First up, Karasu, since he is my favorite out of all my OCs.
_-Names-_
1. Is named after you (plus 5 if fic, plus 2 if RP) LOL hell no. That would be quite weird to be named Karasu in real life. o_o
2. Is a name you made up, pulled outta your butt, or variants thereof? Nope, it is an actual word.
3. Is the name not Japanese?(if not, please get one before you continue) Yes it is.
-Is her name is a non-Japanese noun?(and not Japanese) That just repeating what you said. Of course if it is a non-Japanese now, it wouldn't be Japanese. Duh.
--If you had her/his name be nouns AND in English (Like Sapphire Daisy Lonemoon), please reconsidered your ocs in general.
Or just change their names.
---If normal in your RP, count it out biggrin
4. Is s/he named after a canon character & is confused with on of them a lot? (this doesn't count if it's for humor). No, I don't think anyone in the series is named Karasu and to be fair, there will be people that share the same name unless extremely unusual.
5. Does s/he have more than 1 middle name/first name? (+1 for every name)
- Minus 1 if it's a tradition for their clan to carry Surnames. Surnames are last names, most will have one. neutral
Extra: If you frequently misspell the name on accident, slap yourself & say "DOH!"
LOL I did that with my real name before. Accidents happen, don't count that if was just an accident and fixed.
Total so far:
Uh? Not sure?
minus 1?
````Looks````
1.Does your OC have an impractical hair length & doesn't usually keep it tied up? It's fine, not long, medium probably.
--Minus one if it does inconvenience your OC frequently
2. Has oddly colored hair (I mean 'odd' as in BRIGHT neon blue, lime green or something silly like that. Any of the basic MSPaint colors to be exact)
No, but this IS Naruto, Sakura has bubble gum pink for goodness sake. I won't count it given the series.
3. Has more than one hair color (+1 for each)
What if they had hair dye or natural streaks? That isn't allowed?
---if it's naturally like that, erase that point & give yourself a plus +2 for each different hair color that occurs
----if these are just highlights that occur naturally in nature (ex. light brown hair w/ blond highlights), subtract the points
Well Karasu would probably have natural color streaks as that is common and real black hair or even dark brown will have some tints.
4. Can the OC change hair length(other than cutting it) & color (other than dyeing it) at will (+4) If it's a jutsu, it doesn't count.
LOL what?
5. Are the OC's eyes unnatural in color (Purple is the exception, but anything else, no)
Yes, but it IS Naruto after all, pay attention. This why a lot of test fail. It is common in Naruto, doesn't count.
---Eyes can change color (*sings*A girl with kaleidoscope eyes...) (+2)
----And are basically a mood ring? (+3)
Yes, it is fitting but since his clan is supposed to be all but extinct and powerful, I guess I give him that. +2 well it is part of a kekkei genkai and not a mood thing.
6. Eyes are 2 different colors (either one in each eye or in the same eye & it's not hazel)?
Nope, though if the eye was cut out and replaced, I would say it doesn't count. Eye transplants happen in Naruto.
---If that's because one is Sharingan & the other's Byakugan, or Rissenagon, REMOVE THEIR EYES before the Sue hunters RIP YOU APART. D:
Ew, that would just be weird. Want to try it now and see all comments that happen. LOL of course, it would be for a joke only.
7. Have any unusual tattoos(I mean UNUSUAL, like bright or big?
No
--if it contains a secret about his/her past, +2
No
---if that secret is royalty, +3
No and I don't see many royalty with tattoos.
8. Has unusual birthmark that's critical to the story?
Don't think so.
--if it contains a secret about his/her past, +2
No
---if that secret is royalty, +3
No
9. Do they have a great body/ are highly beautiful (I mean, like INSANELY good)
Depends on the persons opinion. Some may think he is good looking while others wouldn't. He isn't god like I don't think.
--Thin enough to be anorexic in a good way? +2
No, he is a bit lanky but not anorexic or look that way. o_o
---And have a variant of "curves in all the right places'? +3
God, I hope not. He is a male and had no surgery or hormone treatments.
---- If this is counterbalanced by a personality flaw (I.E., manipulates people with their looks) or their clan raised them to be like this for a good reason, remove points
A clan can't raise someone to have curves or look unnatural good, it has to be from good genes and luck.
-----Is a canon character jealous of this?
Don't think so.
------Even though it's OOC for them?
No but now I just imagined Ino for some reason. lol
11. Does your character have impractical clothes? (I.E. Something that limits their movement/shows their undies, snags easily, etc.)
Canon characters have impractical clothing. Mesh Metal shirts and guards, high heels? Mini skirts with bandages? Kishi wasn't going for practicality but style, I say this doesn't count because of that. If in canon, I say it is o.k. for OCs as well unless stated otherwise (like something really special or unique to a certain person or some requirements are needed).
-- +2 if it shows more skin than any of the other Kunouchis or Jounins in the series.
LOL no
12. Has clothes from real world (like graphic tees & skinny jeans) +5
Don't count as Kishi would have to gotten inspiration from the real world. Real ninjas had no mini skirts or zippers and all the clothing most wear is fairly modern.
-----Has clothes from real brand stores (Like Aeopostle or Hot Topic) +5 (no!)
LOL no, they have their own stores. cool
13. Do their clothes copy heavily of a canon character's clothes?
Nah, I can't really see that happening with Karasu.
Animals will cover ears & other stuff.
Uh?
Total so far:
Hell should I know, 1 or 2 maybe. xd
~Where they came from~
1. Is s/he from a made up village?
No, well, where was Karasu born? It happened during the current war. Uncertain on that one.
---Is the villages name totally awesome, like the Village Hidden by Wolves, Village Hidden in the Flames, Village hidden in the Guns... etc.?
Please, they have nothing on Dansho. talk2hand
----Furthermore, if it's village hidden by guns, message your story to me please! I'd like to read that!
LOL
2. Are they from a filler episode village?
Nah, would be awesome if Dansho was canon.
3. Did they move from a made up village to a canonical village?
-- for no explained reason?
They moved yes but is that really unusual or make for bad character? I personally don't think so unless they don't allow foreigners but he is a second gen and things probably changed.
---Even though the two villages in question would never allow it due to feuding or other issues?
Nah, not at this point probably.
----Is the new village where there love interest is?
I guess
4. Did they come from a canonical village & move to a different canonical village?
Sort of
--For no explained reason?
Well it was explained
---Even though the two villages in question would never allow it due to feuding or other issues?
Not at this point probably
----Is the new village where there love interest is?
I guess
5. Are they a reincarnation of a character from a different anime/cartoon/show/story? +8
Copy no but oh god there are many of those on DA and not crossovers.
--Ignore if it's supposed to be a crossover.
6. Is s/he from the real world(our world)? +10
No
---If they are & use their knowledge of canon to save someone from death/change something, +7
No
-----If they are not questioned heavily by the canon characters for knowing all about them & don't bother to bring that subject up, +7
Np
------If they are accepted by the villains (Akatsuki or Sound, etc) and NOT used for information, +10, for OOC & fridge logic
No, he would probably hate them for all that happened.
-------If they're SOMEHOW RELATED to a CANON CHARACTER AND s/he is FROM THE REAL WORLD, read your darn story through and see if you made it make sense. If it does, +10. If not, abandon the fanfic, or re-write it so it does.
LOL
Extra: If your character has items that do NOT exist in the Naruto world AT ALL, Ex. An ipod, Video Game system, another anime, a SuperMan cape, etc., then confiscate ALL items from your OC. ALL OF THEM.
They have TVs, Monitors, trains, etc...as long it isn't a gun, I don't think it would really matter as that is the only thing said to not be allowed and depends on the time period as well.
Total so far:
2-4 at most. I explained why and stand by it.
___Family___
Parents:
1. Are they canon characters?
One is but that doesn't make him a bad character, it is all a matter of how it is written in my opinion and possible. +1
--Are they underage?(+2, but ignore if they're a second generation. If the kid is in the present & is explained by time travel, add 2 MORE points instead)
Second gen, ignored.
---are they 2 MALE or 2 FEMALE canon characters? +5 for not understanding how babies are born
They can't adopt or hire a surrogacy? Or is just based of male pregnancy and all that? Either way, no.
2. Are the parents a canon & another oc?
Yes, so? I tried to make it work and keep them in character as much as possible, even in AU fine +1
3. Are the parents evil?
No, Itachi was proven to be good and Yuko isn't evil, she is just human and don't always make good choices.
4. Are they Kakashi, Orochimaru, Hidan (any of the Akatsuki for that matter), or a kage's daughter/son? (+2 plus the canon character question, too. ...Unless they're next gen.)
Second gen, so this doesn't count than? I am a bit confused by this.Would all of their kids be second gen? Or do they mean parents of those characters?
5. Are they abusive?
No
6. Are they dead? (+2)
Sadly yes, that can't be helped though and most nin die. I say it doesn't count unless the character in question became pregnant long after and said to be that characters child or something weird like that.
---And not staying with a relative?(+2) (if it's because of tension in their own clan never mind, if the oc has no other clan members, +1)
He has his mom and step dad. Even so, as long as some cared for the young kids, I say it doesn't really matter. Maybe they have none? Many clans had been slaughter due to kekkei genkai and ninjas die at early ages fairly often,
----Taken in by a canon character from a different village?(+2, same village 1)
No
-----Who is also (or related to) their love interest? (+2)
No
7. Are they immediately related to a canon character, like a sibling or such? (ONLY if their family hasn't been shown much [other than Naruto & Sasuke])
No besides uncles and his father, but that has been explained and at least makes some sense and fit in.
-----Are they either: Naruto's lost sibling, the other last Uchiha, or a relative of Kimimaru? (+5)
Second gen, doesn't count as the last Uchiha could get people pregnant if they wanted to. Not a pre massacre Uchiha that lived, so I say it shouldn't really count.
8. Is the rest of your OC's clan dead?(+2)
Most are
---Because someone killed them?(+3)
usually that is how that happens in the ninja world. Duh
----Because Orochimaru killed them?(+2)
No
-----Because Itachi killed them?(+5 for ignoring canon, but +2 for last Uchiha, none if the main character of your fic is Sasuke)
I didn't ignore it, he is a second gen so he wasn't involved in it and Itachi is his dad. Already gave a point for that.
------Because S/HE killed them? (+10, what the hell? Unless Itachi is the main character.)
So they can't kill? No
-------If the oc's dead with the rest of the clan, remove those points! biggrin
Well Tsukiyo, Shun, Kaoru, Katsuo are. See? I didn't ignore it.
Siblings:
9. Are they a sibling to a canon character we haven't seen much of?
No
--What about one who's not a main character, but not a small role in the story either?
No
---One who's outright stated to not have any brothers or sisters? +4
No
10. Did their sibling kill off their clan, save for them? +3
No, only happened once in the series anyways.
-For no reason given in story? If so, go find one - NOW! D:
No
-- Is the sibling Itachi? +5 more
LOL god no. Would be weird and I try to make some sense of things at least.
---If he is your OC's brother, and your OC is still on good terms with them (Ex. They still talk to each other, your OC brings him cookies, etc.), add 8 more points. It's OK if your OC just accepts the fact he killed the entire clan and came to terms with his or her anger over it, but still doesn't want to see Itachi ever again.
No, they would be dead anyways as Itachi only had a brother and spared his
life because he could bare to kill him.
1. Does your character have a twin? This doesn't get points, but for every bullet(•) that comes below this does:
No
•Is the twin a canon character? +2 (no matter who it is, since you already got points for that)
No
•Did you give your OC a twin or make 2 twins on purpose just so one can go after one Canon character romantically and the other gets another character romantically, +6
No
•Do we focus on one twin throughout the story, & the other twin is just there to praise, complement, and show off how much of a good person the OC is? +3
No
Etc.
12. Is someone in canon that we don't see a lot of in canon your OC's aunt or uncle?
No, he is in the story all the damn time now.
-What about one who's not a main character, but not a small role in the story either?
No
--What about someone stated not to have any brothers or sisters(Ex. Kakashi? +6
No
---Does said Aunt or Uncle spoil the OC?
I don't see Sasuke doing that....
----Is the spoiling Out of Character for said character? +2
Yes and no, he doesn't.
-Or, maybe the Aunt/Uncle & OC mutually dislike each other for whatever reason, minus 3.
I think Karasu is creeped out by him and probably says away. -3
--If you don't have a reason, keep the points you originally had
13. Is your character part of a clan that doesn't have any members, or just one sole surviving one, and is still living in the present day as the sole survivor or other last Highlander? (ex. The Uzumaki's & Uchiha's, + Kimimaru's & Haku's) If so, +8. THERE CAN BE ONLY ONE
Not if they had a kid had it doesn't have to be besides, two Uchiha are still alive (I am assuming that Tobi is still an Uchiha, even though now it isn't Madara). Second gen doesn't count if you can make it work I say.
Total so far:
I think 3 now or something as I stand by my statements.
@Love@
1. Does you character have multiple crushes? (+1 for every crush s/he has on someone else, unless s/he's had them throughout her life at different times)
Well that isn't unusual, people have many crushes over a life time. Crushes isn't the same as love or dating.
2. How many people are crushing on your oc? One for each. (Unless it's Jiraya)
I don't know, all I know that Shinsetsu likes him but not sure about others.
3. Is there someone crushing on your oc that would probably never be in a relationship?(Ex. Gaara PRE-timeskip, Orochimaru and if the couples are on opposing side (like Akatsuki and the leaf village)) +5
No
--If they are on opposing sides, is your story is titled "forbidden love" or a variant therefor?+2
No
4. Does a character crush on your oc for no particular reason? (+3)
Possible, happens in real life. They just may think they are cute and that's it but I don't really know.
--Can they not stop thinking about them?
Don't know, maybe?
5. Has a character (not the character the oc's interested in) ever attempted to rape your character? (+10)
No....o_O
--And succeeded? (+5 more)
No, Karasu would probably kill them if they tried. Wait, would Kimi count? He did drugged Karasu....
---If it's the oc's love interest (whether or not they succeeded), +10
No
---Did the oc enjoy it? If so, DO NOT CONTINUE. You... you need to spend some time researching rape & it's psychological repercussions, and be smacked upside the head. A lot.
No
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--It was Orochimaru, wasn't it?(or someone else evil)? (+1)
No but lol
----If it was a non, evil character that would NEVER rape someone (or even has the slightest bit of morals) +10
No.....if they had morals, I doubt they would rape. I think you need to reword that.
6. Now, on the topic of consensual sex: how many times does your character shag someone else? +2 for each partner.
The hell sound I know, I am not even going to try and count if he was drunk or drugged.
I'll give a +4 at most and leave it at that. Not really talked about anyways.
--If they sleep with multiple people to use them or because they're the village bicycles, minus half the previous score.
He was drunk probably....
---And if the above doesn't suffer any consequences for using people, add those points back on. (village bicycles get a free pass this time)
Does bad hangover counts? If anything, they would be taking advantage of him. dramallama
----Hey, is either your OC or the other partner who had sex underage(below age 16)? +4 for each minor, you dolt.
He was 15 the first time, but 15 year olds have sex now a days, not too unrealistic sadly. Now if 13 or younger, I would add points.
7. Is a canon character crushing on your oc that has a gap of over 5 years (only for teens and minors, like if Kakashi is crushing on a 12 year old. Creepy!) +5
No
--Is it because you say that they're a *****? (+5 more, unless it's orochimaru. Then it's +1 instead, just for him being so damn creepy)
No and Orochi didn't have sex with the kids, just using them and they willing went to him, well most anyways. Just pointing that out.
8. Does the oc's love reform a evil character?
No
--+5 points if it's Itachi or pre-time skip Gaara!
No and Itachi was never evil!
---And +6 if it's Hidan!
No
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---If the oc changes his(Hidan's) religion too, smack yourself. A. He'll die. B. He's not giving up his religion for you. To him, Jashin > everyone & thing else.
LOL no though would be funny if done on purpose.
-----Don't even THINK your oc's love can even repair Mandara, Orochimaru, or Kabuto. They crossed the moral event horizon years ago, and it's HIGHLY UNLIKELY that they will ever be saved. Like, + 10 for that. :/
He is too young and hates them anyways and Madara is a dead relative, I don't think Karasu would really go for that. You spelled his name wrong by the way.
9. Was the character created just for the love interest?
---Do you want to be that character because of that?
No, he was created out of the product of love or horiness.
10. Is someone turned into a complete jerk that's NOT in canon JUST because of the love interest (I.E. Hinata), out of sheer jealousy? +3
No but that would actually make her character interesting.
11. If your character, for any one of their crushes, is rejected by their crush or the crush just wants to be friends, minus 2!
Uh, I don't know. Maybe Aiko at one point? But he just thought she was pretty (still wondering if Kurenai's baby is a boy or girl, never actually said from what I can remember. I hope it is a girl, that would be funny for Shikamaru).
Total so far:
Who knows 3?
#Other relations#
1. Is she a 4th member on a existing team?(+2)
No
--Does s/he replace someone else?(+3) (No points if it's for want of a nail, like putting Naruto on Team Gai instead of Team 7)
No
2. Is s/he best friends with everyone in her village?
No
---Except his/her enemies/rivals?
No
3.Are they friends with most of the Akatsuki? +3
Hell no, they are mostly dead anyways and a lot older than him, though he probably wouldn't have minded Konan.
---All the Akatsuki?+5
No
----And are good guys? +9
No
4. On the flip side, does everyone in their original village hate them?
Nah, but he can be distant towards people though. Kotori might be a different issue
---Except the love interest?
No
----If it's because the OC betrayed the village on purpose in some way or another, minus 2
No
5. Does the story portray Sakura & Ino as shrieking Sasuke fangirls AFTER the timeskip?
No
6. Does your character have a rivalry with one of the other characters, due to them having the same crush on someone? (like Sakura & Ino pre-timeskip)
--Plus 1 if the Canon character's crush has never been confirmed in canon.
Nah
---Plus 2 if the Canon character is a one dimensional ball of jealousy because of this.
No
----Plus 1 more if the character turns to the villains because of this.
No but could imagine an evil Hinata?LOL
-----Does your character win every time and/or utterly humiliates the canon character? If so, plus 3!
No
7. If you character has a rivalry with another character NOT out of love, are they still turned into a one dimensional ball of jealousy?
No
--Does the rival turn to the dark side of the ninjas because of this?
No
---Does the rival always get humiliated by your OC?
Np
8. Subtract 3 points from your character if they have a friendly rivalry with another character just to see who can do better, to improve themselves, or because they like hanging out with each other & competing.
That could be possible, I don't know.
9. Does your character easily or immediately befriend a stoic or anti-soial character?
No, he is kind of distant himself and have a hard time opening up to people he isn't close to/
--If it was Pre-Timeskip!Gaara or Itachi, plus 3 more.
Well Itachi was sort of anti-social, I will give you that. But learn to spell right next time.
10. Did your character ever work for Orochimaru?
Does unknowingly producing babies for him count? If not, no.
--Willingly, due to being evil or trying to do good but in the wrong way? Minus 1.
No
---Because Orochimaru promised to give them something in return, but Orochi didn't follow through or gave it to them but it comes with a thing that makes it a bad deal? Minus 1
No
----Because s/he was raised as an orphan there? +2
No, but that actually happened, usually as a test subject, so...
-----Because the character was kidnapped to be there? + 3
No, but once again that is something that could be possible, but he usually lures them with the promise of power and had them come to him.
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1. Did your character ever work for the Akatsuki?
No
--Willingly, but as not part of the 10 main members? Minus 1.
No
---Willingly, as part of the main members? +8
No
----Because s/he was raised as an orphan there? +10 (Why would they do that? Got a good reason? If so, give only 5 points instead)
No
-----Because the character was kidnapped to be there? + 3
No but they are known to use people, Deidara for one was actually forced into it after losing to Itachi, so I say that wouldn't count unless they were working as an official member with rings and all.
Total so far:
I don't know, I think 3 still, going by what I think is allowable or not.
--Fighting and other positions of Power--
1. Does your character have a Dojutsu(any technique using the eyes)?+3
Yes. +3 I will give you that.
-Is it the Byakugan, main branch?(ex. Sibling of Hinata) +2
No, but I do wonder how far that goes back.
--If the character is not apart of the main branch of the Hyuga clan and instead is a cousin or something, and has the seal on their forehead, minus 3.
No, but I still wonder for Yui's sake (she is early Konoha).
---If your character's not dead, and has the Sharingan, +5
Yes, but second gen so there.
----If your character has one of the Canon Dojutsus (Sharingan or Byakugan) and is NOT related to their respective clans, plus 8
What if translated like in the cause of Kakashi, Ao or Danzo? Depending on the situation and how far back, it is possible in some cases (still wondering how Ao got it if the Hyuuga had some seals to protect them though).
-----If they have the OTHER canon Dojutsu, the Rinnegan, plus 10, whether or not they're related to Pain/Pein.
No
2. Does your character have a Kekki Genkai that's NOT a Dojustu BUT IS part of Canon? +3 if so.
No but why is that necessarily bad if they are related? Make sense if they were.
--If it's part of a dead clan, like Kimimaro's or Haku's, +5
No and did it say all of Haku's clan is dead or just his parents? They never showed anyone but Haku's parents and only his mom had the kekkei genkai.I know it said for Kimimaro.
3. Does your character have an ORIGINAL Kekki Genkai?
No
-Is it suspiciously similar to an already existing Kekki Genkai?+3
No
--Is it Insanely powerful? +6
No, well not the made up part anyways.
---Minus two if it has a major drawback or limit. Minor ones don't count, unless they have 4 or more of said minor drawbacks.
He has so side effects using it, yes.
----Minus two more if said drawback(major or minor) either makes your OC lose a fight or two, or takes its toll on the character over time.
I don't know, never really had him battle yet but it is possible if he got debilitating head aches, the nightmares only occur when he sleeps though.
-----You get those points right back if the character is saved by a love interest or a Deus Ex Machina.
What? Not possible even if they were fight along with the character to begin with? You just want them to die, do you?
--Does it allow the character to shrug off minor wounds? +2
Uh? The kekkei genkai or being saved? What? That is a little vague and minor wounds wouldn't be too big of deal, those are usually just small and shallow cuts, scraps and bruises and ninjas should be able to handle that.
---Major wounds? +5
No
----SURVIVE DEATH ITSELF?+10
*score the last 3 by just giving the character +X points for the extent of their power, like if they can survive major wounds, it's just 3 points)
No, not because of kekkei genkai
--Does the Kekki Genkai give your character wings? +3
Besides as a joke, no.
4. Does your character have an insanely powerful ORIGINAL Jutsu? +2
No
-With no drawbacks, or less than 4 minor ones? +2
No
--Is it very similar to an existing character's Jutsu?
No
---Only better? +2
No
5. Does your character know jutsus outside of their clan(other than basic Ninjutsu or Medical Jutsu)?
Now, probably. Most jutsu don't come from clans and many are high level, pay attention. Chuunin and up should know higher jutsu that isn't clan related. Of course not all but at least some.
--Do they do this by a copying Jutsu(I won't include the Sharingan, since you already got sue points for that)? +4
Well not included.
6. Is your character more powerful (combat wise)than the following:
-- A Jonin? (ignore if the character is a Jonin or higher)
He and guard or Oinin/Anbu
---Naruto or Sasuke? +3
No, he hates using his mangekyo and suffers for it (did it to limit his abilities/not to over power him and to make it more interesting. Not sure if it would count as a flaw).
----A Kage?+6(ignore if they are a Kage themselves)
No
-----Itachi, Hidan, Orochimaru, or other S-Rank ninjas? +8
------Mandara, or Spoiler!Kabuto? +10
Equal to Itachi probably, it is his eyes he has and he his is father.
*For this, say your character is more powerful than a Kage, don't give them the points for being more powerful to Naruto or Sasuke, just the +6 *
7. Is your character better at medical Jutsu than:
-Sakura?
Hell, Kabuto, Tsunade and possibly even Shii is better than her. in my opinion, but no.
--Kabuto, pre-timeskip?+4
No
---Tsunade?+8
No
*Rate this the same way you would question #6*
8. Does your character have an insane amount of chakara?
--Just 'cause? + 4
Np
9. Rate your OCs skills in these areas from one to ten, one the lowest & ten the highest(list from ChaosSoda):
Ninjutsu 6
Genjutsu 7
Taijutsu 3
Chakra Control 7
Stealth 6
Weapon Use 4
Tracking 3
Wilderness Survival 6
Teamwork 4
Medical Jutsu 2
-Is the list balanced out? Minus 2.
I suppose, just guessing though. -2
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Is the character very weak in some stuff, but strong in others? Minus one
Yes, -1.
-If you only have two or less numbers that are less than five on that list, plus 5.(this does not count if they're a Kage)
No
-If you feel your character is too powerful, and revised their chart, treat yourself to a cookie.
Didn't need to, already balanced. Can I have one anyways?
10. Has your character ever died and then has been brought back to life?+10
-More than once? +5 more each time they did!
No...well in the Halloween story he dies, but that probably doesn't count.
11. Conversely, have they ever brought someone else back to life? +8
--But then your OC dies due to this & did NOT get brought back to life? Minus 3.
No
----Did they bring back a love interest? +2.
No
-----With the power of love? +5
LOL no
------Did they bring back multiple people? +8
No
-------A whole damn village? +15
Hell no
12. If they HAVE brought someone back to life, did they study how to under Orochimaru(and/or Kabuto?), and abides the limits of the original Jutsu they used? If so, then just give them +4 points instead of 8.
No but that is something his mom probably would of done (but not for evil purposes, but to test out some theories and out of curiosity but she probably just studies, not really performing it).
13. Is your character any of these things younger than 15? He been many different ages. ^^;
--A Jonin? +3
Probably just became one than or close to it
---A ANBU? +6
No
----A Kage or S-Rank? +8
No
*Award points like you did in questions six & seven*
14. If your character is a child solider, minus three.
Well aren't all minor ninja's basically that?
15. Alternatively, if your character is useless in battle, plus 3.
Why even battle than? We already have one Hinata and we seen how unhelpful she has been. Younger, new ninjas is sort of understandable but they wouldn't be sent to battle yet, but easier missions usually or as a medic or other specialist if older
-Minus 3 if they improve themselves over the course of the story.
Well I would hope so
--Ignore this entirely if your character isn't a ninja.
16. If your character is not a ninja, yet is very powerful & respected by others for their fighting skills, plus 5.
No.
Total so far:
Who knows?
>>>Animals and other Biological topics:<<<
1. Alright, let's get this out of the way: is your character the holder of a tailed beast that was made up especially for your character?(Uber cliche example: TEH 10-TAILED WOLF!) +20. That is almost inexcusable.
No
--More powerful than the Ninetails? + 5
No
---And gives your character the ears and/or tail of that beast? +10
No
2. Alternatively, if you think having a demon sealed inside him or her will get around the previous question, it won't. When have YOU seen a demon in Naruto besides the tailed beast, much less sealed in a human? +15 for thinking outside of the box though.
No, most can't seem to handle it well anyways.
--And if you have anything else sealed inside her or him, also +15.
No
3. Can your character summon something very large, powerful, or impressive?
--Is that something a dragon, wolf, tiger, or various other large & impressive creature that can be found in Japanese culture or fokelore?
No, just crows
---Is that something NOT apart of Japanese fokelore or part of its native fauna?+ 2
----Is that something from a different show? +10 if NOT a crossover in the first place.
No
4. Is your character able to talk to animals NOT his or her's summon? +6
---Just 'cause? +2
Only crow Itachi and after he got his eyes implanted
5. Is your character a species that's not human, or is only half human? +5
No
--Is it a creature NOT found in Japanese fokelore? +10
No
---If your OC's a vampire or werewolf, and gets another human turned into one of them, plus 6.
Lol only on Halloween
----If it's the love interest, plus +2.
No
!!!!Plot:!!!!
1. Is your character a missing-nin due to a crime they did not commit? +2
--If the perpetrator is caught by the end of the story, AND the OC returns home, minus 2
No, well actually yes it rites I believe but all that was solved. -2
---Alternatively, if they joined the Akatsuki or Orochimaru and stayed with them instead, + 8.
No
----And after they joined got revenge on the criminal who framed them, +3
No but that probably happens a lot, so....well not the officially joining part but being used and getting revenge.
2. On the flip side, is your OC a missing nin for a crime they did commit?
-Was it stealing something really powerful, or murder? +3
No
--Was it because Orochimaru or the Akatsuki made them do it?+2
No
---If either of the above just used your OC like a tissue and either killed the OC, or let the OC live but the OC doesn't get revenge, minus 3.
No
----If it was for their own village, minus 2.
No
--Was it something minor, like stealing a bunch of books, or not paying for dinner?
No
---If it WAS something minor, and they ended up Joining the Akatsuki, plus 8.
No
3. If, either way, they end up in love with a member of a criminal gang and run away to live happily ever after, +8.
No
4. Is there a prophecy involving your OC? +3
-If it's the one that Jiraya spoke of, + 5.
---If it involves an arrange marriage, +8
No
5. Does your OC win all the battles s/he's in? +2
No, probably not.
-If it's at least half the time by a smidgen, and/or because another character stepped in to save them? Minus 1.
Probably, depending if he used his MS, how fast it effected him and how tough the opponents are.
--Minus another 1 point if the OC resolves to get better & does due to above.
Don't know
---If the only times the character loses is with the original character's love interest steps in to save them? +2
No
6. If instead, your character always has to be saved by anyone & everyone, +4 for being useless.
No, he isn't Hinata.
-Minus 2 if your OC dies due to being generally useless in a show about magical ninjas fighting each other.
LOL that would suck.
7. Speaking of useless, add the specified amounts of points for each of these useless and/or highly improbable events in story!
=Video Game playing, +2
They have movies and books, why not? No impossible
=Grocery shopping, +1
Everyone needs to eat...who expect them to magically get food? That is weird
=Spin the bottle, +5
Well teens to that at times during parties, they don't fight all the damn time. They need to rest, heal and just have fun at times.
--Plus 10 if it's with the Akatsuki or the Sound Village. Just because that's near illogical.
LOL not but that would be funny.
=A sleep over,+5
Only the kind that would involve sex or at least heavy petting/making out. dramallama
--That everyone in their age range goes to? +1
LOL uh....orgy?
---That even the VILLAINS go to? If they didn't come to kill or steal something or someone and then LEAVE, +10.
WTF?
=A talent competition (unless this IS the plot of your story...*eyeroll* It could work though) +6
Never happened in a story
--That your OC wins? +4
No
---By singing their favorite song? +6
No
----That's not in Japanese? +2
No
-----If it IS in Japanese, but the opening to another show, and is flat out SAID to be that opening, + 4.
LOL no
=Some kind of Konohan/village your OC comes from/Chunin exam School Dance that everyone goes to? +8
Aw, sounds cute and reminds me of that prom comic I need to draw still.
--EVEN the villains? If they didn't come to kill or steal something or someone and then LEAVE, +5.
No
=Karaoke? +8
Only at Mira's bar maybe, would they have karaoke?
--
In which your OC sings his or her's favorite song? +1
No, good luck getting him to sing. Only would happen in the shower.
---That's not in Japanese? +2
No
----If it IS in Japanese, but the opening to another show, and is flat out SAID to be that opening, + 2 also.
No
-----If the villains are made to participate, + 10 on the account of Orochimaru sounding like he gargled sandpaper.
No but lol
8. Hell, does your character even HAVE A GOAL OR WANT that drives the plot? If they don't, go find one. NOW.
He wants a normal life where he can settle down someday.
9. Is their goal to be the Kage of his or her village?
No
-If they don't succeed, minus 2.
No
--If they do, plus 1.
No
---If they do, but it's at an impossible age, (anything below 30), plus 10.
10. Is their goal never resolved due to something happening in story,
Below 30 isn't impossible.
preventing that goal and changing the plot? Minus 5.
No
-If it's because you never finished the fanfic, then keep those points.
No, usually not
11. Does your character get away with being a jerk to other characters?+3
No
--Does your character get away with killing a character that hasn't done anything wrong in Canon in story? (ex. Hinata, Sakura, Karin...) +6
No but Karin isn't all that innocent, but at least she wised up about Sasuke.
12. Do they get away with not listening to orders from higher ups ALL the time?
--Is your OC always right?
No
13. Is your character ever called out upon for making mistakes? Minus 4.
Probably, everyone makes mistakes.
--Do they make a mistake that either caused the conflict in the story in the first place, or did they make a mistake while trying to reach their goal that had major repercussions against them? Minus 10! Good job!
I don't know.
14. Are they judgmental to Naruto before the timeskip due to him having the fox inside him? Minus 2.
No, obviously he wasn't even born than.
15. How many times do they complain about his or her own past? This doesn't count if someone is just curious & asks them. +1 for every inner monologue, + 2 for verbal speech.
I don't know, not something he really talks about unless brought up.
Total so far:
The hell who I know? Some of it was ridiculous or possible within the story. Not all stories have to serious anyways.
Add them all up now...
So how'd you do?
3 points or lower: Did you just focus on giving your character everything this or another Mary Sue Litmus test said they should not have? *sigh* If you did, read up on Anti-Sue & Suetiful All Along. If you didn't, wow! That's just odd. I hope your character still has enough identifiable traits to make them unique, but I still am happy they're not a sue. Good job, I suppose!
4 to 25 points: Not a Sue! Not a Sue! Great job! biggrin While you gave your character enough traits to make them stand out from the normal, you also didn't pile up all the things you like onto them. Even though this test can't fully check if your OC is a Mary Sue or not, I'm happy that they are seemingly non-sue to boot. And not one dimensional copy & paste people, either. Keep up being awesome! biggrin
26 to 37 points: This is the point where you can't exactly tell if a character's a Sue or not. It's the point where most of your OC's traits are more of what you wish for them to be like, and less of what makes an interesting character. Basically, you're cutting the edge here. Check your character over again, and do your best to see if there's anything missing, incomplete, or just plain not making sense in your character. You can still get away with your OC though, if you're a good enough writer. wink
38 to 69 points: Alright kiddo, hate to break it to you, but you're character is now mostly a vehicle for wish fulfillment & not story telling or other interesting things, and is pretty much a Mary or Marty Sue/Stu. Don't panic just yet though! You can't just tell from this one test if your OC truly is apart of the sparkely people, so consult your local Beta to see if they can either tell you otherwise, or give you ideas on how to smooth out your character. Also, if they turn out to be a Mary Sue, they're easily fixable at this point in time. You can do it! smile
70 plus: Either you got this on accident due to not adding the numbers correctly, on purpose, or because your OC is a complete a Mary Sue. You have basically used Naruto as a block of clay and shaped it with the carving tool your OC truly is. It's not the end of the world, of course. We all made Mary Sues at one point or another in our lives. smile What I recommend to you is that you accept your OC as one of the Beautiful People & keep writing your fanfic because you WANT to & it's fun, or you start from scratch & put some time into developing the character & how they interact with others, and not making them plain, one dimensional sheets of paper with tons of glitter attached. Stay frosty!
I will say the 4-25 category personally. I do pay attention and try to keep them in character and balance them out, etc...not always serious with them, but that is part of the fun.
Long test and not even going to bother with Yuko, she was half assed at first and started out as a joke and first OC, never planned. I did revamp her and still doing so.
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