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Night Kunoichi

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Posted: Sat May 12, 2012 10:04 pm

Laughing smiles, swirling gowns and delicate tapered heels. The room was a swirl, a veritable maelstrom of color spinning round and round and round. The night was cool, the air was clean, and the stars were all a bright. And swirls of clouds wreathed the moon in a milky halo of light. I looked at him and he looked at me, with eyes as bright as the sky. I hated him but oh how I loved him just as much.

And so we danced. Because that’s all we could do.

Posted: Sat May 12, 2012 10:07 pm

This is a drabble I wrote for fun once. For those who don't know what a drabble is, it is a piece of fiction that is 100 words or less. I hope you enjoy. :]

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Posted: Sat May 12, 2012 10:16 pm

Good! I liked it a lot! The details were excellent. I was able to clearly picture the scene. If I were you, I would continue, turn this into something more than just a drabble. But then again, I am not you so do as you like. I really enjoyed reading it and hope to see more of your work on here biggrin

Posted: Sun Jun 17, 2012 5:29 pm

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Good! I liked it a lot! The details were excellent. I was able to clearly picture the scene. If I were you, I would continue, turn this into something more than just a drabble. But then again, I am not you so do as you like. I really enjoyed reading it and hope to see more of your work on here biggrin

Wow, I totally forgot that I had posted this on here. xD So here I am, just looking through the different sections and I see my drabble. So here I am, responding to your kind review a month after. sweatdrop

I know that something more could be made of it because I have made this drabble so vague but I probably won't pick it up. This was actually something I did in a contest that I hoped would give me a nice challenge. However, if you saw something more in particular in this piece, you are more than welcome to pick it up since I know I won't touch it. biggrin

I do have one other thing I've written on here if you are interested. It won't be updated for a very very long time since it's a part of a series I'm trying to write and it's a scene I plan to have in my second book. But if you want to read here it is:

http://www.gaiaonline.com/guilds/viewtopic.php?t=22930433

Thank you very much for your review! and sorry for taking so long. sweatdrop

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Posted: Sun Jun 17, 2012 5:49 pm

Night Kunoichi

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Good! I liked it a lot! The details were excellent. I was able to clearly picture the scene. If I were you, I would continue, turn this into something more than just a drabble. But then again, I am not you so do as you like. I really enjoyed reading it and hope to see more of your work on here biggrin

Wow, I totally forgot that I had posted this on here. xD So here I am, just looking through the different sections and I see my drabble. So here I am, responding to your kind review a month after. sweatdrop

I know that something more could be made of it because I have made this drabble so vague but I probably won't pick it up. This was actually something I did in a contest that I hoped would give me a nice challenge. However, if you saw something more in particular in this piece, you are more than welcome to pick it up since I know I won't touch it. biggrin

I do have one other thing I've written on here if you are interested. It won't be updated for a very very long time since it's a part of a series I'm trying to write and it's a scene I plan to have in my second book. But if you want to read here it is:

http://www.gaiaonline.com/guilds/viewtopic.php?t=22930433

Thank you very much for your review! and sorry for taking so long. sweatdrop

It's alright, I'm not offended you took forever to post or anything. And I don't think I'll use this or anything because I would feel bad about using something that isn't mine. I did see your other work here but didn't notice it was you that posted it haha. I skimmed it really but it looks great! I have something on here too if you didn't see it. I've been looking for feedback everywhere but haven't gotten a whole lot. Here it is if you want to check it out.

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