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Karuda Gensou Uchiha Vice Captain
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 Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2011 1:59 am
Discussion of mah fiction goes here...
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2011 2:04 am
I voted
Meh
Because I can't really judge my own work fairly...
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Karuda Gensou Uchiha Vice Captain
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Yokai Orochi Revived Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2011 3:23 am
O.k. good introduction, no messing around with introducing stuff we already know, straight to the action.
The setting isn't the most original seeing as there have been a lot of author who have thought: Hey lets put my OC's in Akatsuki. Some explanation as to why it's not the actual akatsuki would be appreciated.
The battleness effective and a way to show chracter strengths and personalities without getting too wordy.
Personally it's waaaaay too early to judge the story over all but a promising start.
That and my inner fangirl squees over chapters in italics. Not sure why. sweatdrop
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2011 4:14 am
Italics are just fun.
But I agree with Orochi, it's a good way to start, jumping right into the action and leaving a slight question of just who these people are and what they're doing here.
I shall await your next chappie.
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User_20392979 Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2011 1:51 pm
So far seems promising. I personally think introductions and a bit of descriptions for the characters are important when you first start writing or within the first chapters as that way you can get the feel what the characters are like and to be able to imagine how they might have been. 3nodding
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2011 5:32 pm
A Dose Of Bad Medicine So far seems promising. I personally think introductions and a bit of descriptions for the characters are important when you first start writing or within the first chapters as that way you can get the feel what the characters are like and to be able to imagine how they might have been. 3nodding No! You must leave the character's pasts so you can have... Filler Flashbacks!
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Karuda Gensou Uchiha Vice Captain
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Karuda Gensou Uchiha Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2011 5:35 pm
I'm thinking of doing a character origin story every few chapters but if I do they will likely be in a short summary form
Eg:
Generic Akatsuki member A grew up in Generic Ninja village B and when he was five he was already in Generic Ninja Academy C
By the age of seven our Akatsuki member graduated to Chuunin and was like "******** this, I'm blowing this village" and he left and stuff.
But like more serious then that...
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2011 5:42 pm
Karuda Gensou Uchiha A Dose Of Bad Medicine So far seems promising. I personally think introductions and a bit of descriptions for the characters are important when you first start writing or within the first chapters as that way you can get the feel what the characters are like and to be able to imagine how they might have been. 3nodding No! You must leave the character's pasts so you can have... Filler Flashbacks! To each their own, I just lose interest fast if I don't really know anything about the characters as I can't really connect to them or even picture them. Don't have to reveal everything, just enough to know a bit about them.
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Karuda Gensou Uchiha Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2011 5:45 pm
Yokai Orochi Revived O.k. good introduction, no messing around with introducing stuff we already know, straight to the action. The setting isn't the most original seeing as there have been a lot of author who have thought: Hey lets put my OC's in Akatsuki. Some explanation as to why it's not the actual akatsuki would be appreciated. The battleness effective and a way to show chracter strengths and personalities without getting too wordy. Personally it's waaaaay too early to judge the story over all but a promising start. That and my inner fangirl squees over chapters in italics. Not sure why. sweatdrop Leave my OC's alone! Karuda totally got ******** pwned and he is my first and favourite character with a heart gol- I mean Ice... I still don't have names for some of the characters XD Hono'o doesn't have any name at this time and I'm not all too happy with Mugen and Ko'ori's given names...
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2011 10:08 pm
Karuda Gensou Uchiha Yokai Orochi Revived O.k. good introduction, no messing around with introducing stuff we already know, straight to the action. The setting isn't the most original seeing as there have been a lot of author who have thought: Hey lets put my OC's in Akatsuki. Some explanation as to why it's not the actual akatsuki would be appreciated. The battleness effective and a way to show chracter strengths and personalities without getting too wordy. Personally it's waaaaay too early to judge the story over all but a promising start. That and my inner fangirl squees over chapters in italics. Not sure why. sweatdrop Leave my OC's alone! Karuda totally got ******** pwned and he is my first and favourite character with a heart gol- I mean Ice... I still don't have names for some of the characters XD Hono'o doesn't have any name at this time and I'm not all too happy with Mugen and Ko'ori's given names... Do you have names that fit their personalities? And I don't consider it true Pwnage unless someone bleeds. talk2hand
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Yokai Orochi Revived Vice Captain
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Karuda Gensou Uchiha Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Jun 20, 2011 12:00 am
Yokai Orochi Revived Karuda Gensou Uchiha Yokai Orochi Revived O.k. good introduction, no messing around with introducing stuff we already know, straight to the action. The setting isn't the most original seeing as there have been a lot of author who have thought: Hey lets put my OC's in Akatsuki. Some explanation as to why it's not the actual akatsuki would be appreciated. The battleness effective and a way to show chracter strengths and personalities without getting too wordy. Personally it's waaaaay too early to judge the story over all but a promising start. That and my inner fangirl squees over chapters in italics. Not sure why. sweatdrop Leave my OC's alone! Karuda totally got ******** pwned and he is my first and favourite character with a heart gol- I mean Ice... I still don't have names for some of the characters XD Hono'o doesn't have any name at this time and I'm not all too happy with Mugen and Ko'ori's given names... Do you have names that fit their personalities? And I don't consider it true Pwnage unless someone bleeds. talk2hand I suck at names... I've already half written chapter three and four and I'm working on a summary form character backstory
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Posted: Mon Jun 20, 2011 12:22 am
Karuda Gensou Uchiha Yokai Orochi Revived Karuda Gensou Uchiha Yokai Orochi Revived O.k. good introduction, no messing around with introducing stuff we already know, straight to the action. The setting isn't the most original seeing as there have been a lot of author who have thought: Hey lets put my OC's in Akatsuki. Some explanation as to why it's not the actual akatsuki would be appreciated. The battleness effective and a way to show chracter strengths and personalities without getting too wordy. Personally it's waaaaay too early to judge the story over all but a promising start. That and my inner fangirl squees over chapters in italics. Not sure why. sweatdrop Leave my OC's alone! Karuda totally got ******** pwned and he is my first and favourite character with a heart gol- I mean Ice... I still don't have names for some of the characters XD Hono'o doesn't have any name at this time and I'm not all too happy with Mugen and Ko'ori's given names... Do you have names that fit their personalities? And I don't consider it true Pwnage unless someone bleeds. talk2hand I suck at names... I've already half written chapter three and four and I'm working on a summary form character backstory I do names first then characters. Whoot~! Now you make me feel inefficient. *goes to write some more*
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Yokai Orochi Revived Vice Captain
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Karuda Gensou Uchiha Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Jun 20, 2011 12:26 am
Yokai Orochi Revived Karuda Gensou Uchiha Yokai Orochi Revived Karuda Gensou Uchiha Yokai Orochi Revived O.k. good introduction, no messing around with introducing stuff we already know, straight to the action. The setting isn't the most original seeing as there have been a lot of author who have thought: Hey lets put my OC's in Akatsuki. Some explanation as to why it's not the actual akatsuki would be appreciated. The battleness effective and a way to show chracter strengths and personalities without getting too wordy. Personally it's waaaaay too early to judge the story over all but a promising start. That and my inner fangirl squees over chapters in italics. Not sure why. sweatdrop Leave my OC's alone! Karuda totally got ******** pwned and he is my first and favourite character with a heart gol- I mean Ice... I still don't have names for some of the characters XD Hono'o doesn't have any name at this time and I'm not all too happy with Mugen and Ko'ori's given names... Do you have names that fit their personalities? And I don't consider it true Pwnage unless someone bleeds. talk2hand I suck at names... I've already half written chapter three and four and I'm working on a summary form character backstory I do names first then characters. Whoot~! Now you make me feel inefficient. *goes to write some more* They are only one page each at the moment and I'm having a bit of writer's block on both... but I hope I don't end up doing something stupid like posting such short chapters again
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Posted: Mon Jun 20, 2011 12:51 am
Karuda Gensou Uchiha Yokai Orochi Revived Karuda Gensou Uchiha Yokai Orochi Revived Karuda Gensou Uchiha Yokai Orochi Revived O.k. good introduction, no messing around with introducing stuff we already know, straight to the action. The setting isn't the most original seeing as there have been a lot of author who have thought: Hey lets put my OC's in Akatsuki. Some explanation as to why it's not the actual akatsuki would be appreciated. The battleness effective and a way to show chracter strengths and personalities without getting too wordy. Personally it's waaaaay too early to judge the story over all but a promising start. That and my inner fangirl squees over chapters in italics. Not sure why. sweatdrop Leave my OC's alone! Karuda totally got ******** pwned and he is my first and favourite character with a heart gol- I mean Ice... I still don't have names for some of the characters XD Hono'o doesn't have any name at this time and I'm not all too happy with Mugen and Ko'ori's given names... Do you have names that fit their personalities? And I don't consider it true Pwnage unless someone bleeds. talk2hand I suck at names... I've already half written chapter three and four and I'm working on a summary form character backstory I do names first then characters. Whoot~! Now you make me feel inefficient. *goes to write some more* They are only one page each at the moment and I'm having a bit of writer's block on both... but I hope I don't end up doing something stupid like posting such short chapters again Well if you post lots of short chapters it's pretty much the same as a long chapter heart
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Yokai Orochi Revived Vice Captain
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Karuda Gensou Uchiha Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Jun 20, 2011 9:50 pm
I don't think I can continue to write this fan-fiction. Writing for my old roleplay character has reminded me just how much I miss roleplaying... Writing this fan-fiction has had adverse side-effects on my mental state... I know it's pathetic but roleplaying used to be my life and doing this has just brought back all that Sadness, Anger and Bitterness from the past... You can hate me if you want to but this is something I have to do...
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