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 Posted: Thu Aug 04, 2011 2:00 am
And another attempt at songwriting!!!
Catching On
Listen, why don't you?
To the beating of our hearts
As you hold me close
Isn't something strange
You catch on quick, love
You catch on quick
You're too afraid to admit it, but
Oh you catch on quick
Don't pretend you can't hear me
'coz this is where it has to end
And I know you're afraid, but
Oh, my heart is screaming out no more
Oh, and you catch on quick
You catch on quick
You've got your hands over your ears
But you sure do catch on quick
Don't pretend I didn't speak
Because what I say is no make believe
And I'm afraid too, but
My heart is screaming for an end
Oh, you catch on quick
And I can't pretend that I still love you
You catch on quick
So this is where it has to end
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Posted: Thu Aug 04, 2011 12:48 pm
I like this one better than Falling, but still feel it needs a more defined rhythm. You use the phrase "my heart is screaming" twice. If you use it in two verses, try to spring for the third (or in this case first) to create unity. Good work!
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EstoPerpetua Vice Captain
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