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Posted: Sun Nov 25, 2012 2:16 pm
 Player Name: Kairo Yakazu Character Name: Ouren, Rei Position: Espada Numero 3 Character Age(Appearance Age): 905 (early 20s) Date of Shinigamification: October 13 Height: 202 cm Weight: 218 lbs Eye Color: Green Hair Color: Light Blonde Fragment Location: Right brow Fracción: N/A Sexuality: Straight Descriptive Markings: Many scars across his torso, long loose martial-arts-styled pants rather than a hakama, black gloves.
Personality: Rei is an enigma to most, talking minimally to others unless he finds them trustworthy or it involves matters of war. Despite that fact, he is a deep thinker and a loner, much preferring to be alone and thinking, or even simply sitting in silence. However, in battle, he is one of the last people you would want to face. He ranges from cold and calculating to savage and violent. Character Strengths: Quick and Deep Thinker, Hand-to-Hand Mastery, Extremely Agile, Expert at Countering Character Weaknesses: Tends to Underestimate an Opponent at First, Tends to Fight One-on-One and Refuses Help if he is Losing
Likes: A good fight, peace and quiet, meditation, Hueco Mundo Dislikes: Loud, obnoxious, and ignorant people Favorite Food: Ramen
Resurrección Name: Soldado Sealed Description: No one truly knows what Rei's blade looks like, not even himself, simply because he refuses to use it, stating that it is just a crutch for weakness. What is known is that the sheathe is 75 cm long and the hilt is wrapped with black and white thread, and a bell is attached to the end of the hilt. There is no hilt guard. Resurrección Form: Luchar, Soldado Physical Form: His blade and sheath melt and engulf him in what looks like melted bone, then hardens in certain spots forming a bone-like armor. It looks like he is wearing a skeleton outside of his body aside from a few minor details; -There is no skull, leaving his face and hair still visible -There is also no hip bone -Around his neck area forms a bracer, making his neck no longer exposed -The armor pieces that form on his limbs form on the top of his arms and legs (If you hold out you arms and legs in front of you with your palms down, what is on top is what is considered the top of your limbs) -What would be considered the foot and toe bones are fused together -The only thing on his back is the spine piece and the ribs, which wrap around to the front.
Weapon: His hands and feet
Release Phrase: Til the end, Soldado Abilities- Sonido Enhancement Pesadilla (Nightmare): Harnessing his Sonido to its fullest extent, Rei uses it to speed up even his most minute motions. With it, he can throw a punch or kick as fast, if not slightly faster, than a bullet. This is constantly active as long as he is in his Resurrección.
Pesquesa Enhancement Sueño (Dream): Harnessing his Pequesa to its fullest extent, Rei is able to shut his eyes and see the world in a radar-like vision. He senses both movement and latent reishi, making a picture of the world almost as clear as when he is looking around with his eyes open. This also allows him to see where reishi is building up in his opponent's body. With a well places punch, he can disperse the reishi in said area with weaker opponents, while with stronger opponents, he can temporarily disrupt it.
Double his normal strength (Example: He can now lift a small building with ease)
50% in durability
Resurrección: Segunda Etapa: N/A at the moment, but I would like one if possible.
Abilities/Special Training:
Superhuman Strength: Due to not using his sword, Rei's natural strength is immense, much more than most other Espada and Shinigami. His punches have been known to dent or even go through metal that isn't a Zanpaktou's blade.
Bala: Rei is infamous for his Bala. Although it is not the strongest, it is the way he abuses it that makes it so well known. Instead of firing it, Rei keeps the Bala's reishi wrapped around his fist, giving his next attack explosive potential.
Cero: Rei has a notoriously weak Cero, being only about three times the strength of his Bala. However, he is able to use it in a similar manner to his Bala, doubling the power for the attack, but also usually damaging himself as well. It is also more volitile when wrapped around his fist. Instead of being triggered by his attacking an opponent, it can go off simply be being touched by a piece of string on his clothing.
Gran Rey Cero: Unable to contain it like his Cero and Bala, Rei fires it off fists in small bursts rather than an end-all beam like most of the Espada. It is also notoriously weak like his Cero, but is still about twice as powerful as his Cero.
Sonido: Due to his Resurrección, Rei's Sonido is extremely well trained, being second only to the Number 2, but not by much.
Pequesa: Having a relatively average pequesa until his Resurrección, Rei mostly uses it to identify enemies at long range. However, it is extremely sensitive, letting him see Shunpo-ing enemies with ease despite not being able to accurately gauge their strength.
Hierro: Easily the strongest hierro of the Espada, Rei has been known to cause explosions that could destroy small cities when attempting to harness his Gran Rey Cero, coming away from something that should have obliterated him or at least torn off his arm with only some burnt skin and scars.
Descorrer: The ability used to open the Garganta. Nothing more can be said. Biography: When Rei died, he was pissed. Unbearably angry. As a proud prize fighter, nothing was worse than getting blamed for cheating, much less by fixing the fights. When the Yakuza came down on him for the charges, he fought back, heavily injuring many of them until he was finally gunned down with a bullet to his head. It was this rage that let him become a hollow.
Once he had become a hollow, however, it was nothing but battle after battle, feast after feast. It was like a dream to Rei as he picked as many fights as possible, quickly becoming an adhunchas in just under 150 hundred years. However, after he had finally become a vasto lordes after another 250 or so years, Rei suddenly became sick of the fighting. Rather than continuing to fight, he stayed secluded, becoming stronger through the ways he had done when he was human for nearly 300 years. It was then that he heard what could only be called as the cry of Las Noches. Slowly, he made his way to the structure, slaughtering any hollow unfortunate enough to cross him or his path. Many of them were cocky adhunchas and vasto lordes, all of whom found of quickly that Rei was more than they were able to handle. As he arrived at the gates of Las Noches, he suddenly became sick of something else. His mask. Grabbing it in his right hand on the left side, Rei slowly and painfully tore away his own mask, ascending him to the rank of Arrancar. Looking down at his fists, he smiled widely, allowing his power to be sealed in a blade that he not once looked at as he sheathed it, promising himself that his fists were what had gotten him here, and it would remain that way. Theme Song: Theme Roleplay Example: "Goddammit, just shut up and fight!" As the Cero went by his face, just narrowly avoiding hitting him, Rei dashed forward, slamming his fist hard into the stomach of his Arrancar opponent. As they keeled over in agony, Rei pivoted on his front foot, sending his back foot into the jaw of his opponent, sending them flying into a wall. As he returned to standing normally, Rei sighed. "Dammit, you're still too slow and too weak! Stop challenging me!" With that, he turned around and vanished, only a small sand cloud showing where he once was.
As he arrived on the roof of Las Noches, Rei sat down and sighed, sitting cross-legged and shutting his eyes, beginning to meditate. As he breathed softly, he let his mind wander, far from the annoyance and aggravation of his pathetic excuse for a fight. 'I wonder when I can find a fight worth my time than isn't against another Espada...' he thought to himself, his lips silently forming each word.
It was then a loud crash ended his precious silence. Opening his eyes and letting out a growl, Rei stood up and turned around. Over in the desert of Hueco Mundo was a war of hollows. It was entertaining to watch, but too damn noisy. Balling up his fist, Rei let the red aura if his Bala engulf his fist as he Sonido'd to the middle of the battlefield. Slamming his fist into an unsuspecting hollow's face, an explosion engulfing the area and destroying all but one hollow who was now begging for death. Walking over, Rei lifted his foot hight into the air, slamming his foot down upon its mask with a powerful axe kick, ending its miserable life. Turning away from what was once a battlefield, he vanished once more, what he had left behind a reminder to those weaklings who would disturb his silence.
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Posted: Mon Nov 26, 2012 7:10 pm
how long does his resurreccion last?
what is the point of your character being able to pinpoint the reishi forming in an opponent's body? What does it do? like, chakra points? if so, expand on this.
i like the idea for your bala. good job.
Well, you say it is weaker or stronger than espada numero 4's bala and what not, but really, we have no idea how strong or weak the person's techniques are. get me? it's too vague. Elucidate on his actual capabilities. unless it's to limit your own character's powers, and whatnot.
once again, your comparisons leave your character with incomprehensible power. you cannot simply compare your character to others, even if there is a system hierarchy. let him be an individual. no duh.
he is very angry and power hungry. i like it.
that's it i think. i'll notify either the captain or the vice captain to peruse your profile.
if you don't like my critique, then argue with me. correct me if i'm wrong. i don't mind.
c: welp, goodluck, brah.
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Posted: Mon Nov 26, 2012 8:30 pm
tanqela how long does his resurreccion last?
what is the point of your character being able to pinpoint the reishi forming in an opponent's body? What does it do? like, chakra points? if so, expand on this.
i like the idea for your bala. good job.
Well, you say it is weaker or stronger than espada numero 4's bala and what not, but really, we have no idea how strong or weak the person's techniques are. get me? it's too vague. Elucidate on his actual capabilities. unless it's to limit your own character's powers, and whatnot.
once again, your comparisons leave your character with incomprehensible power. you cannot simply compare your character to others, even if there is a system hierarchy. let him be an individual. no duh.
he is very angry and power hungry. i like it.
that's it i think. i'll notify either the captain or the vice captain to peruse your profile.
if you don't like my critique, then argue with me. correct me if i'm wrong. i don't mind.
c: welp, goodluck, brah.
TIME LIMITS! MY ONE TRUE ENEMY! I'll need to work on those along with the rest of my profile :3
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Posted: Tue Nov 27, 2012 10:30 am
just a point I want to make before moving onto techniques, your ressurecion will need to have a much larger change. The shinigami release changes the weapon of the user in most cases, and the body of the arrancarian will change in their release. It's a motif that is used throughout the series, such as growing wings, forming armor, or entirely changing the structure of the users body. Simply covering ones hands and feet in liquid metal won't be enough. Something I can suggest would be possibly having the arms and legs grow in size, and changing the structure of them to become more hollow like. Larger digits, smaller palms, but with huge musculature and much longer limbs. Of course, it looks sort of weird, but it really pulls in the oddness that is the hollow body.
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YummyBiscuits Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Nov 27, 2012 4:16 pm
YummyBiscuits just a point I want to make before moving onto techniques, your ressurecion will need to have a much larger change. The shinigami release changes the weapon of the user in most cases, and the body of the arrancarian will change in their release. It's a motif that is used throughout the series, such as growing wings, forming armor, or entirely changing the structure of the users body. Simply covering ones hands and feet in liquid metal won't be enough. Something I can suggest would be possibly having the arms and legs grow in size, and changing the structure of them to become more hollow like. Larger digits, smaller palms, but with huge musculature and much longer limbs. Of course, it looks sort of weird, but it really pulls in the oddness that is the hollow body. The only reason I don't have an immense change happening with his Resurrección is because I wanted it to follow along with the theme of his character. He doesn't rely on cheap tricks or changes like most other Arrancar, instead feeling that a fight is something to be respected and won with pure force. That is why he doesn't use his blade, and the reason his Bala, Cero, Gran Rey Cero, and Hierro are the way they are. If you absolutely want me to make some sort of change, I will, but I would much rather leave it be to stick with the flow of the character.
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Posted: Tue Nov 27, 2012 4:31 pm
Kairo Yakazu YummyBiscuits just a point I want to make before moving onto techniques, your ressurecion will need to have a much larger change. The shinigami release changes the weapon of the user in most cases, and the body of the arrancarian will change in their release. It's a motif that is used throughout the series, such as growing wings, forming armor, or entirely changing the structure of the users body. Simply covering ones hands and feet in liquid metal won't be enough. Something I can suggest would be possibly having the arms and legs grow in size, and changing the structure of them to become more hollow like. Larger digits, smaller palms, but with huge musculature and much longer limbs. Of course, it looks sort of weird, but it really pulls in the oddness that is the hollow body. The only reason I don't have an immense change happening with his Resurrección is because I wanted it to follow along with the theme of his character. He doesn't rely on cheap tricks or changes like most other Arrancar, instead feeling that a fight is something to be respected and won with pure force. That is why he doesn't use his blade, and the reason his Bala, Cero, Gran Rey Cero, and Hierro are the way they are. If you absolutely want me to make some sort of change, I will, but I would much rather leave it be to stick with the flow of the character. We can easily combine both of these ideas. It's simply that I want to follow this grand motif that bleach follows. I require a larger change than gloves and shoes, so just try to add something more. Maybe armor covering most of his arm, or even simply gauntlets. That's all I'm looking for right now.
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YummyBiscuits Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Nov 27, 2012 4:37 pm
YummyBiscuits Kairo Yakazu YummyBiscuits just a point I want to make before moving onto techniques, your ressurecion will need to have a much larger change. The shinigami release changes the weapon of the user in most cases, and the body of the arrancarian will change in their release. It's a motif that is used throughout the series, such as growing wings, forming armor, or entirely changing the structure of the users body. Simply covering ones hands and feet in liquid metal won't be enough. Something I can suggest would be possibly having the arms and legs grow in size, and changing the structure of them to become more hollow like. Larger digits, smaller palms, but with huge musculature and much longer limbs. Of course, it looks sort of weird, but it really pulls in the oddness that is the hollow body. The only reason I don't have an immense change happening with his Resurrección is because I wanted it to follow along with the theme of his character. He doesn't rely on cheap tricks or changes like most other Arrancar, instead feeling that a fight is something to be respected and won with pure force. That is why he doesn't use his blade, and the reason his Bala, Cero, Gran Rey Cero, and Hierro are the way they are. If you absolutely want me to make some sort of change, I will, but I would much rather leave it be to stick with the flow of the character. We can easily combine both of these ideas. It's simply that I want to follow this grand motif that bleach follows. I require a larger change than gloves and shoes, so just try to add something more. Maybe armor covering most of his arm, or even simply gauntlets. That's all I'm looking for right now. I was talking about it with my buddy and fellow guildmember Hopeless Optimist, and we came up with an idea that would work perfect for a Resurrección change that would still keep within my theme.
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Posted: Tue Nov 27, 2012 4:43 pm
Kairo Yakazu YummyBiscuits Kairo Yakazu YummyBiscuits just a point I want to make before moving onto techniques, your ressurecion will need to have a much larger change. The shinigami release changes the weapon of the user in most cases, and the body of the arrancarian will change in their release. It's a motif that is used throughout the series, such as growing wings, forming armor, or entirely changing the structure of the users body. Simply covering ones hands and feet in liquid metal won't be enough. Something I can suggest would be possibly having the arms and legs grow in size, and changing the structure of them to become more hollow like. Larger digits, smaller palms, but with huge musculature and much longer limbs. Of course, it looks sort of weird, but it really pulls in the oddness that is the hollow body. The only reason I don't have an immense change happening with his Resurrección is because I wanted it to follow along with the theme of his character. He doesn't rely on cheap tricks or changes like most other Arrancar, instead feeling that a fight is something to be respected and won with pure force. That is why he doesn't use his blade, and the reason his Bala, Cero, Gran Rey Cero, and Hierro are the way they are. If you absolutely want me to make some sort of change, I will, but I would much rather leave it be to stick with the flow of the character. We can easily combine both of these ideas. It's simply that I want to follow this grand motif that bleach follows. I require a larger change than gloves and shoes, so just try to add something more. Maybe armor covering most of his arm, or even simply gauntlets. That's all I'm looking for right now. I was talking about it with my buddy and fellow guildmember Hopeless Optimist, and we came up with an idea that would work perfect for a Resurrección change that would still keep within my theme. Alright, cool. While I have you here on semantics, an age of 4000+ is much to high for a hollow character. Hollows and arrancars are never as long lived as the other species, because they not only eat themselves, but they also tend to be ganged up on by every other species. They tend to be short lived, in other words. As an example, I never have my hollow leaders even go beyond 1000years old unless there's a serious reason for it. I'd like you to bring this down below 1000 please.
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YummyBiscuits Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Nov 27, 2012 4:48 pm
YummyBiscuits Kairo Yakazu YummyBiscuits Kairo Yakazu YummyBiscuits just a point I want to make before moving onto techniques, your ressurecion will need to have a much larger change. The shinigami release changes the weapon of the user in most cases, and the body of the arrancarian will change in their release. It's a motif that is used throughout the series, such as growing wings, forming armor, or entirely changing the structure of the users body. Simply covering ones hands and feet in liquid metal won't be enough. Something I can suggest would be possibly having the arms and legs grow in size, and changing the structure of them to become more hollow like. Larger digits, smaller palms, but with huge musculature and much longer limbs. Of course, it looks sort of weird, but it really pulls in the oddness that is the hollow body. The only reason I don't have an immense change happening with his Resurrección is because I wanted it to follow along with the theme of his character. He doesn't rely on cheap tricks or changes like most other Arrancar, instead feeling that a fight is something to be respected and won with pure force. That is why he doesn't use his blade, and the reason his Bala, Cero, Gran Rey Cero, and Hierro are the way they are. If you absolutely want me to make some sort of change, I will, but I would much rather leave it be to stick with the flow of the character. We can easily combine both of these ideas. It's simply that I want to follow this grand motif that bleach follows. I require a larger change than gloves and shoes, so just try to add something more. Maybe armor covering most of his arm, or even simply gauntlets. That's all I'm looking for right now. I was talking about it with my buddy and fellow guildmember Hopeless Optimist, and we came up with an idea that would work perfect for a Resurrección change that would still keep within my theme. Alright, cool. While I have you here on semantics, an age of 4000+ is much to high for a hollow character. Hollows and arrancars are never as long lived as the other species, because they not only eat themselves, but they also tend to be ganged up on by every other species. They tend to be short lived, in other words. As an example, I never have my hollow leaders even go beyond 1000years old unless there's a serious reason for it. I'd like you to bring this down below 1000 please. Everything you've requested is done, and I hope also to your standards. A bit hard to explain the armor, but I feel I did a relatively good job.
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Posted: Tue Nov 27, 2012 5:02 pm
Kairo Yakazu YummyBiscuits Kairo Yakazu YummyBiscuits Kairo Yakazu YummyBiscuits just a point I want to make before moving onto techniques, your ressurecion will need to have a much larger change. The shinigami release changes the weapon of the user in most cases, and the body of the arrancarian will change in their release. It's a motif that is used throughout the series, such as growing wings, forming armor, or entirely changing the structure of the users body. Simply covering ones hands and feet in liquid metal won't be enough. Something I can suggest would be possibly having the arms and legs grow in size, and changing the structure of them to become more hollow like. Larger digits, smaller palms, but with huge musculature and much longer limbs. Of course, it looks sort of weird, but it really pulls in the oddness that is the hollow body. The only reason I don't have an immense change happening with his Resurrección is because I wanted it to follow along with the theme of his character. He doesn't rely on cheap tricks or changes like most other Arrancar, instead feeling that a fight is something to be respected and won with pure force. That is why he doesn't use his blade, and the reason his Bala, Cero, Gran Rey Cero, and Hierro are the way they are. If you absolutely want me to make some sort of change, I will, but I would much rather leave it be to stick with the flow of the character. We can easily combine both of these ideas. It's simply that I want to follow this grand motif that bleach follows. I require a larger change than gloves and shoes, so just try to add something more. Maybe armor covering most of his arm, or even simply gauntlets. That's all I'm looking for right now. I was talking about it with my buddy and fellow guildmember Hopeless Optimist, and we came up with an idea that would work perfect for a Resurrección change that would still keep within my theme. Alright, cool. While I have you here on semantics, an age of 4000+ is much to high for a hollow character. Hollows and arrancars are never as long lived as the other species, because they not only eat themselves, but they also tend to be ganged up on by every other species. They tend to be short lived, in other words. As an example, I never have my hollow leaders even go beyond 1000years old unless there's a serious reason for it. I'd like you to bring this down below 1000 please. Everything you've requested is done, and I hope also to your standards. A bit hard to explain the armor, but I feel I did a relatively good job. Alright, looks good to me. I want to add, you don't have to have a time limit on the release. It's returning to a true form, so it isn't much of a drain on reality, unless you happen to be constantly using techniques that drain on reishi. You can get rid of that, if you want too.
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Posted: Tue Nov 27, 2012 5:15 pm
YummyBiscuits Kairo Yakazu YummyBiscuits Kairo Yakazu YummyBiscuits We can easily combine both of these ideas. It's simply that I want to follow this grand motif that bleach follows. I require a larger change than gloves and shoes, so just try to add something more. Maybe armor covering most of his arm, or even simply gauntlets. That's all I'm looking for right now. I was talking about it with my buddy and fellow guildmember Hopeless Optimist, and we came up with an idea that would work perfect for a Resurrección change that would still keep within my theme. Alright, cool. While I have you here on semantics, an age of 4000+ is much to high for a hollow character. Hollows and arrancars are never as long lived as the other species, because they not only eat themselves, but they also tend to be ganged up on by every other species. They tend to be short lived, in other words. As an example, I never have my hollow leaders even go beyond 1000years old unless there's a serious reason for it. I'd like you to bring this down below 1000 please. Everything you've requested is done, and I hope also to your standards. A bit hard to explain the armor, but I feel I did a relatively good job. Alright, looks good to me. I want to add, you don't have to have a time limit on the release. It's returning to a true form, so it isn't much of a drain on reality, unless you happen to be constantly using techniques that drain on reishi. You can get rid of that, if you want too. I got rid of it so fast my history doesn't even register that I did it.
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Posted: Tue Nov 27, 2012 5:19 pm
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