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PostPosted: Sun Sep 01, 2013 5:23 pm


Name: Rebecca
nickname: Ash. She really hates her girly name, so she shortened her middle name and nicknamed herself that in the third grade.
favorite color: all shades of blue and red
obsessions: animals, anime, pictures of water scenes.

bio: ash's father was a hard worker and was in her 3rd year in college, majoring in marine engineering, when his parents died in a car crash. A drunk driver had ran a red light and crashed into the side of their car. He quit college out of depression and a few years later he got a job out of need at a restaurant. A woman came in and he took her order, something pulled him toward her, a strange feeling he had. They started talking and he asked her out. A few months later ash was born,the woman stayed with them for a few months but suddenly had to leave. Ash's father was heartbroken, but got over it for he had a small child to take care of. The 2 lived together happily in a small apartment complex. Ash didn't get much, but she was happy with the few toys and things she got over the years. She was a very opinionated girl, but very bright, though with a bit of an anger problem. She was always a bit 'stand offish' so that didn't end in her getting many friends. When ash was 12 she finally made a friend, Riley, a ((really short)) crippled girl, with a bad habit of answering EVERYTHING with sarcasm. They had met in detention, both in there for the same reason, mouthing off to a very strict teacher.They quickly became best friends. One day in the 7th grade, their grade went on a field trip to a theme park and a weird thing attacked them. It seemed to be a mix of a woman and snake. Ash stood frozen in place, shocked as the thing advanced on her. Riley quickly took action, she ripped off her pants, they were restricting movement, revealing goat legs. She knocked out a nearby police officer that was trying to shoot at it, and stole his gun. She shoots at the thing, stalling it for a second, and grabs Ash and beelines for the parking lot. She hot wires it then drives them to camp half-blood, where she waits in the Hermes cabin to be claimed.

friends: riley
enemies: none, yet
what ash looks like: https://p.gr-assets.com/540x540/fit/hostedimages/1379765084/233794.jpg
riley: http://www.miscellaneoushi.com/thumbnails/detail/20121018/women blue eyes redheads freckles smiling katie leclerc portraits 2256x1504 wallpaper_www.miscellaneoushi.com_13.jpg
((so sorry if either of them are you))
personality: total tomboy ( that's why she hates her name), curious, adrenaline- lover, sarcastic, rebellious, and kind.
PostPosted: Wed Jan 08, 2014 5:16 pm


If you still are wanting to be in the guild, that's awesome.

I just think you may want to elaborate more on your profile, or maybe go a different direction with your character. I can't make a clear claim in any sense.

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PostPosted: Thu Jan 09, 2014 9:11 am


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If you still are wanting to be in the guild, that's awesome.

I just think you may want to elaborate more on your profile, or maybe go a different direction with your character. I can't make a clear claim in any sense.


ok, thanks^^
any tips? i'm not the best at profile's...
PostPosted: Thu Jan 09, 2014 2:57 pm


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DramaticScream
If you still are wanting to be in the guild, that's awesome.

I just think you may want to elaborate more on your profile, or maybe go a different direction with your character. I can't make a clear claim in any sense.


ok, thanks^^
any tips? i'm not the best at profile's...


well I don't want to squash creativity, but I'd try and make her bio flow a bit better, you kind of move really quickly and don't really explain many things. What was her mother majoring in? What caused the car crash of Ash's grandmother? Also, Gods really aren't the nicest of beings, I'm not sure they would have a 'seemingly never ending bank account' set up by the mystery man. Maybe elaborate more on Ash's childhood? give details as to what she was like as a kid? Maybe explain how she got her nickname or how she met her friend Riley? And is Riley a magical monster? How is she suddenly not crippled? Elaborate more on her personality in the sense of likes and dislikes, weaknesses strengths. Just make a more well rounded character.

Also, just a thing I personally think you should change, is the part where she just so happens to take a gun from a police officer and shoot? very unlikely honestly. Maybe it was Riley? Since she knew what was really happening. Or just skip that part all together because cops are meant to be in control even when they don't know what the hell it is they are fighting.

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PostPosted: Sun Jan 19, 2014 3:29 pm


thank you!!!
I've been trying to write better for a while, bad habit of mine is doing what you just said, so thank you! now i know what to fix...
PostPosted: Sun Jan 19, 2014 6:59 pm


Rebecca has been claimed by Athena!
She is one of the lesser powerful of her kind, but has room to grow.
Once she has read something, she never forgets it. She can also read exceptionally well, and learn really fast.
She is able to spontaneously form plans, which work 99% of the time.
In other words, she is crazy smart.
When a fight is justified by a reasonable cause (For example, someone punched her in the face) she fights better and with the Blessing of Athena(which she does not have yet) she can almost predict what her opponent will do, and form a strategy to defeat them.
She can communicate with Owls.
She can easily make decisions, and succeed in most competitions.
** Spiders hate her and vice versa.**

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