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Posted: Thu Jul 12, 2012 4:20 pm
Always a boy of science, Victor found it irrational to believe in supernatural creatures known as Nightmares. They were originally called Nyxies until a great war surged due to their king’s hatred for humans. Then, with a mysterious power, humanity managed to thrive and defeat these otherworldly beings. This was merely an old mare’s tale and nothing more. However, Victor couldn’t help but ponder upon the possibility that Nightmares actually existed at some point in time, so consequently, under his father’s supervision, the young boy searched throughout London for any signs that these organisms lived in the past. Although there was plenty of information in the libraries in the forms of myths and legends, he wanted to see “the real thing”, but, sadly, no Nightmares appeared before him.
At the age of thirteen, Victor moves to the Butterfly Mansion alongside his father. The rumors said that ghosts inhabited the manor, but a haunted manor was a status symbol (or so Victor was told). Much to his dismay, he’d given up on the search for Nightmares and continued developing his previous passion: inventing. Nonetheless, that inclination towards technology was short-lived when eerie sounds were heard. The servants, maids, butlers, and even his father were deaf to the scratching and heavy footsteps, not to mention blind to the mysterious vanishings of food and certain objects. Victor also ignored the paranormal activity until one of his hats floated on its own at night.
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Posted: Thu Jul 12, 2012 5:24 pm
Interesting.
However since there is no time reference in the first paragraph ( that my sleepy eyes can see anyways) I would change the beginning of the second paragraph so something like, "He was thirteen when they moved..."
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Posted: Thu Jul 12, 2012 6:20 pm
Snowblazer Interesting. However since there is no time reference in the first paragraph ( that my sleepy eyes can see anyways) I would change the beginning of the second paragraph so something like, "He was thirteen when they moved..." Oh pffft. Silly me. You can never reread too much. xd I fixed it along with a few other things here and there, and as always, thank you! razz
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Posted: Thu Jul 12, 2012 6:47 pm
ShugarSkull Snowblazer Interesting. However since there is no time reference in the first paragraph ( that my sleepy eyes can see anyways) I would change the beginning of the second paragraph so something like, "He was thirteen when they moved..." Oh pffft. Silly me. You can never reread too much. xd I fixed it along with a few other things here and there, and as always, thank you! razz Welcome! gaia_angelleft cat_blaugh gaia_angelright
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Posted: Sat Jul 14, 2012 9:05 pm
I'm intrigued, and I do hope you continue the story. Just don't leave me or any other reader hanging for too long, ok? wink
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Posted: Sat Jul 14, 2012 9:15 pm
Saphira Angira I'm intrigued, and I do hope you continue the story. Just don't leave me or any other reader hanging for too long, ok? wink Haha. Thanks for the advice. I think I'll post the next part tomorrow, and see if I get more feedback. I hope I do though. This is a story I plan to continue.... sweatdrop
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Posted: Sun Jul 15, 2012 7:13 pm
Part two of the story! Enjoy!
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After a few futile attempts, he managed to catch the invisible being, and, to his surprise, the creature’s eyes glowed in the dark. It broke free from his grasp, flew away, and disappeared in the library. The next morning, Victor left the hat near some bookshelves with a chocolate chip cookie underneath, and the little creature instantly appeared. Ready to leave with the hat as it finished its meal, the creature hesitated when offered a second cookie. Victor looked at the small, black blob in broad daylight and recognized it as a Nightmare.
Befriending the Nightmare (and letting it get away with his hat), Victor had to deal with more ghastly occurrences. He knew that Nightmares were behind every bump in the night, so, little by little, he studied them at his own risk. As a result from his observations, he learned that the small Nightmares carried items such as forks and pens whereas the bigger Nightmares were in charge of grabbing the food unnoticed. He also learned their routines and schedules, and that the bigger ones were not only literate but could talk fluently as well. Victor left them a pastry at some checkpoints around the mansion, and eventually gained the courage to befriend even the most dangerous nightmare in the manor: a Level 5 Nightmare.
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Care to give me some feedback? Information about the Nightmares is well underway!
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Posted: Mon Jul 16, 2012 2:25 pm
ShugarSkull Part two of the story! Enjoy!
**************************************************After a few futile attempts, he managed to catch the invisible being, and, to his surprise, the creature’s eyes glowed in the dark. It broke free from his grasp, flew away, and disappeared in the library. The next morning, Victor left the hat near some bookshelves with a chocolate chip cookie underneath, and the little creature instantly appeared. Ready to leave with the hat as it finished its meal, the creature hesitated when offered a second cookie. Victor looked at the small, black blob in broad daylight and recognized it as a Nightmare. Befriending the Nightmare (and letting it get away with his hat), Victor had to deal with more ghastly occurrences. He knew that Nightmares were behind every bump in the night, so, little by little, he studied them at his own risk. As a result from his observations, he learned that the small Nightmares carried items such as forks and pens whereas the bigger Nightmares were in charge of grabbing the food unnoticed. He also learned their routines and schedules, and that the bigger ones were not only literate but could talk fluently as well. Victor left them a pastry at some checkpoints around the mansion, and eventually gained the courage to befriend even the most dangerous nightmare in the manor: a Level 5 Nightmare. **************************************************
Care to give me some feedback? Information about the Nightmares is well underway! Very interesting!! It seemed to moved a little to fast though....either that or my mind is on warp speed....
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Posted: Mon Jul 16, 2012 7:04 pm
Snowblazer ShugarSkull Part two of the story! Enjoy!
**************************************************After a few futile attempts, he managed to catch the invisible being, and, to his surprise, the creature’s eyes glowed in the dark. It broke free from his grasp, flew away, and disappeared in the library. The next morning, Victor left the hat near some bookshelves with a chocolate chip cookie underneath, and the little creature instantly appeared. Ready to leave with the hat as it finished its meal, the creature hesitated when offered a second cookie. Victor looked at the small, black blob in broad daylight and recognized it as a Nightmare. Befriending the Nightmare (and letting it get away with his hat), Victor had to deal with more ghastly occurrences. He knew that Nightmares were behind every bump in the night, so, little by little, he studied them at his own risk. As a result from his observations, he learned that the small Nightmares carried items such as forks and pens whereas the bigger Nightmares were in charge of grabbing the food unnoticed. He also learned their routines and schedules, and that the bigger ones were not only literate but could talk fluently as well. Victor left them a pastry at some checkpoints around the mansion, and eventually gained the courage to befriend even the most dangerous nightmare in the manor: a Level 5 Nightmare. **************************************************
Care to give me some feedback? Information about the Nightmares is well underway! Very interesting!! It seemed to moved a little to fast though....either that or my mind is on warp speed.... Lolz. Seriously? I thought my story was going way too slow, but don't worry. I'm certainly taking my time explaining the "level" concept regarding the Nightmares. Plus, there's the climax, but I won't spoil a thing. wink
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Posted: Fri Feb 01, 2013 8:26 pm
I hope an update is soon...
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Posted: Sun Feb 17, 2013 7:38 pm
Part three of the story! Enjoy!
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Two more years go by, and a fifteen year old Victor had practically made himself an ally of the Nightmares. The first Nightmare he met was the one closest to him, so it was the only nightmare to receive the name of Onyx. As for the others, he’d only refer to them as the Levels, but the Nightmares didn’t mind at all. Unbeknownst to Victor, the ringleader of the Nightmares at Butterfly Mansion was not at all pleased that his fellow allies were on friendly terms with a human. Out of curiosity though, he left his sanctuary to seek out Victor. Bewildered was he at the sight of the boy sleeping soundly with seven Nightmares under the covers, including the Level 5 Nightmare. Without a second thought, he decided to test Victor’s courage. When he was about to go to sleep the following night, a chill went down his spine, and a red moon shone brightly from the window.
“Let us... share a secret with you... Victor,” the Nightmares said at the same time.
Thinking he finally has earned their full trust, Victor followed them to the library which held a hidden entrance behind two book shelves. He moved them and saw a staircase that led to a secret chamber. When the Nightmares refused to go down with him, Victor was a little frightened. He felt odd, as if something was definitely wrong. The nightmares forced some reassuring yet creepy smiles and did not look at his human friend in the eyes. Once Victor closed the heavy door to the secret chamber, he was locked in with the leader of the Nightmares and his father’s corpse.
“Oh dear. So you saw.... Don't be afraid, okay?” the Nightmare said.
The door suddenly disappeared.
“Where are you going? Where are you going?? Won't you please wait?”
A black hooded figure appeared.
“You're the star of this crazy night! Will everything go according to plan?”
He lunged for his throat. Victor barely dodged the attack.
“The ending is up to you to decide,” he said, giving Victor a jump scare from behind.
“Search. Search for the happy ending!” His voice echoed in the room. “If you lose, it will all be over for you. But does the true ending lead to your death? Will tonight be another bad ending?”
The black hooded figure turned into a dark mist and took the form of a monster that seemed human. It was a Level 8 Nightmare, and the leader of the Nightmares at Butterfly Mansion no less. He reanimated Victor’s dead father and ordered him to go against his son.
“Run! Run as fast as you can! Forget everything good and bad! Just kill him and have fun to the point of going mad!!”
Victor didn’t know what to do other than to defend himself. After evading a few blows, he noticed that something was amiss. He couldn’t explain it well but knew that he wasn’t fighting his father. Thus, Victor decided to take a chance and let his father hit him. Just as he suspected, it was an illusion. Victor immediately directed his attention to the Nightmare, and threw him a nearby vase to confirm his other suspicion. The nightmare caught and threw it right back at Victor. He was “the real thing”.
“You were able to see through the trick. I’ll give you that much, but you’re still not close to the happy ending,” the Nightmare said as he ran towards Victor. “Let’s see how you deal with me.”
Victor didn’t hold back hitting and kicking, but going on the offensives was futile. The Nightmare was faster than him, but Victor used a different attack. He did the same thing as before first. He lowered his guard, his opponent took the opportunity, and they clasped each other’s hands. The Nightmare pushed him back against the wall, as Vincent expected, and with a good ol’ classic headbutt his adversary released him. As the Nightmare covered his face, Vincent knew that this was his only chance at throwing his opponent some serious damage. He quickly followed his headbutt with a punch in the stomach and then in the face. Bewildered, the Nightmare tumbled.
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I apologize for my hiatus, but I promise you that this story will have an ending, although I cannot say if it will be good or bad. However, I will spoil you this: the Nightmare itself will be the one providing you with info about his kind. So with that said, are you looking forward to the next update?
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Posted: Mon Feb 18, 2013 1:27 am
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High-functioning Recalibrator
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Posted: Sat Feb 23, 2013 5:21 am
Great story biggrin I liked all parts lol
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