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Karuda heard a very slight splashing sound, from far away, that denounced he was being followed, he rapidly formed handseals so he would be ready for his pursuer. Karuda turned as he heard the man enter the opening he stood in and stared at the man for a second then laughed slightly

“So you’ve come to stop me?” he asked “You think you can?”

The man sighed heavily “I know I can.”

Karuda laughed manically “Try me, you can’t win!” His tone would have made mad men shudder but the shinobi before him stood his ground.

“I don’t want to fight you.” The ninja said “Return now and you may yet be forgiven, under the circumstances-”

Karuda’s eyes narrowed as he cut off the shinobi “I wouldn’t return even if that was true. I have my reasons for leaving and you won’t stop me.”

The ninja sighed “Fine... Have it your way.” His hand moved slowly up into the traditional ninja seal of ‘Combat’ then he bolted towards Karuda, Karuda held his hand up in the same symbol and grinned.

“Seeing as you are so insistent I’ll play with you.” he said, activating his Sharingan.

The shinobi moved his hands with near blinding speed “Doton; Tojikomeru Hashira” he roared as several pillars of hard earth rose up around Karuda but he seemed quite unfazed.

“You think I’d walk right into that?” Karuda said in a jeering tone as he walked up to the pillars then walked right through them. The shinobi was startled by this but he kept his calm as he reached into his kunai holster and withdrew four kunai and threw them at Karuda’s arms and legs in an attempt to disable him.

The kunai passed right through Karuda, he suddenly flickered and disappeared as the real Karuda appeared behind the ninja with a kunai at the man’s throat “You’re too slow” he said as he lowered the kunai into the soft flesh of his the man’s neck, however, he felt a hand close around his wrist.

“You are fast but I’m much stronger then you” the shinobi said, heaving Karuda over his back and throwing him into one of the pillars of earth. Karuda hit the column with a sick crunching sound. Karuda pulled himself from the pillar with a grimace, revealing a small crack in its surface.

“That hurt...” he said in an eerily calm tone, the shinobi’s neck was stained with blood but Karuda’s kunai had not done any serious damage, the ninja’s hands twitched but Karuda was much faster as he weaved handseals.

“Ketsujo-Yorokobi Joukei” he said. The shinobi had never seen this genjutsu before however he soon realized its effects as color ebbed away from his vision however he didn’t let this unnerve him as his hands made further seals.

“Doton; Tsuchi Koukuu Genkotsu” and a small column of Earth rose in front of him which he began to beat furiously with his fists. As the shinobi beat the column large chucks of earth flew towards Karuda, Karuda jumped over the first projectile and slid under the second, the third he narrowly avoided, by rolling to one side, before forming his own handseals.

“Katon; Gōkakyū no Jutsu” he shouted before exhaling a massive fireball that roared toward his sempai. Karuda quickly jumped forwards, high into the air, as Tetsuya formed handseals.

“Doton; Tsuchi Bun’ya” he shouted as a thick layer of hard earth wrapped around him, the fireball collided with the sphere and burned away the stronger outer layers while Karuda formed a few short handseals.

“Chidori; Okubukai Shougeki” he roared viciously as he plummeted toward the now weakened earth cocoon. Karuda’s fist was covered by a large amount of lightning as it cracked through the sphere and connected with the ninja’s left shoulder, the man shouted in pain as the lightning surged through him. The shinobi leapt backwards, his left arm hanging limply at his side; all the muscles and nerves in his shoulder were severely burned by the lightning.

It's not very long and some of the Japanese jutsu names are likely incorrect but this is just a sample of how I write, meant to be used to improve upon and get a general feel of how good I am at writing, ETC.

Is it that bad that noone will comment, for hurting my feelings?

crying

Well I'm going to comment. heart

I love how your jutsu are original yet completely within the limits of realism set by the show.

Nameless shinobi/generic enemy #1 apparently gets named Tetsuya at some point in the battle. Personally I hate finding alternate titles for unnamed people to avoid calling them "the man" or "the figure" all the time. Is he going to be introduced by name later (or possibly earlier)? Or were you going for unfeeling anonymity from Karuda? In which case good job.

Unless this is meant to be a quick battle to show character strength I would also make that last bit a little more drawn out dramatic.

Of course you don't have to listen to anything I say. sweatdrop

Anyway seeing as I failed to censor Tetsuya but managed to fix Karuda's chatting with him I may as well tell you who the character in question is...

Tetsuya Morima is the Chuunin teacher at the Amegakure ninja academy and one of the few people who weren't s**t to Karuda, Karuda's main reason for leaving is he wants to become 'The Sage of Genjutsu', meaning he wants to master every genjutsu, so in other words he had no real intention to be 'evil' at that point in time.

lol.

Yeah but I can't decide if I should have a detailed background or a summary style one that lists the major events in his past...

I'm thinking I'll write then Main story first then the Character Backstories... Like the Flashbacks in Naruto... XD