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 Posted: Mon Feb 03, 2014 10:37 pm
Okaiya Onosaki  " There's always time for a drink so long as you're buying it." Murder doesn’t necessarily mean evil, right? FULL NAME: Okaiya Kenta Onosaki
ALIAS : Follower of Amaimon
NICKNAMES: "Ken" or "Sake"
DATE OF BIRTH: 10/31
CURRENT AGE: 175 (Looks around 25)
GENDER: Male
ORIGIN OF BIRTH: Gehenna
OCCUPATION: Bar tender
HUMAN APPEARANCE:
In his human appearance Okaiya has pale skin and light blue eyes, his hair is spiked down and is a black color, He stands at about 5'11" and weighs about 145 lbs. He wears a tattered, black flowing long coat and a plain white tee underneath, He also wears a pair of black slacks with a silver belt.
PARTIAL DEMON APPEARANCE:
When Okaiya is in his partial demon form his eyes turn a dull navy blue color and his fingernails grow longer. His teeth begin to grow sharper, almost dagger-like and his tail becomes more visible.
TRUE DEMON APPEARANCE:
True demon appearance
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Posted: Mon Feb 03, 2014 10:48 pm
But those who do take it upon themselves to kill others, have to be prepared to have others try to kill them. HEIGHT: 5'10"
WEIGHT: 155 lbs
BLOOD TYPE: O+
BLOOD COLOR: Red
EYE COLOR: Blue
HAIR COLOR: Black
PIERCINGS: N/A
TATTOOS : Has a large red dragon with black outlines and silver background on his right forearm
DISTINGUISHING FEATURES: He has a strong smell of cologne and he has a black wrist band around his left wrist.
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Posted: Mon Feb 03, 2014 11:34 pm
And that’s what they call the law of Karma, my friends. PERSONALITY:
Okaiya is an often agitated demon who will often attack those around him to feed. He is very cautious around Exorcists but not around normal humans, if he sees a group of humans and he detects or thinks there are no Exorcists around he will kill them no matter how many are there. He enjoys finding innocent or unsuspecting humans to kill.
When around other demons he likes to be in his full demon form because he doesn't like hiding his demon form. He usually will engage another demon in battle only if he knows he will win as he does not like to waste his time or energy. He never helps anyone unless he thinks he can get something out of it or get stronger by it. He won't make unnecessary sacrifices, he will only run if he doesn't think he can win a fight.
LIKES: The night time and women
DISLIKES: Exorcists
HOBBIES: Brewing drinks and tricking people into doing his jobs.
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Posted: Mon Feb 03, 2014 11:38 pm
That’s why good or bad, the ones who are left standing are the ones with the strongest wills to survive. DEMONOLOGY: Kin of Amaimon
DEMON CLASS: D
ORGANIZATION: N/A
ORGANIZATION CLASS: N/A
AFFILIATION: Amaimon
BASE OF OPERATIONS: N/A
MY HISTORY:
Okaiya was born in Gehenna and raised there for over 70 years, this is where he studied other demons and their types of behavioral patterns. He never spoke much to any other demons and often rarely even spoke to his parents unless he was forced to. Okaiya started taking a liking to the demon kings and soon found himself wanting to follow under one of them in particular, Amaimon. He began wishing that he could leave Gehenna so that he could feed off the humans as well as the other demons in Assiah. It took him another 3 years before he eventually got out into Assiah. After that, he didn't know much of what to do now that he was where he wanted to be so he began hanging out around bars and watching the humans and demons who passed through there, he tried learning more about Exorcists in an attempt to protect himself from Exorcists who might come after him. He shortly found himself killing humans and demons who didn't expect him to attack him. He found that the more he feasted, the more the Exorcists began looking for him. He tried hiding in the shadows for over 20 years, occasionally finding himself fighting the Exorcists yet narrowly escaping. In this time span, the clothes that he had originally come into Assiah with were now torn and tattered from bullet holes of the Dragoons shots and Okaiya had gotten a red dragon tattoo to show that he was a beast unwilling to let any of his blood be shed. The silver background symbolizes the silver of the bullets unable to pierce his skin.
He decided that he would get a job after that point to draw less attention to himself, but he didn't have any clue of what kind of field would hire a person like him. He decided he'd go into a job that he already knew a lot about, working at a bar, He managed to get the job and has worked there for years to ensure that no one would be able to detect what he truly was. He still occasionally finds demons or humans who annoy him with their presence and follows them into secluded areas to kill them, far away from the Exorcists. Okaiya didn't care who or what he killed, so long as he never had to get too close to the Exorcists homes, he was fine.
RELATIVES:
Rose Onosaki - (Mother;Demon) Home: Gehenna Status: Alive
Gidayu Onosaki - (Father;Demon) Home: Gehenna Status: Alive
MY GOALS: To become a powerful demon
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Posted: Mon Feb 03, 2014 11:45 pm
The world being what it is, a lot of people out there deserve to die, don’t they? MEISTER PRIMARY TYPE: Beast Master
PRIMARY ABILITY: Demon's Rage
SECONDARY ABILITY: Demon's call
MEISTER SECONDARY TYPE: Berserker
PRIMARY ABILITY: Mad enchantment
SECONDARY ABILITY:: God Speed
EQUIPMENT: Gate keys of Gehenna, Shadow sword, Orb of Baast
RUNES: None
EXPERTISE:
Holy weapon knowledge Knows a lot about different holy weapons which he learned from researching them to protect himself better
Alchoholism Knows a lot about alcoholic drinks and beverages because he spends so much time around them
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Posted: Fri Feb 07, 2014 12:54 am
Alright so I’m going to give you some notes to look over and make your profile look a little more literate and have more depth than it currently does. Some of these will be optional changes and others will be mandatory.
Optional Change: I personally like to see a lot of depth and understanding for role playing. When I see a character appearance is just links or two sentences I take that into consideration when I am ranking characters. It shows your role play level and you skipped writing out a human appearance. The picture on the side is a mandatory thing due to the method the profile skeleton was written, you still need to write something out under your human appearance.
I read your character’s history four times, and it seems more like you’re trying to be more human than demon and I noticed from your personality that you’re not trying to make enemies within either the demon realm or the human realm. But eventually you’ll make enemies, it will happen. You mentioned how your parents raised you in Assiah and all this extra stuff which to be honest with you isn’t very smart seeing how most demons need to kill humans for a survival tool because that’s how they feed, or they feed off of their emotions or negative thoughts. But those are specialized demons. Something that needs to change for sure in your profile is how your character receives their orders from Amaimon. Two things about Amaimon, the first is that he is never in a single place and he’s like a giant child and no one usually is able to track him, the second is that Amaimon usually does all his grudge killings himself. I’m going to suggest you redo your history, but it’s not required other than what I mentioned was required. If you want to keep this ‘human’ appearance of mental self, then go for it, but it’s not very demon like at all.
Mandatory Change: Under your Alias you wrote Follower of Ammaimon. First off you spelled the Demon Lord’s name wrong. It’s Amaimon, being a follower of someone you might want to get their name correct. Second thing that is wrong with this is the fact Amaimon is a Demon Lord, a King of a portion of the Demon Race, he has lots of followers, and calling yourself a follower, for a name that would be used as your “reputation”, have you in Gehenna as well as in Assiah makes your character already look like a low level demon and I would also take that into consideration for your ranking.
Under your tattoo section you should be specific on where this ‘large red dragon’ tattoo is located, is it the forearm, bicep, back, chest, abdominal area, lower back, thigh. These are things you should think about answering. Next you should add more on to this character’s personality. Your character sounds very boring for lack of a better word, not saying he is, he just lack depth and information that you would want to have previous knowledge about within the profile, because this information will never be edited. Heading down the profile and looking at the Demonology section you spelled Amaimon wrong again. All you need to really write there is Kin of Amaimon, under Affiliation you would want to write Amaimon, and not follower of Amaimon. Be sure to check your spelling. Amaimon does have a Base of Operations in Gehenna, if you check the Gehenna forums you will be able to find the place where you would use for your base of operations within Amaimon’s territory.
When you select to use Equipment, you get three things from the list, not just one. Runes is the only thing you are allowed to have one of. Also Alcoholic is not an expertise, maybe Alcoholism or something in terms of Alcohol for making drinks, but that still sounds odd.
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Posted: Fri Feb 07, 2014 11:45 am
Alright, I've fixed the problems. Sorry, but most of them happened because I've been extremely busy lately... And the mix up with Amaimon's name was because my iPad auto corrected it. sweatdrop
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Posted: Fri Feb 07, 2014 1:19 pm
Demons can’t really take a liking towards Demon Kings because they are bound to the King they are born under. Because in some way you are blood connected to one of them. If Amaimon is your Kin, then you are a child of Amaimon in a long distant way. Also as a demon you shouldn’t really be studying other demons unless that’s like your job within a Demon Army of some sort, as to make a way to make demons unaffected by fatal verse or something that humans use to kill demons. Assiah and Gehenna are mirrored worlds, so demons usually freely walk into Assiah, there really isn’t a full on procedure. These are small things, but I will approve your profile. Okaiya will be also be D-Ranked demon.
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