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 Posted: Thu Sep 13, 2012 5:08 pm
I'm not sure if it makes sense or not . . .
Raindrops drummed against the tree along with the beat of thunder and the scintillating lightning.
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Posted: Thu Sep 13, 2012 5:58 pm
Snowblazer I'm not sure if it makes sense or not . . . Raindrops drummed against the tree along with the beat of thunder and the scintillating lightning.
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Posted: Thu Sep 13, 2012 6:21 pm
The way you worded this sentence, in a technical point of view, means that the thunder and lightning are also drumming on the tree.
I know what you mean by this sentence, smile but maybe put in the part of the thunder and lightning before the rain drumming on the tree.
'The loud beats of thunder and scintillating lightning accompanied the large raindrops that drummed against the tree.'
Maybe this makes more sense... in a technical way! stressed
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