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Tree Spirit Deora Captain
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 Posted: Wed Sep 14, 2011 12:27 pm
Write some haiku here
Five, Seven, Five syllables
This could be so fun!
If you wish to talk
about haiku posted here,
do so in format.
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Posted: Wed Sep 14, 2011 5:33 pm
The wind blows the leaves-
That sway as the Willow Tree
Weeps it's slow days away.
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Tree Spirit Deora Captain
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Posted: Wed Sep 14, 2011 5:58 pm
xXMapleKitsuneXx The wind blows the leaves-
They sway as the Willow Tree
Calmly goes about it's day.
has seven syllables, just
like the second one.
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Posted: Wed Sep 14, 2011 6:48 pm
Tree Spirit Deora xXMapleKitsuneXx The wind blows the leaves-
They sway as the Willow Tree
Calmly goes about it's day.
has seven syllables, just
like the second one.
If it isn't correct
I'll fix it again.
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Tree Spirit Deora Captain
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Posted: Wed Sep 14, 2011 7:09 pm
xXMapleKitsuneXx Tree Spirit Deora xXMapleKitsuneXx The wind blows the leaves-
They sway as the Willow Tree
Calmly goes about it's day.
has seven syllables, just
like the second one.
If it isn't correct
I'll fix it again.
It seems you must count
better all these haiku lines.
This one's not enough.
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Posted: Wed Sep 14, 2011 7:11 pm
Tree Spirit Deora xXMapleKitsuneXx Tree Spirit Deora xXMapleKitsuneXx The wind blows the leaves-
They sway as the Willow Tree
Calmly goes about it's day.
has seven syllables, just
like the second one.
If it isn't correct
I'll fix it again.
It seems you must count
better all these haiku lines.
This one's not enough.I fixed it. If it isn't correct I'll fix it again.
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Tree Spirit Deora Captain
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Posted: Wed Sep 14, 2011 7:30 pm
xXMapleKitsuneXx I fixed it. 3If it isn't correct 6I'll fix it again. 5
Your poem of correction.
First redo was fine.
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Posted: Wed Sep 14, 2011 7:34 pm
Tree Spirit Deora xXMapleKitsuneXx I fixed it. 3If it isn't correct 6I'll fix it again. 5
Your poem of correction.
First redo was fine.Oh. Well now it's fixed. If it 's not correct now I'll fix it again.
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Tree Spirit Deora Captain
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Posted: Wed Sep 14, 2011 7:38 pm
I never thought that
I would be teaching haiku.
Learning took me long.
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Posted: Thu Sep 15, 2011 6:03 am
Tree Spirit Deora I never thought that
I would be teaching haiku.
Learning took me long. Heh, that's kind of funny. 6I learnt it in a week's time. 7It was hard however. 65, 7, 5
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Posted: Sat Sep 24, 2011 9:32 am
Trying to learn this,
But alas, it's pretty hard.
Don't know if it's right.
;D
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Posted: Sat Sep 24, 2011 9:34 am
Lord Denning Trying to learn this, But alas, it's pretty hard. Don't know if it's right. ;D
Has all the right syllables.
You did very well.
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Tree Spirit Deora Captain
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Posted: Sat Sep 24, 2011 9:43 am
Tree Spirit Deora Lord Denning Trying to learn this, But alas, it's pretty hard. Don't know if it's right. ;D
Has all the right syllables.
You did very well.I do believe, Tree, That your Haiku, misses one Syllable near end. But thank you kindly, For your ultimate insight, Very enlightening. I know the concept, But not how to apply it. Really, its annoying.
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Posted: Sat Sep 24, 2011 10:34 am
Lord Denning Tree Spirit Deora Lord Denning Trying to learn this, But alas, it's pretty hard. Don't know if it's right. ;D
Has all the right syllables.
You did very well.I do believe, Tree, That your Haiku, misses one Syllable near end. But thank you kindly, For your ultimate insight, Very enlightening. I know the concept, But not how to apply it. Really, its annoying.
Five, seven, five syllables
make for a haiku.
You keep putting six
at the end of your poems.
Your first one was right.
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Tree Spirit Deora Captain
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Posted: Sat Sep 24, 2011 3:54 pm
Tree Spirit Deora Lord Denning Tree Spirit Deora Lord Denning Trying to learn this, But alas, it's pretty hard. Don't know if it's right. ;D
Has all the right syllables.
You did very well.I do believe, Tree, That your Haiku, misses one Syllable near end. But thank you kindly, For your ultimate insight, Very enlightening. I know the concept, But not how to apply it. Really, its annoying.
Five, seven, five syllables
make for a haiku.
You keep putting six
at the end of your poems.
Your first one was right.Ah, that is a shame. Why did I think 'very' had Just one syllable? It was three this morn', When I wrote the last Haikus. Maybe that was why. Lastly, not even sure, If I may have got these right. Way too tired now. neutral
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