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 Posted: Mon May 23, 2011 5:38 am
Another one I wrote today and Oh My Gosh, it doesn't have a set rhyming scheme or anything!!! Scary... Oh well, hopefully it's just as good as everything else I've written.
As always, please do read, enjoy and leave comments!!
Mirrors and Shadows
A far away memory
even shadows hurt me
"It's nice to meet you"
A wavering illusion
why can't I see it?
"Why must you haunt me?"
Reflection of my heart
I can't approach it
"Why is this so?"
Shadows overlap my heart
Why must it be?
"Please say you love me"
Why do I feel like breaking
Is this how love feels?
"Why must I love you?"
Quietly trickling tears
Shine like stars
"This is farewell"
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Posted: Mon Jun 13, 2011 9:23 am
I like the new style! It's more abstract than many things, and I like that. I don't miss the rhymes, and in this poem they might have detracted from the overall presentation. It is definitely as good as everything else you've written. Way to expand your horizons!
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EstoPerpetua Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Jun 14, 2011 4:19 pm
EstoPerpetua I like the new style! It's more abstract than many things, and I like that. I don't miss the rhymes, and in this poem they might have detracted from the overall presentation. It is definitely as good as everything else you've written. Way to expand your horizons! Ah, thanks for the input ^_^ I'm glad you like it 3nodding Wow, that sounded formal... Anyway, I was actually trying to create a story with this one (probably should have mentioned that earlier sweatdrop ), do you think that worked?
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Posted: Wed Jun 15, 2011 5:37 pm
Emmerah EstoPerpetua I like the new style! It's more abstract than many things, and I like that. I don't miss the rhymes, and in this poem they might have detracted from the overall presentation. It is definitely as good as everything else you've written. Way to expand your horizons! Ah, thanks for the input ^_^ I'm glad you like it 3nodding Wow, that sounded formal... Anyway, I was actually trying to create a story with this one (probably should have mentioned that earlier sweatdrop ), do you think that worked? Yes, or as much as a story can be written in poetic form anyway.
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EstoPerpetua Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Jun 16, 2011 3:53 am
EstoPerpetua Emmerah EstoPerpetua I like the new style! It's more abstract than many things, and I like that. I don't miss the rhymes, and in this poem they might have detracted from the overall presentation. It is definitely as good as everything else you've written. Way to expand your horizons! Ah, thanks for the input ^_^ I'm glad you like it 3nodding Wow, that sounded formal... Anyway, I was actually trying to create a story with this one (probably should have mentioned that earlier sweatdrop ), do you think that worked? Yes, or as much as a story can be written in poetic form anyway. wonderful, thanks ^_^
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