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 Posted: Fri Apr 20, 2012 7:07 pm
QUEST FORM
Basics ::
xxxxxName: Lance
xxxxxNickname(s): Lace, Lacey - Call him that, and you will be burned. Severely (xD This is mainly just a joke...)
xxxxxFaction: Hearts
xxxxxAge: 18 - 20something
xxxxxHeight: 6'2
xxxxxBody Type: Muscular
xxxxxBlood Type: AB-
Poké-basics ::
xxxxxPokemon: Charizard (Currently Charmander)
xxxxxPokemon type: Fire/Flying
xxxxxNatural Ability: Blaze - When a Pokémon with Blaze uses a Fire-type move, the power will increase by 1.5× if the user has less than or equal to ⅓ of its maximum HP remaining.
xxxxxPerma: No
xxxxxMoveset:
xxxxxCharmander:
xxxEmber
xxxSmokescreen
xxxScratch
xxxDragon Rage
xxxxxCharmelon:
xxxEmber
xxxFlamethrower
xxxShadow Claw
xxxDragon Claw
xxxxxCharizard:
xxxFlamethrower
xxxFire Fang
xxxEmber
xxxAerial Ace
Personality ::
xxxxxPositive Traits
Resourceful - Lance learned at an early age that if he was going to get through live, he needed to think on his feet. With the help of his mentor, Lance learned various methods of using what was available to him to overcome challenges he may face. Easy ways to bandage wounds. How to weave things together. ... I'd say making fire but uh.. he seems to have that area covered. Things people would normally take for granted, Lance can find another use for it. He has a good eye for finding things, and knows what generally holds up or works better than other things. Lots of on the field practice have resulted in him having steadfast hands.
Loyal - While Lance takes his job seriously, whether it just be a normal hit or an order from the Queen, whom he supports, his true loyalty is to his friends. If the situation arose where the Queen ordered to him to kill one of them, Lance would risk everything to protect them. As a way to show this, he would bring false proof of a kill. Their tattered shirt covered in animals blood an organ, claiming the deed was done. Being loyal is so far, the only way he can express any real emotion to those he cares about.
xxxxxNeutral Traits
Watchful - Lance is an observant charizard. He will watch and study, not only the people around him but his surrounding environment. There have been times where he has literally spent hours in the same place. Just watching everything. Seeing who does what, and when and where they do it. His reasoning is "Everyone reacts differently." This, oddly enough, has absolutely nothing to do with his line of work. As he has been doing this ever since he was a child. More often than not, some details, not always helpful ones mind you, will end up sticking in his mind, while most times others just tend to fade into the background.
xxxxxNegative Traits
Stubborn - The second you try to talk to him about a different way of doing things, you might as well be talking to a brick wall. Lance gets this way because he can get a bit... uncomfortable with new experiances and he doesn't particularly want anyone to see that. He would rather stick with what he knows and trusts, then to be stuck somewhere forgein and be on edge all day. On that note though, he could care less what you choice to do though. Lance might come off as rude or arrogant to some people by ignoring his advice. But that's just how he rolls.
Guarded - Lance doesn't like people getting close to him. He's very selective about the things he tells people when it involves himself. Lance does this because of work. He doesn't need any enemies digging up any information or using loved ones against him. So think of it like he's protecting both himself and the people around him. Sure, he might come off grumpy and anti social, but hey. If you were in this line of work, wouldn't you? Due to this however, Its very hard for Lance to express his inner emotions with those closest too him. It frustrates him greatly. There have been times when Lance is feeling defensive over a particular issue where he will snap at whomever he is with, often times saying something rather offensive, without anything to soften the blow.
xxxxxLikes: Working Out, Getting Paid GDI.
xxxxxDislikes: Getting Caught In The Rain, Lazy People, Idiots. Maddox (Lance is lying to himself here. He just hasn't accepted that yet.) His Claustrophobia.
xxxxxFavourite Food: Alfredo. Any kind of Alfredo. Lance loves it aaaaaall.
xxxxxHobbies:
Cooking - Lance loves to cook. He often uses it as a way to relax after a bad day of 'work.'
Studying - I don't mean your basic subject. I mean people.
xxxxxInterests: Reading
xxxxxFaction Opinion:Some people might consider the Hearts to be elite snobs. But to me its home. Snobs and all.
xxxxxAspirations: To do the best that he can.
xxxxxFears:Lightning, Small rooms and areas.
Employment::
xxxxxTitle: Devil's Snare
xxxxxJob: Mercenary/Hitman thing.
Appearance::
xxxxxHair: Platinum Blonde in color. Kinda girly looking. He's got some hair up in a ponytail while the rest falls in his face, covering one eye. Like || this
xxxxxEyes: A bright and warm golden amber kind of color.
xxxxxSkin tone: Tannish.
xxxxxPalette:
xxxxxClothing: Uniform Style clothing. Think Militaryish.
xxxxxAdditional: Is know to occasionally get into a scrap with Maddox. Dox has a habbit of calling Lance by his... 'pet-names'. Lace or Lacey.
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Posted: Tue May 29, 2012 11:20 am
TO DO LIST
Fix Traits
Fix Traits, New Asperation/Title
Fix Traits.
Mental Plot Notes for further down the road.
1. Lance is paranoid about his enemies finding out about his boyfriend and using him again him. This causes the Charizard to get possessive of his boyfriend.
2. Lance's boyfriend turns out to be an underground criminal. What will Lance do when he's ordered to bring him in? Or worse, Kill him. (This would start the false kill proof habit in his Loyalty Trait)
3. Stuck in a small room with nothing but a friend, Lance's claustrophobia gets the better of him. Can his friend calm the unstable dragon?
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Posted: Tue Jun 19, 2012 10:43 pm
I've decided to take a crack at this~
Hard-working: I'm going to say, upfront that your description does not match the word you've chosen. You're describing a perfectionist. Also, it may help to describe the trait more, flesh it out, make it multidimensional so it seems like you're describing him internally from all sides, not just describing what someone sees.
My Body is a Temple: I can see how this can be positive, but I can also see this as narcissistic from your description, making it a more neutral trait. Perhaps focusing on why it makes it a more positive trait may help, however maybe I would try a different angle. Is there a specific trait of his personality that makes him take good care of his body? Maybe he takes good care of everything which would link into the perfectionism I saw in the first description above.
Guarded: The way this is written makes him seem very anti-social, thus making it less of a neutral trait and more of a negative trait. Is there any reason why he's guarded? How does this affect him specifically in social situations? How does it make others see him? This might help you tighten up this profile.
Blunt: I'd like more elaboration on this. How far will he go with this? Will he be blunt all the time, even if it hurts someone? I'd recommend using more description in this trait as it's very vague and general at this time. When it comes to traits, paragraphs of 3-5 sentences give the most solid views of the dimensions of each trait.
Tense: While this is okay as a trait, I'd like to suggest perhaps something like high-strung, perhaps. Him being stressed all the time most likely means that he's prone to being easily stressed, thus the suggestion. However it is entirely up to you if you do decide to use it.
I hope this helped. <3
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Posted: Sat Jul 07, 2012 11:17 pm
ALRIGHT. TIME TO TRY THIS AGAIN
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2012 10:38 am
Crit time again~
Hard-working - Unfortunately, I'm not seeing much change here. This trait is still very unfocused.
Guarded - Still coming off as a negative, not a neutral trait.
Claustrophobia - This is not a personality trait at all. Fears and phobias would go under 'dislikes'.
Otherwise the other two traits are looking better.
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Posted: Wed Aug 08, 2012 10:16 pm
XD THIRD TIMES THE CHARM. RIGHT? Ikid. No rush on this.
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Posted: Tue Aug 14, 2012 10:38 am
Observant - Not a neutral trait. A neutral trait is a trait that is neither positive nor negative. Observant is a positive trait as it is useful and doesn't cause problems for anyone.
Sutbborn - To make this read bet, I'd take out the parts saying it's part of his 'charm' as it makes it seem like you're trying to put a positive light on a negative feature. When writing traits in this particular format you want negative to focus on negative and positive on positive.
Guarded This isn't quite as negative as I would like. Not quite negative, or quite neutral. It needs to be either fully negative or balanced to be neutral.
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Posted: Fri Aug 24, 2012 8:58 pm
Looks like all the concerns were addressed * o* *stamps this*
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