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 Posted: Mon Sep 12, 2011 2:11 am
Here are some of the Pokemon that can be found here. Not all of them are here all at once. Make sure to check the Pokemon Surge thread:
Slakoth, Aipom, Teddiursa, Pidgey, Spearow, Farfetch'd, Doduo, Hoothoot, Taillow, Swablu, Kecleon, Starly, Pidove, Rufflet, Pikachu, Emolga, Paras, Bellsprout, Tangela, Seedot, Shroomish, Tropius, Burmy, Cherubi, Carnivine, Sewaddle, Foongus, Ferroseed, Mankey, Heracross, Weedle, Venonat, Spinarak, Venipede, Nincada, Scyther, Ledyba, Natu, Caterpie, Pinsir, Pineco, Wurmple, Kricketot, Karrablast, Sudowoodo
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Posted: Thu Oct 20, 2011 1:52 pm
Dawn Berliz~  Dawn was looking around the forest,smiling. My favorite place..." She whispered,softly.Her and Bubbles started to walk around to find a nice tree. They looked and looked, seeing the flowers, and little ponds since it rained. "Amazing..." She whispered.Finally she found a spot and sat down with Bubbles in her lap.
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Posted: Thu Oct 20, 2011 2:32 pm
Dawn Berliz~Dawn stands up and smiles. "Time for Battle Class."She said, running. She started to run to the classroom
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Posted: Tue Nov 01, 2011 6:11 pm
~Dawn Berliz~ Dawn ran inside the forest and then plopped to the ground, her breathing heavy. Bubbles did the same thing. Dawn pulled out Sweet Poffins and Water and shared them with her Oshawott. They drank the water quickly.
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Posted: Wed Nov 02, 2011 1:44 pm
DawnBerliz ~Dawn Berliz~Dawn ran inside the forest and then sat down or should I say plopped on the ground and was breathing heavy. Bubbles did the same breathing very fast. They got sweet poffins and waters out. We drank the water fast. ((Could you try to keep your posts in either first person or third person? ^^; And either past or present tense? It gets a tad confusing.))
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Posted: Wed Nov 02, 2011 5:26 pm
CrzyAlterEgo DawnBerliz ~Dawn Berliz~Dawn ran inside the forest and then sat down or should I say plopped on the ground and was breathing heavy. Bubbles did the same breathing very fast. They got sweet poffins and waters out. We drank the water fast. ((Could you try to keep your posts in either first person or third person? ^^; And either past or present tense? It gets a tad confusing.)) ((-confused-))
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Posted: Wed Nov 02, 2011 5:44 pm
DawnBerliz CrzyAlterEgo DawnBerliz ~Dawn Berliz~Dawn ran inside the forest and then sat down or should I say plopped on the ground and was breathing heavy. Bubbles did the same breathing very fast. They got sweet poffins and waters out. We drank the water fast. ((Could you try to keep your posts in either first person or third person? ^^; And either past or present tense? It gets a tad confusing.)) ((-confused-)) ((What's confusing you kiddo?))
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Posted: Wed Nov 02, 2011 5:58 pm
CrzyAlterEgo DawnBerliz CrzyAlterEgo DawnBerliz ~Dawn Berliz~Dawn ran inside the forest and then sat down or should I say plopped on the ground and was breathing heavy. Bubbles did the same breathing very fast. They got sweet poffins and waters out. We drank the water fast. ((Could you try to keep your posts in either first person or third person? ^^; And either past or present tense? It gets a tad confusing.)) ((-confused-)) ((What's confusing you kiddo?)) ((Did I fixed it?))
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Posted: Wed Nov 02, 2011 6:12 pm
((First person is when you say "I", "me", "you". Third person is when you say "he", "she", "they". Does that make sense?))
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Posted: Wed Nov 02, 2011 6:13 pm
DawnBerliz CrzyAlterEgo DawnBerliz ~Dawn Berliz~Dawn ran inside the forest and then sat down or should I say plopped on the ground and was breathing heavy. Bubbles did the same breathing very fast. They got sweet poffins and waters out. We drank the water fast. ((Could you try to keep your posts in either first person or third person? ^^; And either past or present tense? It gets a tad confusing.)) ((-confused-)) ((You mentioned that 'Dawn walked into the forest then I sat down'. It's a little confusing because you used your character's name and then said 'I'. But don't worry, that's why we're here. To help.
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Posted: Wed Nov 02, 2011 8:51 pm
((Wait do you mean when I put 'or should I say?' ??))
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Posted: Wed Nov 02, 2011 9:09 pm
DawnBerliz ((Wait do you mean when I put 'or should I say?' ??)) ((You're switching between 3rd person (Dawn, she, her, the girl) and 1st person (me, my, I, mine) and it gets very confusing. Not only that, but you're also switching Present and Past tense. Present being 'we drank the water, we are running'. Where as Past would be 'we drunk the water, we ran'.))
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Posted: Wed Nov 02, 2011 9:14 pm
SoifonShihoin DawnBerliz ((Wait do you mean when I put 'or should I say?' ??)) ((You're switching between 3rd person (Dawn, she, her, the girl) and 1st person (me, my, I, mine) and it gets very confusing. Not only that, but you're also switching Present and Past tense. Present being 'we drank the water, we are running'. Where as Past would be 'we drunk the water, we ran'.)) ((Weird but I put ran but when I put 'I' where did I put that exactly ^^''))
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Posted: Wed Nov 02, 2011 10:01 pm
DawnBerliz SoifonShihoin DawnBerliz ((Wait do you mean when I put 'or should I say?' ??)) ((You're switching between 3rd person (Dawn, she, her, the girl) and 1st person (me, my, I, mine) and it gets very confusing. Not only that, but you're also switching Present and Past tense. Present being 'we drank the water, we are running'. Where as Past would be 'we drunk the water, we ran'.)) ((Weird but I put ran but when I put 'I' where did I put that exactly ^^'')) Alright dear, let me set it straight, This is what you wrote: " Dawn ran inside the forest and then sat down or should I say plopped on the ground and was breathing heavy. Bubbles did the same breathing very fast. They got sweet poffins and waters out. We drank the water fast." This is what it would be if it were in proper third person which is usually written in past tense. "Dawn ran inside the forest and then plopped to the ground, her breathing heavy. Bubbles did the same thing. Dawn pulled out Sweet Poffins and Water and shared them with her Oshawott. They drank the water quickly."You will see that all articles that are used in third person I have bolded, and all things in past tense are italicized. This is what it would look like it it was in first person and present tense: "I run into the forest and plop to the ground, my breathing heavy. Bubbles does the same thing. I pull out Sweet Poffins and Water and share them with my Oshawott. We drink the water quickly."Compare what you have written with the examples I have given you that would be the two correct paragraphs that you could pull from your original paragraph. See how you have combined two different styles of writing? Third person is narrative, meaning that it is an outsider writing about other people. First person is you writing about your own story.
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Posted: Wed Nov 02, 2011 10:07 pm
all_alone_again16 DawnBerliz SoifonShihoin DawnBerliz ((Wait do you mean when I put 'or should I say?' ??)) ((You're switching between 3rd person (Dawn, she, her, the girl) and 1st person (me, my, I, mine) and it gets very confusing. Not only that, but you're also switching Present and Past tense. Present being 'we drank the water, we are running'. Where as Past would be 'we drunk the water, we ran'.)) ((Weird but I put ran but when I put 'I' where did I put that exactly ^^'')) Alright dear, let me set it straight, This is what you wrote: " Dawn ran inside the forest and then sat down or should I say plopped on the ground and was breathing heavy. Bubbles did the same breathing very fast. They got sweet poffins and waters out. We drank the water fast." This is what it would be if it were in proper third person which is usually written in past tense. "Dawn ran inside the forest and then plopped to the ground, her breathing heavy. Bubbles did the same thing. Dawn pulled out Sweet Poffins and Water and shared them with her Oshawott. They drank the water quickly."You will see that all articles that are used in third person I have bolded, and all things in past tense are italicized. This is what it would look like it it was in first person and present tense: "I run into the forest and plop to the ground, my breathing heavy. Bubbles does the same thing. I pull out Sweet Poffins and Water and share them with my Oshawott. We drink the water quickly."Compare what you have written with the examples I have given you that would be the two correct paragraphs that you could pull from your original paragraph. See how you have combined two different styles of writing? Third person is narrative, meaning that it is an outsider writing about other people. First person is you writing about your own story. ((Thank you, I'll fix it right away -feels embarrassed alittle-))
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