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 Posted: Tue Nov 06, 2012 3:47 am
Name: Lucy Emerfield
age: 15 born in July
Appearance:
[img][img]http://i1286.photobucket.com/albums/a614/jeevze/Snapshot_20121106_3.jpg[/img][/img]
( thats all i could do in 10min sorry i will try again or find a new one i apologise for my crappy drawing crying )
Bio: Lived in a fairly large house in Australia with parents and her sister, that most considered Zombie proof. It held out under the first few waves and seemed reasonably safe before a herd came and overwhelmed them, split from her family she is armed with a few tools from her dad’s shed and a blade with a gem encrusted hilt and enough emergency rations to last about a week.
Personality: stubborn, sarcastic, sassy, loyal, funny, and sometimes dopey
previous occupations: Cashier and kitchen hand at a fast food restaurant, Senior first aid cadet group leader.
family: missing
weapons: A blade and a hammer (main)
inventory: A bike, main tools e.g. a wrench spanner screwdrivers,a rope, some kitchen knives, half a first aid kit and some food supplies.
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Posted: Tue Nov 06, 2012 4:16 am
Much better than your first profile in my opinion. The drawing looks fine girl, trust me, not many people draw their character. I sure as hell didn't. Its unique.
Anyway, the only issues I have are where in the hell do you even get a gem encrusted long blade? Because I'm a collector of swords, of various cultures, and I have never in my life seen one. I've seem gems in the hilts of swords, but never a gem encrusted longblade.
Also I have a problem with the lorikeet, because one, how are you going to feed it and take care of it everyday, and two, I don't know so much about it, but what I do know is that it is a loud screeching bird.
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Posted: Tue Nov 06, 2012 4:35 am
da_final_ninja Much better than your first profile in my opinion. The drawing looks fine girl, trust me, not many people draw their character. I sure as hell didn't. Its unique. Anyway, the only issues I have are where in the hell do you even get a gem encrusted long blade? Because I'm a collector of swords, of various cultures, and I have never in my life seen one. I've seem gems in the hilts of swords, but never a gem encrusted longblade. Also I have a problem with the lorikeet, because one, how are you going to feed it and take care of it everyday, and two, I don't know so much about it, but what I do know is that it is a loud screeching bird. im sorry i meant in the encrusted in the hilt and case i'm not sure how to describe it ill go find it sometime and get a picture and find out what type of blade, but it could defiantly slay zombies. my lorikeet is easy to feed especially if you need to ration some fruit would last quite a while and nectar from the flowers that grow where i live is the natural food source of native lorikeets, yes they are quite loud but mine only goes off when he's hungry in the morning, but he stops the second i come out which would do more good than harm cause without an alarm apocalypse or not i won't wake up till very late but while im with him i doubt he will make much noise and it certainly won't be audible over the native birds .
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Posted: Tue Nov 06, 2012 4:40 am
If the gem is in the hilt it is okay, but instead of a long sword lets make it a regular sword. And you are aware that everything I have set out, the RP areas, is where we are right? You have to think about it like this, imagine you are in a city you have never lived in before. Think of the needs for your pet and think about how you're going to get them in a world full of Walkers, who will eat anything that moves.
Also I need to ask you to work a bit on your grammar. I know you're probably think "Arrrgghhhh grammmmaaaar..." I was like that when I first started RPing, but the sooner you get it better, the sooner people can understand clearly what you're saying. Unless you're me, then no one understands what I'm saying. But I'm just talking about capitalization the most where it needs to be, and some punctuation, like commas, where they need to be.
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Posted: Tue Nov 06, 2012 5:11 am
Alright points noted ill change it since its your RP, but if a zombie apocalypse actually comes im still taking my bird and my dog ... rolleyes
you pretty much hit the nail on the head with the grammar its probably my worst habit but ill try to improve, so please don't get too pissed at me.
anyway its like 11:00pm here so nighty night don't let the Biters bite
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Posted: Wed Nov 07, 2012 1:11 am
Lucy Emerfield is approved.
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