.

This sentence is vital as to why it's needed to be specified how long it takes for him to wear out and how long he has to wait for it to recharge. It would be very over kill to leave this in without heavy consequences on the passive ability.

Violent Rhythm Set's lightning ability allows him to infuse nearly everything he touches with lightning. This mostly just focuses metal items.

While most times in other RPC's these words would be useful to prove that it is not a God Mod and can infuse everything insight, given the nature and power of this Technique, I am requesting you edit this to be solid: ONLY metal items. And again, clarify that it cannot go through soul steel.

As the lightning is maintained by his reiatsu, it can maintain its structure even as it pierces earth or even rubber, however if he releases the hold his reiatsu has on the lightning to cause a more vicious attack, normal conductors will work in absorbing the lightning.

UHM. I honestly don't know how I feel about this. My initial reaction is a solid: "No!" Lol, but reconsidering... I am left simply disgruntled. This attack has become basically unstoppable unless he loses his hold on the reiatsu which is not likely a circumstance. We need to nerf this, how, I will leave up to you.


Also. Cool downs? It's necessary. And since this is not a weak attack, I won't accept anything less than three posts, and thats IF you manage to nerf it like requested.

Chain Lightning

Possibly the ability that works best with his passive. Set extends his hand and releases a tremendous bolt of lightning, akin in size to a gran rey cero.

UHM. HOLY FK? Really? >___< REALLY? Yeah. Nup. Holy crap I just has a hernia. Why you do this to me for Set? Obviously this is going to need to be scaled down by like... Yah. A reasonable amount.

The REST of chain lightning

Mk. Well. I thought the rest of this would be reasonable. But...its apparently not. First off. There is a sentence in here that makes the ability an auto-kill to lower ranked/powered opponents. Secondly, it's an auto hit. Thirdly. ...

Strong spiritual beings can survive these blasts rather easily, however if Set travels through the lightning, it's like him getting a free attack off if you've been caught. You might as well take out the words "if you've been caught" because it's an auto hit as I said, And even if you argue it's not, the fact that it's the size of a gran rey cero , there is NO WAy anyone within 200 feet CANT get caught.

I normally would give suggestions to fix this ability but considering the entire thing is an absolute breach of all the rules that it touches, I have no clue.


It takes four posts for another burst of lightning to be sent out."

Wait. Wait wait. You're telling me you want an auto hit, auto kill move...and you want the cool down to be a tiny four posts?


Rattling Shackles

K. Let me give you the outline of my thoughts on this ability. This ability send out a huge swarm of sparks, at unspecified speeds, to trap a traget in a huge prison - that not only paralyses them and electrocutes the s**t out of them for three posts (unless their paralysed and electrocuted self can find a way out... you know, through the auto paralysation, and electrocution) but it only takes TWO posts to do this move..AGAIN?

And just how big is this swarm? You say massive, I think of a house sized swarm... which is big.

Oh but let me show you my favourite part.

This cell of electricity is one that constantly emits electricity, and if chain lightning bounces off it can completely regain its size and refresh its cooldown.

... Imma tell you, even if you nerf chain lightening down some how to make it acceptable, this will not be allowed. In fact. that's a good idea on just one tiny step in making chain lightning acceptable: Nothing it touches can regenerate it or recharge it or whatever.

That's non negotiable for me in regards to having anything to do with accepting chain lightning.

Anyway, back to rattling chains...

It can also be used along with Violent Rhythm to increase the power of Set's weapon..

Imma have to say nope to this as well. I've already asked your first one to be nerfed a bit, so the addition to this is pretty hectic on my "no mentality."


Dancing with the Spirits

I want you to know that this technique caused me to guzzle down an entire bottle of wine before I gained the brainpower back to come and ...judge this.

I can't... I can't break down the issues in this technique because ALL of it is just unacceptable.

A few major notes.

This is Shikai. Shikai do NOT have "fatal" move techniques. This is your FIRST release. If you have this you dont bloody need bankai now do you?

Secondly. Too much crap can happen with this. i read this ability and all I can see is a Chibi version of your character clapping his little pudgy arms and excitedly shrieking: "It can do this, or this...it depends on how much lightning, OH BUT SET CAN CHANGE HIS MIND AND MAKE IT DO SOMETHING ENTIRELY DIFFERENT depending on his mood!" Then flailing off in his excitement because it's caused him to cease actual motor control.

Just. No. pick ONE. ONE thing. Not 3 different things. If you do this, take out that "fatal move" crap, and this technique can be worked on and improved.



I'm going to be honest with you. I haven't read your scratched bankai out section. Mostly because I'm denying this RPC based off of the first two shikai techniques alone.


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Passive Ability. He can also travel through metallic structures (soul steel excluded) while letting electricity flow through them in the process.

After seeing the edits made to this, I still needed help with this ability. So... I went and spoke to the judge panel and we all came to a conclusion together, that he should not be able to flow through things. Most metals are not even conductible. Being able flow in electricity to things is fine, but the entire panel of judges would like to see this particular sentence taken out.


Violent Rhythm I'm going to quote to you Guide line 1 of the rules.

Also please do not bold anything to put emphasis in your RPC's. The Judges are all capable people and will be able to understand where you're putting emphasis on, and if they aren't, they will be communicating with you in order to fully understand. Bold text is very distracting and can make it harder for a judge to focus on the rest of the RPC.


Please un-bold the words in your abilities. Or I'm going to bite you.

As the lightning is maintained by his reiatsu, it can maintain its structure even as it pierces earth or even rubber, however if he releases the hold his reiatsu has on the lightning to cause a more vicious attack, normal conductors will work in absorbing the lightning.
I've decided that for this to be a proper Shikai first ability ... this needs to be changed. Please make it properly not damage rubber or other non conductors. lol.

Infusing non-conductors greatly stresses his hold on the reiatsu, even with Set's hundreds of years in training in that aspect.

This also should be changed. Even though we are all powerful godly like people, I still dont think it would be fair to be able to infuse things that don't conduct electricity.

Chain Lightning

Set extends his hand and releases a tremendous bolt of lightning, akin in size to a vast level Cero. It's large and powerful, as well as fast however pales in size comparison to an espada's gran rey cero. It's a little over 1/3'rd its size..

-___- okay SMARTASS. You know what would be better? Just saying "Set extends his hand and releases a tremendous bolt of lightening about 1/3rd the size of a grand rey cero" lol.

This ability travels from conductor to conductor, meaning it can go from metal to a person to water, etc.

Imma remind you again, a lot of metals actually aren't conductors. So this might not be a good descriptive term.

I'm going to ask that you put in some details about how this spell CAN be interrupted other than missing a target.

Strong spiritual beings can survive these blasts rather easily, however if Set travels through the lightning, it's like him getting a free attack off if you've been caught.
This sentence should be eradicated and obliterated. Then burned. For good measure.

Please describe what kind of damage this does. Is it shocking, or does it burn? Or both? What? We need a few more describing factors because as it stands this ability still reads out "broken as hell OP attack that bounces around a lot with a cool down that is like a fully built Sona with 10000% CDR on league and it has only a little tiny reference on how it's not an auto hit but can soooooo easily be RP'd as a god mod ability. biggrin "

I KNOW that was a sentence run on. It's supposed to be. lol.

It takes four posts for another burst of lightning to be sent out."

Seriously. I wasn't kidding when I was horrified at this tiny cool down.

Rattling Shackles

It takes the form of a hundred sparks (this is really not a humongous amount considering how extremely small sparks are) closing in on a certain location.

Again. The size is not accurately described. What i see here is a snarky response to my last judgement.

This orb is meant to trap the enemy inside of a prison that constantly streams with electricity, potentially paralyzing them or just dealing continuous, but light damage
For how long? It might say so later in the ability but uhm. Its important that information comes right after this information. Also. I'm still say NO to three posts.

This cell of electricity is one that constantly emits electricity, and if chain lightning bounces off it can replenish its cooldown by one.

I would be okay with this... except for the fact...

The chain lightning can bounce off the walls inside of this ability for more than one post till its cooldown is replenished,

Yah. it says "It takes a long time" but it doesn't specify... like. can it all be written out in one post? This seems like a "loop around addition that SOUNDS like a limitation the judge wanted, but in actuality its really farkin not" (YES. FARKIN.)

And I'm going to contribute that to rushed and sloppy writing - not something you did on purpose. But it's my job to tell you how these things come off.

(If the enemy notices the swarm and manages to escape before it can surround them, Set will have to wait two posts before sending out the swarm again.)

Nope. If he misses, this will require a full cooldown. Idc if he missed. There is a reason why abilities like this have cool downs. Respect da cooldowns plxors. SPEAKING of cooldowns. This spell doesn't actually HAVE a cool down limit other than this part.

Fix that please.

Imma be honest. This ability makes me want to cry. Please make sure you go into our RPC rules and READ them in regards to paralyzation. Cuz there's actually a rule that touches up on it. And while we're at it, you may want to see if there are any other rules this ability breaks. Yeah. that is a hint. rofl


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If he manages to absorb both a full powered chain lightning...

Can you plz explain to me if this chain lightning spell is bouncing around, getting smaller, and stuff... how can it be absorbed. When it's done, does the rest of the electricity just ... sit on the ground? Or something. Cuz... I don't approve. Like.

1 meter = 3.2 feet.

20 meters = 65.6 feet. ...which is NOT that bad. If it weren't for the fact that you're writing this ability like you're able to just spam your other abilities, then use this one to absorb them immediately and create an explosion that feels like a nuclear bomb in close impact. >__________>;;;;;


It is a fatal move and one that he generally uses to finish off opponents.

NO.

A direct strike to the nervous system through spinal contact could paralyze an enemy.
For how long....?

In other news...

You will see I have edited in a section to your RPC. Please go and choose your spells in the system thread and put them in there accordingly.

Also. You're gonna need to join a squad and edit everything in relation to your squads.




Suggestion: Before Editing, I suggest you go to RPC Rules and Guidelines and carefully read the content of the entire thread. This may actually help you create clear definitions and understand what the judgement of your RPC is based off of.


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This judgement is based off you being a big meany-head and that's it gonk

BUT < (bolded because I know you like that. Bite me.) I will continue with these edits and make Set as readable as a homeless guys board when you're tired of waiting in traffic. Gimme a sec.

And I will ARGUE with you over chain lightning xD seriously, this is like his Q in league (which everyone knows is a champions main damage output, unless you still plan on disagreeing with me on that xD ) there used to be a saying. When I Q, you QQ. Now it's like when I throw my chain lightning, you laugh your a** off as you sidestep, making it hit a tree and just kinda hurt the tree a bit. And no offense, but what kind of question is "Is it shocking, or does it burn? Or both?" I'm no field expert, but I think getting hit by lightning might burn a bit as well xD Not like I'm going to hit you and you'll burst in flames, but you'll be burnt. That much can be said for any lightning ability that travels through the air as a bolt. As for lightning that isn't so much projectile and needs to travel through a current, that causes pure electrical damages and generates remarkably little heat.

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This judgement is based off you being a big meany-head and that's it gonk

BUT < (bolded because I know you like that. Bite me.) I will continue with these edits and make Set as readable as a homeless guys board when you're tired of waiting in traffic. Gimme a sec.

And I will ARGUE with you over chain lightning xD seriously, this is like his Q in league (which everyone knows is a champions main damage output, unless you still plan on disagreeing with me on that xD ) there used to be a saying. When I Q, you QQ. Now it's like when I throw my chain lightning, you laugh your a** off as you sidestep, making it hit a tree and just kinda hurt the tree a bit. And no offense, but what kind of question is "Is it shocking, or does it burn? Or both?" I'm no field expert, but I think getting hit by lightning might burn a bit as well xD Not like I'm going to hit you and you'll burst in flames, but you'll be burnt. That much can be said for any lightning ability that travels through the air as a bolt. As for lightning that isn't so much projectile and needs to travel through a current, that causes pure electrical damages and generates remarkably little heat.


Set, I would like to mention for Chain Lightening, Hope came to all the judges and asked them their opinions. We all agreed that it was not a passable ability. This was not Hope's choice, and if she had passed it, this RPC would still be open with you talking to me. I'm sorry that you do not agree with this, however, this is an ability from a video game, which does not directly translate to roleplay. ^.^

I would also like to state, you will need to join a new squad before your RPC is approved. Thank you and have a nice day.
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This judgement is based off you being a big meany-head and that's it gonk

BUT < (bolded because I know you like that. Bite me.) I will continue with these edits and make Set as readable as a homeless guys board when you're tired of waiting in traffic. Gimme a sec.

And I will ARGUE with you over chain lightning xD seriously, this is like his Q in league (which everyone knows is a champions main damage output, unless you still plan on disagreeing with me on that xD ) there used to be a saying. When I Q, you QQ. Now it's like when I throw my chain lightning, you laugh your a** off as you sidestep, making it hit a tree and just kinda hurt the tree a bit. And no offense, but what kind of question is "Is it shocking, or does it burn? Or both?" I'm no field expert, but I think getting hit by lightning might burn a bit as well xD Not like I'm going to hit you and you'll burst in flames, but you'll be burnt. That much can be said for any lightning ability that travels through the air as a bolt. As for lightning that isn't so much projectile and needs to travel through a current, that causes pure electrical damages and generates remarkably little heat.


Set, I would like to mention for Chain Lightening, Hope came to all the judges and asked them their opinions. We all agreed that it was not a passable ability. This was not Hope's choice, and if she had passed it, this RPC would still be open with you talking to me. I'm sorry that you do not agree with this, however, this is an ability from a video game, which does not directly translate to roleplay. ^.^

I would also like to state, you will need to join a new squad before your RPC is approved. Thank you and have a nice day.

I didn't get this ability from any video game. Chain lightning is widely used in many games, comics, and other things. And if that's the case, half the abilities used in any roleplay wouldn't be allowed. As for joining a squad, I know this. Ja-ne.

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