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 Posted: Sat Jul 16, 2011 9:44 pm
Define for me a man
Tell me what he can't and can
Tell me of his appearance, how he looks
And show me where it's stated in books
What makes a boy a man in truth?
What test must he pass to show proof
Of his strength and maturity
Of his resolve and purity
What does a man do that makes him so?
Is a man all the wiser, what secrets does he know?
When does this metamorphosis occur?
Is it easily seen or is the transition a blur?
You can't tell the difference between the two
When the definition is so askew
Call me a boy, call me a man
But no matter what I'll do all I can
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Posted: Mon Jul 30, 2012 11:20 am
As a 19 year old guy trying to make my way in the world, this speaks loudly to me. Your poem flows and rhymes well, but the rhythm in particular is great - it seems to match the subject matter, its a bit halting at places and rushes all over itself in others. Maybe you planned it or maybe you have natural talent but either way you're a great writer.
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