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 Posted: Mon Sep 03, 2012 10:33 pm
Alright a simple enough challenge: Describe a room, person, or scene using 1 paragraph only, be sure to restate your topic sentence in a new way at the end of the paragraph as well
length: 10-15 sentences
start date: 9/5/12
End Date: 9/15/12
first place: 15k gold
second place: 10k gold
third place: 5k gold
if there is only 3 writings in this challenge by the end date, all will recieve the second place prize,
Elements to use: a Person, Place, or Scene
Be descriptive,
NO MORE THAN 15 Sentences,
well have fun with this!
also: This is a personal Give away so i myself will be sending out the winnings by 9/20/12 at the latest
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Posted: Mon Sep 10, 2012 6:32 pm
I don't know if i restated the topic sentence right, but here ya go
Darkness renders the soul immobile. It pulls at our hearts tearing it apart until our breath ceases to be. Fear spread throughout his body locking his joints in place. He could hear the beating of his own heart. Panic clogged his lungs. The edges of his vision began to close; darkness was moving in. He could feel the heat of breath on the back of his neck. A sickening smell offended his sense of smell. Sweat rolled down his neck into the crevasse of his back. Footsteps echoed from the darkness. Where is it? He though, franticly searching the darkness for glint of movement. Pain pierced his chest. Wetness blossomed, warming his cold skin. A slight tugging motion staggered him backwards. Copper bubbled in his throat and streamed into his mouth. Darkness lulled him to un-consciousness, tearing his life away. Fear of darkness and what lies inside stills our beating heart until we no longer belive in light and our soul ceases to be.
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Posted: Mon Sep 10, 2012 8:55 pm
Snowblazer I don't know if i restated the topic sentence right, but here ya go Darkness renders the soul immobile. It pulls at our hearts tearing it apart until our breath ceases to be. Fear spread throughout his body locking his joints in place. He could hear the beating of his own heart. Panic clogged his lungs. The edges of his vision began to close; darkness was moving in. He could feel the heat of breath on the back of his neck. A sickening smell offended his sense of smell. Sweat rolled down his neck into the crevasse of his back. Footsteps echoed from the darkness. Where is it? He though, franticly searching the darkness for glint of movement. Pain pierced his chest. Wetness blossomed, warming his cold skin. A slight tugging motion staggered him backwards. Copper bubbled in his throat and streamed into his mouth. Darkness lulled him to un-consciousness, tearing his life away. Fear of darkness and what lies inside stills our beating heart until we no longer belive in light and our soul ceases to be. try shortening it a bit, from what i counted you are at 18 sentences
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Posted: Mon Sep 10, 2012 9:23 pm
Ravyn94 Snowblazer I don't know if i restated the topic sentence right, but here ya go Darkness renders the soul immobile. It pulls at our hearts tearing it apart until our breath ceases to be. Fear spread throughout his body locking his joints in place. He could hear the beating of his own heart. Panic clogged his lungs. The edges of his vision began to close; darkness was moving in. He could feel the heat of breath on the back of his neck. A sickening smell offended his sense of smell. Sweat rolled down his neck into the crevasse of his back. Footsteps echoed from the darkness. Where is it? He though, franticly searching the darkness for glint of movement. Pain pierced his chest. Wetness blossomed, warming his cold skin. A slight tugging motion staggered him backwards. Copper bubbled in his throat and streamed into his mouth. Darkness lulled him to un-consciousness, tearing his life away. Fear of darkness and what lies inside stills our beating heart until we no longer belive in light and our soul ceases to be. try shortening it a bit, from what i counted you are at 18 sentences I miss-counted!!! Crap!!! If an edit is allowed I shall upload it in a few minutes
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Posted: Mon Sep 10, 2012 9:30 pm
Darkness renders the soul immobile. It pulls at our hearts tearing it apart until our breath ceases to be. Fear spread throughout his body locking his joints in place. He could hear the beating of his own heart. Panic clogged his lungs and the edges of his vision began to close; darkness was moving in. He could feel the heat of breath on the back of his neck. A sickening odor offended his sense of smell. Sweat rolled down his neck into the crevasse of his back. Footsteps echoed from the darkness. Where is it? He thought, franticly searching the darkness for glint of movement. Pain pierced his chest. Wetness blossomed, warming his cold skin. A slight tugging motion staggered him backwards. Copper bubbled in his throat and streamed into his mouth. Darkness lulled him to un-consciousness, tearing his life away. Fear of darkness and what lies inside stills our beating heart until we no longer belive in light and our soul ceases to be.
according to my tired eyes, it is now 15 sentences, but i dont trust my eyes though. . . .
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Posted: Tue Sep 11, 2012 5:29 am
Snowblazer (1)Darkness renders the soul immobile. (2)It pulls at our hearts tearing it apart until our breath ceases to be.(3) Fear spread throughout his body locking his joints in place.(4) He could hear the beating of his own heart.(5) Panic clogged his lungs and the edges of his vision began to close; darkness was moving in.(6) He could feel the heat of breath on the back of his neck.(7) A sickening odor offended his sense of smell. ( cool Sweat rolled down his neck into the crevasse of his back. (9)Footsteps echoed from the darkness.(10) Where is it?, He thought, franticly searching the darkness for glint of movement. (11)Pain pierced his chest.(12) Wetness blossomed, warming his cold skin. (13)A slight tugging motion staggered him backwards.(14) Copper bubbled in his throat and streamed into his mouth. (15)Darkness lulled him to un-consciousness, tearing his life away. (16)Fear of darkness and what lies inside stills our beating heart until we no longer belive in light and our soul ceases to be. according to my tired eyes, it is now 15 sentences, but i dont trust my eyes though. . . .i just went thru and numbered it for ya, it makes working on it easier if you number it as you write it
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